Haou Devil 12 Posted January 2, 2012 Report Share Posted January 2, 2012 <p>It's been a while since I was on the forum. During the time I was out, I've been watching "One Piece". Seeing it again after all those years, it gave me the idea to write this. Here's Chapter One.<br /> <br /> [spoiler=Ch.1 The Journey Begins! Enter Draco D. Nero!]It has been 10 years since the time of the captain of the Straw Hat Pirates, Monkey D. Luffy set out with his crew to find the treasure left by the King of the Pirates, Gol D. Roger, known by the World Government as "Gold Roger". Right now the whereabouts of the Straw Hat Pirates are unknown. Now we tell the story about a man from the seas of West Blue in the town Anchor Bay.<br /> <br /> "(yawns)" yawns a person. "That was a good nap."<br /> <br /> The dark-skinned person with black hair jumped out of his bed and walked over to open his window. The sun shined through the glass and he opened both window panels and breathed in the fresh air. He put on black pants, gray shoes, and a gray-hood jacket and ran outside his house. He ran through his neighborhood, until a voice called out to him.<br /> <br /> "Good Morning, Nero." said a woman.<br /> <br /> the man stopped and was running in place, turned his head and said...<br /> <br /> "Ah, good morning, Ms. Caya." said Nero.<br /> <br /> "So, today's the day is it?" said Ms. Caya.<br /> <br /> "Yeah." said Nero. "I'm heading over to old man Carnegie's place to see if he finished my ship. I'm kind of in a rush here."<br /> <br /> "Okay, okay." said Ms. Caya. "Oh, here. I packed some things you might need for your long trip. Oh and give this bag of apples to Carnegie. Poor soul must be starving."<br /> <br /> "I know I am." said Nero. "Thanks. I'll be sure to write."<br /> <br /> Nero grabbed the bags and took off down the road.<br /> <br /> <em>"My name is Draco D. Nero."</em> narrated Nero.<em>"I'm 17 years old. And my journey as a pirate begins. I'm gonna be King of the Pirates!"</em><br /> <br /> Meanwhile, way off the coast of West Blue, a pirate ship with a red-bearded jolly roger flag and sails is being bombarded by the Marines.<br /> <br /> "Fire!" yelled a Marine soldier.<br /> <br /> Cannons from Marine ships were fired and the cannonballs hit the water.<br /> <br /> "Captain, our escape route is ready." said a pirate. "Should we use it now?"<br /> <br /> "Do it!" said the Captain.<br /> <br /> Meanwhile from a Marine base on a distant island...<br /> <br /> "Don't let that ship out of your sight!" said a Marine soldier through a Snail phone. "He's the notorious pirate, Captain Redbeard, with a bounty of 10,000,000 Beli. We have to take back what he stole from those islands at all costs. Report back with any changes in the situation. That is all." said the Marine as he hung up the Snail Phone. "They have no idea how serious this is. That man... has found the four Devil Fruits of the Four Divine Beasts."<br /> <br /> Meanwhile where the battleships are...<br /> <br /> "You heard him." said a Marine commander. "Don't let that ship out of your sight!"<br /> <br /> "Commander!" said a Marine.<br /> <br /> "What is it?!" said the Commander.<br /> <br /> "There's a strange fog coming in view of the ship." said the Marine.<br /> <br /> A strange, thick red fog appeared in front of the battleships.<br /> <br /> "What is this fog?" said the Commander.<br /> <br /> "Commander, we're losing sight of the pirate ship!" said a Marine.<br /> <br /> "What?!" yelled the Commander. "All main cannons aim forward! Now FI... (coughs roughly). Wha... (coughs) What is that smell?! It reeks of... blood?!"<br /> <br /> "This is bad, Commander!" yelled a Marine.<br /> <br /> "What is it?!" yelled the Commander.<br /> <br /> "The pirate ship has..." said the Marine. "Disappeared!"<br /> <br /> "WHAT?!" yelled the Commander in anger.<br /> <br /> On the other side of the red fog, the pirate ship was sailing away from it. The pirate captain laughed saying...