A random list of stories I won't write

[Catterjune]

Well that's not entirely true. I may write one or several of these stories. The odds are just incredibly low that I'll start/finish any of these. So if I had to write any of these, which one would generate the most interest? >_>


Joe Goes to Duel Academy - An (allegedly) humorous story about a girl (Joanna "Joe" Surname) going to an all girl duel academy. Hilarity ensues. Then magical powers and a main plot are introduced and it gets kind of serious.

Cleansed: Unfinished Business - A sequel to that story I wrote that nobody read. Fifty years later, two students studying Paranormal Criminology work to become Spectral Detectives. The "Duel Academy" saga to Cleansed's "original" storyline.

The Life and Times of Team Shuffle and Cut - A bunch of kids in NYC in 2007 play Duel Monsters. It's (allegedly) realistic. No magical powers. No duel disks. No end-of-the-world ultimatum. It's teen drama, except the teens happen to also play Yu-Gi-Oh.

Some untitled time travel play - So there's the inept, senile, Professor Farnsworth type scientist and his three lab assistants: the brains-behind-the-operation girl, The perpetual buttmonkey, and the Karma Houdini ditzy girl who causes problems that everyone seems to ignore. The play is their presentation of a time machine to their chief investor, who paid them billions of dollars to make it. There's a certain weirdness to the play, in that it never fully answers the question of whether they succeeded with building the time machine or if they just scammed him out of billions of dollars.

Some untitled story about a creepy girl - So there's this girl who, whenever she touches something, she sees the entire life of the person who last touched it. She goes into kind of a weird stroke-like trance for a second or two (in the outside world). In her mind, she watches a person's entire life. This has lead her to being creepy and distant and uncaring of the rest of the world. She's lived a hundred life times, so living her current one is of no concern.

Some untitled story about magical bank robbers - So there are these bank robbers who have the magical power to get anything they ask for by asking politely. "Would you please open up the bank vault, fill these bags with money, delete all the surveillance videos and forget what we look like?" And people happily oblige. The criminals leave, and the police show up minutes later perplexed as to what was going on, along with the bank owners. And then, drama ensues?

Some fantasy thing loosely based on that crappy Fragment story I wrote - Everyone has magical element-based powers in this universe. Kids usually go to some dumb magic school to learn how to properly magic their element. Every million years or something there's some people known as "Prodigies", one for each element. The prodigies are basically amazing Mary Sues with ridiculously OP magical powers. Unfortunately, when all four meet the world ends so the evil villains are trying to get all four of them together in the same room. The Water guy and Wind girl both go to the magic school. The earth girl is a knight who guards the princess and the fire guy is a Robin Hood, steal from the rich guy who annoys the princess, the earth girl, etc etc. It's basically two stories in one, set in the same world, and at some point in time they all meet and hilarity does not ensue, the world ends.


Questions? Comments? Suggestions?

[Makο]

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Some untitled time travel play - So there's the inept, senile, Professor Farnsworth type scientist and his three lab assistants: the brains-behind-the-operation girl, The perpetual buttmonkey, and the Karma Houdini ditzy girl who causes problems that everyone seems to ignore. The play is their presentation of a time machine to their chief investor, who paid them billions of dollars to make it. There's a certain weirdness to the play, in that it never fully answers the question of whether they succeeded with building the time machine or if they just scammed him out of billions of dollars.
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As good as they all are, this one sort of sticks out to me. I'd like to see this done.

[Catterjune]

I think my biggest problem was that every character was just one joke, and I couldn't possible stretch it out long enough to be a 90-minute play length. The Rich Investor guy was supposed to be skeptical and point out that things look exactly the way the audience sees them.

"This our time machine."

"That's just a spray painted box with a clock glued on it."

"We also used duct tape!"

And so on and so forth in that general matter. But the investor dude would have to be angry and/or skeptical for the full 90 minutes. Ninety minutes of skepticism is stupid and not a plot.


