The White Wolf Posted October 3, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 Seems fine, I would just like more specifics on the bankai appearance would be nice, also range and such for the plasma bolt Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 ...I already changed my app to not include Segunda Etapa...Oh well, just gotta change it back then. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 [b]Username:[/b] Ketodama [b]RP Name:[/b] Carnifex [b]Race:[/b] Arancar [b]Position/Rank:[/b] Primera Espada [b]Age:[/b] 11,603 [b]Personality:[/b] Carnifex, despite his name being Executioner in Latin, is a very laid-back sort of person. More often than not he can be found taking a nap out in the white sands and mostly being left alone, though always accompanied by his Fracciones. When confronted with an one who wishes to fight him, he'll more often than not attempt to persuade them to simply take a nap with him. Those that refuse and choose to insist that he fight them discover how he earned his name. He fights and kills without mercy and without regret, almost always making a meal out of those he defeats through one way or another. [spoiler=Appearance:] He appears to be Mediterranean in origin, having the light olive skin prevalent among the residents of that region. Physically, he bears a light, athletic build that one would expect from someone who intends to keep in shape and exercises regularly to that end. He is entirely unscathed, his skin actually bearing a bit of shine to it, as though it were the healthy coat of a dog. He wears a variation on the typical arrancar garb, that being that he wears a pair of loose-fitting pants and a shirt that seems like it would be fitting for special occasions. The colors are different as well, the clothes being primarily black with white trim on them and a red sash tied 'round his waist. His shirt opens towards the left side of his chest via a silent zipper which is always partially opened to expose the four centimeter diameter hole directly over his heart. His hair is coal black and hangs down to his lower back, neatly groomed to keep out of his face and hang perfectly behind him. His eyes are always and always have been blood red, perhaps granting him a haunting appearance. Towards the back of his lower jaw on either side remain the pieces of what was once his mask, being pitch black with several razor-sharp teeth depicted fitting perfectly over each other. When he speaks, his voice bears the almost lyrical notes of an Italian accent.[/spoiler] [b]Bio:[/b] Carnifex, like all hollows, was once a human. He was born in Italy near the end of the fourth century and lived into the fifth century. When the goths invaded in 408, he was one of those killed. In death, he watched as his wife and daughter were raped and murdered. The anger and hate he felt then drove him to madness and he became a hollow, killing every one of the barbarians in his home and devouring their souls. Shortly afterwards, he was confronted by a Shinigami and devoured them as well. He lived on in that way for five thousand years, far removed from the conflcit in Karakura town as he stayed in or near Italy, picking up on the changing language and accent. He eventually completely switched over to living in Hueco Mundo, keeping the Italian accent he had developed as he did so. There came a time when he grew in power to the point of becoming a Vasto Lorde and reached the level of power required of an Espada on his own. This eventually earned the attention of the actual Espada (around 2000 years before the start of this RP) and they decided to find him. When they did so, the previous Primera Espada found something about him he didn't like and fired a Cero at Carnifex, only to find it devoured by a mouth which opened up directly in front of it. That day also held the former primera's final battle in which he was slain and Carnifex took his place. [b]Zanpakuto Name:[/b] Rey de los Muertos [b]Zanpakuto Appearance:[/b] Rey de los Muertos appears as a thick, pure white broad sword about two and a half feet in length and five inches wide with a stylized cross-guard bearing an intricately detailed skull on either side, and a larger one as the pommel. It rests within a very plain scabbard of the same color which is angled across Carnifex's back at 45 degrees with the hilt down by his right hip. [b]Resurrección Release Phrase: [/b][i]"Sound the Death knell, Rey de los Muertos!"[/i] [spoiler=Resurrección Appearance:] Upon the release of his Resurrección, Carnifex is briefly concealed as what seems to be a pitch black mist envelops him and is revealed as a silent and unfelt breeze pushes it away from him. His fingers, thumbs included, transform into six-inch long claws which bear invisible sections to allow them to continue functioning as fingers. In addition, his body becomes covered from the neck down in a sort of carapace-like armor which fits as if it were his skin and a long tail emerges from the base of his spine, covered in the same carapace material and bearing sections which allow it to move and whip about freely. Finally, the fragments of his mask extend across the base of his chin and below his lower lips, giving him the appearance of possessing a beard of black bone.