Cin Posted February 4, 2012 Report Share Posted February 4, 2012 NW said I should probably get some CnC on this. Remember I'm very rusty and this was just a mini refresher. [img]http://img839.imageshack.us/img839/1284/bluesig.png[/img] CnC away guys. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Rai Posted February 4, 2012 Report Share Posted February 4, 2012 I think it's decent, but my main issues are basically that it's a little eclectic. Those random black lines on the left look really dark when compared to the lighter grey lines there. Also the render seems awfully low quality. I like it though because grayscale isn't really attempted within tags, and I haven't seen this style for ages. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Twenty-five Zero Oh-oh Posted February 6, 2012 Report Share Posted February 6, 2012 That render/focal is generally really hard to work with unless you go like vector style. Also might help to shrink the focal a bit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Night Posted February 8, 2012 Report Share Posted February 8, 2012 This is one of those pieces that regardless of the flaws, you can't help but observe it intently and ponder what your inspiration was. Now obviously one could simply disregard this as a rusty piece that lacks proper organization and honestly has far too many unnecessary accessories, and critique it in that sense with no harm done. However, a different approach could be to uncover the elements that give this piece and your skill as an artist potential to improve in that sense. For example it's important to note the style of the piece, I have never really seen a well-produced vector tag, this is due to their complexity and how easily they can be non-appealing if not done right, this and add a manga styled render to the mix and a B/W BG and you get a piece that some would think to be extremely hard to pull off. Now it's apparent you didn't pull it off too well, but for a rusty tag, added onto all of the aspects that were not working in your favor, it's good to see you trying to be original and attempt a style that isn't seen much. The depth in the piece is something I'd also like to address. At first glance the flow/depth might seem a bit overwhelming as opposed to a simple atmosphere that doesn't try to force the viewer to observe to intently, but when observed the piece actually has a unique approach on atmo/depth. The surreal feeling that comes to the viewer when observing the piece is depth/atmo/flow, is it not? Even if it isn't the standard depth seen in tags, it can be classified as such, and due to that I feel it is great. I think a smudge + blur, if carefully and accurately worked into the tag, would be amazing. You still obviously have much to improve on though, many of the basics are non-apparent in the piece. Lighting, clearly is not represented in the piece, and because of this the atmosphere takes a major loss. The piece is highly unorganized as well, and because of this it is apparent that you'll need to work on cleaning your layers and basically just formulate your concept better onto the canvas. Overall, I believe you have potential to be a great artist, honestly. Would love to see you more involved with the community. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yondaime Posted February 11, 2012 Report Share Posted February 11, 2012 There are a few things I find quite interesting, and not so good in this. First off I think you should have either gone all color or just black and white. I say this because just having the eye blue is quite annoying to me. Secondly, the whole left side to me is not as good as it could or should be. The boxes and lines, along with the text are random. The right side has nice flow but I also believe this could be better. I don't see lighting whatsoever. I feel you could have shaded the render some more on the right side to make it look less flat. But as Twenty Five said it is a hard render to work with. However with that said, I do like that you tried to incorperate the clipping masked wireframes. It reminds me of the old days when Legend Zero brought that to the forum. I also like the background behind the clipping masks. It's very unique. To be completely honest this piece is a hard piece you're trying to pull off so don't feel bad because of all my negativity towords this piece. I only wish to help. I am glad that you at least tried. That's what really counts, and I know this is just you getting back into things, but I really believe you will be better than you were before if you keep on trying. I wish the best of luck to you. Just keep pushing forword and don't give up! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cin Posted February 11, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 11, 2012 Thank you for the positive comments and the constructive criticism, this was just a learning piece for elements rather than a proper hole piece. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted February 14, 2012 Report Share Posted February 14, 2012 'a proper hole piece' Sorry, just had to point that out. Anyway, as the others said it's nice, and these kinds aren't the easiest things to make well. The flow is a little awkward and it is a little bit of a montage of various things, but unlike Yondaime I quite like the touch with the blue eyes, and seeing as it's a manga render I think the more grainy image with the fleck of colour does stand out quite nicely with the crisper background. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
'Crack Posted February 14, 2012 Report Share Posted February 14, 2012 [quote name='Yin' timestamp='1328389877' post='5799283'] NW said I should probably get some CnC on this. Remember I'm very rusty and this was just a mini refresher. [img]http://img839.imageshack.us/img839/1284/bluesig.png[/img] CnC away guys. [/quote] In my opinion, the size of the render is too large. You should have left some space out so we could actually see your brushwork, if there was any. I find myself quite liking the position of the text and the effects around it. The render is very HQ. Did you do it, perchance? I like the pixelation effect in the top-left corner. All in all, an extremely good piece for one who is returning to it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cin Posted February 14, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 14, 2012 I took the render from a scan from the Pokemon manga, which was a mistake on my part because of the quality. I rendered, I do all my own renders. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Funky6399 Posted February 23, 2012 Report Share Posted February 23, 2012 the only thing that i dont like about it is its black and white make it color and you have me pleased i like the render its pretty cool Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cin Posted February 24, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 24, 2012 funky that is not useful CnC, I advice you think properly about CnC before posting in the section. I will not make this colour, because that is not the concept of the signature which is Black and White Manga style. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Funky6399 Posted February 25, 2012 Report Share Posted February 25, 2012 k im very sorry i wasnt cncing i was giving a compliment Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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