Cherz Posted January 19, 2013 Report Share Posted January 19, 2013 Its easier to understand, but its still, awkward reading. They Personality, and Appearance dont seem long enough imo, and its wierd reading. Its better, but not quite there. Sorry Zero. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RogueZero Posted January 20, 2013 Report Share Posted January 20, 2013 Which sentence that you guys don't understand? I just need a hint to fix my app ... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Otaku-sama Posted January 22, 2013 Report Share Posted January 22, 2013 My app is finally finished. [spoiler=Iri Eyon | Human Fighter] Name: Iri Eyon Age: 24 Gender/Sexuality: Female/Bisexual Race: Human, old family tale speaks of an archon ancestor Personality: Iri acts the opposite of what is expected of a lady to act like. She is brash, rude and very headstrong. When something gets in her way, her first thought is if she can break her way through it. Her time as a mercenary has made her rather selfish and self-serving, picking fights she knows she can win. In battle, she often charges into battle with little regard for those around her. While reckless, Iri always looks out for her own safety. Iri is also very proud of her physical strength and will take every opportunity to show it off. Rarely will Iri ever turn down a challenge of strength or stamina. While Iri may act very masculine, she is not completely out of touch with her feminine side and will use womanly charms to get her way when necessary. Appearance: Iri stands at 5’ 8”, making her taller than most human women. Her skin is very pale and is complemented by her athletic physique, making her look like she was carved out of solid marble. Her raven black hair is boycut and falls naturally into spikes. Her emerald green eyes are narrow and intense, able to intimidate the average man into paying his debts. Iri rarely, if ever, wears makeup of any kind. Most people will see Iri in her steel plate armor. Her armor, consisting of a cuirass, greaves, a full helm with visor, a brown tunic and gauntlets, is simply made, but rugged enough to withstand many hits. Her left gauntlet is much larger than the right, with a rounded steel buckler bolted to the forearm, allowing Iri to block arrows while wielding a two-handed weapon. Her bastard sword is also of simple design, with a long straight blade without a guard on the handle. The sword is heavy enough to cleave through chainmail, but is also light enough for Iri to wield with one hand when she is blocking. When she is not wearing her armor, Iri wears little to cover herself, with only wrappings to cover her bosom and a loose skirt. Biography: Born as the daughter of a military man, Iri lived a rugged life among the recruits her father trained. With her mother dying at an early age, Iri was completely raised by her father, becoming as loud and rough as the recruits. As soon as she was able to, Iri participated in all of her father’s drills, often outpacing and outperforming older male recruits. Despite her physical ability, her father constantly refused to teach Iri how to fight, expecting her to become someone’s housewife. Refusing to resign to this fate, Iri spied on her father’s combat drills and practiced it in the middle of the night with a stick. When her father caught her doing it, he locked her up in the barracks. It was during this time when Iri decided to go off on her own. After breaking out of the room, she raided the armory and ran off into the night. Iri then lived the free life of a mercenary, providing muscle when the pay was good enough and collecting bounties on wanted criminals. However, Iri still craved more excitement and danger. When she heard of the expedition to the surface that had no human volunteer, Iri decided that this could be the adventure she was looking for and signed herself up. Class: Fighter Custom Abilities: Current Abilities: Supplies: Riding horse, normal clothes, provisions for a week, steel dagger, customized suit of plate armor, bastard sword. [/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alice Moonflowyr Posted January 22, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 22, 2013 We already have a human (Enrise), and your Current Abilities needs to be filled in. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bowtiemyass Posted January 22, 2013 Report Share Posted January 22, 2013 Name: Eros ZanstonAge: 44 (human years)Gender/Sexuality: Male/Bisexual [spoiler= Personality:] Being the grandson of the Lordess of the Archon peoples has its perks, like getting away with crimes, although instead of being imprisoned or put to death, he is given mercy marks. Burn markings scorched into his back meant to warn and hopefully force him stop his criminal acts. But instead fuel his actions. Yet once there is a lack of space for the marks he is finally put to death. Because of his father’s values he grew up truly believing that his race is superior to any other because of his divine alignment(his father even started a cult to spread his beliefs), even though most Archons do not believe this themselves(most Archons believe in equality). Although he does highly respect the Elves and Drow because of their strict relationship with the pure essence of magic. Also because of his grandmother he holds loyalty highest of all traits to anything else, even higher than a life debt. Since he has the belief that his race is "better" than all others he tends to have a short fuse when anyone disrespects his race or if he knows when someone is mocking him and has always got something to say about how much better he is. Although most of the time he doesn't understand many jokes, and he is often mocked but yet doesn't realize it. Also he doesn't know when he is being rude so others generally have to alert him about it.