Monster Hunter: Tales from the Past

[Piercer of the Heavens]

Note 1: This was inspired after reading the monster hunter narratives that [url="http://xglide.deviantart.com/#"]~xglide[/url]wrote.
Note 2: There really isn't a plot, this will just consist of Hunter(s) vs. Monster(s) or Monster(s) vs. Monster(s) stories told fromt he point of view of a Felyne.


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I know why you’re here. You’re here to listen to my exiting stories aren’t ya’? Hehe. Don’t worry; you don’t need to be a hunter to hear these stories. I’m happy to share what I’ve lived through with you. I’m overflowing with them in fact. I bet you want to know who I am first don’t ya’. Well as you can tell I’m a[url="http://monsterhunter.wikia.com/wiki/Felyne"] Felyne[/url], for those of you who don’t know, the armor I’m wearing is [url="http://images.wikia.com/monsterhunter/images/9/9d/Barioth_armor.png"]Barioth S Armor[/url]…. sadly, it was the last thing I received from my master, Jeniffer. Well anyways I’m called Achilles; I used to be hunter when I was young. After my master passed away I couldn’t get myself to hunt anymore. So I became a researcher, studying monster habits to help hunters. With new information, no other felyne, or person at that would need to suffer the lost of a loved one.

This is turning into a sob story, I apologize. Well anyways what story should I tell you first? I know you’re exited aren’t ya’. Hmmmmm, which should I tell first.
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[spoiler=1: First Hunt]
Well maybe my first hunt would be in order. I had been with my master for a while now, so we got along. She was beginning her hunting career as well. Though this wasn’t her first hunt, it was just her first big hunt. Our target was a [url="http://images.wikia.com/monsterhunter/images/8/8f/GreatJaggi.png"]Great Jaggi[/url]. It seemed that this Great Jaggi was getting too close to Moga Village, which was our home town. The people weren’t able to gather materials they needed do to this so they made a request to have it hunted. As you can tell, my master decided to take on this task.

Jeniffer was wearing[url="http://images.wikia.com/monsterhunter/images/5/5c/LeatherArmor.png"] Leather armor[/url]back then, it really didn’t go with her long purple flowing hair, but hey armor is armor. I was wearing [url="http://images.wikia.com/monsterhunter/images/5/5a/Felyne_wood_armor.png"]Acorn armor[/url], as that was all she could afford at that time. Her weapon was[url="http://images.wikia.com/monsterhunter/images/e/e6/Assassinswrd.png"] Hunter’s Dagger[/url], while mine was the [url="http://images.wikia.com/monsterhunter/images/b/b9/Cat_paw.png"]Punch Cat Paw[/url]. Of course as you all know these things aren’t anything special, we were just beginning our hunting career.
Well enough with what we had, time for the story of the hunt that you have been waiting for. As we entered Moga Woods many critters ran around. “You exited. Cause I know I am” she told me stretching her arms. The only response that I gave was a nod of the head and a smile. We ventured deeper into Moga Woods looking for the Great Jaggi, but we couldn’t find it. We searched for about 2 hours, but nothing. It probably wasn’t our best idea to not eat before the quest, but we didn’t. So we decided to eat, Jeniffer had brought some rations along with her so that’s what we decided to eat.

Half way through our meal I heard something in the bushes. So I told Jeniffer that something was there. She unsheathed her sword, ready for what was there. I got my weapon and went into the bushes, to scare what was there. As soon as I cleared the bushed I found a [url="http://images.wikia.com/monsterhunter/images/5/59/MH3-Jagii.png"]Jaggi[/url] on the other side. That’s when I realized, the Great Jaggi had to be near. I smacked the Jaggi on the head and ran back, only to see the Great Jaggi staring of with Jeniffer. “I thought you weren’t going to come back.” She told me with a smile. I was amazed, that even in the face of the Great Jaggi she was still joking around. Well it seemed that the Great Jaggi still hadn’t noticed me, so I went back into the bushes and came out behind it. All the Great Jaggi was doing was roaring at Jeniffer, who was screaming back.

