Yogg-Saron Posted June 5, 2007 Report Share Posted June 5, 2007 Characters:Name:Lu WangAge:19Deck:Beasts RampageBio:A young man of Asian descent. This mysterious teen is the star of the show! Name:Mrs. WangAge:45 Deck:FairyBio:Lu Wang's mother. She may be a mom but she sure can duel! Name:Noph ExileAge:18Deck: GravekeppersBio:Bad guy. He hangs around the town graveyard all the time Name:Debbie WatsonAge:18Deck: Heavy ArtillaryBio:Likes Exile (Noph Exile). But Lu likes her. She has a bad temper Name:Bull NickAge:65Deck:BeatdownBio:Card shop owner. Deck can pack quite a punch........if he ever used it. Name:Mr. WatsonAge:47Deck:MouseBio:Debbie's dad. Likes Mrs. Wang Name:Hemphrey Thomas (Thomas)Age:16Deck:WeakBio:This is a new kid in town. He hasnt quite built up a "good" deck yet though. Name:Lil' RaptorAge:26Deck:DinosaurBio:Rex Raptor's son Name:Worm UnderwoodAge:24Deck:InsectBio:Wevil Underwood's son Will add more as the story progresses....----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------Episode 1: When duty calls As the story unfolds you see a beautiful sunrise over the mountains."Yawnnnnnn", Lu says weirly "w--wa--wait. Todays when the competition to go on to the regional is at the card shop." He quickly gets on his cloths and grabs his deck. While he is going out of the house door his mother stops him "Now were do you think your going. Hmmm," sneered Mrs. Wang. "I am going to the Yu-Gi-Oh competition at the card shop," Lu sneered back."Your going to make me be late mom." "Young man when I told you no more dealing with that Yu-Gi.....whatever you called it until I see you doing something recreational. I dont want you coped up all summer playing that card game. Now if I catch you at the card shop you can say bye bye to all the cards in your room" "But mom..." Lu begged "But nothing you will not go to that card shop and thats final" Mrs. Wang yelled "Yes mother"Lu said sadly. After this Lu was walking through downtown. He could here the kids laughing and having a good time in the card shop.Suddenly he heard something behind him. He turned around quickly and was startled "Oh hey Bull" Lu said in a soft voice. "Whats wrong Lu?"Bull asked. "Nothing its just im not allowed in your card shop anymore because my mom says I need to do something "recreational". "Hmm....bummer" Bull said "well im not really the one to do this but since it is getting a little hetic in there I thought I would duel someone. Are you up for it?" "Sure!" Lu said loudly----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------Lu's LP=4000Bull's LP=4000Let the duel begin! Lu goes first:Okay I lay 2 facedowns. Now I play one defence position monster and end my turn Bull's Turn:I draw then I play Nobleman of Crossout wich lets me remove your facedown monster from the duel and also if it has a flip effect you have to remove all copys of that monster from your deck. Ah it seems it is just a D. D. Trainer. Well now I play Vorse Raider [1900/1200] in attack mode and attack your LP directly. Lu:Not so fast I activate my trap Mirror Force wich destroys your Vorse RaiderBull:Grrr....I lay one face down and end my turnLu draws:I activate the spell card Pot of Greed now I play Reactor Effect wich allows me to pick one card from your hand and discard it and if it is a monster I can special summon it to my side of the field.Bull: I activate my face down card Awakening wich allows me to negate Reactor Effect.Lu: Rats....Okay I play Gene - Warped Warwolf in attack mode [2000/100] and attack you directly and end my turn Bull LP=2000 Bull:Aww man.......I play Raigeki wich destroys your Gene - Warped Warwolf and now I activate my trap Call of the Haunted and take my Vorse Raider now I attack you directly and play a face down I end my turn. Lu Lp=2100 Lu:Okay I activate Graceful Charity wich allows me to draw 3 cards and discard 2 now I play monster reborn to take my Buster Blader from the graveyard to the field and now I attack your Vorse Raider and I end my turn. Bull LP=1300 Bull: Alright I draw then I activate my trap Jar of Greed wich allows me to draw one card. Now I play Thousand Eyes IdolLu:Phh..whats that going to do hahaBull:Its going to do this I activate a spell card called Creature Swap wich swaps our monsters now I attak Thousand Eyes Idol with Buster Blader.......... To be continued..