Lonk Posted January 15, 2013 Report Share Posted January 15, 2013 Title implies that this is an MLP x F-Zero crossfic. Putting in the disclaimer here saying that I do not own My Little Pony or F-Zero. I also plan to update once a week after putting up a few more chapters until the plot gets thick enough. [spoiler=Chapter 1] In the 26th Century, humans have made extensive contact with aliens. Because of these interactions, humans have developed ties to them and have intergraded themselves with the aliens. This has opened up many opportunities, such as trading and migration. In the time it would have taken the people of the 21st century to travel between Earth and the moon, the people of today could explore galaxies from far, far away. And yet, despite the advances in space travel and the amount of progress made in discovering other parts of space, the universe is never fully explored. There are galaxies, star systems and planets that not even the most advanced of aliens have discovered yet. While the times and technologies are advanced, crime has also evolved. Now, because of space travel, people are capable of spreading crime waves throughout the universe. Criminals have learned of their potential and started committing crimes on other planets. The Intergalactic Council knew this was inevitable, so they have responded by creating the Galactic Federation. This organization functions as the law enforcement of the universe. They apprehend people who violate laws from various galaxies, and prevent chaos from seeping out and infecting the vast expanses of space. Galactic Federation Officers are easily distinguishable by their navy blue body armors and helmets with a shield-shaped visor. In addition, they pilot officer-class starships, dark blue manta-shaped ships that are capable of reaching several thousand miles per minute. While their efforts of apprehending criminals before they began their coups have been largely successful, criminals are able to escape to the undiscovered expanses of the universe and lay low there. Because the Milky Way is the home galaxy to the Galactic Federation, crimes are relatively under control there. However, one criminal is causing a large amount of trouble to a squad of GF Officers. Piloting a dark blue skinny, but long ship with light blue zigzag stripes and sporting a white “13” is the Zolorkian known as Zoda, a superhuman with a lavender-esque skin suit, violet breastplate, shoulder pads and boots, and vermillion gloves. Zoda is easily recognizable by his lilac-shaded skull belt and metallic tube that starts on top of his head and flows directly into a machine on his back, always giving him constant adrenaline boosts, but had driven him to permanent insanity as a side effect. Zoda is intergalactically wanted for his continuous assaults and crimes on the planet Earth. Unfortunately for him, the Galactic Federation has set up larger amounts of security around the Solar System quadrant of the Milky Way. “Hahaaaahhhh! The Galactic Federation thinks that they are able to capture me! Double ha, for they know that I have evaded the Federation Officers countless times before!” Zoda said in a bubbly, almost hoarse voice that sounded almost like someone drowning. While the Galactic Officers were quick on his tail and were able to match all of his own movements, Zoda was confident that he would make another quick escape, like he has done for the past several times. Just then, his HUD display on his ship was hacked, and the hologram screen of a Galactic Federation Officer came up. This officer was acknowledged by the serial number 001-850 on his Chest Plate, with his rank being Captain due to the “1” in the hundredth place. “Zoda, you are surrounded!" the captain cried out. "Give up the chase…" In response to this order, Zoda merely laughed maniacally. “Have I really made my plans THAT easy to telegraph that you would set up increased security on the day I would come to plan another assault? Even then, I don’t think you will be able to catch me, for I will always have a way to escape!” When he finished saying this, Zoda’s ship took a very sharp turn to the left and boosted to 2852 k/ps. This action caught the officers tailing him by surprise. They knew that he knew that he was surrounded, so they wondered why he boosted to the area where there is a larger concentration of GF Officers that any person can locate by radar. Questioning the act of this seemingly brash move, the officers that were tailing Zoda did a sharp turn and boosted to the left as well. Then, the officer with the serial number of 001-850 contacted the other officers in Zoda’s direction via hologram screen. “14th Star Unit, this is Captain Sherwood, over! Zoda is heading over to your direction. I repeat, Zoda is heading towards your direction. Prepare to blockade and pursue if necessary, you copy?” With those words, the officers that were waiting at the edge of the star system have begun going into formation, creating a blockade line as well as dispatching some officers to slow Zoda down to a favorable speed. While this was happening, Zoda had reverse-engineered the call, gaining insight on the strategy that the Galactic Federation was going to use to capture him. He laughed in an insane fashion yet again with his arms raised off of the steering bars. “You are making this way too easy, Galactic Federation!” Seeing the first of the dispatched officers charging right at him, Zoda placed his hands back on the steering bars and boosted yet again, going at an impressive 3403 k/ps. “Wait, what is this guy doing!? Is he thinking that he can seriously charge out of here like that???” With Zoda’s boost, the dispatched officers crashed into each other and created an explosion, but not without horrible screams of facing death echoing throughout their vehicles. The rest of the dispatched officers, out of fear of their fallen officers, have decided to use a less brash tactic and decided to set up a secondary blockade. Even though the blockade was not as fortified as the primary blockade they have set up at the edge of the star system that draws out of the galaxy, they were confident that this was good enough to slow him down and allow him to be stopped. They all knew that Zoda would have to slow down just to maneuver around them, which will lead him straight into the blockade and bring him to the speed to capture him. They knew that the Death Anchor, Zoda’s ship, does not have a strong body when compared to their vehicles. One of the officers smirked at these facts. “Zoda, you may have eluded us many times, but this time, there is no way that you are going to escape.” While Zoda was being pursued by the original officers, he had come across the first blockade. He acknowledged the fact that he had to slow down temporarily to maneuver around the blockade, so that he would be able to make it out of the galaxy. Zoda then sharply turned left at the moment before approaching the blockade and did a hard turn to the right after reaching the last of the vehicles. He had played right into the hands of the Galactic Federation. The officers had also performed their own turns as well, avoiding collision from the blockade and catching up to Zoda. Immediately afterwards, the blockade of starships had disbanded and began chasing after Zoda alongside the officers, while setting up a walling formation so that Zoda will have no place to escape to. Finally, Zoda had reached the main blockade of the 14th Star Unit. He looked to his sides to see that the Galactic Officers have formed their vehicles