yugitom Posted October 6, 2011 Report Share Posted October 6, 2011 Yusei-Draw! I activate Reincarnation of Hope, so I discard two cards to get another from my deck later. Now, I summon Junk Synchron. For his effect I can summon Speed Warrior from my graveyard. Quillbolt Hedgehog's effect in my graveyard activates while I have a tuner monster on the field, I summon him back! Synchro summon! I use my Junk Synchron and my hedgehog to summon Junk Warrior (2300). I activate his effect, he gains attack points equal to the attack points of all level 2 or below monsters on the field (3200). I end my turn with two face-downs. Bando-So, you used all cards in your hand on the first turn. I activate Heavy Storm to destroy all your spell and traps. Yusei-I activate Starlight Road, so I prevent my cards from destruction, and summon Stardust Dragon (2500)! Bando-I activate the Field Spell, De- Circuit. Now, whenever I summon a 'De-' monster, I can draw 2 cards from my deck. Now I summon De-fence man. Activate your effect! 2000 Bando-I summon De-ep sea W. Warrior! Yusei-You just special summoned a synchro monster! Bando-Indeed! Now, De-fence man tune my synchro monster! Yusei-(A level three synchro monster?) Bando-I synchro summon, De-vil Gun Man! (3000) Yusei-3000 attack points?! Bando-It's a shame I'm placing him in defence mode (0). I discard three cards. That's all for me. Yusei-I draw! I switch Speed Warrior into attack mode, now attack De-vil Gun Man! Bando-You idiot! Yusei-What? Bando-When you destroy my monster in defence mode I can either take control of one of your monsters or destroy one of your monsters and decrease the attack points of one monster you control by the original attack points of the monster destroyed. But, of course, you'll just activate Stardust's effect to save any monster from destruction, so, I take control of Junk Warrior! Jack-Yusei! Run now, you damage they deal is real and vicious. If Speed Warrior gets hit, you'll get seriously hurt! Yusei-It's a risk I'm willing to take. (But, the odds are in his favour, he has my strongest monster, but I have Scrap Iron Scarecrow, to block any attack I want once per turn. I'm still in the game.) Bando-Just end your turn already. Yusei-I switch Stardust Dragon into defence mode, that ends my turn. (This have been a real show of events, this guy's power...!) Bando-I draw! Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha! I thought you'd put up a good fight! I activate Megamorph and equip to Junk Warrior. As long as my life points are lower than yours, Junk Warrior can double it's attack points (6400)! I summon De- Dark Swordsman (1500). Jack-(Wait, does Bando know that Yusei has Scrap Iron Scarecrow out?) Bando-(Eyes glow blue) Yes, Jack. Jack-(What, can you read my mind?) Bando-Yes, Atlas. Yusei-How dare you mess with my friend! Bando-Friend? After he steals your first duel runner from you, steals your favourite card, leaves you in the sattelite and tries to claim he's the camp when you are? Friend?! I've had better friends in a can of tuna! VOICE ONLY-Oh no he di'nt! Bando-Don't worry (eyes glow blue) I'll show you the true meaning of friendship! I'm your friend, I'll free you from these infantile, fools you call friends! See the light! Yusei-I already have, now make you move. Bando-As you wish, Junk Warrior, attack Speed Warrior! Yusei-Trap card! Scarp Iron Scarecrow. Bando-I know. Dark Warrior, attack! 3600 Bando-I end my turn with three face-downs. Yusei-Draw! I discard Le.. Bando-..Vel Eater, I know. Yusei-! Then you know who I'm gonna summon... Bando-Quickdraw Synchron. Yusei-What the..? (700). I decrease the level of my Stardust by... Bando-I activate my trap card, Summoning rules. Now, only two special summonings can be conjured each turn. Yusei-(Damn.. Wait, I shouldn't speak in my head, that guy can here me.) Bando-Too true. Yusei-Damn, I summon Level Eater (600). I also summon Changer Synchron (0). Bando-Ha ha ha ha! You've really fallen behind, haven't you? Yusei-The best is yet to come, so I switch my Stardust into offence and attack! Bando-Trap card! Tempt to the copyright, now I declare one face-down that might be on your field, if I'm right, then I gain control of it, if I get it wrong, I take 2000 points of damage. Yusei-But you know there's no risk. Bando-Exactly, I choose... Scrap Iron Scarecrow! Yusei-My trap! Bando-Is now mine. So, I activate Scarp Iron Scarecrow. Ha ha ha ha! I'm calling all the shots! Yusei-Not all of them, I activate Pot of Greed. I end my turn with two face-downs. Bando-I draw... Yusei-And I activate, Urgent Tuning. So, I can synchro summon, by using Changer and Eater... Formula Synchron! (200) Bando-HA! That pipsqeek? He oly has 200 attack points. Yusei-But when Stardust and Formula synchro, they summon an almighty dragon. Bando-You must be an idiot, you can only synchro on your turn. Ha ha ha ha ha ha.. Yusei-Ever