[/spoiler] [b]Resurrección[/b] [b]Abilities:[/b] Carnifex's strength, speed, and agility are increased substantially upon the release of his Resurrección. In addition his movements become much quieter, producing noise equivalent to his normal movements if he were several meters from whoever is listening while he remains almost directly in their face, and this extends to the sound of his Sonido as well. Finally, he gains the ability to unleash bursts of absolutely black energy which, upon contacting anything which is not a Zanpakutou, or the equivalent of one, will reduce the target to dust but not entirely. If it strikes one's arm, only their arm will become dust. [spoiler=Segunda Etapa Appearance:] Segunda Etapa brings about a substantial change in Carnifex's form. His toes grow out claws identical to those on his hands, minus the sectioning of course. From the tip of his tail a full double-edged crescent blade emerges, six inches wide and three feet across on either side; down his back two rows of half-crescent blades emerge from just below his neck all the way down to just a few inches from the beginning of the blade emerging from his tail. These blades begin being their larges, eight inches in length, at the highest point on his body and reduce to their smallest, an inch and a half long, at the lowest on his tail. Finally, the remnants of his mask completely extend across the lower half of his face to complete a mouth which contains many teeth, all of them sharp as razors. From where the canines would be, a pair of five-inch fangs just as sharp as the other teeth grow forth, poking down over the bottom of the mask.[/spoiler] [b]Segunda Etapa[/b] [b]Abilities:[/b] His agility, speed, and strength are increased exponentially over that which he possesses during his Resurrección. In addition, he has the added ability of unleashing the bursts of energy at a greatly increased rate and with greater potency. The blades across his body, yes that includes the big one on his tail, and the claws upon his hands and feet have a similar effect to these blasts though certainly more potent, able to eat into a Zanpakutou or equivalent surface a little bit with each strike and reduce much larger portions of less resistant surfaces to dust. Finally, every single movement he makes during this release is absolutely silent and even his Sonido produces no sound. [b]Abilities:[/b] As with all Espada, he is able of using all of the basic forms of Cero as well as utilizing a very quiet form of Sonido. In addition, if he is targeted by a Kido-based attack, a mouth will simply open on whatever portion of his body is being targetted and absorb the energy. He can open multiple mouths at once on different portions of his body. [spoiler=Fracciones:] [spoiler=Alexandra] [b]RP Name:[/b] Alexandra [b]Race:[/b] Arrancar [b]Position/Rank:[/b] Fraccion [b]Age:[/b] 23 [b]Personality:[/b] Something of a spas at times, Alexandra tends to be affectionate to almost anyone she comes across that isn't trying to kill her. She has the same opinion of fighting as her master, preferring to avoid it if possible but showing no mercy if it is unavoidable. She can often be found combing or otherwise grooming her master's hair, being the reason that it is so clean. [spoiler=Appearance:] Alexandra wears a simple robe in the style favored by the Arrancar, with the exception that hers bares the same color scheme as her master's. She is thinly built, in the way that one would expect a dancer to be. Her hair is tied back into a long, tight braid which hangs half-way down her back, and her skin bears the light tan of one who spends a fair amount of time in the sun. The remnants of her own mask form an unbroken circlet across her forehead, though they are white rather than black.[/spoiler] [b]Zanpakuto Name:[/b] Bailarina [b]Zanpakuto Appearance:[/b] Bailarina appears as a staff, upon either end of which is a crescent blade about six inches in length. This staff can be broken apart into three sections connected by chains. [b]Resurrección[/b] [b]Release Phrase:[/b] [i]"Dance with me, Bailarina[/i]." [b]Resurrección[/b] [b]Appearance:[/b] Bailarina's Resurrección produces a unique change in Alexandra. Her robe becomes a sort of skin-tight suit akin to what a gymnast wears, still black in color mind you, with an accompanying skirt which reaches half-way down her thighs. Upon her feet a pair of dancing shoes with a four inch blade upon the top and either side of them akin to that present on a Kris. The remnants of her mask also solidify into a crown bearing three points towards the front which curve back over the top of her head. [b]Resurrección[/b] [b]Abilities: [/b]The Resurrección increases Alexandra's agility and speed quite substantially, making an already graceful dancer an even greater threat upon the battlefield as she litterally dances about and strikes with lethal precision. As if this were not enough, every strike from the blades upon her shoes briefly sends a pulse of incredible pain through the whole of the target's body, as well as reducing the mobility of whatever limb is struck. [b]Abilities:[/b] As a dancer, Alexandra is naturally incredibly graceful and agile, able to dance easily around the strikes of her foe and strike around their guard. As with most Arrancar, she is skilled in the use of Sonido and Cero.