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DEF: One More Shot (New One-Shot: Spliced)

Fusion X. Denver

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@Black

Top 3 picks:

 

1. Stay at home Dad (3rd Place)

2. Therapist (2nd Place)

3. CEO of a large Multi-Billion dollar business (1st Place)

 

Or a Priest iirc.

@Bold: You always have to make a Catholic joke, don't you? =.=

 

Anyways, Therapist/Pastor is my job, stay at home dad would be second choice.

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Black, y u so sour about the one-shot?

 

IMO, though, it was actually really great. Made no real sense, I ecpected it to be a tragic ending (thus making it non-canon) or that iwas a dream of some sort.

 

 

Tho I find it hilarious Black's wife would be calmly chatting with a friend rather than staying by her husband's side.

 

You know, the guy who had his chest recently clawed open.

 

Regardless, I found it enjoyable. Actually made me want to write. /amazing achievement

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Fusion X. Denver

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Hey now, Black is entitled to his opinion. In fact, I WELCOME IT.

IF I PISS YOU OFF, SLAP ME IN THE FACE.

IF MY STORY'S A PIECE OF SH*T, THROW IT IN MY FACE.

MAKE ME MEET MY MAKER. <-I love alliterations.

Jake's Halloween one-shot was better, and I gave up reading his halfway through.

Non-canon has its advantages Well Jake DOES write a good story, he's a worthy opponent.

This was very bland and stupid. How in the hell does Werewolf bite + Woman = Kyuubi?

Wellllll

Bio-chemical mechanics can be complicated, I'll admit I stretched some parts of it.

Like Aka forming that "chakra blast", I felt that was pushing it, but figured science by that point could support such a phenomenon.

So El's already mutated genetics had a different reaction in her system. If El bit Nobuo, he could have turned into an awesome Wild Tiger or something.

But that explanation is really pushing the envelope, won't deny it.

The only person that cared that I was missing, sans Caeda and Amelia, was CREATOR?

It's not that, it's my writing.

I only wrote 1 part, but it's not like Black wasn't going to get lots of visitors later.

I probably should have made it one day rather than two (I actually might go fix that later, it'd make more sense).

Andx stays at the Powerforce, he's not my dog, you started that yourself.

Uhhh

You could consider everyone in Powerforce as his owner?

How does Fuse get off POUTING while my chest is healing from being RIPPED OPEN AND IN THE WOODS FOR OVER A DAY?

Chris is unintentionally inconsiderate all the time.

Come on, you know this.

Better yet, how the hell did I LIVE with my chest ripped open?

It wasn't that deep. He didn't reach Black's rib cage or anything, just a flesh wound.

A big flesh wound, but a flesh wound.

And he's lucky.

At least you kept Caeda in character enough to not go to the party, though she didn't have a single line. Oh, and I worry just as much as she does.

I didn't mean to snub her or anything if that's what you're getting at. I never intend that.

All the more reason Amelia would worry then :T

And last, but CERTAINLY not least, you were just oh so original with the costumes.

HEY

THAT WAS A TRIBUTE TO OUR MAIN PERSONAS, BRO.

IT'D BE BLASPHEMOUS TO DO SO OTHERWI-

ok maybe not blasphemous, but that was my creative choice.

I wanted everyone to be their main, timeless, signature, super-special-awesome character.

The only reason BT was Baraka because he is always Ben Tennyson :T

BTW, where did you get off usi- You know what, I'll just keep that one to myself for now.

Hrm

Using....

Uh

Hrm.

Are you referring to Wiseman?

 

Because if you were, in case you couldn't tell, a lot of stuff in here is set-up. Big things are coming for Yugo and DEF and their friends and shizz.

EDIT: Damn, I had this funny Joker pic from cheezburger.

He's holding Harvey Dent's hands and his gun and the caption says:

IT'S ALL

PART OF THE PLAN

 

But it won't let me use that image extension.

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Super Chaos Sonic

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Alright, right now I'm posting a teaser/trailer of my 2nd installment of Detective Nero. I'm not finished with it, but gives you something to keep you waiting.

 

[spoiler=Detective Nero Oneshot #2 Trailer]

Trailer Music

 

Sonic/Nero: That dream...does it mean anything? A-Are the Vongola members in trouble?

 

Nero Spade returns...with what may be his most difficult case yet.

 

Nero: Ms. Kyosuke, how are you?

 

Katie: Nero, I'm doing fine. Listen...I need you to call Ragna. I-I-I have a major case I need help with...

 

An old friend calls for some help...

 

Katie: Sorry to be like this, but we needed your help.

 

Ragna: We?

 

The Vongola returns from being disbanded...but under bad circumstances...

 

Chase: We each were given a letter. They all said the same thing, only thing that changed was the Vongola ring classification.

 

Lighting Guardian

 

Enjoy your moments of your life...but because you still have the weights of the Vongola of YCM with you, you've become a target. When dusk meets dawn, on the day where life ended, you and your fellow guardians shall no longer exist...then the six gems of the sky will belong to one!

 

Sonic/Nero: Someone is holding a grudge on the Vongola...but who?