<br /> <br /> "Ha, ha, ha, ha!" laughed Redbeard. "Bloodmist escape complete. It's easy when you have blocks of dry ice and a tub of dead animal blood."<br /> <br /> "What's our next destination, Captain Redbeard?" said a pirate.<br /> <br /> Redbeard had a mean stern look on his face.<br /> <br /> "C... Captain?" said a pirate.<br /> <br /> "Tell me." said Redbeard. "What sea are we headed into?"<br /> <br /> "Uh... West Blue, sir." said a pirate.<br /> <br /> Redbeard smiled.<br /> <br /> "Is that right?" said Redbeard. "In that case, full speed ahead. There's a certain old geezer of a shipwright that I have unfinished business with. He lives in a town in this sea. Men, set a course for Anchor Bay."<br /> <br /> "Yes, sir!" said the pirates.<br /> <br /> "You better be prepared." said Redbeard. "I'm coming for you, Carnegie!"<br /> <br /> Meanwhile in the forests of Anchor Bay, Nero is running like crazy to the other side of the forest. While running, he a man with long black hair with white sideburns, brown eyes, wearing a black shirt, a long, red coat, white pants, brown boots, holding a sword on both thighs walking the opposite way he was going. Nero yelled...<br /> <br /> "Hey!" yelled Nero. "Are you lost or something?"<br /> <br /> The guy turned his head and walked over to Nero.<br /> <br /> "No." said the guy. "Why do you ask?"<br /> <br /> "It's just that I've never seen people like you here before." said Nero.<br /> <br /> "Well don't get used to it, kid." said the guy, "This is the last you'll see of me before I'm finished here."<br /> <br /> "What do you mean?" said Nero.<br /> <br /> "I heard there was a pirate coming to this part of West Blue." said the guy. "I'm going to catch this guy and take back what should've been mine. (takes out swords) I'll cut him to ribbons if I have to! That's why I came to this place, because it's closer to where he was last seen. I don't need any distractions. Especially from you."<br /> <br /> "Okay, I'll take your word for it." yelled Nero.<br /> <br /> The guy calmed down a bit and Nero realized what he was supposed to be doing.<br /> <br /> "Oh, right." said Nero. "I forgot about the bags Ms. Caya gave me."<br /> <br /> Nero grabbed the bags..<br /> <br /> "Later." said Nero as he ran.<br /> <br /> The guy with the swords smiled, then he turned and walked away.<br /> <br /> "Huh." said the guy. "Smart kid."<br /> <br /> After a few minutes, Nero arrived at small stone house built next to the ocean and a shipping yard built right behind the house. Nero ran right behind the house to the shipping yard and yelled...<br /> <br /> "Hey! Old man Carnegie!" yelled Nero. "I'm here for my ship!"<br /> <br /> Then an old man with a long gray beard and gray hair that stands straight up, wearing goggles came out from one of the garages.<br /> <br /> "Oh, Nero." said Carnegie. "I wasn't expecting you so soon."<br /> <br /> "So Carnegie, is my ship finished?" asked Nero.<br /> <br /> "Almost." said Carnegie. "I still need to put in the masts and sails. At the rate I'm going, it shouldn't take more than 3 hours. 4 hours tops."<br /> <br /> "4 hours?!" said Nero. "Aw, man. What am I gonna do for 4 hours? Oh yeah. Ms. Caya wanted me to give you these apples."<br /> <br /> Carnegie took the bag of apples from Nero.<br /> <br /> "Thank you." said Carnegie. "If you can't think of anything to do, why don't you help me with the ship? It wouldn't hurt to do a little hard labor."<br /> <br /> "As much as I love to, I'm exhausted from running all the way over here and..." said Nero.<br /> <br /> Before Nero could finish, he looked out at sea and saw a red cloud coming in.<br /> <br /> "Hey! Carnegie!" called Nero.<br /> <br /> "What is it?" said Carnegie.<br /> <br /> "Look out there." said Nero.<br /> <br /> "Hmm?" said Carnegie.<br /> <br /> Carnegie looked at the red cloud, then his eyes widened and he thought...