to make sure that he would be trapped in place. “Zoda, you are surrounded! Give up the chase and surrender to the Galactic Federation. There is no way for you to escape, so we can do this the easy way or the hard way.” The captain was saying. Zoda, however, began to laugh maniacally again. “You think that this little children’s tactic will be able to work against me!? You may think that you have me cornered like a rat that is stupid, and I may have slowed down to a speed where you may all catch me. However, I have one last surprise to give you all!” With these words, Zoda had pulled out a strange looking blue box with wispy dashed lines from his breastplate and slammed it into the hub port of his car’s switches. Then, the most unusual thing began happening. The box had actually started to meld into the surface and fused as a new switch. Then, a large red button had appeared to where the box fused with the surface at. He smashed his palm into the button and grabbed his shift stick, pushed it forward and pushed the boost button on it. The large red button had then began glowing, and with it, the exterior of the Death Anchor. The captain took quick notice of this, and drew a shocked from what he is about to do. “Zoda is about to use hyperspeed! Fallback! I repeat, fallback! You guys would only be jeopardizing your lives if you continue to block and are caught within the hyperspeed!” Unfortunately, the warning from the captain was too late, as the Death Anchor began to break the light around them and practically warped after just reaching the blockade. What was left was a line of light that pierced through the formation, and with it blew back the vehicles of the blockade, causing them to crash into each other and blow up. The pursuing officers saw the widespread destruction of what had happened, and stopped. They brought their heads down in shame for not only failing to catch Zoda yet again, but for not being able to see the signs of Zoda’s plans and potentially save many of their comrades’ lives. Realizing his mistake, the captain of the capture then realized that there was still hope. Normally, vehicles that use the hyperspeed function tend to leave a strong trail that can be followed before it dissipates within a week. The captain then pulled up an intergalactic map function on a hologram screen and analyzed the photon residue left by the hyperspeed warp. After analyzing the trail signature, the captain cursed under his breath. “Damn! He escaped into unknown territory! Guys, this hunt is now out of our jurisdiction of the galaxy.” With these words, the remaining officers groaned at the revelation of the fact. Seeing his comrades down, the captain continued speaking. “However, it doesn’t mean that Zoda will get away. It just means that we are going to have to hire somebody to catch him now, and I know just the one who can get him.” The rest of the officers then looked at the hologram with a face that clearly disagrees with their superior. “But sir, you don’t mean that we are going to be hiring THAT bounty hunter, do you!? We can still track down Zoda with this strong signature! We will do anything as long as-“ “SHUT THE HELL UP! We are going to hire Falcon for this job, and you have no say in this. If word gets out that we would go into unknown reaches of space, we will be given demerits, be demoted and possibly be dishonorably discharged!” Meanwhile, in an unknown sector of space, the Death Anchor and Zoda had exited hyperspeed. However, Zoda knew that using the hyperspeed function will dangerously deplete the energy in a vehicle, which was why this technology was rarely used. To conserve energy, Zoda had to stop driving while avoiding any possible debris in space; he knew that if anything would hit him, then his vehicle would abruptly crash and his life would end. However, just several hundred miles ahead, Zoda could actually see a planet. Planets can provide the insane Zolorkian with shelter, especially planets in unmarked territories. However, he had to note to himself that this planet had a sun and moon orbiting dangerously (or at least he considered dangerously) close to the planet. He knew that he would have to time his driving. He could not use any boost power, and the wrong move would cause his vehicle to be destroyed. Even though he was worried, the benefits of hiding out on the planet were rewarding enough to outweigh the risks. It was then where he decided to give himself a pep talk. “Alright Zoda, even though you are dangerously low on energy, you have to make it to that planet. If you do, then you are able to recharge and plan another coup on Earth again. All that could happen is that you can die. It’s not anything big that you couldn’t handle! Alright then.” After making the decision to go, he put his vehicle to drive, going only at 500 k/ph this time. He knew that it was unsafe to use up energy to go at regular speeds. After what felt like to be one and a half hours, he finally made it into the planet’s orbit. Unfortunately for him, his ship got caught by the planet’s gravity and pulled his ship in. “Oh nooOOOooo! If my ship gets caught in the planet like that, then I’m a goner!” Using quick thinking, Zoda had turned the ship down into more of a nosedive, but to the right of the planet. What he was expecting was that the Death Anchor would burn up in the planet’s atmosphere. However, the fiery red field of disintegration never came. He is hoping to aim into what appeared to be a large, dense forest situated near a large mountain that is directly a few thousand miles under the sun. With any luck, the trees would be able to catch his Death Anchor and lessen the impact on entry into the world. Fortunately for him, his plan had worked out perfectly, and it was able to safely crash onto the ground, in the middle of the forest. What Zoda doesn’t know is that he is smack dab right in the middle of the Everfree Forest, on a planet whose main populations are creatures that have only appeared in what he would consider mythology. [/spoiler] Chapter 2 [url=http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/295771-my-little-f-zero-racing-is-magic-pg-13/?p=6131989]Chapter 3[/url] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alice Moonflowyr Posted January 15, 2013 Report Share Posted January 15, 2013 I liked. Me gusta. Will post a more in-depth review later. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lonk Posted January 15, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 15, 2013 I will look forward to it Spike. Chapter 2 is probably going to come up tomorrow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alice Moonflowyr Posted January 15, 2013 Report Share Posted January 15, 2013 Will post the review in maybe an hour or so, kinda busy.