Hidden Amongst Shadows [A Pokemon FanFic]

[Ren✧]

[center]I actually started this FanFic awhile back, but I got one comment from another member and with no other activity in the thread I became quickly discouraged and gave up. Well, I have found that I have a little more time on my hands at the moment and thought writing a FanFic would be a fun way to pass the time.[/center]

[center][spoiler=A Little Background][/center]
[center]This story takes place long after the death of Ash Ketchum and his friends. Their adventures have become famous and are well known throughout the world of Pokemon. After Ash's death, the legendary Pokemon, Groudon, began to stir from its slumber. Groudon went to a furious rage, awakening its true power, as well as provoking its counterpart, Kyogre. The two went to battle with no regard for the world that they lived in. Continents crashed together and countries were swallowed by the sea. Just as quickly as the cataclysmic event had started, it ended. Groudon retreated into its cave to sleep once again, and with nothing to provoke it, Kyogre disappeared beneath the lapping waves of the ocean. Their fight had left their mark on the world though. The regions of the Pokemon World are no longer separate, but one. This event later became named The Merge. This new super-region was given the name Arcanum.[/center]

[center]This has caused Pokemon migration across the globe. Where previously it would have been hard to find a certain Pokemon, there are now and abundance. The event also had an opposite effect, causing certain forms of Pokemon to become endangered. The world of Pokemon that you knew no longer exists.[/center]

[center]Also, in the recent years, villainous gangs such as Team Galactic and Team Magma have disappeared. Or rather, they have become united. All organized Pokemon gangs have united under Team Rocket, making a force that strikes terror into the citizens of Arcanum. Lately, their villainous activities have increased and the world is wondering what they are planning.[/center]
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[center]TABLE OF CONTENTS:[/center]

[center][url="http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/286502-hidden-amongst-shadows-a-pokemon-fanfic/#entry5985035"]Chapter 1: Demon's Shadow[/url]
[url="http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/286502-hidden-amongst-shadows-a-pokemon-fanfic/#entry5986334"]Chapter 2: Puzzling Lore[/url][/center]


[center]Chapter 1 was moved to the post below.[/center]

[Ren✧]

[spoiler=Chapter 1: Demon's Shadow]



[b]Chapter 1: Demon’s Shadow[/b]
Sebastian sat down at the base of the large tree with a sigh. He had been traveling all day, without taking a moment’s break. He rummaged in his back pack and pulled out a fresh, crisp apple. He had just bought it in a small village a day prior. Sebastian sank his teeth into the red fruit, and its sweet taste spread throughout his mouth. He let out another sigh.

In the shade of the large tree, it was actually comfortable. After walking for miles, with the sun beating down overhead, the tree and its shade were welcome. Sebastian finished off the apple and threw it aside. He leaned his back against the trunk of the tree and stared out across the grassy plain. A small breeze picked up, causing the tall grass to wave, to and fro.

It was so peaceful here. Sebastian wanted to stay for awhile, but he knew that loitering might create a problem arise. Despite this knowledge, his eyelids began to droop, the cruel being of sleep were tugging on them. Just as his eyes closed completely, he shook his head. He pushed himself off the ground and slung his backpack over his shoulder. In the village he had stayed at the day before, he had heard stories of bandits in these parts of the plains. Sebastian had no desire to run into them.

At a slightly brisker pace he began walking again. He walked for hours, and hours. He didn’t know what exactly he was looking for, but he knew that he would know it when he saw it. A week ago, before he had started this trek, Sebastian had heard tales of a strange entity appearing during the new moon. Rumor had it that the entity sent people into a comatose state. The people would not wake up until the following full moon. Unfortunately, most did not escape unscathed. They woke ranting about demons and curses, unable to close their eyes for fear of seeing it all again. Their mind had been broken by whatever they had seen in their nightmare.

Most people regarded the entity as an angry spirit that preyed on the fears of people but Sebastian knew better than that. There were many ominous and powerful things that circled throughout the Earth, but he didn’t believe a spirit could do what the rumors described. Sebastian was sure his hypothesis was correct, all the data pointed right to it. Darkrai had reared his head again.