heard of a special ability? Formula Synchron can synchro summon on your Main Phase 1. Bando-So what? You can't beat 6400 attack points! Yusei-Ever heard of another face-down? I synchro summon, Shooting star dragon! (3300) Now, I activate Emergence Break. To destroy, your Megamorph and force you to keep you monster in attack mode. Bando-So? I summon Mid Shield Gardna in defence mode. (1800) That's it. Yusei-I draw, perfect! I send the top three cards of my deck to the grave to activate, Tuner's Revival. Now, I can take three different tuner monsters from my grave, and add them to the top my deck. And I also activate my monsters effect, for each tuner I can find on the top of my deck, my monster can attack. Bando-What? Yusei-So Shooting Star Dragon can attack three times. So, you're done, attack, Mid Sheild Gardna, Junk Warrior and Bando himself! Bando-What? 0To have a look at most of the De- monsters Bando used go on realistic cards and keep going until you find De- monsters, soon there will also be spells and traps forum for the De- cards, thank you for reading. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThatPhantomGuy Posted October 6, 2011 Report Share Posted October 6, 2011 Hi, name's Phantom. I'm gonna review this here fic. 'kaythanks. [spoiler=Story]Yusei-Draw! I activate Reincarnation of Hope, so I discard two cards to get another from my deck later.Whoa, whoa, whoa there partner! No introduction? No premise? No idea what's going on? No "" to actually tell if someone's speakin' or not? A prologue at least?!Now, I summon Junk Synchron. For his effect I can summon Speed Warrior from my graveyard. Quillbolt Hedgehog's effect in my graveyard activates while I have a tuner monster on the field, I summon him back! Synchro summon! I use my Junk Synchron and my hedgehog to summon Junk Warrior (2300). I activate his effect, he gains attack points equal to the attack points of all level 2 or below monsters on the field (3200). I end my turn with two face-downs.I'm going to take a WILD guess here and assume that the person talking here is Yusei Fudo. The guy rambles a lot more than I remember in the anime... Bando-So, you used all cards in your hand on the first turn. I activate Heavy Storm to destroy all your spell and traps.Of course. You're using a script writing style, which is one of the big no-noes on the Fan Fic Section (if you would've read the rules like nobody else does). But hey, let's go with it for now.Yusei-I activate Starlight Road, so I prevent my cards from destruction, and summon Stardust Dragon (2500)!Talking like this is so exciting. Can't you tell how exciting my moves are like this.Bando-I activate the Field Spell, De- Circuit. Now, whenever I summon a 'De-' monster, I can draw 2 cards from my deck. Now I summon De-fence man. Activate your effect!OH I GET IT! DE-FENCE LIKE DEFENCE! GENUIS!2000Wus dis?^Bando-I summon De-ep sea W. Warrior!HE DID IT AGAIN! Hilarious! De-ep Sea W. Warrior as in DEEP Sea W. Warrior!Yusei-You just special summoned a synchro monster!A fart should totally go right after he says that. Thank you Captain Obvious.Bando-Indeed! Now, De-fence man tune my synchro monster!So much emotion in this fic. Serriously, these two are like freakin' robots who just got bashed over the heads with sledgehammers and decided to play card games for no reason whatsoever.Yusei-(A level three synchro monster?)Oh I wouldn't know Robo-Yusei, SINCE THERE'S NO CARD DESCRIPTIONS.Bando-I synchro summon, De-vil Gun Man! (3000) Yusei-3000 attack points?! Bando-It's a shame I'm placing him in defence mode (0). I discard three cards. That's all for me.Then why don't you put him in attack mode, hmmm? And why does he discard three cards? That's against the rules unless you have a specific effect that causes him to do so.Yusei-I draw! I switch Speed Warrior into attack mode, now attack De-vil Gun Man! Bando-You idiot!No, I think both robots are the idiot here. But those 'De-' cards are starting to get annoying...Yusei-What? Bando-When you destroy my monster in defence mode I can either take control of one of your monsters or destroy one of your monsters and decrease the attack points of one monster you control by the original attack points of the monster destroyed. But, of course, you'll just activate Stardust's effect to save any monster from destruction, so, I take control of Junk Warrior! Jack-Yusei! Run now, you damage they deal is real and vicious. If Speed Warrior gets hit, you'll get seriously hurt!Where the funnel cake did Jack come from?! Why does he talk funny?!Yusei-It's a risk I'm willing to take. (But, the odds are in his favour, he has my strongest monster, but I have Scrap Iron Scarecrow, to block any attack I want once per turn. I'm still in the game.) Bando-Just end your turn already.STFU Robo-Bando! Don't harrass Robo-Yusei, he's got WAY cooler hair then you'll ever have!Yusei-I switch Stardust Dragon into defence mode, that ends my turn. (This have been a real show of events, this guy's power...!) Bando-I draw! Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha! I thought you'd put up a good fight! I activate Megamorph and equip to Junk Warrior. As long as my life points are lower than yours, Junk Warrior can double it's attack points (6400)! I summon De- Dark Swordsman (1500). Jack-(Wait, does Bando know that Yusei has Scrap Iron Scarecrow out?) Bando-(Eyes glow blue) Yes, Jack.Glowing blue eyes isn't really all that impressive. Or evil. But I guess it's not a cliche of the glowing red eyes bit...Jack-(What, can you read my mind?) Bando-Yes, Atlas.FFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-Yusei-How dare you mess with my friend!GAY.Bando-Friend? After he steals your first duel runner from you, steals your favourite card, leaves you in the sattelite and tries to claim he's the camp when you are? Friend?! I've had better friends in a can of tuna!Jack claims he's camp, and Robo-Bando's bests friends are cans of tuna. *Sigh*VOICE ONLY-Oh no he di'nt!Very camp.Bando-Don't worry (eyes glow blue) I'll show you the true meaning of friendship! I'm your friend, I'll free you from these infantile, fools you call friends! See the light! Yusei-I already have, now make you move.HALLELUJAH!Bando-As you wish, Junk Warrior, attack Speed Warrior! Yusei-Trap card! Scarp Iron Scarecrow.SCARP IRON' SCARECROW! YE-HAW!Bando-I know. Dark Warrior, attack! 3600 Bando-I end my turn with three face-downs. Yusei-Draw! I discard Le.. Bando-..Vel Eater, I know.This is stupid. You might as well quit since Robo-Bando developed unexplained psychic powers and is using it to CHEAT.Yusei-! Then you know who I'm gonna summon... Bando-Quickdraw Synchron. Yusei-What the..? (700). I decrease the level of my Stardust by... Bando-I activate my trap card, Summoning rules. Now, only two special summonings can be conjured each turn. Yusei-(Damn.. Wait, I shouldn't speak in my head, that guy can here me.) Bando-Too true.UGH.......Yusei-Damn, I summon Level Eater (600). I also summon Changer Synchron (0). Bando-Ha ha ha ha! You've really fallen behind, haven't you? Yusei-The best is yet to come, so I switch my Stardust into offence and attack! Bando-Trap card! Tempt to the copyright, now I declare one face-down that might be on your field, if I'm right, then I gain control of it, if I get it wrong, I take 2000 points of damage. Yusei-But you know there's no risk. Bando-Exactly, I choose... Scrap Iron Scarecrow! Yusei-My trap! Bando-Is now mine. So, I activate Scarp Iron Scarecrow. Ha ha ha ha! I'm calling all the shots! Yusei-Not all of them, I activate Pot of Greed. I end my turn with two face-downs. Bando-I draw... Yusei-And I activate, Urgent Tuning. So, I can synchro summon, by using Changer and Eater... Formula Synchron! (200) Bando-HA! That pipsqeek? He oly has 200 attack points.HA pipsqeek oly.Yusei-But when Stardust and Formula synchro, they summon an almighty dragon. Bando-You must be an idiot, you can only synchro on your turn. Ha ha ha ha ha ha.. Yusei-Ever heard of a special ability? Formula Synchron can synchro summon on your Main Phase 1. Bando-So what? You can't beat 6400 attack points! Yusei-Ever heard of another face-down? I synchro summon, Shooting star dragon! (3300) Now, I activate Emergence Break. To destroy, your Megamorph and force you to keep you monster in attack mode. Bando-So? I summon Mid Shield Gardna in defence mode. (1800) That's it.Robo-Bando a total douche.Yusei-I draw, perfect! I send the top three cards of my deck to the grave to activate, Tuner's Revival. Now, I can take three different tuner monsters from my grave, and add them to the top my deck. And I also activate my monsters effect, for each tuner I can find on the top of my deck, my monster can attack. Bando-What? Yusei-So Shooting Star Dragon can attack three times. So, you're done, attack, Mid Sheild Gardna, Junk Warrior and Bando himself! Bando-What? 0What? To have a look at most of the De- monsters Bando used go on realistic cards and keep going until you find De- monsters, soon there will also be spells and traps forum for the De- cards, thank you for reading.Sure no problem. You're okay with spelling and grammar, but your story telling and dialogue need major work. You can't use script formats here, only; "This type of dialogue." said Phantom. You only have speaking anyway, so I have no idea if these two are turbo dueling or what, even why the heck they're dueling in the first place and who's Bando. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted October 7, 2011 Report Share Posted October 7, 2011 Please read the forum rules. This fic is in script format and is nowhere near the needed amount of detail. LOCKED. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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