[quote name='Tentalus Therapist' timestamp='1358214947' post='6121157'] [b]Time for another review. Today's review is [/b][i]My Little F-Zero Racing is Magic [/i][b]by [/b][url="http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/user/169062-tentalus-therapist/"]Tentalus Therapist[/url]. [b]Let's see if he can impress me. [/b] . In the 26[sup]th[/sup] Century, humans have made extensive contact with aliens. Because of these interactions, humans have developed ties to them and have intergraded themselves with the aliens. This has opened up many opportunities, such as trading and migration. In the time it would have taken the people of the 21st century to travel between Earth and the moon, the people of today could explore galaxies from far, far away. And yet, despite the advances in space travel and the amount of progress made in discovering other parts of space, the universe is never fully explored. There are galaxies, star systems and planets that not even the most advanced of aliens have discovered yet. [b]Exposition rainbow! [/b] While the times and technologies are advanced, crime has also evolved. Now, because of space travel, people are capable of spreading crime waves throughout the universe. Criminals have learned of their potential and started committing crimes on other planets. The Intergalactic Council knew this was inevitable, so they have responded by creating the Galactic Federation. This organization functions as the law enforcement of the universe. They apprehend people who violate laws from various galaxies, and prevent chaos from seeping out and infecting the vast expanses of space. Galactic Federation Officers are easily distinguishable by their navy blue body armors and helmets with a shield-shaped visor. In addition, they pilot officer-class starships, dark blue manta-shaped ships that are capable of reaching several thousand miles per minute. While their efforts of apprehending criminals before they began their coups have been largely successful, criminals are able to escape to the undiscovered expanses of the universe and lay low there. [b]Pretty rainbow~[/b] Because the Milky Way is the home galaxy to the Galactic Federation, crimes are relatively under control there. However, one criminal is causing a large amount of trouble to a squad of GF Officers. Piloting a dark blue skinny, but long ship with light blue zigzag stripes and sporting a white “13” is the Zolorkian known as Zoda, a superhuman with a lavender-esque skin suit, violet breastplate, shoulder pads and boots, and vermillion gloves. Zoda is easily recognizable by his lilac-shaded skull belt and metallic tube that starts on top of his head and flows directly into a machine on his back, always giving him constant adrenaline boosts, but had driven him to permanent insanity as a side effect. Zoda is intergalactically wanted for his continuous assaults and crimes on the planet Earth. Unfortunately for him, the Galactic Federation has set up larger amounts of security around the Solar System quadrant of the Milky Way. [b]This is the longest rainbow I've ever seen. Its very pretty~ [/b] “Hahaaaahhhh! The Galactic Federation thinks that they are able to capture me! Double ha, for they know that I have evaded the Federation Officers countless times before!” Zoda said in a bubbly, almost hoarse voice that sounded almost like someone drowning. While the Galactic Officers were quick on his tail and were able to match all of his own movements, Zoda was confident that he would make another quick escape, like he has done for the past several times. Just then, his HUD display on his ship was hacked, and the hologram screen of a Galactic Federation Officer came up. This officer was acknowledged by the serial number 001-850 on his Chest Plate, with his rank being Captain due to the “1” in the hundredth place. [b]We care about the serial number because...? Just give him the title of 'Captain' and ditch the serial number. It doesnt really add anything and just serves to make things more complicated. [/b] “Zoda, you are surrounded!" the captain cried out. "Give up the chase…" In response to this order, Zoda merely laughed maniacally. [b]So even in the future the cop gives the futile order to stop, and then the crook inevitably forces a chase, and the cops will still end up getting him? Lovely. [/b] “Have I really made my plans THAT easy to telegraph that you would set up increased security on the day I would come to plan another assault? Even then, I don’t think you will be able to catch me, for I will always have a way to escape!” [b]Because I am the Joker reincarnated! We need Future Batman to come to the rescue![/b] When he finished saying this, Zoda’s ship took a very sharp turn to the left and boosted to 2852 k/ps. This action caught the officers tailing him by surprise. They knew that he knew that he was surrounded, so they wondered why he boosted to the area where there is a larger concentration of GF Officers that any person can locate by radar. Questioning the act of this seemingly brash move, the officers that were tailing Zoda did a sharp turn and boosted to the left as well. Then, the officer with the serial number of 001-850 contacted the other officers in Zoda’s direction via hologram screen. [b]Call him a captain. Serial numbers are for robots. [/b] “14[sup]th[/sup] Star Unit, this is Captain 850, over. Zoda is heading over to your direction. I repeat, Zoda is heading towards your direction. Prepare to blockade and pursue if necessary, you copy?” [b]His name is 850. How creative. My mind is exploding from the amount of creative in that name. [/b] With those words, the officers that were waiting at the edge of the star system have begun going into formation, creating a blockade line as well as dispatching some officers to slow Zoda down to a favorable speed. While this was happening, Zoda had reverse-engineered the call, gaining insight on the strategy that the Galactic Federation was going to use to capture him. He laughed in an insane fashion yet again with his arms raised off of the steering bars. [b]Waitwaitwait. He's at the edge of a star system? When the f*** did that happen? *reads back* Nope, nothing about being at the edge. On another hand, this guy is totally Reincarnated Joker. [/b] “You are making this way too easy, Galactic Federation!” Seeing the first of the dispatched officers charging right at him, Zoda placed his hands back on the steering bars and boosted yet again, going at an impressive 3403 k/ps. [b]We have no comparison. How is this impressive? [/b] “Wait, what is this guy doing!? Is he thinking that he can seriously charge out of here like that???” With Zoda’s boost, the dispatched officers crashed into each other and created an explosion, but not without horrible screams of facing death echoing throughout their vehicles. The rest of the dispatched officers, out of fear of their fallen officers, have decided to use a less brash tactic and decided to set up a secondary blockade. Even though the blockade was not as fortified as the primary blockade they have set up at the edge of the star system that draws out of the galaxy, they were confident that this was good enough to slow him down and allow him to be stopped. They all knew that Zoda would have to slow down just to maneuver around them, which will lead him straight into the blockade and bring him to the speed to capture him. They knew that the Death Anchor, Zoda’s ship, does not have a strong body when compared to their vehicles. [b]This is the first cool paragraph of the chapter. [/b] One of the officers smirked at these facts. “Zoda, you may have eluded us many times, but this time, there is no way that you are going to escape.” [b]Because Future Batman is going to come kick your ass. [/b] While Zoda was being pursued by the original officers, he had come across the first blockade. He acknowledged the fact that he had to slow down temporarily to maneuver around the blockade, so that he would be able to make it out of the galaxy. Zoda then sharply turned left at the moment before approaching the blockade and did a hard turn to the right after reaching the last of the vehicles. He had played right into the hands of the Galactic Federation. The officers had also performed their own turns as well, avoiding collision from the blockade and catching up to Zoda. Immediately afterwards, the blockade of starships had disbanded and began chasing after Zoda alongside the officers, while setting up a walling formation so that Zoda will have no place to escape to. Finally, Zoda had reached the main blockade of the 14[sup]th[/sup] Star Unit. He looked to his sides to see that the Galactic Officers have formed their vehicles to make sure that he would be trapped in place. [b]Chase scenes are cool. [/b] “Zoda, you are surrounded! Give up the chase and surrender to the Galactic Federation. There is no way for you to escape, so we can do this the easy way or the hard way.” The captain was saying. Zoda, however, began to laugh maniacally again. [b]He's Reincarnated Joker, do you really think he's going to listen to you?