On a completely unrelated note, some more ideas for stories I won't write:

Some Zombies Apocalypse thing with Vampires: Vampires have always been a mild annoyance to a small town (small annoyance because of their small number) until one day when an infection rolled throughout town that turned most people into zombies. The few humans that remain are either hunter/gatherers or locked away in heavily fortified citadels. Zombies prowl the city looking for humans to eat. Because of this, the primary food source for vampires is endangered. And then hilarity ensues?

Something about Nidoran: So there's this Pokemon Professor who thinks Nidoran[M] and Nidoran[F], Nidorino and Nidorina, and Nidoking and Nidoqueen all having different Pokedex numbers and being different species is ridiculous. Jellicent and Frillish, Hippowdon, that stupid Unova bird, and a bunch of other Pokemon look different despite gender differences. He goes on to mention other Pokemon like Rotom and legendaries as well also have different forms. So he goes on some vague adventure to whatever to prove (or disprove) his Nidoran hypothesis. Hilarity ensues?

Some other thing about revenge: So there's this girl who's loses her boyfriend/childhood friend due to a drunk driver (her and her boyfriend were 16. The driver was 17.) Girl spirals into depression. Driver goes to jail. Now, it's 5 years later and the Driver gets out of jail, but she doesn't think his punishment was severe enough. Her plan is to get him to fall in love with her, then fake her own death (and possibly frame him for it) so he knows what it's like to lose the person that he loves. Hilarity does not ensue.

All mostly vague premises. Questions? Comments? Suggestions?

[Cin]

Like the sound of the last one. Not something I'd ever come up with since I like MxM.

[Catterjune]

Which last one? The girl who plans revenge or some crappy fantasy thing? e_e


Off-topic: I actually am working on a story, or the first chapter of one at least. Right now I'm kind of just "world building" and trying to get the main plot down.

It's a "realistic" Yu-Gi-Oh Western. For the record, I've never seen 5D's, the only thing I know about Crash Town is what I learned from WC'11. Though I'm familiar enough to know 5D's did something similar.

It's "realistic" in that there are no magical powers in any way, shape or form.

[b]So why do they need to duel at all!? Why can't they just punch each other in the face!?[/b]

... That's a good question. One that I don't quite have the answer to. That's kind of what these topics are for, aren't they? >_>

I mean, I had a few ideas floating around, each of them more terrible then the last. The only decent idea I could come up with is:

Guns and most other leathal weapons are banned by the local government. The only people who have guns are the "true" police. The people on patrol who our protagonists square off with day to day are just basic unarmed security. They have no guns, just duel disks.

[b]You didn't answer my question. Why would they need to duel at all!?[/b]

The duel disks in this fic are a tad different then ones used in the anime.

- All duel disks must accept a challenge when a person with another duel disk challenges them.
- After a duel is started, the person with the duel disk attached can not run away for any reason. If they get further then some predefined distance from their opponent, the duel disk suddenly feels like it weighs a ton.
- Duel disks can not be removed when a duel is in place.
- Anyone coming close to either duelist as they're dueling recieves a mild shock, that gets significantly less mild the closer they get.
- When a duel is won, there's a four minute period when their disks will not accept any challengers.
- If they lose the duel, there is no four minute wait.

So basically, our protagonists are a bunch of delinquents who focus on winning duels as quickly as they can to make their getaways. The security focus on deliberately stalling them and standing in their way until the real police with guns show up.

[b]If there's so many drawbacks and whatever why would they even bring a duel disk to begin with!?[/b]

The protagonists are outlaws and do not live in the city. The city is full of rich elite people who all have duel disks. They wear them to fit in, possibly. Also duel disks are expensive. Like a car in our real world.

And if you don't like that excuse, IDK. They probably also have some other technological uses or something. Like... you physically can not get inside the city if you don't have a disk for some reason.

[b]Okay so... what do you need help with?[/b]

The main protagonist/narrator in the story is kind of a lame nerd duel disk salesman/repairman/something. I had the opening idea that he's selling 4 duel disks when he stumbles upon the other three people in his group.

However, each duel disk has a "trick" of sorts. They're specially custom made, so they can do special things. Things like... cheat.