Sebastian smiled inwardly. He had always enjoyed dark Pokémon more than any of the others at the Trainer School. They just brought about them an ominous, almost a malevolent, feeling when they around. This feeling intrigued Sebastian and he soon acquired the ambition to catch and train dark type Pokémon. [i]Now I will catch the most powerful one of all, [/i]Sebastian thought to himself.

Night fell, but still Sebastian kept walking. He looked at the rising moon and saw that only a small sliver remained. If he did not reach his next destination the following night, he would have to wait another month before being able to catch Darkrai.

“Time to speed this along,” Sebastian said to no one. He pulled his hand out of his pocket and grabbed an object that was clipped to his belt. The object looked like an enlarged marble, painted red on one side and white on the other. He pressed the center button on the object and it expanded. It was a Pokéball. He through the Pokéball into the air and it opened. A bright, white light emerged from the open Pokéball in midair. The light struck the ground and after it faded a black and gray wolfish creature stood where the base of the light had been. The Pokéball returned to Sebastian’s open hand like a boomerang.

Sebastian looked at his Mightyena and smiled. After countless hours of training he had not only made his Mightyena strong, but also unique. His Mightyena was twice the size of most of its species. It was truly an impressive sight. Sebastian hopped on Mightyena, who didn’t seem to mind, and bent down over its neck. “You ready, Ebony?” Sebastian asked the Mightyena, Ebony. Ebony replied with a bark and took off. She was quite fast, even with the weight of Sebastian on her.

The darkened landscape raced by as Ebony ate up mile after mile. A few times during the night they had to rest, but they made good time. Just as the sun started peeking over the horizon, a town came into view. Sebastian gestured for Ebony to stop. She happily obliged. Her tongue hung out and her sides were heaving. She was exhausted. Sebastian pulled out a bottle of water from his bag as well as a small drinking dish. He poured the water into the dish and let Ebony take a long drink from it. When she was done, Sebastian grabbed her empty Pokéball from his belt. “Good girl,” Sebastian praised, “Return!” Sebastian held up the Pokéball and a red light engulfed Ebony, recalling her back into her Pokéball.

Sebastian continued to the town on foot. By the time he got there the sun had fully risen. He walked into town and instantly noticed a difference that wasn’t there in all the other towns and villages he had visited along his journey. Few people were out in the streets and those that were, had a tense expression on their face. It was as if the whole town was holding its breath, waiting for something to happen.

Sebastian walked down the center of the road. He had little to fear, in the retrospect of getting run over. There was not a moving car in sight. Nor was there a bike or a scooter, just people in groups of two or three, hurrying from one place to the next. Most of the people in the town did not look at Sebastian and those that did turned away as soon as Sebastian noticed.

Yes, there was something not right about the town…and Sebastian loved it.

Sebastian made his way to an elderly man that was sitting in his rocking chair outside of his house. As Sebastian approached, the elderly man looked up and met Sebastian’s gaze. Unlike the rest of the people in town he didn’t seem tense or nervous. “You are the one that I saw in the vision. You are the one that shall from us from the binds of this ghastly Pokémon!” The elderly man said. At first Sebastian was too stunned to speak, [i]How does this man know it is a Pokémon?[/i] He thought to himself.

Sebastian voiced his thoughts out loud. The man chuckled, showing that he had more than one missing tooth. “Not too long ago, I too was cursed to sleep under the Pokémon's spell. Then, I felt it, a warm presence spread throughout my dream body. A voice spoke in my head, telling me the true name of the creature the plagued our town and that a hero would come to save us. Is that not you?” The man asked.
“It is me,” Sebastian replied simply, “Is there a Pokémon Center that my Pokémon and I can rest in until sundown?”

