Dwarven King Posted November 16, 2011 Report Share Posted November 16, 2011 Good! I thought he was going to make me use Bankai just to get rid of him! D:< Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ANBU Posted November 16, 2011 Report Share Posted November 16, 2011 lol yah i fled.. my guy will probably try to get shinigami in the forest though when/if he manages to sneak back in Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted November 16, 2011 Report Share Posted November 16, 2011 Is he stupid/crazy enough to attack the Captain Commander outright? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dwarven King Posted November 16, 2011 Report Share Posted November 16, 2011 Apparently...he ketp trying to make Yachiru angry even though it was obvious that it was only making her stronger. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ANBU Posted November 16, 2011 Report Share Posted November 16, 2011 until he realizes their power way outclasses his he will.. xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Techi☺ Posted November 17, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 17, 2011 Posted =P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Techi☺ Posted November 17, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 17, 2011 [quote name='ANBU' timestamp='1321509493' post='5648143'] Akuma was slightly surprised at the mechanical armor forming pover the man she believed a Shinigami, "[color=#dda0dd]ooh.. this one seems interes-[/color]" she said studying him before being cut off by the man's attack his fist colliding with her mask breaking it and sending her backwards into a nearby building which she easily extricated herself from the bandages covering her face easily seen as to anyone who could sense her her power it suddenly jumped, spiking up to a higher level then it was at before she shot more of her enhanced bala at the man with one hand and at a building with the other, the building when hit showing more destruction from the power of her bala which had increased as her mask was destroyed. "[color=#dda0dd]Foolish.. After all.. this made me stronger.. have you ever heard of hell..? of the sufferring most humans don't go through to have ended up in that place.. it makes me want to just explode..[/color]" She said accenting the word with an enhanced cero sent off towards another building "[color=#dda0dd]..and take everyone on this wotld to the sufferring I know[/color]" she then finished glaring at where the man was earlier. [/quote] What about Hiro's like... 8 inch claws?! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ANBU Posted November 17, 2011 Report Share Posted November 17, 2011 didn't you punch?.. ohwait just reread.. Dx fixed..? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elƒie Posted November 18, 2011 Report Share Posted November 18, 2011 I posted again.. Finally. Lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Techi☺ Posted November 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 18, 2011 [quote name='*~Dark~Magician~Girl~*' timestamp='1321589638' post='5650080'] I posted again.. Finally. Lol [/quote] Finally? I thought you were one of the most posting in this Rp O_O ... lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dwarven King Posted November 18, 2011 Report Share Posted November 18, 2011 [quote name='Techi☺' timestamp='1321592283' post='5650174'] Finally? I thought you were one of the most posting in this Rp O_O ... lol [/quote] No, that would be me and ANBU. DMG has made like...two posts. Also, Ket, control Yachiru if you wish. Doing last minute preparations for YCS, then I'm gone until Sunday night/Monday. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elƒie Posted November 18, 2011 Report Share Posted November 18, 2011 Yep.. Only two. Lol. Ai's a slow starter when she wakes up. Ya know.. Most depressed people are. Lol. But now that I have her up and about, I'll be posting more often. Lol. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Damiano Tosē Posted November 19, 2011 Report Share Posted November 19, 2011 I'll make a reservation for shinigami captain. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Techi☺ Posted November 21, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 21, 2011 Wow, busy weekend and I'm back. I'll post tomorrow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted November 21, 2011 Report Share Posted November 21, 2011 Hey techi, you might want to make an accepted apps spoiler on the first page. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elƒie Posted November 21, 2011 Report Share Posted November 21, 2011 Yeah.. Keto put this rp up for a possible review. Lol. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted November 21, 2011 Report Share Posted November 21, 2011 It's not just because I suggested a review of it, it's because it'd make much more sense to put it there so that new players can look through and figure out what's taken. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ANBU Posted November 21, 2011 Report Share Posted November 21, 2011 @keto: if I remember right (@techi: sorry if im thinking of someone else Dx) he doesn't really keep up with adding accepted apps to the spoiler.. lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Damiano Tosē Posted November 27, 2011 Report Share Posted November 27, 2011 [size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][spoiler=My Application][/font][/size] [size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b]Username: [/b]Axon "[i]the phoenix tactician.[/i]" - Axon [u][b]Personal Information[/b][/u] [b]Name: [/b]Yamu Kosen (亜木高専, [i]Kosen Yamu[/i]) [b]Race: [/b]Human/Shinigami [b]Position/Rank: [/b]2nd Rank Division Captain/Leader of the Stealth Force [b]Age: [/b]9,438 [b]Personality: [/b]Yamu is, in all things, a man of less words and more-effective actions. Impressively stoic, calm, and level-headed, The death of his daughter led him to become a very serious person and would not speak during certain meetings. Words should not be spared for when they are most needed, and meted out only as necessary- conversations with him tend to be rather short, though informative. The most noticeable trait is his ability to deceive and manipulate others around them in different manners. Yamu has a great talent for analyzing and observing everything in his presence, allowing him to quickly understand a person's pattern of thinking - better to manipulate them. He is also a powerful strategist, capable of forming well-thought-out plans several steps ahead of others. Yamu is exceptionally good at mediating his own emotions- to the point where some tend to doubt he even has them. Yamu is not good with expression- keeping a neutral face even in the most ridiculous of circumstances. Yamu also shows himself to be a powerful and flexible tactician, capable of adjusting seamlessly any given combat situation, if not plan out events well in advance. In combination with his perfectionist ways, this tends to make Yamu appear as a rather responsible individual, far more temperate than one would expect of his age. Because of this, he understands the strengths, weaknesses, and mannerisms of his enemies and creates strategies to achieve victory. [b]Appearance: [/b]Yamu is a short, slender, lanky type of Shinigami with a personality that perfectly fits his appearance. His height is tall, around 157.48 to 160.02 centimeters, (5 feet and 2 inches to 5 feet and 3 inches.) His weight is fairly lanky, having a small body yet in shape, weighing around 43 kilograms (95 pounds.) His eyes are described as Navy Blue, the shape of his eyes are the shape of an almond. His eyes are mostly expressive, easy to tell his emotions when others are looking at them. His eyes have an unusual color - blue like the mystical ocean under the bright yet fiery sun. They are bright and clear, but sometimes are shaded from the lack of sleep Yamu has been enduring. His hair has the color of navy blue, his hair texture normal and fine, his hairstyle swept back- vivd, one strand of her hanging over the middle of his face. His hair is short, chin-length, shiny and smooth. His skin tone is more of a porcelain, extremely pale, warm peachy tone,translucent quality. His forehead is smooth, average. His jawline is well-sculpted, similar to a super hero's jawline. His feet are small yet quick, wearing a size 7 in men's shoes. His teeth are well-conditioned, also straight. Yamu looks as if he is young, middle aged to late aged teen. He is attractive, good-looking, handsome, and cute with a hint of nice. Yamu is also the neat, clean type of person. He has a ring set on all of his right fingers, only ring missing is his thumb ring. Yamu wears the simple shinigami clothing, but wears a red scarf on his neck. [b]Biography:[/b] During his years as a young shinigami, Yamu was a very cold, callous (Showing or having an insensitive and cruel disregard for others) dispassionate figure, and is rather aloof, brooding, and indifferent, willing to harm both his comrades and enemies should they ever get in his way. He refers to anyone he does not find interesting as "trash" and treats them as expendable (Designed to be used only once and then abandoned or destroyed.) He is not particular violent and will only fight when provoked. He displays little respect for authority and says whatever is on his mind, regardless of whether or not it is appropriate. He tends to be lazy and unenthusiastic who apparently spends much of his time asleep. He is not eager to take leadership role. He is not particularly interested in whatever is going on around him. Yamu was born on March 16th, as son of the Creed Kosen and Mystique Kosen, into the Kosen family, one of the five noble families. Yamu was born in the Kosen family mansion in the Seireitei of Soul Society. He would spend countless hours training on his own, achieving to get much stronger then those he had looked up too. Fifty-eight years later, he married the princess of another noble family to strengthen the bond of the two families together, but the marriage was short and not a happy one. The princess became ill and was to the point of death. Shortly after