I had three ideas so far:

- One of them rigs your draws when you have 1000 or less life points. You have an increased (guaranteed?) chance of drawing a pre-selected card.
- One of them lets you see your opponents hand and field. Remember, knowing your opponents hand doesn't mean you can counteract it.
- One of them lets you play Custom Cards in a duel. Of course, they need the special paper and etc for this to work.

So I need room for one more duel disk idea. >_>

tl;dr - A "realistic" Yu-Gi-Oh western. Protagonists commit heists to make money. Still working out a few things.

Questions? Comments? Thoughts? Suggestions? Opinions?

[?someone?]

I read Cleansed. I also like the time machine and flashback ones.

[Catterjune]

Posting in a topic that is off the first page is against the rules and will result in a warning.

... This topic's still on the first page. e_e

And I'm still working on this story:

Off-topic: I actually am working on a story, or the first chapter of one at least. Right now I'm kind of just "world building" and trying to get the main plot down.

It's a "realistic" Yu-Gi-Oh Western.
[And then some other stuff]

But I've hit a bit of a dead end in terms of world building.

So here's what I've got so far:

There's a modern/futuristic city in the middle of the desert. It's surrounded on all four sides by sand, and within the desert are dozens of bandits, gangs, lowlives and other such things.

In order to fully understand why things are the way they are today, one must know how things were before, many many years ago and that's where I hit the first snag.

I'm not quite sure why a bunch of assholes would choose to live outside the city and be hoodlums. The closest thing I can come up with is that perhaps there was a war of some sorts, and these guys were on the losing side.

The second snag is why the hell is duel monsters so god damn important? The closest thing I can come up with is some complicated system that I mentioned slightly up in that message I quoted.

So like... yeah. My explanation of "nothing" and "just because" isn't all that satisfying to me, and this is a subforum where we ask for help. So... anyone? Ideas? Questions? Comments? Concerns?

[Aerion Brightflame]

Classic example as to why people would live out of the city would be because there are things of more value out there, or they are evading the laws by existing out of reach.

 

So you could do they were exiled, and sent out to rot, only managed to survive within the environment. That's all I have for that.

 

As for Duel Monster becoming so popular... Electric shocks built into the devices? If guns were outlawed to most people, ways of establishing order would be needed. The pain of the shocks would probably go someways to help that.

 

Or you can go down the lazy route and just say a law was passed forcing it to happen, and since then it's just become a natural part of society.

[Catterjune]

I can sort of maybe think there might be something of value in the desert, but then if they live in the desert, why would they need to go to the city at all? There'd be no conflict because the desert is mostly barren.

Evading the laws, I imagine could work vaguely (as they are criminals who rob from the rich and keep for themselves) but running from the law is what they're doing right now, in the present. It doesn't establish why they started doing it. If they were just born into it, then again that doesn't establish why their parents did it. And if they're orphans who never had parents at all, the question becomes how did they survive in the desert for so long?

Electro shocks is a stupid and bad idea and you should feel stupid and bad for suggesting it. I asked for reasons why people would want or need to use duel disks and duel monsters. What you gave was a reason people wouldn't want to use duel disks or duel monsters.

Lazy route it is then, though I dislike it. It's so... lame and straightforward. e_e

Any other comments or suggestions?

[Umbra]

If you're going to implement organized crime into your story - which is essentially what this is, as far as I can tell - you might as well look at the real world for a justification. You could make it purely economical; there's quite a lot of money in the business, and some people might be willing to risk their lives for that extra cash. Others simply can't afford not to, and others could be indebted to this gang.

 

As for why people would want to duel... you could simply call it established canon. Dueling would be a gentleman's game, similar to pistol duels, and some of the lowlifes might put up with it. Those who can afford to keep a deck, that is, or those that have robbed an unsuspecting duelist. Others might go for a more direct (read: violent) route.

[Catterjune]

If it's economical, it makes no sense for them to live in a shithole in the desert. And if they have money, there's no reason for them to steal.