“Yes, come on in.” The man got out of his rocking chair and entered his house. Sebastian looked at the old, wooden house with doubt, but followed the man regardless. As he entered the house he became aware of a musty scent that let on to the fact that the house had not been aired out for some time. “A few months ago we had a real Pokémon Center,” The man said,” But after the recent attacks it was shut down. Now the job of taking care of trainers and their Pokémon falls to me and Happiny.” Upon saying this, a small pink shape moved out of the shadows of the dark corners in the house. The Pokémon had a pink ponytail protruding from the top of its head, and carried a stone in the pouch that seemed to be the lower half of its body.

“Hap-,” The Happiny said cautiously.

“It’s okay. This nice trainer is here to free us, just like I said.” The old man told his Pokémon. Upon his words the Happiny started to cheer and came closer to Sebastian, holding out her hands. “She wants you to give her your Pokéballs,” The man said.

Sebastian gave Happiny the four Pokéballs from around his waist. She took them and headed towards the back of the house. Sebastian had a moment of unease, watching his Pokémon disappear into the gloom of the windowless. It soon dispersed though, the man seemed trustworthy enough. “You can sleep there,” The man said, gesturing to a small, pull out bed. The sheets looked old and musty, but to Sebastian, who had been traveling for days on end, it looked perfect. He set down his backpack next to the bed, kicked off his shoes and was asleep by the time his head hit the pillow.

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Sebastian felt something nudge his shoulder. He cracked his eyes open and through the narrow slits he saw a pink shape. He opened his eyes all the way and rubbed the sleep out of them. Standing there was Happiny, with the four Pokéballs he had given her earlier. “Happiny!” The Pokémon exclaimed, offering the Pokéballs to Sebastian.

Sebastian took them and clipped them onto his belt. After doing so, he looked above Happiny to the old man that had housed him. “Thank you,” Sebastian said.

“No, thank you,” The old man said, and with that he disappeared farther back into the house. Leaving Sebastian nothing to do but brave the dark night that had fallen while Sebastian had slept. He left some money on the bed he had been sleeping on and then left the home.

There was no one outside on the streets. Sebastian could see a few curious eyes peeking out from behind some of the house’s blinds. Out in the distance he heard the chirping of a flock of Murkrow. Their call pierced the quiet night.

Sebastian looked up at the sky, and was unsurprised to see that there was no moon. Almost at once, the calls of the Murkrow stopped. The slight breeze that had been blowing came to a halt. Sebastian once again returned his gaze to the sky. Silhouetted by the faint light of thousands of stars, was a figure. The figure raised its hands above its head, creating a sphere of pure darkness. It threw it at the still form of Sebastian.

Sebastian’s eyes grew wide as the attack hurtled towards him. Fear paralyzed his entire body. Just as the attack was about to reach him there was a pink blur off to Sebastian’s side and then he felt a strong force knock him to the ground. The attack whistled harmlessly overhead, crashing into the ground behind him. Sebastian looked at his savior and was surprised to see that it was none other than Happiny.

“Happiny?” The Pokémon seemed to be asking if Sebastian was alright. “Yeah, I’m fine. Thanks,” Sebastian said. Happiny nodded and then scurried off, back to the old man’s house.

Sebastian looked back to the figure of what he knew to be Darkrai; it was slowly descending toward the ground. I hovered a few feet in front of where Sebastian lay in the dirt. “You have come to challenge!” The Darkrai said in a gravelly voice. It sounded as if it had not spoken in years.

Sebastian was dumbfounded. Never before had he heard a Pokémon talk, let alone address him. Sebastian swallowed. “Yes,” Sebastian said cautiously, getting to his feet.

“The let us begin.” Darkrai took spread his arms farther apart, taking a fighting stance. Sebastian steeled his nerves. He had come all this way to capture Darkrai, and he was not going to fail. He took a few steps away from Darkrai, not because he was afraid, but because if he sent out a Pokémon at this distance the battle field would be diminished considerably.

“Don’t fail me now!” Sebastian said, as he threw a Pokéballs. In a flash of light, a Pokémon emerged. The Pokémon was lizard-like in appearance, but it stood on two legs. Its orange and yellow skin was washed out by the darkness of the night, the bright, red crest atop its head stood out like a beacon. “Let’s go, Scrafty.”

