[Thar!! Vanguard] Trying something new - PAWN CARD

[Thar]

This Cardfight!! Vanguard thing looks rather interesting.
However, I could not find a good card maker of it like this site's, nor do I have any program necessary for any other method (am using one of my mom's cousin's computers.)

So tell me what you think:

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[u][i][b]Tron Pawn Beta[/b][/i][/u]
Grade 1
[i]Ability:[/i] Boost
[i]Flavor:[/i] "While our ability on the field of battle is unmatched, one cannot be too careful..."
[i]Effect:[/i] [AUTO] When this unit attacks and is Retired by an opponent's unit, rest the defending unit. Your Vanguard gains +5000 Power.
[i]Power:[/i] 5000
[i]Shield:[/i] 3000
[i]Clan:[/i] Supernova Grapplers
[i]Race:[/i] Battleroid

[Ambrogirmint705]

[quote name='Thar Ablaze' timestamp='1343624375' post='5992550']
This Cardfight!! Vanguard thing looks rather interesting.
However, I could not find a good card maker of it like this site's, nor do I have any program necessary for any other method (am using one of my mom's cousin's computers.)

So tell me what you think:

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[u][i][b]Tron Pawn Beta[/b][/i][/u]
Grade 1
[i]Ability:[/i] Boost
[i]Flavor:[/i] "While our ability on the field of battle is unmatched, one cannot be too careful..."
[i]Effect:[/i] [AUTO] When this unit attacks and is Retired by an opponent's unit, rest the defending unit. Your Vanguard gains +5000 Power.
[i]Power:[/i] 5000
[i]Shield:[/i] 3000
[i]Clan:[/i] Supernova Grapplers
[i]Race:[/i] Battleroid
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Kinda interesting card here, but something doesn't feel right. I think you should make the effect like this:
[Soulcharge 2]When this unit's attack hits, you may pay the cost. Rest 1 of your Rear Guards, your Vanguard gains +5000 Power.

I like to make the cards being offensive, as the NOVA GRAPPLERS, not SUPERNOVA GRAPPLERS..have plenty of units with abilties on Standing their Rear Guards to battle once again.

[Love of Ghibli]

Okay well no a lot of things wrong here.

1: Its effect is off: Your units can't die on your turn unless you retire them yourself via effects or you just want to drop another unit in place of an existing one. Meaning you could never attack and get retired by an opponents unit.
2: grade 0's have 10k shields, grade 1's and 2's have 5k shields (except null guards and special intercepts), and Grade 3's don't have shields ergo no such thing as a 3k shield.
3: I don't know if you were going for a custom type but the existing type is nova grapplers not supernova

now all that aside the card is a 5k grade 1 that has to swing in order to be useful..nope by it will not be seeing any true play.

[Thar]

I figured I'd get something wrong on a TCG that I went into half-blind.