As for the game, I suppose just leaving it as "that's just the way it's always been" could work, but I dislike the idea behind it because there's no logical reason why low lifes would pick it up, especially if there's a chance they'd be caught by the police. It bugged me in 5D's too. If Yusei had just built a motorcycle instead of a D-Wheel he probably would have gotten out of the Satellite a lot faster and with less hassle.

Afford to keep a deck. Anyone can get a deck, even children. The problem is Duel Disks. For a real world analogy, they cost about as much as a real world car does.

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As for other things:

I had an idea for an Avatar: The Last Airbender fic. It takes place a little while after Aang was frozen. Specifically, it takes place at the moment Master Hama mastered bloodbending and escaped.

The story revolves around 3 other waterbenders who happened to have been kidnapped at the time and who made their escape around the same time as Hama. Stuck in the Fire Nation they manage to make it to a small town surrounded by rivers.

The town has a bit of a problem though. Every year there's a terrible monsoon that floods their crops and kills people and other bad things. After it's gone, the grounds are super fertile and etc, so it's not so bad. Also the town is all Firebenders.

So the 3 waterbenders show up in the town right around monsoon season. At first they're hated and treated like outcasts. Eventually the villagers stop caring so much about hating on the waterbenders because they have to harvest their crops and gather their belongings before the flood comes. Just as the valley is about to flood, the waterbenders manage to save the day at the last second. They're hailed as heroes and... etc etc.

But that's just the prologue.

For the main part, it's been one year since that day. The town is grateful for the waterbenders, however one of them decides not to help this year. The fire nation had kidnapped him, took him to savage lands, and as far as he's concerned the other 2 waterbenders are just suffering from Stockholm syndrome. He can't just be killed or murdered, because waterbenders are important to the town. Also he's trying to influence the other two waterbenders to agree with him and let the town be wiped out.

So like... yeah. Ideas? Thoughts? Opinions? Comments?

[L0SS]

I also really like the idea of the Time-machine play. I think that could really go somewhere, provided you make it more than some pseudo-serious running gags. Could they inadvertently create a time-machine at the end of the play? The narrative could go back and forth from pitch to rejected pitch, as more and more ridiculous and nonsensical 'designs' are wheeled out; making the investor more and more sceptical, meaning that as the final invention is about to be presented, the investor is at breaking point, and is ready to walk out. And then, shock-horror, It actually works and the play ends.  

 

I had a little idea of my own. It followed the life of a car: from shiny and fresh out of the dealership, to supporting a family, being used as a boy-racer, as a drug courier, and finally ending it's life in a scrap yard. It is very much a visual thing, and I'm unsure if it would have taken place form the perspective of the car, or from the perspective of the people using it. The car itself would have been something like a Ford Sierra Cosworth, or a Lotus Carlton; understated and cool (and British). It would have shown a mix of life styles and people to keep it interesting (I was thinking episodic TV style).

 

I'll get back to you on the western one. I've always been a fan of Westerns, so I'll make it my duty to come up with an idea or two. Keep it up.

[?someone?]

I had a little idea of my own. It followed the life of a car: from shiny and fresh out of the dealership, to supporting a family, being used as a boy-racer, as a drug courier, and finally ending it's life in a scrap yard. It is very much a visual thing, and I'm unsure if it would have taken place form the perspective of the car, or from the perspective of the people using it. The car itself would have been something like a Ford Sierra Cosworth, or a Lotus Carlton; understated and cool (and British). It would have shown a mix of life styles and people to keep it interesting (I was thinking episodic TV style).

 

Yes, yes, yes, yes, yes, yes. Do it. And I think it should be from the car's perspective. It can "observe" the emotions and actions of it's owners... from a personal point of view, I don't think a gangster would give two sh*ts about his drug runner. Maybe, like a kind of passive 3rd person thing, eg. "The boy looked on sadly, one final time, as the car drove away", so as not to give it sentience. Almost like the car is a camera, and can only record things that happen near/in it.