Without a moment’s notice, Darkrai raised his arms above his head and formed, once again, a sphere. Unlike last time, this sphere didn’t seem as mysterious or powerful, but Sebastian wasn’t going to let his guard down. “Scrafty, use Hi Jump Kick!” Sebastian ordered. Scrafty jumped high into the air, and then with an unseen force propelled himself towards Darkrai, foot first.

Sebastian could have sworn he heard Darkrai chuckle. Darkrai lowered himself closer to the ground, making the Hi Jump Kick pass harmlessly overhead. Scrafty hit the asphalt of the road and strong pained roared in his leg. “Scraf-,” He cried out in pain. “Use Low Kick!” Sebastian commanded, ignoring the damage that Scrafty had taken. Scrafty responded immediately. He brought his legs out to the side and swept the across the ground. Quick as lightning, Scarfty’s foot connected with the legs that Darkrai had conjured for himself. Darkrai’s eyes grew wide as he fell to the ground.

“Don’t underestimate us,” Sebastian said.

“It is you, who underestimates me.” Darkrai chided.

Scrafty got back on his feet and stood patiently waiting for Sebastian to give an order. Before Sebastian could give a command Darkrai shot a spiraling blast of dark energy hurtling towards Scrafty. It hit him straight in the chest, knocking him backwards a few feet and then landing him on his butt. “Scrafty, you can do it!” Sebastian encouraged. Scrafty shook the daze the attack had given him and got up. Without having to be commanded he knew what his master wanted him to do.

Scrafty sprinted towards Darkrai, his fists hung by his sides and his eyes were closed. His fists started to glow as he approached Darkrai. Scrafty’s eyes snapped open. “Scrafy, use Focus Punch!” Sebastian called.

Scrafty leaped into the air, and struck Darkrai squarely in the jaw. Darkrai was sent flying into the air and then landed with a thud on the ground. He stayed there for a moment, and a small feeling of pride and achievement fluttered in Sebastian’s heart. Could it really be that easy? “You will pay for that one,” Darkrai said, getting up. The sound of his voice shattered any idea that Sebastian had of the battle being over.

Scrafty stood in front of Sebastian. Using Focus Punch, his most powerful attack, had taken a lot out of him. Darkrai stared directly into Scrafty’s eyes and in a flash of purple light Scrafty fell asleep. “Hypnosis…” Sebastian muttered angrily to himself. He moved to grab Scrafty’s Pokéballs, but before he could return Scrafty, Darkrai sent a black sphere, Shadow Ball, hurtling towards Sebastian’s hand. The Pokéball went flying into the dark depths of the night, as well as causing a horrible pain to rip through Sebastian’s right arm.

“I told you, you would pay. Now watch your precious Pokémon suffer!” Darkrai roared. After saying this Scrafty started to convulse. He opened his mouth in a silent scream. He opened his eyes, pleading for Sebastian to save him, but he was trapped in the nightmare that was Darkrai. And no one could help him.

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[Ren✧]

[spoiler=Chapter 2: Puzzling Lore]

[b]Chapter 2: Puzzling Lore[/b]
Sebastian could on stare at the writhing form of his Pokémon. Scrafty rolled about on the ground, unable to utter a cry for help. The sight brought tears to Sebastian’s eyes. Never before had he seen something so heartbreak, and never before had he felt so helpless.

“Stop it,” Sebastian said his voice barely a whisper. “Stop it!” Sebastian said his whisper turning into a shout.

“You are weak,” Darkrai taunted. His voice revealed the enjoyment he got from seeing Sebastian in so much pain. “Walk away now, and that beast shall be your only casualty.” Darkrai pointed to the thrashing form of Scrafty.

Sebastian raised his gaze, meeting Darkrai’s eyes. A steely look flashed between them. “Not a chance,” Sebastian grabbed a second Pokéball from his belt, pressing the center button to enlarge it, he threw it. In a dazzling display of white light, Sebastian had sent out his second Pokémon.