[/spoiler] [spoiler=Sylvia] [b]RP Name:[/b] Sylvia [b]Race:[/b] Arrancar [b]Position/Rank:[/b] Fraccion [b]Age:[/b] 34 [b]Personality:[/b] Sylvia could be described as a tomboy and she doesn't really care about it. Despite this she tends to be rather critical of "unmanly" things that her master does, such as letting Alexandra play with his hair. She also tends to be brutally honest, not bothering to conceal her opinion even if it could be hurtful to someone else. She can come across as rude, but she does care quite a bit about her master and fellow fraccion. [spoiler=Appearance:] This one bears a more muscular build, that of a martial artist, and wears a pair of tight fitting shorts and a tank-top, copying the color scheme of her master, whilst her hands and feet remain bare. Her mask remains covering the whole of her bottom jaw, though it is white unlike her master's, and bears the more traditional style of teeth seen in such masks. It seems to be the lower-half of a frown or grimmace.[/spoiler] [b]Zanpakuto Name:[/b] Asesina [b]Zanpakuto Appearance:[/b] Asesina takes on the appearance of a pair of axes single-bit axes which bear an arced blade across the front and a four-inch spike jutting out from the back. In addition, a six-foot cord connects the two weapons at the base of the hafts. [b]Resurrección[/b] [b]Release Phrase:[/b] [i]"Rip them to shreds, Asesina!"[/i] [b]Resurrección[/b] [b]Appearance:[/b] When she releases her[i] [/i]Resurrección, Sylvia's garb transforms into something more similar to a Karate student's clothing done in black with a white sash tied 'round her waist. Her hands and feet now become covered in bone-white material similar to that which her mask fragment is composed of, and her mask extends to form a sort of head guard akin to those worn by begining students of the martial arts during sparring matches, though the lower portion with its teeth remain. [b]Resurrección[/b] [b]Abilities: [/b]Her speed is increased quite a bit and her strength is as well, though to a marginally lesser degree. The most astounding change is the increased toughness of her body, being able to shrug off all but the most powerful strikes from bladed weapons as if they were nothing. The final change is that if she strikes an opponent, no matter how it is done, the area immediately covered by the blow begins to heat up. Upon receiving three strikes in the same location, the foe's body will burst into flames though the fire will only cover the afflicted area. [b]Abilities: [/b]Being a martial artist, Sylvia is quite strong and fast, able to deflect many of her enemy's blows with ease and then beat them into the ground with a flury of strikes without much grace. As with Alexandra, she is skilled in using both Sonido and Cero.[/spoiler][/spoiler] [spoiler=Short Beginning:] As was his fashion, Carnifex had found a nice dune a good ways out from the fortress of the Arrancar upon which he could relax for a while. He was laid back with his head just over the top of the dune, not really alone as his Fracciones were accompanying him as they always did when he made his way out into the dunes. Not far off from where he lay, Sylvia had seated herself in a lotus and was deep in meditation, whilst Alexandra sat with her master's head in her lap and was busy combing his hair to the point of perfect straightness and holding a pair of scissors in the hand which was not busy holding the comb and clipping away whatever split ends she found. After a short time, Sylvia seemed to lose patience with the whole thing. "Master, how can you tolerate her doing that to you?" She stated rather flatly, "Most men wouldn't let a woman anywhere near their hair." "Sylvia, you assume that I am interested in being like most men," Carnifex replied in his almost lyrical accent, "In doing so, you are mistaken. However, I am rather curious as to why you find such enjoyment in my hair, Alexandra." As he said this, the young woman grooming him let out a quiet giggle which he could not help but smile in response to. "You have such wonderfully soft hair, master." Came Alexandra's reply as she once more began to comb Carnifex's hair as she hummed a quiet tune to herself. This brought a chuckle out from her master's throat whilst Sylvia simply scoffed and turned away before returning to her meditations. The roman turned Espada simply lay there, now closing his eyes to avoid the boredom of staring at a featureless blue sky.[/spoiler] [b]LADIES AND GENTLEMEN, IT IS TIME TO CLEBRATE BECAUSE MY APP IS FINALLY DONE![/b] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hunderas Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 [quote name='Ketodama' timestamp='1317610303' post='5556722'] [b]LADIES AND GENTLEMEN, IT IS TIME TO CELEBRATE BECAUSE MY APP IS FINALLY DONE![/b] [/quote] woot woot oh wait. I added more to my app like bankai appearance and length of Kessho-en also I might do my lieutenant's app haven't really decided yet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Blu:. Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 Ketodama, looks great to me, accepted on my terms, and very nicely detailed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Simping For Hina Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 I am nearly done with my app, it will be done tomorrow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Blu:. Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 DAE!!!! <3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The White Wolf Posted October 3, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 DAEMON! TOOK YOU LONG ENOUGH LOL I'M USING CAPS LOCK AND DON'T INTEND ON STOPPING Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Blu:. Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 On noez! SSD is in Caps Lock mode! Run! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The White Wolf Posted October 3, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 HELLZ YEAH! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ANBU Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 lol im probably taking too long with myn Dx.. added my fraccione's abilities along with a fusion of them ability that changes depending which one uses first.. (probably OP?) just gotta do my espada's backstory and then add his personality (which ive kinda planned) and make his fracciones personalities ^^' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The White Wolf Posted October 3, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 K, YOU DO THAT Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 I'm guessing you're okay with my app, granted that you haven't said anything to the contrary, Altair. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The White Wolf Posted October 3, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 I was planning on looking it over tomrrow after school, unless Techi or Blu does before meHoly, I see you down there looking at this RP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Techi☺ Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 Holy?... I gave Ketodama's App a look real quick. But I'd like to take a little more time to read it over. (My app definently has more content to add... ) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 Alright, well y'all tell me what ya think. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Techi☺ Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 That doesn't sound like a question... I'll get to fully reading it in an hour or so...I'd accept the first espada app. I don't see it as getting all too OP. (Any character can be played out to be OP... but I trust Keto.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Devack Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 this is every thing but short beginings Username: kinglion73 RP Name: Soren Ragus Race: shinigami Position/Rank: Captain of Squad 11 Age: 133 appears 22 Personality: He is one of the more relaxed captain’s in all the thirteen court guard squad. In side of combat he seems like he has no care. He has access to his bankai but due to the unspoken rule of squad 11 he never pulls out his bankai. Unlike captains before him he won’t just try to overpower his enemy but he’ll still fight people straight up. He never uses both of his zampactos unless he has to. He also slacks on his captain duties at times. Appearance: He has crimson red eyes that look nonchalant 90 percent of the time. He has an average build to him at first glance you would even think of him as a captain let alone captain of squad 11. He has long laid down green hair that go down to the bottom of his neck. He does have some battle wounds on his chest and back from previous battles. Bio: He grew up in the rukan district as a drifter. He spent his time as a youth getting in to fights and running away from soul reaper. He soon attempted several time to get in to the shinigami academy. He finally made it in the academey and almost failed out due to his laid back style. When he got out of the academy, he was recommended to squad eleven while in his squad he raised himself through the ranks. He soon made it to 1st lieutenant when he realized that he could beat him for his spot. Their fight lasted 13 hours straight till soren drew his second sword which no one knew he had because he had never took it out to use. After that fight he became the captain, he started carrying his second sword. Zanpakuto Name: fenikkusu sousei (phoenix twins) Zanpakuto Appearance: Dual swords stashed on both sides of his body. The sword he uses with his left hand has a dark red and black handle while the other has an army green and white handle. The both swords have handle’s hilt is shaped like a bird. Both swords blades look exactly the same. Shikai Release Phrase: flying flames Shikai Appearance: the blades of his swords turn in to glowing red wing blades. The wings look like