[/b] “You think that this little children’s tactic will be able to work against me!? You may think that you have me cornered like a rat that is stupid, and I may have slowed down to a speed where you may all catch me. However, I have one last surprise to give you all!” With these words, Zoda had pulled out a strange looking blue box with wispy dashed lines from his breastplate and slammed it into the hub port of his car’s switches. Then, the most unusual thing began happening. The box had actually started to meld into the surface and fused as a new switch. Then, a large red button had appeared to where the box fused with the surface at. He smashed his palm into the button and grabbed his shift stick, pushed it forward and pushed the boost button on it. The large red button had then began glowing, and with it, the exterior of the Death Anchor. The captain took quick notice of this, and drew a shocked from what he is about to do. [b]inb4badassmoment[/b] “Zoda is about to use hyperspeed! Fallback! I repeat, fallback! You guys would only be jeopardizing your lives if you continue to block and are caught within the hyperspeed!” Unfortunately, the warning from the captain was too late, as the Death Anchor began to break the light around them and practically warped after just reaching the blockade. What was left was a line of light that pierced through the formation, and with it blew back the vehicles of the blockade, causing them to crash into each other and blow up. The pursuing officers saw the widespread destruction of what had happened, and stopped. They brought their heads down in shame for not only failing to catch Zoda yet again, but for not being able to see the signs of Zoda’s plans and potentially save many of their comrades’ lives. Realizing his mistake, the captain of the capture then realized that there was still hope. Normally, vehicles that use the hyperspeed function tend to leave a strong trail that can be followed before it dissipates within a week. The captain then pulled up an intergalactic map function on a hologram screen and analyzed the photon residue left by the hyperspeed warp. After analyzing the trail signature, the captain cursed under his breath. [b]Because Reincarnated Joker got away or because Future Batman is sitting somewhere on his lazy ass drinking coffee?[/b] “Damn! He escaped into unknown territory! Guys, this hunt is now out of our jurisdiction of the galaxy.” With these words, the remaining officers groaned at the revelation of the fact. Seeing his comrades down, the captain continued speaking. “However, it doesn’t mean that Zoda will get away. It just means that we are going to have to hire somebody to catch him now, and I know just the one who can get him.” The rest of the officers then looked at the hologram with a face that clearly disagrees with their superior. [b]Future Batman is going to get a scolding. [/b] “But sir, you don’t mean that we are going to be hiring THAT bounty hunter, do you!? We can still track down Zoda with this strong signature! We will do anything as long as-“ [b]Future Batman does not approve of your comments. [/b] “SHUT THE HELL UP! We are going to hire Falcon for this job, and you have no say in this. If word gets out that we would go into unknown reaches of space, we will be given demerits, be demoted and possibly be dishonorably discharged!” [b]So Future Batman is now called Falcon? Interesting. [/b] Meanwhile, in an unknown sector of space, the Death Anchor and Zoda had exited hyperspeed. However, Zoda knew that using the hyperspeed function will dangerously deplete the energy in a vehicle, which was why this technology was rarely used. To conserve energy, Zoda had to stop driving while avoiding any possible debris in space; he knew that if anything would hit him, then his vehicle would abruptly crash and his life would end. However, just several hundred miles ahead, Zoda could actually see a planet. Planets can provide the insane Zolorkian with shelter, especially planets in unmarked territories. However, he had to note to himself that this planet had a sun and moon orbiting dangerously (or at least he considered dangerously) close to the planet. He knew that he would have to time his driving. He could not use any boost power, and the wrong move would cause his vehicle to be destroyed. Even though he was worried, the benefits of hiding out on the planet were rewarding enough to outweigh the risks. It was then where he decided to give himself a pep talk. [b]Dats one purdy rainbow~[/b] “Alright Zoda, even though you are dangerously low on energy, you have to make it to that planet. If you do, then you are able to recharge and plan another coup on Earth again. All that could happen is that you can die. It’s not anything big that you couldn’t handle! Alright then.” After making the decision to go, he put his vehicle to drive, going only at 500 k/ph this time. He knew that it was unsafe to use up energy to go at regular speeds. After what felt like to be one and a half hours, he finally made it into the planet’s orbit. Unfortunately for him, his ship got caught by the planet’s gravity and pulled his ship in. [b]Oh boy. He's in trouble now, and Future Batman can drink his coffee in peace. [/b] “Oh nooOOOooo! If my ship gets caught in the planet like that, then I’m a goner!” Using quick thinking, Zoda had turned the ship down into more of a nosedive, but to the right of the planet. What he was expecting was that the Death Anchor would burn up in the planet’s atmosphere. However, the fiery red field of disintegration never came. He is hoping to aim into what appeared to be a large, dense forest situated near a large mountain that is directly a few thousand miles under the sun. With any luck, the trees would be able to catch his Death Anchor and lessen the impact on entry into the world. Fortunately for him, his plan had worked out perfectly, and it was able to safely crash onto the ground, in the middle of the forest. What Zoda doesn’t know is that he is smack dab right in the middle of the Everfree Forest, on a planet whose main populations are creatures that have only appeared in what he would consider mythology. [b]I do hope that this Everfree Forest is where ponies come in. [/b] [/spoiler] [/quote] So this was alright. The chase scene was well done, but its a chase scene. Hard to do on paper. Lots of pretty exposition rainbows, which are always good if you do it right, which you did. All in all, nice first chapter. Waiting for the next one :3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lonk Posted January 15, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 15, 2013 I appreciate the review in all honesty. 