<br /> <br /> ("No." thought Carnegie. "It can't be. But in any case...") "Nero." said Carnegie.<br /> <br /> "Huh?" said Nero.<br /> <br /> "Go back to the bay and tell everyone to get inside." said Carnegie. "Hurry! There isn't much time."<br /> <br /> "Ah... right!" said Nero.<br /> <br /> Nero ran as fast as he could through the forest. Meanwhile at the bay, the townspeople saw the red cloud getting closer. They smelled the stench of blood from the cloud and out of the cloud they saw a giant red pirate ship come into the harbor.<br /> <br /> "W... What's going on?" said a person.<br /> <br /> "Mommy!" cried a child.<br /> <br /> "Get behind me." said the child's mother.<br /> <br /> A bridge came down the side of the ship and a bunch of pirates were walking off the ship, including a man wearing a mahogany captain's coat and hat, black shirt, brown pants, black boots, with brown eyes, and red hair and goatee. He walked to the front and laughed.<br /> <br /> "Heh, heh, heh, heh." chuckled Redbeard. "Ha, ha, ha, ha, ha, ha! Hello Anchor Bay! Meet the new law of this town, the Redbeard Pirates and their strong Captain Redbeard! Ha, ha, ha, ha, ha, ha, ha, ha!"<br /> <br /> Everyone was scared as they saw him and his crew.<br /> <br /> "Now then..." said Redbeard. "The reason I came here today is because I'm on the hunt for someone who wronged me in the past and I've heard he's been living somewhere around here. So tell me. Where is the shipwright by the name of Carnegie?!"<br /> <br /> Everyone's eyes widened when they heard his name. Ms. Caya looked more worried than anyone.<br /> <br /> "Ah, so you do know him." said Redbeard. "Well, I can tell by your faces that you're not gonna tell me where he is. That's okay."<br /> <br /> Everyone had relieved expressions on their faces.<br /> <br /> "I guess I'll just have to tear apart every building here just to make you talk." said Redbeard with a sadistic smile.<br /> <br /> Everyone looked terrified again. The pirates ran into every building in the neighborhood and tore apart every piece of furniture there.<br /> <br /> "Destroy everything!" yelled Redbeard. "Crush every house until you find that old geezer!"<br /> <br /> Ms. Caya looked at him hatefully.<br /> <br /> "You're a monster!" said Ms. Caya.<br /> <br /> Redbeard looked at her.<br /> <br /> "So what?!" said Redbeard. "As a pirate, it's my duty to pilfer from the rich and kill the weak! That's one of the laws of the sea! I can take everything."<br /> <br /> Then a voice called out.<br /> <br /> "The only thing you'll be taking is a knife through your chest!" yelled the voice.<br /> <br /> "Huh?" said Redbeard as he looked to his left.<br /> <br /> The man with the red coat and his two swords walked out into the chaos. Redbeard just smiled and said...<br /> <br /> "Well, well." said Redbeard. "If it isn't the old bounty hunter. Long time, no see, Blade, the "Sword Beast". Why are you here?"<br /> <br /> "Isn't it obvious?" said Blade. "I came to slice open that head of yours, Redbeard!"<br /> <br /> <strong>TO BE CONTINUED</strong><br /> <br /> [spoiler=Next time - Battle of tainted blood! "Sword Beast" Blade vs. Captain Redbeard] <em>"What was that red cloud I saw?"</em> narrated Nero. <em>"And why was the old man acting strange? Forget about that now. I got to hurry to warn Ms. Caya and everyone. Next time, "Battle of tainted blood! "Sword Beast" Blade vs. Captain Redbeard". <strong>I'm gonna be the next Pirate King!</strong></em> [/spoiler] [/spoiler]<br /> [spoiler=Ch.2 Battle of tainted blood! "Sword Beast" Blade vs. Captain Redbeard]Redbeard and Blade are seen facing off with each other at the bay of the town. They stood silent for a moment until Redbeard said...<br /> <br /> "You? Kill me?" said Redbeard. "Ha, ha, ha, ha, ha! You must be the biggest dunce I've ever met! Tell me, Blade. How many times have we met in battle? And then tell me how you fail every time?! Ha, ha, ha, ha, ha, ha!"