The small Pokémon stood just an inch or two higher than Sebastian’s waist. The Pokémon had a feline-like appearance. Its head was topped with a red crown-like crest; a collar of the matching shade circled its neck. Set in the center of its forehead was a yellow gem that glowed faintly. “Weavile,” The Pokémon said, indicating it was eager to get revenge for its fallen comrade.

“You are either a fool or a warrior,” Darkrai said, acknowledging Sebastian’s drive to continue. Not deeming his words worth of a response, Sebastian spoke to his Pokémon. “Weavile, use Taunt!” A vicious smile sprung to Weavile’s lips, showing off its vicious, pointed teeth.

“Is that supposed to intimidate me?” Darkrai asked, somewhat amused by Sebastian’s choice of tactics.

“Something like that,” Sebastian confirmed, his voice even. Darkrai raised his hand, a dark sphere forming in his palm. It was the same attack that Darkrai had launched at Sebastian from the very beginning.

“Dark Void!” Darkrai roared, heaving the sphere at Weavile, who had yet to move. As the attack sailed through the air, its size decreased and before it even got within ten feet of Weavile it fizzled out. “What the hell?” Darkrai asked. Sebastian found pleasure in hearing a tone of confusion in the once so confident Pokémon.

“You really should start doing your homework,” Sebastian said, not intending to elaborate any farther. “Weavile, use X-Scissors!” Taking advantage of Darkrai’s confusion, Weavile attacked. Jumping high into the air, Weavile’s claws began to glow a shade of bright green. Reaching his climax of the jump, Weavile launched the bug type attack at Darkrai from above. The attack hit Darkrai directly, dealing quite a bit of damage.

“Follow up with Ice Beam!” Sebastian ordered. He wanted revenge and he was not going to let Darkrai recover. As Weavile fell back to earth, it launched a beam of icy energy from the palms of its outstretched hands. Before it could make contact with Darkrai however, a beam of spiraling dark energy intercepted it. Dark Pulse.

Picking himself up off the ground, Darkrai addressed Sebastian. “You are a formidable opponent, but you let your emotions rule your actions.” With those ominous words Darkrai began to take the offensive. The nightmarish Pokémon fired several Dark Pulses at Weavile, who had now safely landed on the ground. Barely dodging the attacks, Weavile sprung backwards, twisting his ankle as he landed. Weavile let out a growl of pain.

“Take back the offensive! Use Metal Claw!” Weavile nodded, understanding the need to keep going. Holding his right arm out to the side, Weavile dashed towards Darkrai. Just as Weavile was about to make contact, a striking pain racked up his leg, causing him to fall. The sprain was worse than he had originally thought.

“Maybe I overestimate you,” Darkrai said, directing his words at Sebastian. With a casual flick of his wrist, Darkrai hit Weavile across the face and sent him flying backwards. “Time to finish this,” Darkrai said casually. He once again held his arms high, the sphere of Dark Void forming. It appeared as if Weavile’s Taunt had worn off. “Sweet dreams,” Darkrai said darkly. The attack hurtled towards Weavile, who in turn was unable to move.

Things seemed to slow down. Sebastian watched the sphere of pure dark energy hurtle towards his helpless Pokémon. It appeared that twice he had failed, and now he would be paying the price for stubbornness. He cried out, desperate to figure out a way to save his Pokémon, but he knew that he would not be quick enough. Before the attack could find its mark however, an orange light illuminated the surrounding area. Just as the finishing blow for Weavile was about to be complete, a jet of bright fire hit the attack, sending it cascading sideways. The attack passed harmlessly around Sebastian and Weavile, landing forcefully in the dirt roadway.

Another blast of fire shot overhead. Sebastian dove to the ground to avoid being hit by the fiery inferno. The attack hit Darkrai in the face. Sebastian turned to see where the attacks had come from. Standing behind him was a human-like Pokémon. Its egg shaped body was covered in orange and yellow stripes. “MAGMORTAR!” The Pokémon yelled, challenging Darkrai, who had recovered from the surprise attack Magmortar had thrown its way earlier.