850's real name is revealed in the next chapter though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lonk Posted January 16, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 16, 2013 2nd chapter should come up soon. It is just being refined in a process. Though, I do have the 3rd chapter written out, but that needs to be refined as well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lonk Posted January 27, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 27, 2013 [spoiler=Chapter 2] Meanwhile, back on Earth, there exists an interstellar trade harbor. This town was created as a response to the increased competition in profitable intergalactic trade. This town is marked by skyscrapers, pyramid-shaped office buildings and is bordered by mountains. The sky is usually a hazy orange and the sea is of a clear black color. This place is known as Port Town. However, off the coast of Port Town lays a chain of islands, each with a different racetrack. This chain of islands is home to Captain Falcon, one of the greatest bounty hunters in the entire galaxy and champion of the F-Zero Grand Prix. Captain Falcon is distinguishable by his indigo pants, indigo form-fitting armor and a red helmet with a black visor shade as well as a single pauldron on his right shoulder. He always carries a sidearm in a yellow holster on his right hip. The emblem on his helmet is the icon of a falcon, which is also engraved into his golden-colored boots. However, this reputation has given Falcon many enemies, forcing him to live his life in solitude on these islands. The only times where Captain Falcon leaves these islands is when the F-Zero would happen, or if there was a large enough bounty. Around this time of the year, Falcon is test driving his vehicle, the Blue Falcon. The Blue Falcon is distinguishable by its blue, plane-like auto body, two blue folded wings with red and white stripes at the ends of them, four thrusters at the back and the number “07” on each of the wings and at the tip of the nose. The speed of the machine was going at around 2200 k/ph, the natural limit of most standard F-Zero Machines. The next F-Zero Grand Prix is about to come up in a month, and he has a considerably visible smirk on his face. He was thinking about what new competition might show up, as well as seeing old rivals and dangerous enemies. He knew that, in his mind, he would blow away the competition yet again. However, while Captain Falcon was racing on the track, his Blue Falcon had picked up a signal from the Galactic Federation. An audible groan was heard from him, because he did not like involving himself in the affairs of the Federation too much, especially during training season. However, he decided to answer it back home, as he realized that whatever they have for him must be important. After Captain Falcon entered the garage, he drove through a long tunnel that led underground to his home. There, Falcon opened up the comms signal with the Galactic Federation with his hologram screen. There, he saw a Galactic Federation officer with the serial number 001-850 on his breastplate of the suit. The officer had his helmet off, revealing the chiseled face of a forty year-old man with brown-blonde hair and brown eyes. The officer then began to speak. “Falcon, this is Captain Sherwood from the 14th Star Unit. I do apologize for interrupting your training schedule, because I know you are incredibly busy during this time.” Captain Falcon was not amused. His mouth showed somewhat of a scowl. “Well Sherwood, seeing that you have called for me during this time, it must be important.” “It’s Zoda”, with these two words, Falcon’s interest had been peaked. Zoda was one of the few criminals that made it onto Captain Falcon’s bingo list, and one of the very few that escaped his reach. He knew that a target like Zoda would provide a high enough bounty to keep his home fortress running. “We had intel that he would come to Earth to stage another coup, but we responded on time as he entered this star system. Unfortunately, he got away from us and he escaped into areas that are out of our jurisdiction. Falcon, the Galactic Federation is willing to pay you one hundred million space credits for the capture of Zoda.” Captain Falcon pondered about the bounty for a bit. While he did have to prepare for the F-Zero, he also had a chance to capture Zoda and earn a hefty reward for it. Then, Falcon responded. “I will take the bounty. I just need to know where he escaped to, and I can go there by boarding my Falcon Flyer.” “Excellent.” The captain then flashed a hologram screen, pinpointing the last area where Zoda was and showing the photon residue leading out of the Milky Way. “We have reason to believe that Zoda headed towards the southeastern expanse of space in this direction. He could not have gone far, because hyperspeed technology dangerously exasperates the energy of a vehicle, especially that of a machine that is meant for F-Zero races. God only knows what Zoda was thinking driving a machine unsuitable for interstellar travel into space. Then again, he IS Zoda, so this guy has an unpredictable intellect.” “I am so anxious to catch this punk. If you have any further notes, say them now.” “Alright then Falcon, since you asked. Like I said earlier, Zoda had fled to an unknown part of space, probably a planet. If you do go to a planet, and it is inhabited by intelligent beings, do not try to fight any of them unless if they attack first. The council would like to be on good terms with all intelligent races, and integrating a new race into the United Universe would be easier to do if they do not have any reason to despise us. In addition, we prefer that Zoda is captured alive. This way, we can investigate his person better. Now then Falcon, I wish you good luck on your mission and happy hunting.” After this, Captain Sherwood waved his hand and ended the transmission, having the hologram screen disappear. “Yes!” While Captain Falcon’s training had to be interrupted, he was itching for another chance to catch Zoda. Captain Falcon walked out of the transmission room and went straight to the docking bay. He pulled out a round signaler from his pocket, and pressed the only button on it while pointing down to a suspiciously spacious patch of ground. Then, he was rewarded with two high pitched sounds coming from his signaler, and the ground began to open up, which revealed a rectangular shaped hole. Out of the pit came a titanic spacecraft with a brazen yellow body, green eyes and purple folded wings. Falcon smirked when he saw the luster that the body gave off. This was the true beauty of the Falcon Flyer. Falcon then pointed his signaler to the Falcon Flyer and pressed the button on it. Within moments, the white hull under the ship began to open up, showing a ramp that can take vehicles inside of the ship. He ran into the open cockpit of the Blue Falcon and closed it. He then drove it up the ramp and inside of the Flyer. While he usually did not take his F-Zero Machine on bounty hunts, he knew that Zoda would still have his F-Zero Machine, which meant that he would flee in it given the chance that he sees Falcon. Falcon had made sure that the Falcon Flyer had been properly rationed for this mission. While in the hull of the ship, he checked to see what he had in the ship’s arsenal. Inside of the arsenal was an array of handheld weaponry. He didn't prefer to use heavy weaponry, as he found them to be too large to drag around and they usually wound up being overkill. For these reasons, Captain Falcon preferred guns that he can place in his holster without much of a hassle. As he was walking through the grayscale-colored arsenal, he noticed