<br /> <br /> Blade looked furious. He unsheathed both of his swords and rushed at him screaming...<br /> <br /> "Shut up, you bastard!" yelled Blade.<br /> <br /> Redbeard unsheathed his sword, but turned the blade in front of him.<br /> <br /> "Hah!" laughed Blade. "What, you plan on killing yourself? Sorry, but I...<br /> <br /> "(gunshot)"<br /> <br /> "(grunts with pain)" grunted Blade.<br /> <br /> A bullet hit Blade's stomach and he started to bleed rapidly.<br /> <br /> "What the...?!" grunted Blade. "I didn't see you pull out a... (grunts with pain)... gun!"<br /> <br /> "Heh, heh, heh." laughed Redbeard. "Take a closer look at my sword, you fool."<br /> <br /> The sword of Redbeard was designed to work as a short-range and long-range weapon with a blade on top and a pistol for a sheathe on the bottom.<br /> <br /> "Why, you crafty...!" grunted Blade.<br /> <br /> "Ha, ha, ha, ha, ha!" laughed Redbeard. "Well, enough fooling around."<br /> <br /> Redbeard turned to the sword side of his weapon.<br /> <br /> "Time to finish this!" yelled Redbeard. "Now you learn why they call me "Bloodbath" Redbeard! Die, "Sword Beast"."<br /> <br /> As Redbeard's sword was coming close to cutting Blade, Blade disappeared and reappeared behind Redbeard.<br /> <br /> "What the..." said Redbeard.<br /> <br /> "Got you!" said Blade.<br /> <br /> Blade swung his sword at Redbeard, but Redbeard acted quickly and turned and blocked Blade's attack with his sword.<br /> <br /> "I still have my second sword." said Blade. "Take this!"<br /> <br /> Blade lunged his second sword at Redbeard, but Redbeard parried that one with a hidden sword in his coat that looks like the design of his first gunblade.<br /> <br /> "What?!" said Blade.<br /> <br /> "You didn't think I only had one Gunblade, did you?" said Redbeard.<br /> <br /> Redbeard jumped away from Blade and switched to the gun half of both his weapons and started shooting at Blade. Blade hit most of the bullets with his swords, but some of them cut through his arms and waist. His wounds were bleeding fast and the onslaught of bullets backed Blade into a corner near the edge of the harbor. Redbeard walked down the path and stopped 5 feet away from Blade, aiming his Gunblade at him.<br /> <br /> "Where are you gonna go now, scum?" said Redbeard as he smiled. "Later."<br /> <br /> Redbeard fired off a round at Blade, then Blade said...<br /> <br /> "Shave!" yelled Blade.<br /> <br /> "Huh?" said Redbeard.<br /> <br /> Blade disappeared again and Redbeard's Gunblade clashed with something but he didn't see anything. Blade then reappeared behind Redbeard again, this time farther out. Redbeard looked behind him and said...<br /> <br /> "That was..." said Redbeard.<br /> <br /> "You're mine!" yelled Blade.<br /> <br /> Blade quickly rushed to slash Redbeard. Redbeard wasn't quick enough to turn around and block one of Blade's swords. When Blade was close enough to cut Redbeard, gunshots were fired and hit both of Blade's arms and leg directly.<br /> <br /> "AAARRGH!!" yelled Blade.<br /> <br /> Redbeard took advantage of this, turned around, and slashed Blade's chest. Blood flew to the ground and was dripping off of Redbeard's Gunblade. Before dropping unconcious, Blade weakly said in pain...<br /> <br /> "D... Da... Damn it!" said Blade.<br /> <br /> Blade dropped to the ground face first. Redbeard smiled as he put away his Gunblades.<br /> <br /> "Nice work, you guys!" said Redbeard.<br /> <br /> Four pirates of Redbeard's crew walked up to him.<br /> <br /> "He never stood a chance, Boss." said a pirate.<br /> <br /> "Nothing but a pushover." said another pirate.<br /> <br /> ""Falcon Eye" Hector Vale, "Iron gut" Barnaby, "Mad dog" Garver, and "Whirlwind" George." said Redbeard. "Your tenacity is what made me choose your four as my crews leading generals. I promise you'll each select one of the Devil Fruits we gathered along our journey once I obtain the power I sought for my whole life! But, in order find it, we need to find that old man! Tell the crew to search the east part of the island. I'll check the west."