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Professor Cobra Posted June 5, 2007 Report Share Posted June 5, 2007 Okay. When someone talks, put 'Insert name here said, says, etc.' Good duel too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yogg-Saron Posted June 6, 2007 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2007 continued Bull: Okay Buster Blader attack Thousand Eyes Idol.........Lu: Not so fast I activate Raigeki Break wich by discarding one card from my hand I can destroy Buster Blader.......Bull: Grr......It cant end like this I end my turnLu:Alright I summon another Gene - Warped Warwolf from my hand and attack you directly........ Bull falls back and Lu helps him upBull:That was a good duel Lu you have learned alot since moving hereLu:Th-thank youBull: Sure thing also if your not allowed in the card shop I figured I might as well do this for you Bull hands Lu a box of yugioh packs Lu:OMG!!! Thank you so much BullBull: Your welcome besides yugioh has been getting less and less popular in this town pretty soon it will all be away and in our historyLu: Geez....hope that never happensBull: Alot of people hope for stuff but usually never get itLu: Okay........I better get going my moms probally wondering were I am by now.Bull: See yaLu: Bye Lu is walking past the card shop when suddenly the door of the shop opens and bonks Lu on the head. Lu gets knocked out. Kid........KID!!......... Lu:Huh.....wh-what happenedOther kid: Im so sorry kid I guesse I should watch if theres someone behind the door next time my names Hemphrey Thomas you can call me TomLu: Oh....Hi TomTom:Im new here and I was just checking out the card shop. I love yugiohLu: Wow me to.......well thanks for checking on me Tom but I have to get home quick or my mom is going to kill meTom: Me too.....well byeLu: Bye hope to see you again Lu walks in and to his suprise his mom is haveing a duel with a guy :shock: ............. To be continued Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yogg-Saron Posted June 6, 2007 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2007 Anyone like it :cry: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silencerleader Posted June 6, 2007 Report Share Posted June 6, 2007 Nice fanfic...creative and good :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yogg-Saron Posted June 7, 2007 Author Report Share Posted June 7, 2007 continued Lu: What are you doing momMrs. Wang:Oh Lu you are home early I thou---Lu: thought I was at the card shopMrs. Wang:Yes, were you?Lu: No m'am I had a duel with the card shop owner thoughMrs. Wang:Sigh. Always caught up in yugiohLu: But mom you can not be talking about yugioh when your playing as wellMrs. Wang:Do not worry about what I do just go to your room I will tell you when supper is readyLu: Whatever Mrs. Wang:Whatever thats what they all say you can never teach them anythingMan: I understand m'am would you like me to leave?Mrs. Wang: Oh no Mr. Watson dont leave lets do that duel first....Mr. Watson: Yes m'am....... Mr.Watson LP=4000Mrs. Wang LP=4000 Mr. Watson:Ladys first Mrs. WangMrs. Wang: You can call me Lily and how about yourselfMr. Watson:Just call me FredLily:Okay I draw then lay 2 face downs I then play Dancing Fairy in attack mode and end my turn Fred:Okay I draw then activate Raigeki wich destroys your Dancing Fairy I lay 2 face downs then set a monster. I end my turn. Lily:Okay I play Hysteric Fairy then attack your face down.....Fred:Not so fast I activate Negate Attack.....Lily: Like that is going to stop me I activate one of my face downs Seven Tools of the Bandit wich negates your negate attack. Continue with the attack......Fred: You just attacked my Man-Eater Bug now with its effect I destroy your Hysteric Fairy.Lily:Why must you treat a lady like that I end my turn.... Fred:I draw then activate Shiens Castle of Mist wich is a field card. Now I activate my other face down Ultimate Offering wich lets me do one extra normal summon or set for 500 LP. I summon The Six Samurai - Zanji then activate Ultimate offering to summon The Six Samurai -Irou in attack mode. Now Irou and Zanji attack directly.......Lily: I activate Waboku wich causes all damage to go to zero....Fred: Gosh I end my turn... Lily: I draw then I set a monster your turn.... Fred:Okay I draw then summon The Six Samurai - And it is able to attack directly now Yariza attack directlyNow I attack your face down with Irou and because of its effect it automaticly destroys your card....Now Zanji attack directly..... Fred LP=3500Lily LP=2200 Lily:My turn I draw then play Goblin Attack Force and attack your Six Samurai Zanji.....Fred:I activate his effect if there is another Six Samurai on the field I can target a different Six Samurai and I target Yariza.Lily:I end my turn Fred LP=2200Lily LP=2200 Fred: I draw then play Lightning Blade and equip it to Zanji....I attack with Zanji attack directly.........Nice duel Lily Lily: I cant believe I lostFred: Its okay everbody loses......... to be continued Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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Professor Cobra Posted June 7, 2007 Report Share Posted June 7, 2007 Like me, you use actual cards. I like that. 8/10 Could be more be little longer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yogg-Saron Posted June 10, 2007 Author Report Share Posted June 10, 2007 continued Lu:Hey mom can you come up here for a little bit!Lily:Sure Lu give me one minute! I am so sorry Fred but it looks like you have to leave.Fred:Yes m'am I understand Fred leaves and Lily heads up to Lu's room. Lily:Knock Knock coming inLu:Oh hey mom can I ask you somethingLily: Sure sweetie!Lu: Umm....that guy was he like your.....Lily: BoyfriendLu: Yeah....Lily: No sweetie he was just an old work buddie there is absolutely no relationship.Lu: Okay just wondering.....Lily: Now pumpkin I know its a little tough without a father but do you have a problem with Fred coming over.Lu: Fred? Thats his name.... why were you two dueling?......but no I have no problem.....Lily: We were just having a nice duel to talk and catch up.......if you need anything else just yell.Lu: Yes m'am thanks.Lily: No problem As Lu takes a nap he has a dream Lu:Huh.........were.....am I?Voice:You are in the forbbiden realm leave immediatly.......Lu: Who are you?Voice: None of that matters. NOW LEAVE!!!Lu: Show yourself!Voice: No. But if we have a duel and you win I will tell you my identity and tell you how to get out. If you lose however, you will spend all eterinty in the forbidden realm A duel field appears between Lu and the darkness were the voice is coming from. Voice: I will let you go firstLu: Okay I draw. Hmm......I set one monster in defence position and lay 3 face downs and end my turnVoice: Tsk Tsk such an ametaur move I activate my spell Golden Dragon's Will.Lu: Wh--what does that do.Voice: You will find out in 2 turns. But for now I lay one face down and then summon Red Mountain Dragon (1900/1000) and attack your face down.......Lu: You just destroyed my Simbo's Monkey wich allows me to inflict damage to you for half of the attack of the monster who destroyed this card wich means you get 950 damage to your LP Voices LP=7050 Voice: Ok I now play 2 face downs and end my turn.Lu:Okay I draw then remove Simbo's Monkey from play to summon Simbo's Monkey Gaurd [5 stars (200/200)]Voice:Ha whats that going to do to my Red Mountain Dragon.lLu:You will see I activate its effect to discard my entire hand and for every trap that was sent to the Graveyard this monster gains 1000 attack and there was no traps in my hand.Voice: You just wasted your own effectLu: Not neccesarily I activate my face down. Return of the Cards what this card does is allow me to pick cards out of my Deck whos total cards were in my hand at the time I dicared them.....That means I can pick 2 cards out of my deck to add to my hand and I take Greed of the Terrance, and another Greed of the Terrance. Both of wich are trapsVoice: Then that means........Lu: Yes I use Simbo's Monkey Gaurd's effect and send my 2 cards to my grave. Simbos Monkey Gaurd(2200/200)Now I attack your Red Mountain Dragon. And end my turn and oh did I foreget about Greed of the Terrance's effect at the end phase of the turn this card is