[L0SS]

Yes, yes, yes, yes, yes, yes. Do it. And I think it should be from the car's perspective. It can "observe" the emotions and actions of it's owners... from a personal point of view, I don't think a gangster would give two sh*ts about his drug runner. Maybe, like a kind of passive 3rd person thing, eg. "The boy looked on sadly, one final time, as the car drove away", so as not to give it sentience. Almost like the car is a camera, and can only record things that happen near/in it.

Yeah, I think that's really interesting. I think I'd use different parts of the car itself to see through; wing mirrors, reflections in the lights, that kind of thing. It would have to be gritty to make it work, and the more I think about it, the more I feel a short film would be the best format (and something I could foreseeably do).

[?someone?]

Yeah, I think that's really interesting. I think I'd use different parts of the car itself to see through; wing mirrors, reflections in the lights, that kind of thing. It would have to be gritty to make it work, and the more I think about it, the more I feel a short film would be the best format (and something I could foreseeably do).

 

You owe me a banana sticker if it includes one or more scenes of in-car bangin'.

[L0SS]

You owe me a banana sticker if it includes one or more scenes of in-car bangin'.

I'll just leave this here and we'll never speak of this again.

[Guest]

Anyway...

I've kind of been thinking of rewriting my old terrible ghost story, but I guess with just... more content. Much more cases, a bit more backstory and filler to "let the story breathe", and I was thinking of making it written through Luke's perspective, to give it more of a 'Sherlock' kind of feel, but I'm super fucking lazy so I'll probably never do it.

Not sure if I still feel the same about "1960's New York" when "Fictional Place at unspecified time" might work better...

[Catterjune]

*reads the rules*

Unlike the main Creative Writing forum, bumping at any time is not allowed. Posting in a topic that is off the first page is against the rules and will result in a warning and a lock.

So... I can bump if I come up with a new idea, right? e_e


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Another Fic I won't write: A YCM-based Police Drama

tl;dr - It takes place in a town/city kind of thing, each subsection is a district of said town.

YCMaker = Mayor/Wise omnipotent (yet mostly absent) sovereign ruler
Rest of the Mods = Police/"Wise Council/Politicians" type of thing.

Central Plot: The mods dealing with trolls (criminals) spray painting grafitti and wrecking topics (buildings) all the while getting limited/zero support from YCMaker. Pika is the protagonist, because I'm such a narcissist, and the story goes from how she became a bright-eyed TCG mod hoping to clean up the section, to becoming disillusioned and heartbroken at how long it takes to get anything done, to becoming the queen of YCM by finding a duplicate Emperor's Crown that grants her all of YCMaker's powers, to being disillusioned again by all that as well to finally becoming a regular old member.

Reason why I won't write it: Being the ultimate weirdo perfectionist, I'd want to write important YCM events, important trolls and people we've banned, and important milestones in the mod community, such as when we got new mods, when we got rid of old ones, etc etc. Unfortunately I can't remember much or any of it. e_e

[Just Crouton]

Would you have a catchphrase like "I'm going to hatch an egg of whoopass on these trolls!"?

[Catterjune]

I haven't planned that far ahead, if at all. I think it'd be mildly serious with hints of humour to it though

[Catterjune]

Look I'm back.

I had this idea for a story...

Well it's not even really an "idea". More of a vague premise. Anyway, here ya' go:

Who: The story centers around three people who work after hours at "Kaiba Corp". I put it in quotes because they don't really work for Kaiba Corp, it's a very distinct company with a different name, different goals, but they do similar things as Kaiba Corp and Industrial Illusions (work on Duel Disks and the Card Game). I think I called it "Ambient Energy" in the fic, but that sounds more like the name of an electric company.

So there's three protagonists of the story, and each work in different departments. Not 100% sure what departments they work at though. I had about six ideas in mind, a professional duelist, a card designer, a duel disk engineer, a security gaurd, a janitor, a duel disk salesman and maybe someone from middle management.

What: These 3 characters are basically stuck in after hours at Not!KaibaCorp. It's there they discover the facility is trying to kill them. Lasers, dueling robots, compressed air chambers, pistons, deadly heavy machinery, things like that. Think something like Saw, or Portal if you've seen the film or played the game.