“I haven’t been annoyed like this in several decades,” Darkrai grumbled darkly, raising his hands in preparation to deal with the new threat of Magmortar. Before he could attack though, his body was engulfed with blue electricity. Darkrai began to converse, his muscles contracting as the electricity coursed through his body. With a strangled yelp, Darkrai collapsed on the ground.

Sebastian rubbed his eyes, making sure that what he saw actually happened. Things just weren’t adding up. There were of course wild Pokémon around here, but to find a Magmortar? They are nearly impossible to find, even in their naturally habitat. To find one out here in the grassy plains was a laughable thought. That led Sebastian to believe that it had to be a trainer’s, who’s could it be?

Taking another look around, Sebastian spotted a silhouette standing over the fallen form of Darkrai. Getting up, Sebastian began to cautiously inch towards the shadowed figure and the fallen Darkrai. As he did so however, he realized he was neglecting his duty as a trainer. Taking Weavile’s empty Pokémon, Sebastian used it to return Weavile to the ball’s safe confinement.

Sebastian then walked over to where Scraggy laid, conversing on the ground. White spit had collected on the sides of his mouth, running down his cheeks. The sight caused a pang of guilt and sadness to see Scraggy in this condition. He wiped away the tears that had begun to form at the edges of his eyes. He made Scraggy a silent promise to help him as soon as he could, but right now the strange man was too much of a priority.

Getting up from his kneeling position, Sebastian strode over to the man. The man was now kneeling on the ground, as Sebastian came closer he saw that he was tampering with some kind of box-shaped device. “Who are you?” Sebastian asked. He was careful to make his voice even. He didn’t want this guy thinking that he was a threat, but he also was a little suspicious of this mysterious figure…even if he did save Sebastian from the cold clutches of Darkrai.

The figure looked up. Upon seeing his face, Sebastian confirmed that it was indeed a man. “You gave me a scare,” The man said. Although the look on his face said otherwise, he looked completely calm. “My name is Loren, but everyone calls me Lore.” The man straightened and extended his hand.

Shaking it, Sebastian eyed the man suspiciously. “What did you just do?” Sebastian asked, obviously referring to the still form of Darkrai at their feet.

“I imagine I just saved your life. But as for how I did it,” Lore, rummaging through his pockets, “I did it with this.” He held up a black cylinder with two, small metal prongs on the end. The man pressed a button and blue electricity began to jump between the two prongs with a dangerous sizzling sound. Sebastian took a step back.

“A tazer?” Sebastian asked, somewhat skeptical of how well something like that would actually work on a legendary Pokémon.

“Well it is obviously more than just a simple tazer. I call it the VoltRod.” Lore said, as he bent down and began to fiddle with the box-shaped gizmo Sebastian had noticed before. Sebastian was having a hard time believing how this stranger was being so nonchalant about everything.

“What is that?” Sebastian asked, pointing to the small black cube.

“You are just full of questions,” Lore said with an irritated sigh. “If you must know it is a Containment Cube.”

Sebastian just looked at the man. He didn’t want to risk upsetting the man further with more questions. “I am guessing by your silence, that you want me to explain what a Containment Cube does?” Sebastian was a bit surprised at the man’s perceptiveness. Sebastian just nodded, answering the man’s question.

“This,” Lore started, “is what it does.” Lore stood up, after pressing a button on top of the cube. A blue circle appeared on top of the cube. A beeping sound began to resonate from the small device, growing higher in pitch and volume with each passing second. Just as it got to the point that Sebastian would have to cover his ears, the beeping stopped. Replacing the beeping, a dull blue light engulfed the Containment Cube. The light spread out and then began to engulf the fallen form of Darkrai.

“Wait a minute,” Sebastian said, putting the pieces together, “You’re taking Darkrai?”

“Well I did defeat it,” Lore said, not lifting his gaze.