a particular shock gun that he couldn’t help but love. The sleek, silver gun was capable of holding 150 shock rounds at a time, and each of those lightning-pulsing blue rounds have enough wattage in them to shock a baby elephant to unconsciousness. This gun had always helped him catch his targets, from the many foot soldiers of the evil Black Shadow, to even the occasional Dalek that threatens to destroy humanity. He grabbed the gun, and a smirk had appeared on his face. He really felt that he can finally catch Zoda this time, and there will be no escape this time, in any way. After Captain Falcon checked to see that he is stocked on gel fuel, G-Diffusors are running effectively, he had the weapons he needed and there were no malfunctions of the ship, he decided that it was sufficient enough for him to leave. He walked into the main control room, which held one brown cotton armchair on a raised platform followed by several other chairs that control advanced aspects of the ship, such as a heavier combat station and energy redirectors. However, he wondered why he even had multiple seats on the ship, considering that just having access to the main control unit is sufficient enough for him to use. Captain Falcon sat down on the armchair on the raised platform and laid back a bit, so that he could adjust his seat to his relaxed settings. He brought up a hologram screen that showed only a straight light blue line by pressing the gray assortment of keys on the central keyboard. Soon afterwards, a female robotic voice was heard, and the light blue line had moved to accompany the tone of the voice. “Greetings, Captain Falcon. I am the central computer of this ship. What is your command?” Captain Falcon pulled out his signaler from his pocket yet again, and pointed towards the ceiling of the ship. However, before he can press the button on the signaler, he lifted one of the brown, fuzzy coverings off of one of the arms on the armchair and flipped it over, revealing an assortment of buttons in various colors. He pressed an orange circular button on the pad. Within moments, the platform and the armchair began to rise to the ceiling of the ship, and the ship opened up a circular hole in the ceiling. Afterwards, Falcon and his armchair were on the top of the Falcon Flyer. He then pointed his signaler towards the roof of the depot and pressed the button on it. Immediately, the roof had begun to open up, and bright, comforting sunbeams began breaking through the crack in the roof, bathing the dull depot in its glorious brilliance. Then, he pressed the blue triangular button on the pad, which caused the seat to slowly descent back into the ship and the ceiling of the ship to close. After descending back into the main control room, Falcon looked back at the screen. “Falcon Flyer, prepare to take off for these coordinates recorded into the system given to us by the Galactic Federation.” “Understood Captain.” Captain Falcon never got tired of hearing his ship say that phrase. He enraptured himself in the power that he has with his ship when taking off. It was one of the quirks of owning the craft that made it very enjoyable. The ship’s G-Diffusor system became active, and then the ship started to float upwards. Then, it pointed diagonally upwards, with the thrusters warming up. After the thrusters were done, they began to flare and generated a propulsion boost. The ship’s thrusters then exploded backward with force and shot the craft right through the gap of the roof and appeared as though it broke through a large, cragged mountain on the island. Then, the gap had closed afterwards, having movement sensors to detect when the Flying Falcon would leave through this exit. The ship was going at 12000 k/ph and was breaking through the atmosphere of the planet. As it breached through the orange clouds and then the ozone layer, the ship managed to rocket even faster to 20000 k/ph and breached the atmosphere, revealing the star-filled vasts of outer space. The ship was set to auto-pilot, tracing the photon residue left by Zoda. After the craft detected the complete path of the photon, it turned to the direction of the photon and boosted on its trail. Based on how extensive the amount of photon was, Falcon knew that it would take a good amount of time before he would reach his destination. He decided to get up from his armchair and head down the hall, where he would check on the holding cells. As he walked down the hallway, it gradually grew darker, a sign that the ship was transferring energy to navigation and autopilot features to ensure the quickest and safest path of travel. When he turned to an automatic door on the leftmost wall in the hall, he entered inside another hallway. This time, however, instead of walls forming the path, there were titanium bars instead, which were made very durable so that the captured bounty would have no way of escaping, even if some were supernaturally strong. As he walked down the corridor, he began to recount the times he had hunting down his targets. The most memorable cell, however, was the one all the way down the corridor. This cell is where he stuffed twenty-six henchmen that belonged to Zoda. The sleek, metallic cell has proven to be to hold that many people, just by that experience. In the midst of memorization, the lights in the hallway began to brighten up again. Captain Falcon was sprinting back through the corridor, and then sprinted down the hallway back into the main control room. What he saw with the hologram screen that was set up had somewhat stunned him; he saw a vividly green planet with a bright sun and chalky moon constantly revolving around the planet. The planet looked as though it was never touched by pollution. It also looked, dare he say, harmonious. It was a breathtaking sight for him. He then sat in his armchair and pressed a combination of buttons on the keyboard. The image of the planet then disappeared, and was replaced with a light-blue line. “Computer, what is the name of this planet?” There was a slight pause, and then the line began to move. “No information on this planet nor area available. This planet was detected immediately after the trail of photon had ended.” Captain Falcon smiled with this information while slightly cocking his head forward. “Computer, set a course towards this unknown planet.” The line then disappeared and was replaced with a hologram screen of the Falcon Flyer plotting a course to the planet, navigating its way around the sun and moon. “This is definitely going to be a good hunt.” [/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Premier Alexander Romanov Posted January 27, 2013 Report Share Posted January 27, 2013 SWEET MOTHER OF NEIL PATRICK HARRIS!!! You've somehow combined the awesomeness of F-Zero with the epicness of MLP:FiM!!! AND IT WORKS!!! [spoiler=How I Currently Feel (Warning: A Bit Gruesome)] [/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lonk Posted January 27, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 27, 2013 SWEET MOTHER OF NEIL PATRICK HARRIS!!! You've somehow combined the awesomeness of F-Zero with the epicness of MLP:FiM!!! AND IT WORKS!!! [spoiler=How I Currently Feel (Warning: A Bit Gruesome)] [/spoiler] Thank you for the compliment and support :D Next chapter will definitely start off the ponies. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lonk Posted January 29, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 29, 2013 [Spoiler=Chapter 3] On the planet, the dawn is starting to break. With it, the crow of a brown-feathered rooster echoes near a dense wood, overlooking an orchard of trees, a barn and a farmhouse. Inside of the farmhouse, there were several country-style furniture pieces and, in the rooms were six Technicolor ponies getting up from their beds. Out of the ones that came out of their rooms were two adult ponies. One of them was an amber-coated mare with a blonde mane and tail that were tied up, green eyes, brown freckles with 3 apples that mark her flank and wearing a Stetson. Next to her was a slightly larger purple-coated stallion with a dark blue short mane and tail, blue eyes and a wooden straw hat. The mark on his flank was a bundle of purple grapes that are stemming off from a branch. Both ponies started walking into the kitchen and were welcomed by a scent of sweet cinnamon and apples. In the quaint kitchen, there was a table with a simple white cloth draped upon it, with several plates filled with stacks of golden brown pancakes resting on them. The wafting aroma were making the mouths of these two ponies water, as they appear to be momentarily dazed by the sweet smell. It was then when a high southern belle-styled voice broke them from their stupor. “G’mornin’ Applejack! G’mornin’ Grape Jam! It seemed like y’all wer’ ‘avin yerselves in one of ‘em moments again.” The voice came from a pale yellow young mare with an apple red mane and orange eyes. She wore a large bow with a similar color as her mane. Marked on her flank was a brown, wooden table holding a rather large red apple. She was wearing a white apron that embedded the same symbol of tje table with an apple. She had her head turned around looking at the other two ponies with a large smile. Applejack and Grape Jam turned their heads to see the young mare trotting up to them. “G’morning Apple Bloom. How’s mah adorable li’l sis doin’ ‘dis mornin’?” “Well ahm doin’ fine, thank ya very much, but ahm not so li’l ahnymor, so ya can cut that bit out. Ah just made this apron last night fashioned after mah cutie mark!” Grape Jam eyed the apron a bit. He may not have had Apple Bloom’s talent, but from the eyes of a common viewer, the apron looked very sturdy and beautifully made. “So Applebloom, ah can see that ya taken quite a shine ta makin’ fancy stuff now.” Even though Apple Bloom looked at Grape Jam with happy eyes, she still looked somewhat nervous. “Got ta find the right words. Ah need to make sure t’ not embarrass myself in front of ‘im.” Apple Bloom thought to herself. “Why yes ah did Grape Jam. Evah since ah discovered mah talent in woodcraft and crafts, ah’ve been workin’ on mah skills so that”, with Apple Bloom putting more emphasis into her next words, “ah may be tha Apple Family’s best contractor!!!” Both ponies had their teeth clenched as a reaction from the loud voice. Apple Bloom seeing this reaction, nervously grinned. She continued. “And how is mah sis’s esteemed husband doing today?” Grape Jam merely stared in place at Apple Bloom’s direction. Then, he blinked once and looked slightly down towards Apple Bloom’s height. “it’s alright Apple Bloom. Ya can consider me yer other big brother”, Grape Jam said with a smile on his face. “Keep usin’ dem fancy titles and ahmma gonna tell ya the story of how ah fell in love with mah sugarcube Applejack again.” Grape Jam and Applejack looked at each other amorously and nuzzled each other’s snouts. Apple Bloom’s facial expression had suddenly scrunched up. She hated that particular story. She recounts all of the details, from the accidental bump at his family’s Grape Orchard in Southern Coltifornia five years ago to seeing how much in common they had with each other (and thus, found that they were perfect for each other). She may have found it cute the first five times the story was told, but it started to get annoying after the next twenty times. She also hated just how mushy lovey-dovey the story was. Grape Jam and Applejack knew that this was starting to bother their younger sister, so they stopped. In the midst of Apple Bloom’s mild shock, a large red-coated stallion with a slightly mangled blonde mane and tail, a brown yoke around his neck and a large green apple that was cut in half for his cutie mark walked into the kitchen. He calmly walked his way towards the triumvirate of Earth Ponies and stopped. “Hiya Apple Bloom, Applejack and Grape Jam! How are y’all doin’ ‘dis fine mornin’?” Grape Jam trotted up to his brother-in-law and raised his right hoof in the direction of the stallion. “All of us are doin’ good! Ah can see that ya had a restful night last night Big Mac?” Seeing the raised hoof of Grape Jam, Big Mac raised his right hoof and pounded it into Grape Jam’s hoof. “Eeyup!” When Big Mac first met Grape Jam, Big Mac became very defensive of his sister, and was somewhat hostile towards Grape Jam. He was not used to the idea of his younger sister bringing home a stallion, which she replied “Big Mac, ah think ya have yer apples shoved inside yer backdoor. I suggest taking something for that”, which caused him to grow embarrassed at the words. Of course, over the course of five years he was with Grape Jam, his attitude towards him had positively increased; today, he looks at him as a full-fledged member of the apple family and the brother that he never had. He also was happy to have another stallion on the farm to help with the plowing. Smiling contently, Big Mac trotted towards the table and sat down on the wooden seat. Coming from the hallway was an elderly mare with a light-green coat and white hair tied up in a ball. She had an apple pie as her cutie mark. She was walking into the kitchen with her walker, with a yellow foal with a blue mane on her back. As she made it to the table, she grabbed the foal on her back and put her on a blue highchair that Apple Bloom made last year. She then let go of her walker and sat on the seat next to the foal. The foal was dribbling, having the wet drool drip onto the covering top on the highchair. The elderly mare laughed at this display. Apple Bloom, Applejack and Grape Jam were the last to arrive to the table. After the elderly mare finished laughing, she saw that all of the other ponies on the table were already getting their pancakes from the center place. She saw that Applejack was sitting between Grape Jam and the little foal, while to her left were Apple Bloom and Big Mac. She saw that each pony was smearing 100% Sweet Apple Acres Grape Jelly across each of the pancakes (which she considered to have been a wonderful creation ever since the orchard had begun planting grapes a while back). Before she took her pancakes, she gave one of the pancakes in the center to the little foal, which Applejack cut up into bite-sized pieces. Applejack was taking each of the pieces with a fork and bringing them into the foal’s mouth. The foal reacted with a satisfactory grin and eye shut while she was chewing each piece of the delicious pancake, savoring the apple and cinnamon flavor mixed with the grape jam coating. Seeing this response of bonding, the elderly mare had contently sighed and commented. “Applejack, yer makin’ me feel older by havin’ this her’ child. It makes me remember the good ol’ times when ya were a little filly like her.” “Granny Smith, ya know that yer great-grandaughter has a name”, she then looked towards the foal and smiled, bringing her hoof under her daughter’s chin and tickling it a bit, “Isn’t that right Apple Jelly?” Apple Jelly cutely giggled from being tickled. Grape Jam’s heartstrings were strummed a bit by the display of affection that his wife was giving to their daughter. Apple