Jake the Sage Posted June 5, 2013 Author Report Share Posted June 5, 2013 So if I get it right people stripping on the beach is hilarious? Perhaps you'll laugh for an entire week if I tell you nudist beaches exist and that is nothing new. (=_=) Okay I know what a nudist beach is, just more the fact that the twins are just going to go swimming in their underwear. Oh well, guess some things I find odd are not odd to other people. That's comedy . . . Kari's first line involved a present tense verb in a past tense piece. It is? Guess Word didn't catch it . . . thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted June 5, 2013 Report Share Posted June 5, 2013 No, word has no idea how tenses work usually. Though you think it would pick up 'shouts'. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted June 5, 2013 Author Report Share Posted June 5, 2013 Yeah but that is why I have beta-readers to look for those kind of things; though I go back myself, but sometimes I miss something, always better to have more than one pair of eyes reading for mistakes. What I showed wasn't really anything they've been through yet so that might be why the tenses were wrong. When I'm writing I'm not all that concerned with those things. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
iCherry Posted June 5, 2013 Report Share Posted June 5, 2013 So if I get it right people stripping on the beach is hilarious? Perhaps you'll laugh for an entire week if I tell you nudist beaches exist and that is nothing new.I've actually heard of those and the idea is pretty hilarious in my opinion. I sort of want to go to one for perverted reasons and such, but I'm curious if anyone here has been to one? Highly doubt it, but still.How far into your new DEF are you in to, Jake? I haven't been here, but I'm assuming it hasn't been made public yet. ... Or you posted it here, from what I'm reading. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted June 5, 2013 Report Share Posted June 5, 2013 You'll get my full overview of this little excerpt of yours quite soon Jake. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TatteredSleeves Posted June 5, 2013 Report Share Posted June 5, 2013 I've actually heard of those and the idea is pretty hilarious in my opinion. I sort of want to go to one for perverted reasons and such, but I'm curious if anyone here has been to one? Highly doubt it, but still. How far into your new DEF are you in to, Jake? I haven't been here, but I'm assuming it hasn't been made public yet. ... Or you posted it here, from what I'm reading. There's alot of nude beaches out in cali...I've had mixed experiences... One instance was mostly middle-aged men there (presumably for the same reason I was) to check out the scenery. The second time I went It was the middle of spring break and the huge number of high-schoolers that were present made it EXTREMELY easy on the eyes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spirit of DMG Posted June 5, 2013 Report Share Posted June 5, 2013 Hmmm... All of a sudden I feel like going to Cali... Cherry, no one knows where Jake is in DEF II. Not even Jake. He has posted an excerpt, but that's all. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted June 5, 2013 Report Share Posted June 5, 2013 Welp, I finished the review, but I'm going to wait for my proof reader before I post it. I think you guys will enjoy it immensely. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
iCherry Posted June 5, 2013 Report Share Posted June 5, 2013 There's alot of nude beaches out in cali...I've had mixed experiences... One instance was mostly middle-aged men there (presumably for the same reason I was) to check out the scenery. The second time I went It was the middle of spring break and the huge number of high-schoolers that were present made it EXTREMELY easy on the eyes. ... Now that I think about it, the first instance isn't that surprising, is it...? Spring sounds like a good time, but Summer would be a hell of a gamble. Hmmm... All of a sudden I feel like going to Cali... Cherry, no one knows where Jake is in DEF II. Not even Jake. He has posted an excerpt, but that's all.i hope you pick the right time because you may spend 500 dollars for plane tickets on the most nightmarish eye-destorying sights known to manSo he hasn't even so much as started on the main project then? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TatteredSleeves Posted June 5, 2013 Report Share Posted June 5, 2013 That's the good part about living in cali...you don't usually have to worry about timing. But dood, ComicCon is better eye candy, FAR more "artistically inspiring" women, and (let's all be honest here) anime/video game cons are the third easiest place to get some on the damned planet. But the beaches are still nice, went bodysurfing down at Pearl Beach a week ago...I absolutely reccomend south cali as a vacation spot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted June 5, 2013 Author Report Share Posted June 5, 2013 I've actually heard of those and the idea is pretty hilarious in my opinion. I sort of want to go to one for perverted reasons and such, but I'm curious if anyone here has been to one? Highly doubt it, but still. The people who go to nude beaches are always the ones you never want to see naked. It's a rule . . . There's a lot of nude beaches out in Cal . . . the second time I went It was the middle of spring break and the huge number of High School students that were present made it EXTREMELY easy on the eyes. Well f*ck the rules. Cherry I'll be joining you on your trip to Cal. Wait . . . my brother is going to be moving to Cal in October when he gets transferred . . . mehehehehehehehe (>8D) How far into your new DEF are you in to, Jake? I haven't been here, but I'm assuming it hasn't been made public yet. ... Or you posted it here, from what I'm reading. Cherry, no one knows where Jake is in DEF II. Not even Jake. He has posted an excerpt, but that's all. So he hasn't even so much started on the main project then? Cherry don't listen to DMG, he's only messing with you. I've been writing and working on it for a long time now but thing after thing keeps coming up to pull me away from the chore of writing. What I showed in here was a sample to show that, yes, I have been writing. Once it's finished and ready to be posted I'll post it in the Fan Fiction section, not here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted June 6, 2013 Report Share Posted June 6, 2013 Well Jake, you've been, wait for it... [url=http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/299580-wait-for-it-heart-breakers-episode-9-gratuitous-japanese-title-sub-holder/?p=6215807]HEART BROKEN![/url] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted June 6, 2013 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2013 Well Jake, you've been, wait for it... HEART BROKEN! Hu? Oh well . . . *reads the review of a single section of an entire fic* Meh . . . Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kazooie Posted June 6, 2013 Report Share Posted June 6, 2013 I just have to ask, why did you think it was a good idea to show us part of the fic no one had proofread yet? It seems like doing something like that would just scream "Bad Idea" in your head. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted June 6, 2013 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2013 I just have to ask, why did you think it was a good idea to show us part of the fic no one had proofread yet? It seems like doing something like that would just scream "Bad Idea" in your head. I do a lot of things that scream "this is a bad f*cking idea" but I seem to not get that station. At all. Everyone wanted a scene, okay Creator/DMG wanted a scene, so I decided to show them an entertaining one. I remembered people here asking for a beach scene so I thought, "Hey! We can post some of the beach scene chapter to show them, 1.) We are working on this, 2.) You DID include the beach chapter. Everyone will be happy!" And I actually think I did say that this hadn't been proofread before, but either Broken forgot or overlooked it per usual. Though . . . Main Goal: Show You ARE Writing- ACCOMPLISHED! EDIT: Okay I actually didn't say that they hadn't read this part. So that was my bad. All I said was I had three beta readers reviewing this. Guess I should've been more clear. The most anyone has read is chapter one and the prologue because they have other things on their plate as well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted June 6, 2013 Report Share Posted June 6, 2013 It is a bad idea, too bad Jake has too many other voices in his head to listen to common sense. Also: Note: Since I am writing and then reviewing, as well as having my three beta readers look through for mistakes, things are up for change so what you've just read might not be the way it is when I post the real thing. Doens't say anywhere that this wasn't proofread. In fact, you didn't even remotely mention that this particular part wasn't proofread, so that leads me to assume it was. But nice to see you realize your mistake... too bad it was after you made yourself look like a twit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted June 6, 2013 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2013 It is a bad idea, too bad Jake has too many other voices in his head to listen to common sense. Only Lora and she doesn't interrupt me all the time. And yeah as I already said that was my mistake. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted June 6, 2013 Report Share Posted June 6, 2013 I know, but it's so much more gratifying to kick the dog a few times. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted June 6, 2013 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2013 I know, but it's so much more gratifying to kick the dog a few times. And God knows you love being a cruel sadistic b*stard Broken (XD) I think that's why you haven't been banned from the Hotel yet, you got a nice sarcastic sense of humor on you- even if it is being directed at me sometimes. You're like the grumpy old man who waves his cane at passing teenagers complaining about their loud music and their pop-n-lock dancing . . . I actually look forward to you reading the story even if you don't like it, because I saw you can at least be funny reviewing it and tearing the bad parts to pieces. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted June 6, 2013 Report Share Posted June 6, 2013 Huh, and here I was thinking you kept me around for my charm and wit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted June 6, 2013 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2013 Huh, and here I was thinking you kept me around for my charm and wit. Both are applied when I say sarcastic humor. It is part of your charm and you need a good wit to be good at sarcasm Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spirit of DMG Posted June 6, 2013 Report Share Posted June 6, 2013 Cherry don't listen to DMG, he's only messing with you. I've been writing and working on it for a long time now but thing after thing keeps coming up to pull me away from the chore of writing. What I showed in here was a sample to show that, yes, I have been writing. Once it's finished and ready to be posted I'll post it in the Fan Fiction section, not here. So, what I'm understanding from this is... you have no idea where you are in the overall process of writing.Is that correct? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted June 6, 2013 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2013 So, what I'm understanding from this is... you have no idea where you are in the overall process of writing.Is that correct? No I'm around Chapter 5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mugendramon Posted June 6, 2013 Report Share Posted June 6, 2013 No I'm around Chapter 5 Five chapters of that? I really look forward to it. This thing was such an amazing piece of work, I think it could only be better if I was in it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted June 7, 2013 Report Share Posted June 7, 2013 Jake, I feel like you wouldn't be taking this much flak from everyone if you just posted what you have now =/ If you keep posting only excerpts, you're only going to draw in attention without solving any of the tension By waiting even longer, you're only building up more and more suspense, and I'm seriously worried you might not be able to deliver Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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