her death, the princess gave her husband a necklace handmade from her, a crystal necklace that only the pure and kind-heart can wear. Her death was a memorable one, and Yamu vowed to think of and about her, staying by her side as she would in spirit. Forty-nine years later, Yamu was appointed the captain of the 2nd division, also leader of the Onmitsukido, the [b]Stealth Force. [/b]He has been known by two names: the "Phoenix Tactician," and the "Black-Burning Angel." [u][b]Zanpaktou[/b][/u] [b]Zanpaktou Name: [/b]His sword is named Schwarz-Verbrennung, Black-Burning Angel. [b]Zanpaktou Appearance:[/b]The sword is a chokuto, with a black blade. The blade itself can endure even the strongest attacks. A medium length of chain with a skull's head at the end dangles from the base of the hilt. The hilt is bandaged, attached to his right hand. The zanpaktou has no sheath, usually seeing him carrying it in his hand or on his shoulder. [u][b]Shikai [/b][/u] [b]Shikai Release phrase: [/b]Trap, Schwarz-Verbrennug! [b]Shikai Appearance: [/b]Yamu gains phoenix-like wings on his back made up of black spiritual energy. His zanpaktou also changes its appearance, turning itself to a dark-colored saber that Yamu manifests from extending his right hand at will. He can use the wings to give him the ability to fly. He also develops the power: Phoenix's boost from Above. This power lets him use his attack, Phoenix's Hypnosis from the Divine. [u][b]Shikai Abilities[/b][/u][/font][/size][list] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b]Phoenix's Hypnosis from the Divine: [/b]This ability controls the five senses to the point that it can make the target misinterpret another person's form, shape, mass, feel and smell to be that of the enemy. After seeing it just once, that person will completely succumb to the hypnosis. For part of the ability, Schwarz-Verbrennug releases an atmosphere that triggers the sense of smell, having the aroma forcing for the nose to smell.[/font][/size] [/list] [size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][u][b]Bankai[/b][/u] [b]Bankai Release Phrase: [/b]Fly like the wind, soar through the skies and trap those to a world unseen, Schwarz-Vrebrennug! [b]Bankai Appearance: [/b]Yamu keeps on his captain haori, this time gaining sleeves and has his sleeves rolled up, his jacket unzipped, showing his muscular, cut body. His zanpaktou also generates into a blade of black flames in Yamu's right hand. He also gains two more attacks, added to Phoenix's Hypnosis from the Divine. His black wings changes color, this time being multi-colored. [u][b]Bankai Abilities:[/b][/u][/font][/size][list] [*][b][b]Phoenix's Boost from Heaven: [/b][/b][font="'lucida sans unicode"]Yamu boosts his velocity to the point where his speed matched to the "Flash Goddess," or Yuroichi. The ability allows him to move huge distances in the blink of an eye as if by teleportation. It also allows him to deceive his opponents sense of sight more often, allowing the user to see double as he can create multiple copies of himself. This allows the abilities, Senka and Utsusemi to be use more often then usual.[/font] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Phoenix's Illusion from Above: [/b][/b]Yamu creates multiple illusions, for example, creating decoys of himself to fight his opponents and other illusions to distract his opponents, Yamu can hide his own movements and attack with impunity (freely.) [/font][/size] [/list] [size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][u][b]Ability:[/b][/u][/font][/size] [list] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]High Intellect: [/b][/b]The most fearsome trait of Yamu is his tremendous intellect. He is well-versed in the history, strategy, tactics of the Soul Society and every division - including his very own. [/font][/size] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Master Tactician: [/b][/b]He has shown himself as a powerful and flexible tactician, capable of adjusting seamlessly to any given combat situation, if not plan out events well in advance. He creates strategies to achieve victory, he is also shown highly cautious in battle.[/font][/size] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Tremendous Velocity/Speed: [/b][/b]Being the leader of the Stealth Force, he is perceived to be so fast that one cannot discern even being attacked by Yamu until after it has taken place. He is capable of effortlessly dodging simultaneous attacks at close range and the evasion of High level attacks. His velocity is so fast that opponents rarely do not know his movements until after he has made them.[/font][/size] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Hand-to-Hand Lord: [/b][/b]He is a very proficient hand-to-hand combatant, possessing considerable masterful skill using it as his primary means of attack. He is equally lethal using punches and kicks as well as being highly unpredictable. His fighting technique is incredibly destructive, using his speed and reflexes to quickly take out his opponents.