<br /> <br /> "What do we do about this one, Captain?" asked Barnaby.<br /> <br /> "I've seen the bounty he has on his head." said Redbeard. "6,000,000 Beli. If we turn him over to the Marines, we'll be eating and drinking good for months. Plus, it'll bring my bounty up even higher! Throw him in the storage room. Now fan out!"<br /> <br /> "Yes, sir!" said the pirates.<br /> <br /> Garver picked up Blade, walked on the ship and threw him in the giant square hole in the middle of the deck. Blade landed on a pile of rope, still bleeding. Meanwhile where Nero is...<br /> <br /> "(panting)" said Nero.<br /> <br /> Nero sees the town up ahead.<br /> <br /> "Ah!" said Nero. "Finally."<br /> <br /> Nero stopped at the front of the harbor, exhausted, and saw the town almost destroyed.<br /> <br /> "What happened here?" said Nero. "I got to find Ms. Caya and the others like the old man said."<br /> <br /> Ms. Caya popped out from her hiding place and saw Nero.<br /> <br /> "Nero." said Ms. Caya.<br /> <br /> "Ms. Caya, what happened?" said Nero.<br /> <br /> "This pirate, Redbeard and his crew are destroying every building here and they're not stopping until we tell them where Carnegie is."<br /> <br /> "They know Carnegie?" asked Nero.<br /> <br /> "Yes." said Ms. Caya. "Also, I overheard them talking about Devil Fruits stored on their ship."<br /> <br /> "Their ship?" said Nero.<br /> <br /> Nero then looked behind him and saw Redbeard's pirate ship.<br /> <br /> "If they're trying to take something from us, let's take a few things from them." said Nero.<br /> <br /> "What?" said Ms. Caya.<br /> <br /> "It makes sense to me since I'm setting off to become a pirate." said Nero. "What better way to do it than steal from my competition. Also, if they eat those fruits, this town is as good as done. I won't let that happen to my hometown."<br /> <br /> "Nero." said Ms. Caya. "But what about Carnegie?"<br /> <br /> "The old man can take care of himself." said Nero. "Believe me. He's not going down without a fight. Now, come with me to the ship."<br /> <br /> "Right." said Ms. Caya.<br /> <br /> Nero and Ms. Caya ran aboard the ship. Just then, they heard a groaning sound.<br /> <br /> "(groans)" said a voice.<br /> <br /> "What was that?" said Nero.<br /> <br /> Ms. Caya saw the square hole in the Deck, looked in it and saw Blade laying down there in his own blood. She watched in horror and covered her mouth so no one can hear her scream. Nero ran over and saw Blade hurt.<br /> <br /> "Hey, you're..." said Nero.<br /> <br /> "(hacking cough)" coughed Blade. "Help me."<br /> <br /> "Ms. Caya." said Nero. "Go down and help him. I'll see if they have a first-aid kit and bring it to you."<br /> <br /> "Okay." said Ms. Caya. "Hurry back."<br /> <br /> Nero ran in the ship, then stumbled upon the kitchen and found four small treasure chests on the table in front of him.<br /> <br /> "Hmm." said Nero curiously. "What's in these boxes?"<br /> <br /> Nero opened all four chests and found strange-looking fruits inside all of them. One was a giant strawberry with small, bright yellow dots on it, and covered with swirls around it. One was a melon that looked like a dark, tortoise shell and had swirls covered around it also. One was a green pineapple with blue spots with a red outline on each point of the pineapple and has swirls covered around it also. Finally, there is one giant white pear that also has swirls covered around it, but also has black stripes that covers around it.<br /> <br /> "These are..." said Nero. "(smiles)"<br /> <br /> Meanwhile, Redbeard and his generals came walking back into town looking furious.<br /> <br /> "How is it that we can't even find one old geezer?!!" yelled Redbeard in anger.