silvericeman Posted October 18, 2011 Report Share Posted October 18, 2011 iv been trying to write my own manga and i want some feed backhere is the [size=7]basic plot[/size] so i know it needs development dont bother putting that in a comment any other help will be appreaciated main characters name is Hiroki in the story learns that he is a decedent of the race of dragons(in the story i re-imagined dragon to be powerful human-like beings) once he finds out he must learn how to use his abilities. He is thought to be the last of the ice dragons. his master is killed by an assassin sent by the flame dragon emperor. he goes on a quest of vengeance the genre clearly is going to be action based but also have strong roots in comedy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
burnpsy Posted October 18, 2011 Report Share Posted October 18, 2011 It sounds really generic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
silvericeman Posted October 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 18, 2011 [quote name='burnpsy' timestamp='1318969691' post='5586674'] It sounds really generic. [/quote] well alot of topics are already taken and glorifying ice as a weapon is something i dont see done often correct me if im wrong but i dont see that to often i would love to know if there are others and like i said that is just the basic plot Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Just Crouton Posted October 18, 2011 Report Share Posted October 18, 2011 Develop it a [b]lot[/b] more. EDIT: Simple plot is fine, as long as the characters are addictive. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
burnpsy Posted October 18, 2011 Report Share Posted October 18, 2011 Yes, you don't see ice weapons much in manga outside of Fairy Tail. What mainly strikes me as screaming generic is the part where this is an action/comedy. That's been done to death to the point the you need to write it [i]really[/i] well, or nobody will care anymore. So I agree with King Crouton that it needs to be worked on a whole lot more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legend Zero Posted October 18, 2011 Report Share Posted October 18, 2011 tbh I'd rather write it out as a fanfic, get it reviewed on many forums, then draw it out. It may take longer, but it would be something that most would enjoy. Of course, this is my opinion of how things should be done. (I sound like Bakuman antag :3) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Corgi Posted October 18, 2011 Report Share Posted October 18, 2011 [quote name='silvericeman' timestamp='1318969898' post='5586682'] well alot of topics are already taken and glorifying ice as a weapon is something i dont see done often correct me if im wrong but i dont see that to often i would love to know if there are others and like i said that is just the basic plot [/quote] Now it sounds even more generic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
silvericeman Posted October 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 18, 2011 [quote name='~Purrloin~' timestamp='1318971733' post='5586755'] Now it sounds even more generic. [/quote] well i am an amateur just trying to write my first manga and i thought it would be easier if it was something that was abundant. so i would have example to use to help me write my own. generic it may be but i am proud of what i have so far Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted October 18, 2011 Report Share Posted October 18, 2011 Isn't this basically Avatar: The Last Airbender? Not to mention that you're doing to [b]dragons [/b]what Twilight did to vampires. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
silvericeman Posted October 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 18, 2011 [quote name='Umbra' timestamp='1318973357' post='5586803'] Isn't this basically Avatar: The Last Airbender? Not to mention that you're doing to [b]dragons [/b]what Twilight did to vampires. [/quote] avatar was part of my inspiration only im including more than just 4 different disciplines. twilight made vampires gay and sparkly. as for my dragons they will basically be the dragons everyone knows only they look like humans Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sunshine Jesse Posted October 18, 2011 Report Share Posted October 18, 2011 It's not a manga if you're not writing/publishing it in Japan js Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
silvericeman Posted October 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 18, 2011 [quote name='Nightmare Zarkus' timestamp='1318975022' post='5586879'] It's not a manga if you're not writing/publishing it in Japan js [/quote] its basically my manga because the manga i have read in addition to the anime iv seen inspired me to write my own in the same style only not in japanese mainly because i know almost no japaneses except for what in the dubbed animes Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
burnpsy Posted October 18, 2011 Report Share Posted October 18, 2011 Dude. If it's not made in Japan, it's called a [i]comic[/i], regardless of influence. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
silvericeman Posted October 19, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 19, 2011 [quote name='burnpsy' timestamp='1318975837' post='5586930'] Dude. If it's not made in Japan, it's called a [i]comic[/i], regardless of influence. [/quote] all right ill give you that one......once again Japan trumps us everything is better in japan Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sunshine Jesse Posted October 19, 2011 Report Share Posted October 19, 2011 [quote name='silvericeman' timestamp='1318986583' post='5587374'] all right ill give you that one......once again Japan trumps us everything is better in japan [/quote] oh god you're one of [i]those[/i] people Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
silvericeman Posted October 19, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 19, 2011 [quote name='Nightmare Zarkus' timestamp='1318987172' post='5587393'] oh god you're one of [i]those[/i] people [/quote] whats that supposed to mean.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sunshine Jesse Posted October 20, 2011 Report Share Posted October 20, 2011 the "hurr hurr nippon ichi" type of person Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
burnpsy Posted October 20, 2011 Report Share Posted October 20, 2011 [quote name='Nightmare Zarkus' timestamp='1319084431' post='5589201'] the "hurr hurr nippon ichi" type of person [/quote] But Nippon Ichi makes/publishes really good games... :/ [center][center] [/center][/center] [center][center][url="http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Nippon_Ichi_Software"][img]http://i54.tinypic.com/20p1r4l.png[/img][/url] [/center][/center] [left][left]But yeah, that. I don't disagree with that assessment after what he's posted, but that might be a pre-mature judgement.[/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left]In any case, staying on-topic to the thread, your idea needs to be worked on really well and executed [i]really[/i], [i][b]really[/b][/i] well if you want anyone to care. That pretty much sums up the thread right there.[/left][/left] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
silvericeman Posted October 20, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 20, 2011 [quote name='Nightmare Zarkus' timestamp='1319084431' post='5589201'] the "hurr hurr nippon ichi" type of person [/quote] yeah i honestly dont know what that means.....better in japan was simply a reference to an article published on Smosh.com.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
burnpsy Posted October 20, 2011 Report Share Posted October 20, 2011 Nippon Ichi in that context means either "Best in Japan" or "Japan is #1". [size=1](I only know this because I know some Japanese)[/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
silvericeman Posted October 20, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 20, 2011 [quote name='burnpsy' timestamp='1319085932' post='5589234'] Nippon Ichi in that context means either "Best in Japan" or "Japan is #1". [size=1](I only know this because I know some Japanese)[/size] [/quote] thank you for clearing that up......but yeah me saying better in japan was only a reference to articles on smosh.com follow the following to see for yourself there is more where it came from http://www.smosh.com/smosh-pit/articles/better-in-japan-pokemon-theme-song-beat-boxing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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