[/font][/size] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Master Swordsmanship: [/b][/b]He has demonstrated the ability to effortless fight back opponents of high rank and high fighting experience with his own power sealed. He has also demonstrated the ability to perform tremendously powerful and precise strikes, capable of cutting through very sturdy targets. He is also able to easily cut down multiple high rank opponents with ease.[/spoiler][/font][/size] [/list] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cosmic Angel Posted November 28, 2011 Report Share Posted November 28, 2011 Sorry I havent been posting a mixture of turkey day and finals that i have to study for has stopped me from posting but im back fornow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted November 28, 2011 Report Share Posted November 28, 2011 [quote name='Skydro' timestamp='1322418349' post='5669724'] [size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][spoiler=My Application][/font][/size] [size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b]Username: [/b]Axon "[i]the phoenix tactician.[/i]" - Axon [u][b]Personal Information[/b][/u] [b]Name: [/b]Yamu Kosen (亜木高専, [i]Kosen Yamu[/i]) [b]Race: [/b]Human/Shinigami [b]Position/Rank: [/b]2nd Rank Captain [b]Age: [/b]9,438 [b]Personality: [/b]Yamu is, in all things, a man of less words and more-effective actions. Impressively stoic, calm, and level-headed, The death of his daughter led him to become a very serious person and would not speak during certain meetings. Words should not be spared for when they are most needed, and meted out only as necessary- conversations with him tend to be rather short, though informative. The most noticeable trait is his ability to deceive and manipulate others around them in different manners. Yamu has a great talent for analyzing and observing everything in his presence, allowing him to quickly understand a person's pattern of thinking - better to manipulate them. He is also a powerful strategist, capable of forming well-thought-out plans several steps ahead of others. Yamu is exceptionally good at mediating his own emotions- to the point where some tend to doubt he even has them. Yamu is not good with expression- keeping a neutral face even in the most ridiculous of circumstances. Yamu also shows himself to be a powerful and flexible tactician, capable of adjusting seamlessly any given combat situation, if not plan out events well in advance. In combination with his perfectionist ways, this tends to make Yamu appear as a rather responsible individual, far more temperate than one would expect of his age. Because of this, he understands the strengths, weaknesses, and mannerisms of his enemies and creates strategies to achieve victory. [b]Appearance: [/b]Yamu is a short, slender, lanky type of Shinigami with a personality that perfectly fits his appearance. His height is tall, around 157.48 to 160.02 centimeters, (5 feet and 2 inches to 5 feet and 3 inches.) His weight is fairly lanky, having a small body yet in shape, weighing around 43 kilograms (95 pounds.) His eyes are described as Navy Blue, the shape of his eyes are the shape of an almond. His eyes are mostly expressive, easy to tell his emotions when others are looking at them. His eyes have an unusual color - blue like the mystical ocean under the bright yet fiery sun. They are bright and clear, but sometimes are shaded from the lack of sleep Yamu has been enduring. His hair has the color of navy blue, his hair texture normal and fine, his hairstyle swept back- vivd, one strand of her hanging over the middle of his face. His hair is short, chin-length, shiny and smooth. His skin tone is more of a porcelain, extremely pale, warm peachy tone,translucent quality. His forehead is smooth, average. His jawline is well-sculpted, similar to a super hero's jawline. His feet are small yet quick, wearing a size 7 in men's shoes. His teeth are well-conditioned, also straight. Yamu looks as if he is young, middle aged to late aged teen. He is attractive, good-looking, handsome, and cute with a hint of nice. Yamu is also the neat, clean type of person. He has a ring set on all of his right fingers, only ring missing is his thumb ring. Yamu wears the simple shinigami clothing, but wears a red scarf on his neck. [b]Biography:[/b] During his years as a young shinigami, Yamu was a very cold, callous (Showing or having an insensitive and cruel disregard for others) dispassionate figure, and is rather aloof, brooding, and indifferent, willing to harm both his comrades and enemies should they ever get in his way. He refers to anyone he does not find interesting as "trash" and treats them as expendable (Designed to be used only once and then abandoned or destroyed.) He is not particular violent and will only fight when provoked. He displays little respect for authority and says whatever is on his mind, regardless of whether or not it is appropriate. He tends to be lazy and unenthusiastic who apparently spends much of his time asleep. He is not eager to take leadership role. He is not particularly interested in whatever is going on