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Right align, por favor.

 

It's a type of prologue I'd expect to see in a movie or television show; not in a written piece. In other words, it is not a prologue. It's blatant description.

 

Your missing some punctuation in places and you need to use paragraphs.

 

I've got no idea what this story is about and no intention to keep reading. In other words: your prologue did not perform its most basic function.

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