<br /> <br /> Carnegie then walked up behind him.<br /> <br /> "Perhaps you're not looking right in front of you, Redbeard." said Carnegie.<br /> <br /> "Huh?" said Redbeard as he turned around. "Heh, heh, heh. So you finally show your cowardly face! Long time, no see, Carnegie, the shipwright. No. I should say Navy Vice Admiral Granger Carnegie!"<br /> <br /> "You know I retired from the Navy a long time ago." said Carnegie.<br /> <br /> "And yet you're still making and fixing ships for Marine soldiers passing by." said Redbeard. "That's right, I know. But forget about that for a minute. Now then, where is it, old man?"<br /> <br /> "Where is what?" said Carnegie.<br /> <br /> "Don't play games with me, Carnegie!" said Redbeard. "Where is the Devil Fruit that you took after you left the Navy?!"<br /> <br /> Carnegie eyes widened then he flashbacked to when he had the Devil Fruit.<br /> <br /> Flashback:<br /> <br /> <em>"Huh?"</em> said a boy. <em>"Hey, here's something to eat."</em><br /> <br /> The boy grabbed a white, vanilla-colored melon with swirls covered around it. Carnegie then walked in and saw the boy eat the fruit, until he realized what the boy ate. Carnegie yelled...<br /> <br /> <em>"No! Don't eat that!"</em> yelled Carnegie.<br /> <br /> The boy had already eaten the entire melon.<br /> <br /> <em>"Bleh!"</em> said the boy. <em>"That's not how a melon should taste. Oh, hey Carnegie. Is something wrong?"</em><br /> <br /> Carnegie had a shocked expression on his face after the boy ate the fruit.<br /> <br /> Flashback ended.<br /> <br /> Carnegie then came back to his senses and told Redbeard...<br /> <br /> "I... I threw it in the ocean." said Carnegie.<br /> <br /> "What?!" yelled Redbeard.<br /> <br /> "It's probably way down in the depths of the sea." said Carnegie.<br /> <br /> A woman was watching from an alley in town.<br /> <br /> ("I've got to get help, quick!" thought the woman. "I know. I'll get Nero. He'll know what to do.")<br /> <br /> Redbeard looked more furious than usual.<br /> <br /> "YOU OLD BASTARD!!" yelled Redbeard.<br /> <br /> Redbeard goes in to punch him, until he saw the expression on Carnegie's face. He recognized that expression and smiled.<br /> <br /> "You're lying, aren't you?" said Redbeard.<br /> <br /> Carnegie's eyes widened again.<br /> <br /> "I knew it." said Redbeard. "You used that same expression on me before when you were still in the Navy. You must have that fruit hidden somewhere on the island and if you don't tell me..."<br /> <br /> Redbeard noticed the woman. She back away from the scene, but a pirate was standing behind her and he grabbed her and brought her out to Redbeard.<br /> <br /> "I'll make it this woman's last day on Earth." said Redbeard.<br /> <br /> Redbeard pulled out one of his Gunblades and held the gun half up against woman's head. Carnegie was sweating bullets as Redbeard came close to puling the trigger. Finally, Carnegie said...<br /> <br /> "All right!" yelled Carnegie. "I'll show you where to find it."<br /> <br /> "Excellent." said Redbeard. "Let her go and grab the old man!"<br /> <br /> The pirate holding the woman threw her back and grabbed Carnegie.<br /> <br /> "Before we get to searching, I want to show you something." said Redbeard. "Bring him to the ship!"<br /> <br /> "What do you have that you think I want to see?" asked Carnegie.<br /> <br /> "Over the years I have been assembling a blood thirsty crew." said Redbeard. "But along my journey, I've heard tales of the four legendary Devil Fruits that each hold a power of one of the Divine Beast that once roamed the land. I'm here to tell you that I have acquired all four."<br /> <br /> Carnegie's eyes were opened widely when he heard him.<br /> <br /> "You what?!" yelled Carnegie.