around him. Yamu was born on March 16th, as son of the Creed Kosen and Mystique Kosen, into the Kosen family, one of the five noble families. Yamu was born in the Kosen family mansion in the Seireitei of Soul Society. He would spend countless hours training on his own, achieving to get much stronger then those he had looked up too. Fifty-eight years later, he married the princess of another noble family to strengthen the bond of the two families together, but the marriage was short and not a happy one. The princess became ill and was to the point of death. Shortly after her death, the princess gave her husband a necklace handmade from her, a crystal necklace that only the pure and kind-heart can wear. Her death was a memorable one, and Yamu vowed to think of and about her, staying by her side as she would in spirit. Forty-nine years later, Yamu was appointed the captain of the 2nd division, also leader of the Onmitsukido, the [b]Stealth Force. [/b]He has been known by two names: the "Phoenix Tactician," and the "Black-Burning Angel." [u][b]Zanpaktou[/b][/u] [b]Zanpaktou Name: [/b]His sword is named Schwarz-Verbrennung, Black-Burning Angel. [b]Zanpaktou Appearance:[/b]The sword is a chokuto, with a black blade. The blade itself can endure even the strongest attacks. A medium length of chain with a skull's head at the end dangles from the base of the hilt. The hilt is bandaged, attached to his right hand. The zanpaktou has no sheath, usually seeing him carrying it in his hand or on his shoulder. [u][b]Shikai [/b][/u] [b]Shikai Release phrase: [/b]Disintegrate, Schwarz-Verbrennug! [b]Shikai Appearance: [/b]Yamu gains phoenix-like wings on his back made up of black spiritual energy. His zanpaktou also changes its appearance, turning itself to a dark-colored saber that Yamu manifests from extending his right hand at will. He can use the wings to give him the ability to fly. He also develops the power: Phoenix's flames from Above. This power lets him use his attack, Phoenix's Slice from the Divine at a far away range. In close range the attack's command is[i]“Phoenix's Claw!”[/i] [u][b]Shikai Abilities[/b][/u][/font][/size][list] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b]Phoenix's Slice from the Divine: [/b]The blade from Schwarz-Verbrennung's saber allows Yamu to swing the saber towards the opponent. It also causes a massive veil of black flames to erupt upwards and approach the target, darkening the sky, burning anything caught within the blast, easily destroying anything that touches it. The flames continues to rise, dissipating into the sky.[/font][/size] [/list] [size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][u][b]Bankai[/b][/u] [b]Bankai Release Phrase: [/b]Fly like the wind, soar through the skies and burn everything in your path to ashes! Schwarz-Vrebrennug! [b]Bankai Appearance: [/b]Yamu keeps on his captain haori, this time gaining sleeves and has his sleeves rolled up, his jacket unzipped, showing his muscular, cut body. His zanpaktou also generates into a blade of black flames in Omaru's left hand while keeping the dark-colored saber on his right. He also gains two more attacks, added to Phoenix's Slice from the Divine. His black wings changes color, this time being multi-colored. [u][b]Bankai Abilities:[/b][/u][/font][/size][list] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Phoenix's Blast from Heaven: [/b][/b]This blast is a black beam with a yellow outline to it, which is similar to his other attack, Phoenix's Slice from the Divine. This attack can only be used when the zanpaktou is in its Bankai state. Schwarz's blast from heaven is powerful enough to destroy a large part of any town and/or city. When this attack is finished, Yamu cannot use the attack again for at least 2 minutes.[/font][/size] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Phoenix's Illusion from Above: [/b][/b]Yamu creates multiple illusions, for example, creating decoys of himself to fight his opponents and other illusions to distract his opponents, Yamu can hide his own movements and attack with impunity (freely.) His opponent will remain focused on the illusion until it is too late.[/font][/size] [/list] [size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][u][b]Ability:[/b][/u][/font][/size] [list] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]High Intellect: [/b][/b]The most fearsome trait of Omaru is his tremendous intellect. He is well-versed in the history, strategy, tactics of every forms of sabre and nation in every planet- including his very own. [/font][/size] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Master Tactician: [/b][/b]He has shown himself as a powerful and flexible tactician, capable of adjusting seamlessly to any given combat situation, if not plan out events well in advance. He creates strategies to achieve victory, he is also shown highly cautious in battle.[/font][/size] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Immense Strength: [/b][/b]Omaru shows his tremendous strength by being able to effortlessly cut through of very strong opponents with ease. Powerful enough to stop enemies with just one index finger, cutting people in half and possibly almost killing them, severely injuring them with a single swing of his sword.