The Change

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[center][font=arial, helvetica, sans-serif]Prologue[/font][/center]
[font=arial, helvetica, sans-serif]No one knew who or what started The Change but it happen so the humans, are we still human well let me explain. The Change messes up the DNA of primates its different between individuals but it there is one thing that is the same for all species fully developed individuals become violent, larger, stronger, faster, and pack like. Those who were not fully developed could have no change, small change like changing eye color, evolutionary changes, or freakish stuff form comic books. So are still humans maybe maybe not, but that is not the story. The story is about how The Change changed my life ha ha ha ha now I'm making jokes I must be crazy I'm about to die and I'm making jokes not were was I? O yeah I was 19 when The Change happen living in a shabby apart , gun shots in background. Sh*t I got to go will get back to recording this later[/font]


[font=arial, helvetica, sans-serif]Please answer poll.[/font]

[Umbra]

...is that it?

I think I've written monologues longer than that.

[?someone?]

Did I mention something about grammar before? Maybe?

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[quote name='Umbra' timestamp='1354390405' post='6082462']
...is that it?

I think I've written monologues longer than that.
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I apologize I must not have highlighted the whole thing I did this late will fix.

[quote name='?someone?' timestamp='1354406524' post='6082744']
Did I mention something about grammar before? Maybe?
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Don't see mistake please say what line.

[Catterjune]

Is English not your first language?

You have tense changes every 4 or 5 words, a lack of punctuation, and just in general seem to not understand how basic English sentences work. Sentence fragments litter the whole thing.

I understand that it's written like dialogue, but because of the lack of the above it just looks like a huge mess.