 

A threat has been issued...what will this mean for them?

 

Sonic/Nero: Look Lauren, I'm sorry...

 

Lauren: Sorry doesn't cut it Sonic! It won't keep people alive!

 

Sonic/Nero: There's a lot of things going on with this than you guys realize.

 

Will Nero's secret be compromised?

 

Bel: Ushishishishi~ I'm not here to kill you...on the contrary...I'm here to help.

 

Sonic/Nero: They want the Vongola boss...they'll get it.

 

DETECTIVE NERO - The Shattered Vongola!

 

Coming soon to the DEF Oneshot Thread near you!

 

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Fusion X. Denver

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Apologies for not properly replying to everyone yesterday.

 

A Tsuna costume...

 

The Mod Sonic is pimpin'! XD Loved it Fuse!!

Good to hear! You fit Tsuna well more than anyone else I know.

Nobuo should have been in a Wild Tiger costume. Jake never would have found out. I do wonder what happened after that but oh well. Great stuff man. As always. I'll be looking forward to the next.

 

I wish I knew what Wild Tiger was :/

I don't think much happened, it was just 2 friends dancing.

Or was it <w<

I'll get you Wiseman, I always win.

 

Pretty good lead in and explanation as to why I would hate him.

 

btw You should do a Wiseman Bio.

More like a tie in, but yes, Creator hates Wiseman.

He's not the only one either. He's the second character I've had who's had more than 1 "rival" (first being Xazeon).

Wiseman bio will be out after I release the 1st installment (which is being worked on now).

Is it just me or was Creators entrance a lot like Pain's?

 

And why was there such a lack of Valentine in this Halloween?

 

 

I did like the whole nine tails tie in though :3

 

Now if we had more Uchiha...I keed

 

But how come the children had zero screen time in their own universe?

 

Creator=Pain?

More like Sage Naruto, but yeah, it was a cool entrance.

And as always, I didn't mean to snub anyone with minor screentime or whatnot. I basically started out the one-shot with turning El and Aka into werebeasts and deciding who'd fight them. El should fight DL because smex and then his own wife. And Aka should fight Chris because smex and Cortez was the best man at their wedding, so after that, I just wrote the story and put people in where I could see fit.

At least someone liked Kyuubi Aka :T

The children had no screentime because I didn't need them, I guess.

I enjoy the fact that every major event happens at the Hotel.

 

Also the Alucard costume is okay, but I'd probably be Freddy instead . . .

 

What about me? What was I dressed as?

 

The Hotel is where it's at, bro.

I've always known you as Alucard, so that's why I went with him.

Lora, you seemed to have no costume, but you had this contraption around your gut where a fake alien worm would pop out and screech.

...or a mermaid.

Whatever works.

 

Black, y u so sour about the one-shot?

 

IMO, though, it was actually really great. Made no real sense, I ecpected it to be a tragic ending (thus making it non-canon) or that iwas a dream of some sort.

 

 

Tho I find it hilarious Black's wife would be calmly chatting with a friend rather than staying by her husband's side.

 

You know, the guy who had his chest recently clawed open.

 

Regardless, I found it enjoyable. Actually made me want to write. /amazing achievement

 

She can't get a cup of coffee for a minute?

Good point though.

And good to hear!

 

I still have no internet :/

@Remo-Tinypic's blocked at my school.

 

EDIT: WAIT WAIT I forgot to look at Sonic's preview.

One sec

That was good shizz.

Looking forward to it bro.

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I wish I knew what Wild Tiger was :/

I don't think much happened, it was just 2 friends dancing.

Or was it <w<

 

It WAS just a dance! He asked me ... didn't want to be rude ...

 

The Hotel is where it's at, bro.

You know it! (XD)

I've always known you as Alucard, so that's why I went with him.

Yeah it didn't bother me, though again Freddy would've worked.

Lora, you seemed to have no costume, but you had this contraption around your gut where a fake alien worm would pop out and screech.

...or a mermaid.

Whatever works.

 

I think Vampiress would work since Dad was Alucard. I could've been Seras.

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Desu the Blue Nerd

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This is Wild Tiger

[spoiler=Wild Roar!]

Be glad it was this one and not this extremely inappropriate one that made me want to vomit.

473387-tiger_bunny_wild_tiger.jpg

 

P.S. I like blue.

 

ALRIGHT!

 

I added part 2 of Play the Tape.

 

It's about 2.5k words, logner than the Prologue and Part 1 combined xD

 

Yes, Nobuo, Remo, and Chase got in it... Sorta for Remo and Chase.

 

I'll check it out.

 

And to Lora...Me ASK you? F*ck no. You'd probably ask me just to freak me out with that alien thing popping out of your stomach. :/

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Nice job on the story Black. Things are getting interesting. Can't say I'm really that big on the idea that everybody turned into what they were dressed as. And my fight is okay since it's self defense. B)

 

You asked me to dance ... I just scared you because I thought it was funny.

 

<- is ignoring the two bickering

So it is taking longer to write my work than I thought . . .

 

But...it didn't really happen. It was in a story. And it wasn't really explained. You can't say it as if you're positive it happened like that. -__-

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