[/font][/size] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Tremendous Velocity/Speed: [/b][/b]He is perceived to be so fast that one cannot discern even being attacked by Omaru until after it has taken place. He is capable of effortlessly dodging simultaneous attacks at close range and the evasion of High level attacks. His velocity is so fast that opponents rarely do not know his movements until after he has made them.[/font][/size] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Hand-to-Hand Lord: [/b][/b]He is a very proficient hand-to-hand combatant, possessing considerable masterful skill using it as his primary means of attack. He is equally lethal using punches and kicks as well as being highly unpredictable. His fighting technique is incredibly destructive, using his speed and reflexes to quickly take out his opponents.[/font][/size] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Master Swordsmanship: [/b][/b]He has demonstrated the ability to effortless fight back opponents of high rank and high fighting experience with his own power sealed. He has also demonstrated the ability to perform tremendously powerful and precise strikes, capable of cutting through very sturdy targets. He is also able to easily cut down multiple high rank demons with ease.[/spoiler][/font][/size] [/list] [/quote] Alright, I only have a few problems with this here. Firstly is the position of "2nd Rank Captain". In my mind that means you want to be the Vice-Captain of some division or another, but you mention towards the end of your biography that your character is the captain of the Second division and commander of the Stealth Force. I would appreciate those being placed in the Position/Rank section of your app for easy reference. Secondly, your character's "Immense Strength" Ability seems a bit out of place with him as a whole. I mean, he seems to be the sort of person who has little strength but applies it where it is necessary to cause the maximum amount of damage possible. Thirdly, your character's Zanpakutou is completely unfitting to what the Stealth Force is all about. I mean every single attack is meant to deal immense amounts of destruction more or less at random across a wide area. The Stealth Force could be likened to the modern day Navy Seals. They don't unleash massive force at random, they apply smaller amounts of force at focused points. This is, of course, not speaking about your illusion ability which fits quite well with the Stealth Force but does seem a bit like a god mode. I mean you state in the description of the ability "The opponent will remain focused on the illusion until it is too late." You're setting it up so that they have no chance to work around it whatsoever. Finally, you mention demons in your app. This one is not so much a problem as a bit of confusion that I'm noticing. There are no demons in Bleach, my good sir. The short version of everything I have said is "Not Accepted". Then again, I am merely the co-host but Techi trusts my judgement. I would recommend making changes according to what I have stated. [quote name='*~Dark~Magician~Girl~*' timestamp='1322447953' post='5671377'] I'm sorry but I'm not going to be able to join in fully, as I wished.. With the only descent Internet access being with the college and the semester ending soon, I'm going to have a hard enough time keeping up with the ones I'm already with.. I'm sorry. ;-; [/quote] Perfectly alright DMG. Everyone's been a bit busy with Turkey Day. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elƒie Posted November 28, 2011 Report Share Posted November 28, 2011 Whoaps! Posted that in the wrong spot.. Lol Edit: Wait a minute... I didn't post that on here. O_o Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted November 29, 2011 Report Share Posted November 29, 2011 The f***? I was tryin' to quote Cosmic Angel's post there and instead I wound up quoting what you said back in Vault X. Glitchy ass forum.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Damiano Tosē Posted November 29, 2011 Report Share Posted November 29, 2011 [quote name='Skydro' timestamp='1322418349' post='5669724'] [size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][spoiler=My Application][/font][/size] [size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b]Username: [/b]Axon "[i]the phoenix tactician.