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I agree with KC. The [i]first[/i] boss battle in an RP/game is supposed to be the easiest, not the um... second (I think that's the number that Acedia's at, considering the giant spider from before is actually counted as a boss)

Maybe if Acedia suddenly manages to freeze time [i]just[/i] before a pile of attacks surge towards him and kill him :3

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[quote name='Flandre Scarlet' timestamp='1337829405' post='5945878']
Or the "Acedia" we're fighting could be a fake, because it's just like a Slothie to send someone to do their own dirty work... even if it is a fake of their own self
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That...actually makes sense.

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[quote name='Flandre Scarlet' timestamp='1337829405' post='5945878']
Or the "Acedia" we're fighting could be a fake, because it's just like a Slothie to send someone to do their own dirty work... even if it is a fake of their own self
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I feel like I'm making this RP too predictable. -_-


[quote name='Lord of Chaos' timestamp='1337901198' post='5946322']
Would like to reserve a student if possible. Im working on the app right now having some trouble (haven't done this in a few years forgive me plz)
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As long as you can have it before Acedia is defeated I can fit your character into the story.

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[b][u]Personal Information[/u][/b]
[b]Character Name: Balenille[/b]
[b]Gender:[/b] Male
[b]Age:[/b] 15
[b]Personality:[/b] Balenille has a very active personality, always able to get along with most people. Some may find him annoying, though he cares little of what others think of him. Due to a prefference of peace, he believes more in talking his way out of conflicts, though he will fight if he must. Though he has an active personality, he is times calm, though he has a hyper side. Dyslexia also causes him to sometimes get very frustrated when he speaks, as sometimes people look at him as if he is insane, unable to make sense of what he has just said.
[b]Biography:[/b] Balenille was born on a small island the off coast of California, though most don't know about this island. His father walked out on his mother when he was only two weeks old, so he knows and cares for very little of his father. Balenille has been to the school his entire school life, though too young to remember when he moved there. Diagnosed with Dyslexia at a young age, he has come to understand just how much it impacts his life. Being the only child in his entire family, he can sometimes get access to things that others his age wouldn't be able to get. When he was twelve, he took a trip to visit his grandparents. His mother decided that she would have him fly there. He hasn't gotten on a plane since, after having a near death experience when the plane took a crash landing. Lately, he has been having dreams of being able to control the element of lightning, training with it, able to conjure it straight from his body.
[b]Fears: Flying[/b]
[b]Appearance:[/b] Balenille is an even six foot in height. Like his mother, he has hazel eyes with flecks of violet around the pupils. He keeps his dark brown hair short, due to a horrible cow lick if he doesn't. He has the build of a football player, with broad shoulders and large calf and forearm muscles. His chest is broad. His face is round, with many scars from acne. Generally seen with pants, very rarely wearing shorts as his legs are very hairy. With long legs and arms, he has a farther reach with things then most. Most of his shirts are of a darker color, generally to match his tanned skin. Though, underneath his clothes, hes very pale.
[b][u]Combat Information[/u][/b]
[b]Appearance:[/b] When in Combat, he wheres leather armor. A scabbard at his side and a bow a crossed his back. A cape flowing with lightning running along the edges.
[b]Weapon: [/b]A simple double edged sword with a sapphire on the butt of the hilt and in the direct middle where the blade and hilt meet. A long bow with a spider silk threaded string. Though this bow has small runes in the side enchanting it.
[b]Abilities/Technique(s):[/b] If it involves lightning, he can generally do it, with in reason of course.
[b][u]Other Information[/u][/b] Not much to tell here.

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Not my place to say, but I feel you need to cast more detail onto the power/ability section, and explain where the weapons come from, the relevance, how he retrieves them in battle, etc. Or else you've just got a random and unnecessary sword and a bow with no where to put them or get them from. And just having them for the sake of it approaches Gary Stu-ism.
Also, explain what you mean by 'enchanting it', when you were talking about the Bow.
And why Spider Silk thread for the bow string? It'd be useless.

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[quote name='Balenille' timestamp='1337926118' post='5946565']
[b][u]Personal Information[/u][/b]
[b]Character Name: Balenille[/b]
[b]Gender:[/b] Male
[b]Age:[/b] 15
[b]Personality:[/b] Balenille has a very active personality, always able to get along with most people. Some may find him annoying, though he cares little of what others think of him. Due to a prefference of peace, he believes more in talking his way out of conflicts, though he will fight if he must. Though he has an active personality, he is times calm, though he has a hyper side. Dyslexia also causes him to sometimes get very frustrated when he speaks, as sometimes people look at him as if he is insane, unable to make sense of what he has just said.
[b]Biography:[/b] Balenille was born on a small island the off coast of California, though most don't know about this island. His father walked out on his mother when he was only two weeks old, so he knows and cares for very little of his father. Balenille has been to the school his entire school life, though too young to remember when he moved there. Diagnosed with Dyslexia at a young age, he has come to understand just how much it impacts his life. Being the only child in his entire family, he can sometimes get access to things that others his age wouldn't be able to get. When he was twelve, he took a trip to visit his grandparents. His mother decided that she would have him fly there. He hasn't gotten on a plane since, after having a near death experience when the plane took a crash landing. Lately, he has been having dreams of being able to control the element of lightning, training with it, able to conjure it straight from his body.
[b]Fears: Flying[/b]
[b]Appearance:[/b] Balenille is an even six foot in height. Like his mother, he has hazel eyes with flecks of violet around the pupils. He keeps his dark brown hair short, due to a horrible cow lick if he doesn't. He has the build of a football player, with broad shoulders and large calf and forearm muscles. His chest is broad. His face is round, with many scars from acne. Generally seen with pants, very rarely wearing shorts as his legs are very hairy. With long legs and arms, he has a farther reach with things then most. Most of his shirts are of a darker color, generally to match his tanned skin. Though, underneath his clothes, hes very pale.
[b][u]Combat Information[/u][/b]
[b]Appearance:[/b] When in Combat, he wheres leather armor. A scabbard at his side and a bow a crossed his back. A cape flowing with lightning running along the edges.
[b]Weapon: [/b]A simple double edged sword with a sapphire on the butt of the hilt and in the direct middle where the blade and hilt meet. A long bow with a spider silk threaded string. Though this bow has small runes in the side enchanting it.
[b]Abilities/Technique(s):[/b] If it involves lightning, he can generally do it, with in reason of course.
[b][u]Other Information[/u][/b] Not much to tell here.
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All is okay except for what Nameless pointed out. I'm pretty sure you materialize the weapons once you transform. Since it is based of your dreams the spider silk tread is fine, pushing it but fine. You do need to explain the enchanting part, what does the enchanting do to it, etc. Your power is kind of vague. Specifiy a little more and it will be fine.

So for now not accepted.

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1) Flandre, you're seriously OPing and Mary-sueing Nancy. It's going over the top. Try to tone it down a little, take a breather, and let someone else do the work for once. Stop all out attacking, or I swear I will go Zombie/Skeleton Ape-sh*t on you!

2) My guy now apparently has 4th wall awareness for this last post. XD

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