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[taker55]

Super Sayian power - Gohan

Monster

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5 stars they say its overpowered for somereason help plz

rare

ocg help plz

1st edition

28u-18i

warrior/effect

This card rises its atk by 600 each time it attacks . Its attack points are x 400 for each warrior in your deck. this card can only be attack by wind monsters

grammer help plz

 

 

atk 0 def 2000

[gary9672001]

-instead of "rises" put in raise

-after the "600" put in points

-instead of "attack" on the second sentence put in atk

-instead of the second sentence try something like this "The atk points of this card is raise by 400 points for each warrior type card in your deck"

-The effects of this card is really overpowered cause of its low sacrifice and its effect. (look at it this way if you summon this card to the field and your whole deck is full with warrior cards like about 30 something are warrior cards. So lets do the math 30 x 400 is 12000 and place that as an atk points for the monster. The monster alone can destory the god cards and all of the strongest cards in the yugioh game for a single sacrifice which is REALLY overpowered.)

[•:Elonar:•]

Change it to this:

 

When this card attacks, raise it's ATK by 500 points. For each Warrior-Type monster in your deck, this card gains 400 ATK points. This card can only be attacked by WIND monsters.

[Parting Shot]

while the previous suggestions are pretty good, it still doesn't change the fact that it is extremely overpowered. a 1 tribute monster whose ATK is equal to 400 x how many warriors are in your deck. even played halfway through a duel, it could still have upwards of 3000 ATK points.

 

a more balanced effect would be something like this:

"This card's ATK is equal to the number of face-up Warrior-Type monsters on the Field x 400. When this card attacks, increase this card's ATK by 600 until the End Phase of the turn."

 

it's more balanced, since you can only have up to 5 warriors on your field, and the chances of your opponent also having warriors is slim, but it gives you an added bonus if they do.

 

hope this helps ^_^