[/i]" - Axon [u][b]Personal Information[/b][/u] [b]Name: [/b]Yamu Kosen (亜木高専, [i]Kosen Yamu[/i]) [b]Race: [/b]Human/Shinigami [b]Position/Rank: [/b]2nd Rank Division Captain/Leader of the Stealth Force [b]Age: [/b]9,438 [b]Personality: [/b]Yamu is, in all things, a man of less words and more-effective actions. Impressively stoic, calm, and level-headed, The death of his daughter led him to become a very serious person and would not speak during certain meetings. Words should not be spared for when they are most needed, and meted out only as necessary- conversations with him tend to be rather short, though informative. The most noticeable trait is his ability to deceive and manipulate others around them in different manners. Yamu has a great talent for analyzing and observing everything in his presence, allowing him to quickly understand a person's pattern of thinking - better to manipulate them. He is also a powerful strategist, capable of forming well-thought-out plans several steps ahead of others. Yamu is exceptionally good at mediating his own emotions- to the point where some tend to doubt he even has them. Yamu is not good with expression- keeping a neutral face even in the most ridiculous of circumstances. Yamu also shows himself to be a powerful and flexible tactician, capable of adjusting seamlessly any given combat situation, if not plan out events well in advance. In combination with his perfectionist ways, this tends to make Yamu appear as a rather responsible individual, far more temperate than one would expect of his age. Because of this, he understands the strengths, weaknesses, and mannerisms of his enemies and creates strategies to achieve victory. [b]Appearance: [/b]Yamu is a short, slender, lanky type of Shinigami with a personality that perfectly fits his appearance. His height is tall, around 157.48 to 160.02 centimeters, (5 feet and 2 inches to 5 feet and 3 inches.) His weight is fairly lanky, having a small body yet in shape, weighing around 43 kilograms (95 pounds.) His eyes are described as Navy Blue, the shape of his eyes are the shape of an almond. His eyes are mostly expressive, easy to tell his emotions when others are looking at them. His eyes have an unusual color - blue like the mystical ocean under the bright yet fiery sun. They are bright and clear, but sometimes are shaded from the lack of sleep Yamu has been enduring. His hair has the color of navy blue, his hair texture normal and fine, his hairstyle swept back- vivd, one strand of her hanging over the middle of his face. His hair is short, chin-length, shiny and smooth. His skin tone is more of a porcelain, extremely pale, warm peachy tone,translucent quality. His forehead is smooth, average. His jawline is well-sculpted, similar to a super hero's jawline. His feet are small yet quick, wearing a size 7 in men's shoes. His teeth are well-conditioned, also straight. Yamu looks as if he is young, middle aged to late aged teen. He is attractive, good-looking, handsome, and cute with a hint of nice. Yamu is also the neat, clean type of person. He has a ring set on all of his right fingers, only ring missing is his thumb ring. Yamu wears the simple shinigami clothing, but wears a red scarf on his neck. [b]Biography:[/b] During his years as a young shinigami, Yamu was a very cold, callous (Showing or having an insensitive and cruel disregard for others) dispassionate figure, and is rather aloof, brooding, and indifferent, willing to harm both his comrades and enemies should they ever get in his way. He refers to anyone he does not find interesting as "trash" and treats them as expendable (Designed to be used only once and then abandoned or destroyed.) He is not particular violent and will only fight when provoked. He displays little respect for authority and says whatever is on his mind, regardless of whether or not it is appropriate. He tends to be lazy and unenthusiastic who apparently spends much of his time asleep. He is not eager to take leadership role. He is not particularly interested in whatever is going on around him. Yamu was born on March 16th, as son of the Creed Kosen and Mystique Kosen, into the Kosen family, one of the five noble families. Yamu was born in the Kosen family mansion in the Seireitei of Soul Society. He would spend countless hours training on his own, achieving to get much stronger then those he had looked up too. Fifty-eight years later, he married the princess of another noble family to strengthen the bond of the two families together, but the marriage was short and not a happy one. The princess became ill and was to the point of death. Shortly after her death, the princess gave her husband a necklace handmade from her, a crystal necklace that only the pure and kind-heart can wear. Her death was a memorable one, and Yamu vowed to think of and about her, staying by her side as she would in spirit. Forty-nine years later, Yamu was appointed the captain of the 2nd division, also leader of the Onmitsukido, the [b]Stealth Force. [/b]He has been known by two names: the "Phoenix Tactician," and the "Black-Burning Angel." [u][b]Zanpaktou[/b][/u] [b]Zanpaktou Name: [/b]His sword is named Schwarz-Verbrennung, Black-Burning Angel. [b]Zanpaktou Appearance:[/b]The sword is a chokuto, with a black blade. The blade itself can endure even the strongest attacks. A medium length of chain with a skull's head at the end dangles from the base of the hilt. The hilt is bandaged, attached to his right hand. The zanpaktou has no sheath, usually seeing him carrying it in his hand or on his shoulder. [u][b]Shikai [/b][/u] [b]Shikai Release phrase: [/b]Trap, Schwarz-Verbrennug! [b]Shikai