<br /> <br /> "You heard me right." said Redbeard. "I have those four legendary Devil Fruits, but I plan to give those four to my four trustworthy crewmembers you see before you. I have no interest in those fruits. No. The Devil Fruit power I want exceeds that of those four and once my generals and I eat our Devil Fruits, we'll have powers that rival the Seven Warlords of the Sea. No, even better. The Four Emperors. That power is what I was destined to have and you're the only who has the fruit, so I might as well show you the fruit I have before<br /> getting mine."<br /> <br /> Carnegie looked angry.<br /> <br /> "You snake!" said Carnegie.<br /> <br /> "Ha, ha, ha, ha, ha, ha!" laughed Redbeard. "Say what you will, Carnegie. That's not gonna help your situation."<br /> <br /> As they board the ship, they heard a voice coming from their ship.<br /> <br /> "How's he doing?" said Nero.<br /> <br /> "He's gonna be fine." said Ms. Caya. "Thank goodness you found the first-aid kit in time."<br /> <br /> "Alright." said Nero. "You stay here while I go find..."<br /> <br /> "Huh?" said Redbeard.<br /> <br /> "Huh?" said Nero.<br /> <br /> Redbeard saw Nero and he looked puzzled for a moment until he asked...<br /> <br /> "What do you think you're doing here, kid?!" asked Redbeard.<br /> <br /> "Well, I... uh ... Ah?!" said Nero.<br /> <br /> Nero saw Carnegie being held hostage by Redbeard.<br /> <br /> "Old man!" said Nero. "What are you doing here?"<br /> <br /> "Nero, run away!" yelled Carnegie. "Hurry!"<br /> <br /> "But..." said Nero.<br /> <br /> "(groaning)" said a voice.<br /> <br /> Nero heard something coming from the giant hole in the Deck behind him. He saw Blade standing behind him with his stomach wrapped in bandages.<br /> <br /> "You!" said Nero.<br /> <br /> "Don't think you can take him alone." said Blade. "My name's Blade and Redbeard is my kill! Got that?! (grunts with pain)"<br /> <br /> Blade grabbed his stomach and sat down. Redbeard smiled.<br /> <br /> "Ha, ha, ha, ha, ha!" laughed Redbeard. "Still weak in the knees aren't you, "Sword Beast"?"<br /> <br /> "Anyways, what are gonna do with Carnegie?" asked Nero.<br /> <br /> "Heh." said Redbeard. "You come on to my ship, go through my belongings, and you're asking the questions? You've got guts kid. I'll give you that much, but guts isn't gonna matter where you're going."<br /> <br /> Redbeard pulled out his Gunblade and aimed the gun half at Nero.<br /> <br /> "Nero!" yelled Carnegie.<br /> <br /> "Die." said Redbeard.<br /> <br /> Redbeard shot a bullet and it hit Nero. Redbeard was smiling with joy, until...<br /> <br /> "Sorry, that's not gonna work." said Nero looking like he was never shot.<br /> <br /> "What?!" said Redbeard. "But I shot you in the heart, point blan... Huh?!"<br /> <br /> Redbeard stopped himself after he saw Nero's chest. The bullet was caught in his chest and white liquid started sliding down along with the bullet and into Nero's hand. Redbeard looked shocked to see what just happened.<br /> <br /> "Wha... What the...?!" said Redbeard surprised.<br /> <br /> "Captain!" said Garver. "He's a Devil Fruit User!"<br /> <br /> Carnegie then realized he forgot about what Nero did in the past and then he smiled and said...<br /> <br /> "Heh, heh, heh." said Carnegie. "Hey, Redbeard. You wanted to know where that Devil Fruit you were looking for is? Well, take a good look in front of you."<br /> <br /> "What?!" said Redbeard. "You... you mean...?"<br /> <br /> "Yeah." said Nero. "I ate the Paste Paste Fruit. I'm a glue man."<br /> <br /> Redbeard looked so furious, his whole face turned red.<br /> <br /> "Why you!!!" said Redbeard.<br /> <br /> "Captain! This is bad!" yelled Hector.<br /> <br /> "What is it?" said Redbeard.<br /> <br /> "The four Devil Fruits!" said Hector. "They're gone!"<br /> <br /> "WHAT?!!" yelled Redbeard.<br /> <br /> "Oh, those?" asked Nero. "Heh. I chucked them in the ocean."