Where: Not!KaibaCorp basically does a lot of stuff related to dueling. Cards, holograms, duel disks, possibly AI for monsters. It's mostly an office which slowly turns into like... research and factories, and if the protagonists survive the night and escape, they... idk. I didn't really plan that far.

When: Most likely in "present" times. They have their phones but they don't work because plot. Maybe a power outage, and that's why they're stuck behind after hours.

Why and How: That's... a bit where the problem comes in. So they're stuck in after hours... for some reason... and then they wake up at work and try to leave only to find the door locked. I assume it was some evil plot that got the three of them stuck in there, but I don't really know why the person who planned it would get them stuck, what his goal was.

I'm also not quite sure how to really "raise the stakes", or put pressure on the group to continue onward. I mean, there's no reason they can't curl up at their desk and cry until someone else comes in at 9am and Not!KaibaCorp because less scary.

Other random thoughts: I had an idea for them to like... have "problems" thrown their way that they could solve. Something like: "solve this duel puzzle in 60 seconds or your face explodes" but not something quite so stupid. Anyway, these three protagonists would never get to really interact, but their actions at work do block and create pathways for the other two. Like, a character turns on the power in the basement to get an electric door open, but that also turns all the Dueling Robots alive for Character B. Or Character B hits a button to lock all the doors to keep a monster from murdering him, but that just traps Character C in with the monster. Small things like that. They never meet, but they may see glimpses of each other, like through security guard stations and cameras or footprints.


BUT YEAH! That's my ideas. A bunch of guys stuck at Not!KaibaCorp after hours, when Not!KaibaCorp decides to kill them. Don't know about the how or why points though, and obviously I don't have an ending.

[Final Fantasy Revolution]

Joe Goes to Duel Academy - An (allegedly) humorous story about a girl (Joanna "Joe" Surname) going to an all girl duel academy. Hilarity ensues. Then magical powers and a main plot are introduced and it gets kind of serious.

Cleansed: Unfinished Business - A sequel to that story I wrote that nobody read. Fifty years later, two students studying Paranormal Criminology work to become Spectral Detectives. The "Duel Academy" saga to Cleansed's "original" storyline.

Can you provide a link to the original Cleansed? I tried to find it myself but can't for some reason or another, mostly my laziness. Paranormal Criminology is definitely something that might be good to reiterate, but does the original have dueling? If not then perhaps this one shouldn't either.

The Life and Times of Team Shuffle and Cut - A bunch of kids in NYC in 2007 play Duel Monsters. It's (allegedly) realistic. No magical powers. No duel disks. No end-of-the-world ultimatum. It's teen drama, except the teens happen to also play Yu-Gi-Oh.

Some untitled time travel play - So there's the inept, senile, Professor Farnsworth type scientist and his three lab assistants: the brains-behind-the-operation girl, The perpetual buttmonkey, and the Karma Houdini ditzy girl who causes problems that everyone seems to ignore. The play is their presentation of a time machine to their chief investor, who paid them billions of dollars to make it. There's a certain weirdness to the play, in that it never fully answers the question of whether they succeeded with building the time machine or if they just scammed him out of billions of dollars.

I read your concerns about this earlier, and I honestly don't see any problem. Crappier plays have been built on much less, but if you can somehow spin it so that perhaps the investor is only angry for forty-five minutes of the play, he can take a time travel trip(perhaps the three just move him outside the research facility and change the inside during a five minute "thing"?) He walks in, thinks he's time traveled, hates it, and goes back. He thanks them for their, work sends them on their way, and for some reason he drops a candle on the cardboard "time machine" and burns it to the ground.

Some untitled story about a creepy girl - So there's this girl who, whenever she touches something, she sees the entire life of the person who last touched it. She goes into kind of a weird stroke-like trance for a second or two (in the outside world). In her mind, she watches a person's entire life. This has lead her to being creepy and distant and uncaring of the rest of the world. She's lived a hundred life times, so living her current one is of no concern.