“With my help. You wouldn’t have been able to get to him with that stupid stunner if it wasn’t for me,” Sebastian’s temper was rising. He had worked so hard for this moment and now it was being taken away from him.

“Young man,” Lore said, turning to face Sebastian, “if it weren’t for me you would probably be caught in a never-ending vicious nightmare. Don’t pester me anymore.” An evil gleam entered the man’s eyes, causing a worried though to pass through Sebastian’s mind. He looked down, watching the light completely encase Darkrai, and then begin to pull his body into the cube.

As far as Sebastian could tell, the Containment Cube was much like a Pokéball. But, if that were the case why didn’t Lore just use a Pokéball? The only answer the seemed plausible was the idea that the Containment Cube was more powerful, less unpredictable. The device finished its job. No longer was the unconscious form of Darkrai lying at his feet. His hopes had been crushed.

“Now, just to make sure you don’t interfere any farther,” Sebastian heard Lore’s voice, cold and haunting. But, before he could look up he felt the cold sting of metal on his neck. He knew what was going to happen right before it. An electric current coursed through his body and Sebastian fell to the ground.
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[Aerion Brightflame]

Umm... its certainly different to anything i've read before. It''s good, you have lots of talent. It's just a slightly odd thing to read when you aren't used to it. Things do seem to be happening quickly, and is Darkai becoming one of the pokemon where there are lots of it?

Oh, and welome to Creative writing, where replies are in short order. Oh, and i would put it in spoilers so people don't moan that you don't have it in spoilers.

I shall keep reading, hopefully understanding whats happening.

[Ren✧]

[quote name='HiveNet' timestamp='1343061083' post='5986354']
Umm... its certainly different to anything i've read before. It''s good, you have lots of talent. It's just a slightly odd thing to read when you aren't used to it. Things do seem to be happening quickly, and is Darkai becoming one of the pokemon where there are lots of it?

Oh, and welome to Creative writing, where replies are in short order. Oh, and i would put it in spoilers so people don't moan that you don't have it in spoilers.

I shall keep reading, hopefully understanding whats happening.
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No Darkrai is still a rare Pokemon, but he isn't the good little Pokemon he is in "The Rise of Darkrai".

I put it in Spoilers like you said. I am writing the second chapter now.

As for things moving too quickly, they will slow down in a few chapters. I like to start out fast, try to draw people in that way.

Glad to have a reader!

[Ren✧]

Sorry it is taking so long to get the second chapter up guys. This last week as been extremely busy.

[Ren✧]

BUMP, nearly done with second chapter. I won't be able to post for a few days, seeing as I am out of town.

[Ren✧]

Second chapter is up. 1st chapter moved to second post.

[Aerion Brightflame]

So it appears with have a villain... Intresting.

My knowledge of current pokemon is non existant, so i didn't recognize all of them, but thats my problem not yours. This might seem like an odd and time consuming request, but maybe link them? Just so you don't have to worry about your reader not recogniing the pokemon. Though why a non pokemon fan would read a pokemon fic is beyond me.

I think Darkai was kinda... unwhelming. It's meant to be a legendary, and one thing i didn't like about some of the games is that the legenedaries... were never legendary in battle. They never wiped the floor in one blow if you know what i mean.

Still, carry on with the fic, as worry not, i shall definately read, and try to comment. I know how terrible it feels when you put effort into writing, and then it gets shunned...

Oh, and on the writing quality, it was good, battle flowed smoothly, and the descriptions were sufficient. And, the villian reminds me vaguely of someone from one of the movies... not sure which. But intresting that he doesn't feel the need to beat a young persons pet until its unconcious.

[Ren✧]

[quote name='HiveNet' timestamp='1343691983' post='5993120']
So it appears with have a villain... Intresting.

My knowledge of current pokemon is non existant, so i didn't recognize all of them, but thats my problem not yours. This might seem like an odd and time consuming request, but maybe link them? Just so you don't have to worry about your reader not recogniing the pokemon. Though why a non pokemon fan would read a pokemon fic is beyond me.