<br /> <br /> Redbeard%2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kōsuke Ueki Posted January 21, 2012 Report Share Posted January 21, 2012 I don't know why, but Nero really reminds me of Luffy A LOT. But either way, very well done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted January 21, 2012 Report Share Posted January 21, 2012 You do realize that in One Piece canon, eating more than one Devil Fruit will destroy your body. ([url="http://www.mangafox.com/manga/one_piece/v40/c385/3.html"]Bottom-right panel if you don't believe me.[/url] And yes, Blackbeard's stated to be an exception.) Thus, having your character take five is completely breaking what laws the universe has established and labels him a Stu of epic proportions. Also, having an "Ocean Ocean Fruit" makes no sense if the ocean is the natural canceler of DF powers. It'd be like Superman's suit being made out of kryptonite. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kōsuke Ueki Posted January 22, 2012 Report Share Posted January 22, 2012 Hm. Now that I realize it, I think their might a special plot point in which is the reason why Nero was able to eat all 5 Devil Fruits without committing suicide. amirite? If not, at least I tried to figure it out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Haou Devil 12 Posted January 23, 2012 Author Report Share Posted January 23, 2012 [quote name='Rinne' timestamp='1327183937' post='5774647'] You do realize that in One Piece canon, eating more than one Devil Fruit will destroy your body. ([url="http://www.mangafox.com/manga/one_piece/v40/c385/3.html"]Bottom-right panel if you don't believe me.[/url] And yes, Blackbeard's stated to be an exception.) Thus, having your character take five is completely breaking what laws the universe has established and labels him a Stu of epic proportions. Also, having an "Ocean Ocean Fruit" makes no sense if the ocean is the natural canceler of DF powers. It'd be like Superman's suit being made out of kryptonite. [/quote] I haven't watched One Piece in years, until I started watching it again a few months ago. I've been watching random arcs since then and now I'm watching the Enies Lobby Arc. I haven't gotten to the episode where they explain what happens when a person eats more than one Devil Fruit, so thanks for the manga page. Anyways, I've decided to revise the whole thing sometime this year. If you can think of any Devil Fruit power Oda hasn't used yet, reply to this page so I can figure out which fruit is suitable for Nero. Also, the fruit has to be a Logia-type fruit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted January 23, 2012 Report Share Posted January 23, 2012 Why does it [i]have[/i] to be Logia? It's the rarest of the three types by far, and it's the most constricting in terms of originality (you have to stick to an elemental type). It'd just make you more Stu-ish. Stick to Paramecia. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Haou Devil 12 Posted January 23, 2012 Author Report Share Posted January 23, 2012 [quote name='Rinne' timestamp='1327284859' post='5776674'] Why does it [i]have[/i] to be Logia? It's the rarest of the three types by far, and it's the most constricting in terms of originality (you have to stick to an elemental type). It'd just make you more Stu-ish. Stick to Paramecia. [/quote] I wanted my crew to be different from Luffy's crew. Out of all of Luffy's crewmembers, there isn't one Logia Devil Fruit user. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Northern Sage Posted January 23, 2012 Report Share Posted January 23, 2012 The format makes it a chore to read, (which, by the way, is a bad thing) the main character is such an obvious Luffy clone and Mary Sue he couldn't be less of a ripoff if his first name was "Monkey" and there are... quite an amount of grammatical and spelling mistakes. And for gods sake don't use actions and thoughts like that. It looks extremely unnatural. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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