Since I was behind it, I leaped onto the Great Jaggi’s back, biting its back. It let out a scream as soon as I bit it, which if I may add didn’t taste good. Jeniffer took advantage by rushing it and slashing downward, but the Great Jaggi jumped back dodging the slash. “So close” she yelled. The Great Jaggi then started to flail randomly to shake me, which work. I was sent flying toward Jeniffer, landing a foot or two in front of her. She rushed the Great Jaggi again, leaping forward for another downward slash. It was a mistake that cost her; the Great Jaggi did a 180 turn, smacking Jeniffer’s stomach with its tail. It knocked her back, making her skid on her back. This time the Great Jaggi rushed Jeniffer, going in for the bite, but I wasn’t going to let that happen. I dropped my weapon and ran toward the Great Jaggi. With one leap I latch on to its face, covering its vision by using my paws. It started violently shaking its head, randomly biting air. “Off, now!” I heard Jeniffer yell. I used the shaking of the Great Jaggi to land further away than what I would have by trying to go against the shaking. I looked toward the Jeniffer to see what she was going to do. By the time I looked she was in front of the Great Jaggi giving another downward slash. This time she made contact, straight to the Great Jaggi’s head. It gave a loud roar do to the pain that it felt. It looked as if this quest was over, but it seemed that I was wrong. Her sword got stuck on the Great Jaggi’s skull, who survived the slash. “Dam it” I heard her yell as she tried to get the sword unstuck. I knew this wasn’t going to end well, so I ran as fast as I could towards them. I was late though, the Great Jaggi opened its mouth biting down on Jeniffer’s right arm, her sword arm. She gave an ear shattering scream. She started to hit the Great Jaggi’s head with her shield. As soon as I got to the Great Jaggi I jumped onto its neck, clawing at its eye. The Great Jaggi released its gripped and lifted its head to try to get me.

Jeniffer didn’t hesitate and used the spikes on the shield to slash the now exposed neck of the Great Jaggi. With that it was over, the Great Jaggi continued to struggle for a little, but the blood loss was too severe. In less than a minute it collapsed.

With that, out first big hunting quest was over. The bite wasn’t enough to break bone, just cut through the muscle. She wasn’t able to do any hunting for a few weeks, but we still did quest.
Usually delivery or gathering quest.
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[Twyknight]

Lol, This is pretty cool. But I just a one complaint and somthing silly to point out.. Not much of a complain but a suggestion. It helps alot when you add small details, and it is easy in first person pespective writing, with small details also allows more lengthy content while at the same time keeping the reader in suspense For ex: "She rushed the Great Jaggi again, leaping forward for another downward slash. It was a mistake that cost her; the Great Jaggi did a 180 turn, smacking Jeniffer’s stomach with its tail."
try somthing like this "She sprrinted once again toward the Great Jaggi, of which cost her dearly; the Great Jaggi quickly reacted by turning a full one hundread and eighty degrees, flailing it's broad tail into the right side of Jennifer's rib-cage. This was done so quickly it blended dust from the bare ground into the air dimming the scene as Jeniffer is plunged to the ground from mid-flight. I can hear her breath released with a moan of pain as she skidded on her back flinging more dust into the air."
[notice how I worded the numbers which is more proper for when writing a story unless their is a cause for the placement of number like quoteing a sign or somthing etc etc etc more boring tips lol]
Just a tip. You see this is a stroy in words not visual effects so it is helpfull to the reader to further out the details of the scene, giving them more motivation to read on and can open up more emotions etc etc etc. Plus don't worry about lenght or dragin it out because thats the fun with words, it isn't life so you can explain everything as if time were standing still .

I'm not quite sure if this is a past tense or present tense but either way it seems well blended so keep it up.
One last thing, that silly thing I was talking about is when you said Jeniffer had a Hunter's Dagger. But then said "she unsheather her 'sword'. Just more details

Looking forward to more!

[Piercer of the Heavens]

Thanks for the comment and I will try to implement what you said in my future ones. My writing isn't that good, but I wil try to mrpove on it, especially with the details. Those always seem to get past me. To be honest I really like reading you imrpovement more than what i wrote, so i see what you mean.

As for the reason of the whole Hunter's Dagger and unsheated her sword. "Hunter's Dagger" is the name of the weapon, but it falls into the classification of Shield and Sword in the monster hunter games.