discarded from my hand I can draw 2 cards wich means I can draw 4 cards. Now I officially end. Voice Lp=6750Lu Lp=8000 Voice: Finally I was wondering when you would stop blabering.....I activate one of my face downs Dragons Cradle wich allows me to remove 1 monster card from my deck from play for 3 turns and then at the end of the 3 turns I can Special Summon it to the field. I choose Golden Dragon's Gaurd. I then set one monster and end my turn.Lu: Hmm....I play one face down then summon Servant of Simbo in attack mode (500/1700)Voice: Phh...another weaklingLu: Not for long I activate its ability by paying 1000 of my life points I can destroy any monster on the field. And I choose your set monster! to be continued Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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darkguy00000 Posted June 10, 2007 Report Share Posted June 10, 2007 continued Lu: What are you doing momMrs. Wang:Oh Lu you are home early I thou---Lu: thought I was at the card shopMrs. Wang:Yes' date=' were you?Lu: No m'am I had a duel with the card shop owner thoughMrs. Wang:Sigh. Always caught up in yugiohLu: But mom you can not be talking about yugioh when your playing as wellMrs. Wang:Do not worry about what I do just go to your room I will tell you when supper is readyLu: Whatever Mrs. Wang:Whatever thats what they all say you can never teach them anythingMan: I understand m'am would you like me to leave?Mrs. Wang: Oh no Mr. Watson dont leave lets do that duel first....Mr. Watson: Yes m'am....... Mr.Watson LP=4000Mrs. Wang LP=4000 Mr. Watson:Ladys first Mrs. WangMrs. Wang: You can call me Lily and how about yourselfMr. Watson:Just call me FredLily:Okay I draw then lay 2 face downs I then play Dancing Fairy in attack mode and end my turn Fred:Okay I draw then activate Raigeki wich destroys your Dancing Fairy I lay 2 face downs then set a monster. I end my turn. [b']Lily:Okay I play Hysteric Fairy then attack your face down.....Fred:Not so fast I activate Negate Attack.....Lily: Like that is going to stop me I activate one of my face downs Seven Tools of the Bandit wich negates your negate attack. Continue with the attack......Fred: You just attacked my Man-Eater Bug now with its effect I destroy your Hysteric Fairy.Lily:Why must you treat a lady like that I end my turn.... Fred:I draw then activate Shiens Castle of Mist wich is a field card. Now I activate my other face down Ultimate Offering wich lets me do one extra normal summon or set for 500 LP. I summon The Six Samurai - Zanji then activate Ultimate offering to summon The Six Samurai -Irou in attack mode. Now Irou and Zanji attack directly.......Lily: I activate Waboku wich causes all damage to go to zero....Fred: Gosh I end my turn... Lily: I draw then I set a monster your turn.... Fred:Okay I draw then summon The Six Samurai - Yariza And it is able to attack directly now Yariza attack directlyNow I attack your face down with Irou and because of its effect it automaticly destroys your card....Now Zanji attack directly..... Fred LP=3500Lily LP=2200[/b] Lily:My turn I draw then play Goblin Attack Force and attack your Six Samurai Zanji.....Fred:I activate his effect if there is another Six Samurai on the field I can target a different Six Samurai and I target Yariza.Lily:I end my turn Fred LP=2200Lily LP=2200 Fred: I draw then play Lightning Blade and equip it to Zanji....I attack with Zanji attack directly.........Nice duel Lily Lily: I cant believe I lostFred: Its okay everbody loses......... to be continued Ok, you've messed up the LP count. Seven Tools costs 1000 Life Points to activate, plus you didn't subtract for Yariza's attack. As for the lack of interest people seem to be showing, that's due to the shortness of chapters I think. Try making your chapters three or four times longer, but not more than that, or people will lose interest. K? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Professor Cobra Posted June 11, 2007 Report Share Posted June 11, 2007 I will agree will darkguy00000. I would add more a little more storyline or make longer duels. (your choice) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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