Bloom had a noticeable shine in her eyes as a response to this act. She wanted to play with her niece after breakfast, but she knew that she had to do some applebucking soon. Her response to the affection then turned slightly sour with the revelation. She felt a bit infuriated that she had to do some of the share of her sister’s applebucking, because she was spending more time with Apple Jelly. She mentally sighed. “Ah guess dat bein’ a mother means havin’ a higher level of devotion towards your child. It can’t be helped” After finishing his pancakes, Grape Jam had a hearty smile on his face from breakfast. He looked towards Big Mac with a sense of eagerness. He then leaned over to him, holding his hoof over his brother-in-law’s ear and whispered. “Ya wanna leave a bit e’rly and surprise the girls wit’ a headstart on their chores?” Big Mac looked towards Grape Jam and uttered a “eeyup”, signaling his approval. During the small commotion of the foal at the kitchen table, Big Mac and Grape Jelly had approached several of the firmly planted trees with a variety of colorful apples. Taking position, both of the Stallions turned to their rears and were ready to buck the trees. As Big Mac had his hind legs raised, readying to buck the tree behind him, a rainbow blur had rushed by him, spinning the unbalanced stallion onto the ground. The source of blur was none other than a cyan pegasus mare with a rainbow-colored mane and tail with magenta eyes. Her cutie mark was a rainbow-colored lightning bolt that is striking from a cloud. She hovered in the air in an upright position, flapping her wings. “Oops! Sorry Big Mac! I’m in a bit of a rush! Are you okay?” “Eeyup.”, Big Mac replied before he began to prepare bucking apples once more. Rainbow Dash glanced towards Grape Jam. “Oh, hey Grape Jam. How’s Applejack doing?” “Hiya Rainbow Dash. Mah sugarcube Applejack is doin’ just fine. She’s just playin’ and carin’ for lil’ Apple Jelly along with Granny Smith. Apple Bloom should be comin’ out soon though.” “Alright then. Say hi to Applejack for me!” After the greetings were done, Rainbow had continued flying through the plane. Normally, Rainbow Dash wouldn’t be up this early in the morning. However, today was a special day for her, and her facial expression showed an excessively large grin. As she was speeding through the clouds, she began thinking about how awesome today is going to be. “Oh boy! I am finally graduating from the Wonderbolt Academy! I knew that this day would come! I am finally going to be a Wonderbolt! I finally get to fly alongside Spitfire and Soarin and get to perform my awesome tricks in front of crowds of ponies! They will be like ‘Wow, Rainbow Dash!! You are so cool!’ and then I will be like ‘Yeah, it’s nothing. Wait until you see my Sonic Rainboo-‘Before she could finish, her eyes caught something on the meadow horizon. She saw what appeared to be a large metal bird diving near the forest, outside of Ponyville. “Man, I really don’t have the time for this. However, it does look interesting”. With curiosity overtaking her, she took a left towards the craft, not knowing what to expect. Meanwhile, after the Falcon Flyer had pierced through the planet’s atmosphere, Captain Falcon got a better look at his surroundings. From his left, he could see that a series of buildings were settled at the foot of a mountain. “Hmmm, it seems that the dominant race of aliens on this planet are intelligent, based off of their knowledge of constructing buildings.” Captain Falcon was momentarily lost in thought before he realized that he was about to impact the ground soon. Overriding the ship’s autopilot, he grabbed the steering wheel of the craft and pushed downward. The Flyer’s descent was slowed down, and it was at a manageable speed to land safely on the ground. The craft then had three holes open from the hull and out came three metal legs with flat bottoms. Captain Falcon then ran down the main hallway of the Falcon Flyer and then went to the door down the hallway. He pressed a blue button on the paneling near the door, and with it the door raised. He took his first steps out of the flyer and then realized just how pure the air was. It was as though he felt elated for every breath he took. The blades of grass dancing along the gentle breeze were a verdant shade of green. The forest, on the other hand, looked foreboding. Each of the trees appeared to have a face, with each one appearing as though they were screaming “Get out”. While this was normally a deterrent for the weak of heart, Falcon knew that he had to find Zoda. It was a large possibility that he would be hiding in a forest like this. Just before he took out his tracker, a cyan equine-like alien with wings and a rainbow-scale mane and tail had landed right in front of him. It looked as though this creature had a curious stare directed towards him. Despite the foreign appearance of the creature, Captain Falcon had kept a cool composure and a straight face. From Rainbow’s perspective, she is looking at what appears to be a heavily suited monkey that looks as though it was compensating for a lack of hair. She looked a bit tense as she eyed this…bald primate-like creature and its unusual clothing. She couldn’t help but notice the muscular build on whatever the creature’s gender was. She also noticed that the creature was giving her a threatening stare, as though it was expecting her to make a move. The two of them continued to stare at each other, with the tension in the air growing so thick that the viewer can choke on it. Finally, Rainbow Dash broke the dreadful silence. “Who the buck are you!?” [/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Catterjune Posted January 31, 2013 Report Share Posted January 31, 2013 Exposition rainbow!Pretty rainbow~This is the longest rainbow I've ever seen. Its very pretty~[...]Dats one purdy rainbow~---Because I am the Joker reincarnated! We need Future Batman to come to the rescue![...]On another hand, this guy is totally Reincarnated Joker.Because Future Batman is going to come kick your ass.He's Reincarnated Joker, do you really think he's going to listen to you?Because Reincarnated Joker got away or because Future Batman is sitting somewhere on his lazy ass drinking coffee?Future Batman does not approve of your comments.So Future Batman is now called Falcon? Interesting.Oh boy. He's in trouble now, and Future Batman can drink his coffee in peace.---The only thing worse then an unfunny joke is an unfunny joke repeated multiple times. The first time it might be kind of cute, like a dog bringing you a dead squirrel as a present. "Oh look, he thinks he's helping but he's actually disgusting me!" But if he does it way more then once I'm inclined to hit him on the nose with a newspaper.Your "review" is just mentioning that something is exposition, that one guy reminds you of the Joker, and one guy reminds you of Batman. That's not a review, that's just running commentary."This guy reminds me of Joker... which is a bad thing because [X]""This guy reminds of Batman... which is a good thing because [Y]""This is some long exposition... which is neither good nor bad because [Z]"That would be a review.On-topic: I dislike ponies (or at least the pony fandom) and I'm apathetic towards F-Zero and Captain Falcon (though I dislike the Captain Falcon fanboys).So basically I didn't read the fic. Spike's "review" was just so fucking awful I felt I had to say something. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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