that of a bird each feather is a blade. The swords shred not cut like the original form. Shikai Abilities: The blade upgrades his power and his speed. The feathers also red hot blades the sheared all they touch. Bankai Release Phrase: Molten destruction doragon Bankai Appearance: it becomes a dual bladed sword. One of the blades is a black dragon while the other is a red dragon. he also has flaming feathers circling around him in an x formation around him. He also grows a flame cape. Bankai Abilities: He can use his mind to control the feathers flying around him. The Feathers can explode when soren tells them too. The feathers are as fast as Soren When he is using his shinkai. He can also use fire in fused with his blades. He also can use his duel blades to control a fire dragon that come out of when his eyes go completely red. Abilities: he is one of the faster captains to go along with his immense power. He knows no kidos because of the fact the squad he’s in. [spoiler=Short Beginning] “Captain when are you’re going to be late for sparing if you don’t get up a move.” Soren looked up at his lieutenant standing over him. “ I know that I was just about to leave if that’s ok with you.” He then stood up and moved as fast as he could to the squad eleven barrack’s training ground. When he got there he saw his third seat holding his zanpakuto. “You know what? I’m challenging you for your seat captain.” The third seat said with a intensity soren had never seen from him in a long time. Soren drew one of his swords and nodded in acceptance of the challenge. The 3rd seat charged at him with all he had. Soren was easily able to block his attack with ease. “You know your epically slow when it comes to attacking” Soren said as hit him in the head with his handle. The 3rd seat was even angry that Soren was holding back. “Why do you hold back!” he yelled that as he activated his shikai. Soren just smiled as he charged at him again. This time he had a giant blade in his hand. Soren pulled out his other sword and was able to block it. " Captian Your going to die here today." the thrid seat took another swing with his sword as soren ducked under it. Soren jumped back and took off his captians jacket and sat it on the ground. he resheathed one of his swords and said, " I still don't need that just yet. " The third seat looked at his captian with an even more charged look than before. " Just give up i really don't want to kill you. Yourmy 3rd seat and i don't find pleasure in killing my subordinates." the third seat then swung his sword as soren jumped over and brought down his sword with enough force to crush a weak hollow. " Captian you call that a strick, I call that you being weak." Soren laughed at this statement," it's not to late for you to ggive up and live because I don't think nice of those who threaten my life." the third seat then jumped up and smashed down towarad Soren. As he side steped the attack, soren thrusterd his blade at the neck of his subordinatent. The third seat was suprised that he missed but even more that there was a blade at his neck." I thought you had gotten soft Kenpachi." Soren kicked the third seat in to a wall and started to leave," trainings over for today and you" ,looking at a new recruit," get some one to clean up this mess." he then looked around at the destuction his third seat caused. he then put back on his captians jacket and walked away from the traiining feild. 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Techi☺ Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 Don't forget your bio too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Devack Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 Completly forgot about bio thought I had aleready did it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hunderas Posted October 3, 2011 Report Share Posted October 3, 2011 arn't all captain's of squad 11 called zaraki or whatever it is for the most blood lustful in the soul society Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Devack Posted October 4, 2011 Report Share Posted October 4, 2011 Other than what I'm missing what you think Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Techi☺ Posted October 4, 2011 Report Share Posted October 4, 2011 It sounds a little flashy for the 11th captain. Don't you think? And flame manipulation(even if it's sourced as a dragon) and many mini-blades are a little used... Don't you think? (it's kind of like byakua's power... only they can freaking expolde?) I can't make heads or tails of it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted October 4, 2011 Report Share Posted October 4, 2011 Squad eleven only has close-combat based Zanpakutou. No Kidou or ranged based ones. Also, when will this be starting? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Devack Posted October 4, 2011 Report Share Posted October 4, 2011 ok i under stand what you all are saying but bankai he hardly goes in to and the flashyness i'm not changing the apperances . . . . . edited Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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