Yu-gi-oh card gramer chack

[pfaccioxx]

I think this effect nead's some grammar fixing, can someone help plz?

"If this card would be destroyed wile in DEF mode you may reduce it's level by 1 and it's DEF by 400 to negate this card's destruction. You can not activate this effect if this card is Level is 1 or lower. If this card is attacked by your opponent, he/she takes 50 LP damage times this card's level."

[Doc.]

[quote name='pfaccioxx' timestamp='1330378155' post='5844580']
I was'nt asking for a crticqe on it's efict, just a fix on it's grammar
anyways I got what I neaded, so thanks anyways
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Want grammar correction?
GO TO SCHOOL YOU TWAT.

[Ieyasu Tokugawa]

Learning proper English grammar could help.

Yugioh uses can, not may.

Don't say negate the card's destruction, just say you can do the stuff "instead"

It's also "inflict damage equal to this monsters level x50 to your opponent."

And I might add that your last effect is crap because 50 burn is stupid low. If it were any good Sparks would be god-tier.

[pfaccioxx]

[quote name='Ieyasu Tokugawa' timestamp='1330323021' post='5843811']
Learning proper English grammar could help.

Yugioh uses can, not may.

Don't say negate the card's destruction, just say you can do the stuff "instead"

It's also "inflict damage equal to this monsters level x50 to your opponent."

And I might add that your last effect is crap because 50 burn is stupid low. If it were any good Sparks would be god-tier.
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I was'nt asking for a crticqe on it's efict, just a fix on it's grammar
anyways I got what I neaded, so thanks anyways