Clairsentience? This could definitely be a "something" as a writer, your job is to makes one hundred words from one, but this idea can definitely be unfolded and I think I would read this.

Some untitled story about magical bank robbers - So there are these bank robbers who have the magical power to get anything they ask for by asking politely. "Would you please open up the bank vault, fill these bags with money, delete all the surveillance videos and forget what we look like?" And people happily oblige. The criminals leave, and the police show up minutes later perplexed as to what was going on, along with the bank owners. And then, drama ensues?

A title called Persuasion or Persuaded comes to mind for this, but for some reason their powers don't work on females they love, like, or people who are named Gary Seinbergson (Gary finds out about them and blackmails them, and the boys have decide weather or not to kill him?)

Some fantasy thing loosely based on that crappy Fragment story I wrote - Everyone has magical element-based powers in this universe. Kids usually go to some dumb magic school to learn how to properly magic their element. Every million years or something there's some people known as "Prodigies", one for each element. The prodigies are basically amazing Mary Sues with ridiculously OP magical powers. Unfortunately, when all four meet the world ends so the evil villains are trying to get all four of them together in the same room. The Water guy and Wind girl both go to the magic school. The earth girl is a knight who guards the princess and the fire guy is a Robin Hood, steal from the rich guy who annoys the princess, the earth girl, etc etc. It's basically two stories in one, set in the same world, and at some point in time they all meet and hilarity does not ensue, the world ends.

Link to original please, concept of prodigies has been done to death but not by you! Boldly go where others have gone before!

Questions? Comments? Suggestions?

See above.

 

 

Some Zombies Apocalypse thing with Vampires: Vampires have always been a mild annoyance to a small town (small annoyance because of their small number) until one day when an infection rolled throughout town that turned most people into zombies. The few humans that remain are either hunter/gatherers or locked away in heavily fortified citadels. Zombies prowl the city looking for humans to eat. Because of this, the primary food source for vampires is endangered. And then hilarity ensues?

Hilarity doesn't ensue, this could be a nice more dramatic story with some humorous anecdotes maybe, but it definitely shouldn't be all about hilarity.

Something about Nidoran: So there's this Pokemon Professor who thinks Nidoran[M] and Nidoran[F], Nidorino and Nidorina, and Nidoking and Nidoqueen all having different Pokedex numbers and being different species is ridiculous. Jellicent and Frillish, Hippowdon, that stupid Unova bird, and a bunch of other Pokemon look different despite gender differences. He goes on to mention other Pokemon like Rotom and legendaries as well also have different forms. So he goes on some vague adventure to whatever to prove (or disprove) his Nidoran hypothesis. Hilarity ensues?

Definite possibilities but should be avoided for now in my opinion.

Some other thing about revenge: So there's this girl who's loses her boyfriend/childhood friend due to a drunk driver (her and her boyfriend were 16. The driver was 17.) Girl spirals into depression. Driver goes to jail. Now, it's 5 years later and the Driver gets out of jail, but she doesn't think his punishment was severe enough. Her plan is to get him to fall in love with her, then fake her own death (and possibly frame him for it) so he knows what it's like to lose the person that he loves. Hilarity does not ensue.

I like this idea, it should however, end with this woman getting hit by a bus after the man commits suicide; all as an homage to the oldest life lesson: Life isn't fair.

All mostly vague premises. Questions? Comments? Suggestions?

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[Catterjune]

Can you provide a link to the original Cleansed?

 

Nah. The story was bad and I should feel bad. v_v

Besides, I was planning on rewriting it with more story, more cases, and more development of minor characters and main characters.

If you find the original, keep it to yourself.

 

 

 

 

but does the original have dueling? If not then perhaps this one shouldn't either.

I don't literally mean "duel academy to the original". The first story was about characters who learned stuff on the street, made it up as they went along, and mastered the art. The sequel can't really take place with the same characters, because they're already the best at it, so it has to have new protagonists who are "learning the trade", so to speak.

IN ANY CASE! I changed my mind on certain aspects of the sequel story. It'll most likely take place a few weeks after Klaus and Antoinette's graduation, and center on them dealing with a third Spectral Detective who works against them.