I think Darkai was kinda... unwhelming. It's meant to be a legendary, and one thing i didn't like about some of the games is that the legenedaries... were never legendary in battle. They never wiped the floor in one blow if you know what i mean.

Still, carry on with the fic, as worry not, i shall definately read, and try to comment. I know how terrible it feels when you put effort into writing, and then it gets shunned...

Oh, and on the writing quality, it was good, battle flowed smoothly, and the descriptions were sufficient. And, the villian reminds me vaguely of someone from one of the movies... not sure which. But intresting that he doesn't feel the need to beat a young persons pet until its unconcious.
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In the next chapters I will try to add a few links to the Pokemon. They will probably be listed at the end of the chapter, kinda like a glossary or something. Glad to have a dedicated reader.

I have some questions if you don't mind, you have already answered a few of them but I'll ask anyway:

What do you think about the length of the chapters?

Do the battles seem fragmented, broken, or do they flow?

How is the imagery? Can you picture everything?

If there are any anonymous readers, feel free to answer the above questions as well.

[Aerion Brightflame]

[quote name='~Renegade~' timestamp='1343704504' post='5993288']
In the next chapters I will try to add a few links to the Pokemon. They will probably be listed at the end of the chapter, kinda like a glossary or something. Glad to have a dedicated reader.
[b]Or you could do what i do in my Yu-gi-oh! fic link at the moment where the name is first mentioned. That saves you the effort of having to write it afterwards. (Shameless advertising for the win) [/b]

I have some questions if you don't mind, you have already answered a few of them but I'll ask anyway:

What do you think about the length of the chapters?
[b]Chapter length is fine, neither of them seem to drag on, or end prematurely.[/b]

Do the battles seem fragmented, broken, or do they flow?
[b]So far, the Darkai one was pretty good. No random breaks in the middle for tea or anything like that. [/b]

How is the imagery? Can you picture everything?
[b]Not everything, but thats becuase i normally forget what its meant to look like. So i just invent an enviroment for the actions. But, your desriptions of the enviroments are fine anyways. [/b]
If there are any anonymous readers, feel free to answer the above questions as well.
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[Ren✧]

@HiveNet: I'll check out your fanfic, see what you are doing with the links. Thanks for answering the questions!

[Ren✧]

I am so sorry for no new chapters. I am extremely busy right now, I don't foresee that changing for a few weeks

[ListenToLife]

If I can give a little bit of Advice; keep your chapters on one post until a second post is needed. I dont intimately know how things work around here, but I'd presume that was the norm.
But it's a great Story. I'll definitely be reading. It'll help me when I come to write my own Pokémon Fan-Fic, I reckon.

[Ren✧]

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If I can give a little bit of Advice; keep your chapters on one post until a second post is needed. I dont intimately know how things work around here, but I'd presume that was the norm.
But it's a great Story. I'll definitely be reading. It'll help me when I come to write my own Pokémon Fan-Fic, I reckon.
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Actually I thought it was customary for writers to just post a table of contents on the first post and then move on from there. I think I'll keep doing it this way. I don't know when the next chapter will be out, school is starting so as busy as I am atm things are only gonna get worse.

[ListenToLife]

Okay. I just thought it might be easier and more efficient to have them all on one or two posts. I guess it's up to writer's preference.

Anyway, great story. I'll definitely be reading if you continue this. It's really good. (I know I already said this, but who cares?)

[Ren✧]

I have started writing the 3rd chapter.

[SunKistRebelution]

I enjoyed reading this fanfic. Normally I don't read anything but the yugioh fanfics due to the fact that this is a yugioh fansite. However, I love the premise of Arcanum and will definitely continue following this. Nice work.

[Randomflyingobjects]

I read this a month or two back, but for some reason didn't comment.

Anyway, it's good so far, as far as I remember, and sence it's fairly good, I'm going to continue reading a couple chapters. Hopefully, I'm going to get to make a more in-depth review for the third chapter, but... yeah.