[/spoiler] [Spoiler= Appearance:] Eros stands at approximately six foot three with dark blonde hair flowing almost six inches down past his shoulders. He has Deep green eyes with almost an emerald glow emanating from them and his ears stand out by being larger than his human counterparts by several centimeters and being slightly sharper with a rounded tip pointing towards the heavens (being admired or mocked by other races). Eros like many Archons has a very slim body and is very athletic, his skin is a light shade of peach and is very smooth and supple, yet even with his light skin he doesn't burn in the sun easy thanks to a drink his people drank on every occasion they could which also causes the emerald glow in his eyes. On his back he has many burn marks acquired as punishments for dishonoring his people, yet he always stands tall because he understands that he has deserved every mark and still believes that with every punishment his race is superior(the strict rules prove it). To cover up he wears a blood red robe with golden laced trims and a golden plated steel breastplate, under he has loosely fitted pants held up by a bright (almost gold like) rope. On a sash around his waist he tied a jade medallion passed down through his family from father to son at the dawn of becoming a man. On his side he carries a pouch of salt for no particular reason, but just in case he happens to need it one day. On his other side opposite his pouch of salt he has a steel hammer (similar to the ancient Nordic god Thors'). And on his chest he has a sheathed dagger. [/spoiler] [Spoiler= Biography:] When Eros was only an infant when the flood happened and his parents were swept away and presumably dead. Eros was orphaned like many Archon children. Around his neck was jade medallion that showed he was a son of an Archon divine mage. A son of the Lordess realized his potential to master the divine arts and decided to adopt him, although to this day he still doesn't know he is adopted. When he became of age he was given the medallion as a gift to prove his worth as a Divine mage. Only weeks after receiving his medallion, his step-mother talked him into committing crimes "for the betterment of the race" but was actually so he would be killed, because his father spent more time with him then his blood son and she didn't like it. Since he could never tell his father why he committed such crimes because his step mother told him to keep it a secret, the truth could never come to light. When Eros' back was just about full of mercy marks his father heard wind of other races going out of the keeps to scout the area to make homes on the surface again, he saw this as a way to get his son out of dying. He told him that he should prove that the Archons were superior by establishing a kingdom first, Eros took the task not knowing his father's true intentions. [/spoiler]Race: ArchonClass: InvokerCustom Abilities: None at the moment [spoiler= Current Abilities:]- Smite The ‘Smite’ spell can be used three times per day. Holy energy smites the target, dealing immense damage. This damage is tripled against undead opponents.- Divine Favor The ‘Divine Favor’ spell can be used once per day. It will immediately give target enhanced senses, strength, stamina, and agility for the next half-hour.- Minor healing There was no details for healing so I didn't know what to put [/spoiler] [spoiler= Equipment:] - Horse for riding - Casual robes - Weeks worth of provisions - Basic iron dagger - Medium sized steel hammer - Light Golden trimmed/Red Studded Leather Armor (combat use only) - Pouch of salt [/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alice Moonflowyr Posted January 22, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 22, 2013 The healing is basically your own idea of what a minor wound is. Otherwise, accepted. Adding to OP now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alice Moonflowyr Posted January 25, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 25, 2013 Four days left! Everyone please post an affirmative that you are ready to go with this RP! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Admiral_Stalfos19 Posted January 25, 2013 Report Share Posted January 25, 2013 Writer's block. Dunno how long it'll last :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Enrise Posted January 25, 2013 Report Share Posted January 25, 2013 Four days left! Everyone please post an affirmative that you are ready to go with this RP! I'm good. I've been eagerly bored as it is, so this RP will make up for that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Otaku-sama Posted January 25, 2013 Report Share Posted January 25, 2013 Darn, I was beaten to my race of choice twice! I wanted human or archon. Is there any human like races left that can fight physically or can you allow two humans? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cherz Posted January 25, 2013 Report Share Posted January 25, 2013 He can allow ONLY 2 of one class. Sama, your in luck. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alice Moonflowyr Posted January 25, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 25, 2013 Nomads. They're pretty much humans but they've adapted to desert life and moving around. They have dark skin, and wear white and red clothing :3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bowtiemyass Posted January 25, 2013 Report Share Posted January 25, 2013 I'm all set, been achen to get this goin. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Otaku-sama Posted January 26, 2013 Report Share Posted January 26, 2013 Thanks Spike. Here is my edited app. [spoiler=Iri Eyon] Name: Iri Eyon Age: 24 Gender/Sexuality: Female/Bisexual Race: Nomad Personality: Iri acts the opposite of what is expected of a lady to act like. She is brash, rude and very headstrong. When something gets in her way, her first thought is if she can break her way through it. Her time as a mercenary has made her rather selfish and self-serving, picking fights she knows she can win. In battle, she often charges into battle with little regard for those around her. While reckless, Iri always looks out for her own safety. Iri is also very proud of her physical strength and will take every opportunity to show it off. Rarely will Iri ever turn down a challenge of strength or stamina. While Iri may act very masculine, she is not completely out of touch with her feminine side and will use womanly charms to get her way when necessary. Appearance: Iri stands at 6’ 3”, making her much taller than most human women. Her skin is very tanned and is complemented by her athletic physique. Her raven black hair is boycut and falls naturally into spikes. Her emerald green eyes are narrow and intense, able to intimidate the average man into paying his debts. Iri rarely, if ever, wears makeup of any kind. Most people will see Iri in her steel plate armor. Her armor, consisting of a cuirass, greaves, a full helm with visor, a brown tunic and gauntlets, is simply made, but rugged enough to withstand many hits. Her left gauntlet is much larger than the right, with a rounded steel buckler bolted to the forearm, allowing Iri to block arrows while wielding a two-handed weapon. Her bastard sword is also of simple design, with a long straight blade without a guard on the handle. The sword is heavy enough to cleave through chainmail, but is also light enough for Iri to wield with one hand when she is blocking. When she is not wearing her armor, Iri wears little to cover herself, with only wrappings to cover her bosom and a loose thigh-high skirt. Biography: Born as the daughter of a military man, Iri lived a rugged life among the recruits her father trained. With her mother dying at an early age, Iri was completely raised by her father, becoming as loud and rough as the recruits. As soon as she was able to, Iri participated in all of her father’s drills, often outpacing and outperforming older male recruits. Despite her physical ability, her father constantly refused to teach Iri how to fight, expecting her to become someone’s housewife. Refusing to resign to this fate, Iri spied on her father’s combat drills and practiced it in the middle of the night with a stick. When her father caught her doing it, he locked her up in the barracks. It was during this time when Iri decided to go off on her own. After breaking out of the room, she raided the armory and ran off into the night. Iri then lived the free life of a mercenary, providing muscle when the pay was good enough and collecting bounties on wanted criminals. However, Iri still craved more excitement and danger. When she heard of the expedition to the surface that had no human volunteer, Iri decided that this could be the adventure she was looking for and signed herself up. Class: Fighter Custom Abilities: Current Abilities: Anti-Mage: Naturally resistant against magic Heat Resist: Immune to extreme heat, resistant to fire Supplies: Riding horse, normal clothes, provisions for a week, steel dagger, customized suit of plate armor, bastard sword. [/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alice Moonflowyr Posted January 26, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 26, 2013 Cool. Will add it to the OP. 2 days left! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alice Moonflowyr Posted January 28, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 28, 2013 IC goes up tomorrow folks! I'm PMing all participants to make sure they're ready! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Tico~ Posted January 28, 2013 Report Share Posted January 28, 2013 I'm putting in a reserve for a Goblin. Hopefully, can get my app done sooner rather than later. Edited. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cherz Posted January 28, 2013 Report Share Posted January 28, 2013 I am so ready for this. It has been my most anticipated RP currently~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alice Moonflowyr Posted January 28, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 28, 2013 Well, I already told you over Skype, but I'm putting in a reserve for a Goblin. I wanted it here so everyone else can see <_< @Cherz: Das good~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alice Moonflowyr Posted January 28, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 28, 2013 IC is up folks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cherz Posted January 29, 2013 Report Share Posted January 29, 2013 Question. If the world was flooded, wouldn't that mean there are no enemies to fight, other than what started le flood? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alice Moonflowyr Posted January 29, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 29, 2013 Aquatic enemies are very evil. Very very very evil. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cherz Posted January 29, 2013 Report Share Posted January 29, 2013 ...umm, okay then. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alice Moonflowyr Posted January 29, 2013 Author Report Share Posted January 29, 2013 >:3 Plus, this is only when its safe to see if civilized races can actually live up there. Other, more...uncivilized...monsters might already have moved back up to the surface. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Enrise Posted January 29, 2013 Report Share Posted January 29, 2013 >:3 Plus, this is only when its safe to see if civilized races can actually live up there. Other, more...uncivilized...monsters might already have moved back up to the surface. Or somehow adapted to the sudden environment chance, which is impossible. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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