 

 

 

 

 

 

I read your concerns about this earlier, and I honestly don't see any problem. Crappier plays have been built on much less,

This isn't a race to the bottom here. I'd rather have "a good play" then "not the worst play".

 

 

 

 

 

but if you can somehow spin it so that perhaps the investor is only angry for forty-five minutes of the play, he can take a time travel trip(perhaps the three just move him outside the research facility and change the inside during a five minute "thing"?) He walks in, thinks he's time traveled, hates it, and goes back. He thanks them for their, work sends them on their way, and for some reason he drops a candle on the cardboard "time machine" and burns it to the ground.

Again, seeing someone angry for 45+ minutes isn't entertaining. It's annoying. I did have one idea on this though...

The professor and his 3 lab assistants are hired by the US Government to create a time machine. Instead they accidentally build a teleporter. The professor laments at his ineptitude, when they come up with the idea to instead use the teleporter and teleport the military contractor guy to some quick Old West town they just finished building.

In the sequel, their charade was revealed and they get arrested and thrown into some maximum security prison. So they decide to build a teleporter but accidentally build a time machine instead. Hilarity ensues?

 

 

 

 

Clairsentience? This could definitely be a "something" as a writer, your job is to makes one hundred words from one, but this idea can definitely be unfolded and I think I would read this.

I've given it some thought, and I decided she has a brother, who is a world renowned detective. He's not really that great, and kind of a bumbling fool, but it's his creepy weird loner sister who solves the cases. Not sure where the story goes from here though. Either he's the villain and she's the main character, or she discovers someone who she can't "read", or she just gets fed up with living like this and leaves, leaving the brother detective to try to find her. Not sure what though...

 

 

 

 

Link to original please, concept of prodigies has been done to death but not by you! Boldly go where others have gone before!

No link. I quit before... really anything got established. "Prodigies" is more of a vague idea. The four are being watched by a group of knights who want to make sure the 4 never meet, and there's a group of people who want to make sure the four do meet, because they want the world to end for some reason.

 

 

 

 

 

Hilarity doesn't ensue, this could be a nice more dramatic story with some humorous anecdotes maybe, but it definitely shouldn't be all about hilarity.

I didn't literally mean hilarity ensues. Sarcasm and such in text is difficult to read. It'd probably be a dramatic action/adventure-like story. It's basically a war with three factions. Zombies, who are dumb idiots, but of which there are thousands. Humans, who are very small in number (around a hundred or so) but... they're humans so the reader automatically sympathizes with them. And lastly the Vampires, who are the smallest faction (maybe about a dozen?) but who have extreme physical strength, magic, skill, etc etc. The vampires wanna keep the humans alive, because vampires eat humans. Humans hate both sides. Zombies want to eat humans, and don't want to eat vampires because vamps are already dead.

But other than the set up, I'm not sure where the story goes from here.

 

 

 

 

 

I like this idea, it should however, end with this woman getting hit by a bus after the man commits suicide; all as an homage to the oldest life lesson: Life isn't fair.

I wasn't sure where to take this story either. I think she's really angry and pretty sick in the head, traumatized by the loss of her mother.

So I had kinda like... three ideas I thought of. The one I definitely wouldn't use is the path where she falls in love with the guy and changes her mind about her plan. She's sick in the head, and wouldn't fall in love with him.

The second idea was that her plan goes exactly as planned, she wins, the guy goes to jail. She flees the country. The End. But that's kinda a shitty ending. Who the fuck is she to decide what that guy's punishment should be?  She gets away with ruining his life... not that great an ending.

The third idea was that in her attempt to make it look like he murdered her, she accidentally kills herself. From where the story goes, it would either be an ambiguous ending, or it would state in no uncertain terms that the boyfriend wasn't convicted of her murder. It would probably end on a happy-ish note. "At least she's with her mother now." and that's probably the "best" possible ending for everyone involved.

 

 

 

 

 

 

THanks for taking the time to respond to this, but obviously some stories were given more thought and were more developed than others. >_>