Appearance: [/b]Yamu gains phoenix-like wings on his back made up of black spiritual energy. His zanpaktou also changes its appearance, turning itself to a dark-colored saber that Yamu manifests from extending his right hand at will. He can use the wings to give him the ability to fly. He also develops the power: Phoenix's boost from Above. This power lets him use his attack, Phoenix's Hypnosis from the Divine. [u][b]Shikai Abilities[/b][/u][/font][/size][list] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b]Phoenix's Hypnosis from the Divine: [/b]This ability controls the five senses to the point that it can make the target misinterpret another person's form, shape, mass, feel and smell to be that of the enemy. After seeing it just once, that person will completely succumb to the hypnosis. For part of the ability, Schwarz-Verbrennug releases an atmosphere that triggers the sense of smell, having the aroma forcing for the nose to smell.[/font][/size] [/list] [size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][u][b]Bankai[/b][/u] [b]Bankai Release Phrase: [/b]Fly like the wind, soar through the skies and trap those to a world unseen, Schwarz-Vrebrennug! [b]Bankai Appearance: [/b]Yamu keeps on his captain haori, this time gaining sleeves and has his sleeves rolled up, his jacket unzipped, showing his muscular, cut body. His zanpaktou also generates into a blade of black flames in Yamu's right hand. He also gains two more attacks, added to Phoenix's Hypnosis from the Divine. His black wings changes color, this time being multi-colored. [u][b]Bankai Abilities:[/b][/u][/font][/size][list] [*][b][b]Phoenix's Boost from Heaven: [/b][/b][font=lucida sans unicode]Yamu boosts his velocity to the point where his speed matched to the "Flash Goddess," or Yuroichi. The ability allows him to move huge distances in the blink of an eye as if by teleportation. It also allows him to deceive his opponents sense of sight more often, allowing the user to see double as he can create multiple copies of himself. This allows the abilities, Senka and Utsusemi to be use more often then usual.[/font] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Phoenix's Illusion from Above: [/b][/b]Yamu creates multiple illusions, for example, creating decoys of himself to fight his opponents and other illusions to distract his opponents, Yamu can hide his own movements and attack with impunity (freely.) [/font][/size] [/list] [size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][u][b]Ability:[/b][/u][/font][/size] [list] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]High Intellect: [/b][/b]The most fearsome trait of Yamu is his tremendous intellect. He is well-versed in the history, strategy, tactics of the Soul Society and every division - including his very own. [/font][/size] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Master Tactician: [/b][/b]He has shown himself as a powerful and flexible tactician, capable of adjusting seamlessly to any given combat situation, if not plan out events well in advance. He creates strategies to achieve victory, he is also shown highly cautious in battle.[/font][/size] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Tremendous Velocity/Speed: [/b][/b]Being the leader of the Stealth Force, he is perceived to be so fast that one cannot discern even being attacked by Yamu until after it has taken place. He is capable of effortlessly dodging simultaneous attacks at close range and the evasion of High level attacks. His velocity is so fast that opponents rarely do not know his movements until after he has made them.[/font][/size] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Hand-to-Hand Lord: [/b][/b]He is a very proficient hand-to-hand combatant, possessing considerable masterful skill using it as his primary means of attack. He is equally lethal using punches and kicks as well as being highly unpredictable. His fighting technique is incredibly destructive, using his speed and reflexes to quickly take out his opponents.[/font][/size] [*][size=3][font=lucida sans unicode,lucida grande,sans-serif][b][b]Master Swordsmanship: [/b][/b]He has demonstrated the ability to effortless fight back opponents of high rank and high fighting experience with his own power sealed. He has also demonstrated the ability to perform tremendously powerful and precise strikes, capable of cutting through very sturdy targets. He is also able to easily cut down multiple high rank opponents with ease.[/spoiler][/font][/size] [/list] [/quote] Edited. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The White Wolf Posted November 29, 2011 Report Share Posted November 29, 2011 Hello all, I am the original creator of this RP as those of you who joined the first one know, *is unhappy that he left in the middle of it* anyhow, I am reserving, and will not be posting an app until Techi gets back on YCM and responds to my PM [color=white]RESPECT THE ORIGINAL CREATOR!.... Ninja text (hopefully) :3[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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