fireraven23 Posted August 22, 2011 Report Share Posted August 22, 2011 [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left]This is my idea for something completely new. It takes place over the Zexal thing. If I get enough good comments (2 or 3 should do) I might write another chapter. Hope you enjoy it! [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [spoiler='Chapter 1- Introduction']"“[size=3]D-Gazers set! Duel start!” That was Chad Wolfgang Phaux (Foh). He's a sixteen year old high school student with a wish of becoming Tag Duel Champion with his sister, and using that power to heal people. His hair is spiked in random directions, is red at the base and yellow above that, much like a fire. His eyes were sharp, in an intimidating way, and were a dark enough brown to almost be black. He was having a duel with his sister Amber. Amber is a 17 year old high school student, also hoping to be Tag Duel Champion. She hopes to use that power to save peoples lives. She has grass green hair, that reaches slightly past her shoulder. Her eyes were innocent and shy, and were a bright sky blue. Let's get to the duel now.[/size] [left][left][size=3][b]Chad Phaux: 4000[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Amber Phaux: 4000[/b][/size] [/left][/left] [left][left][size=3]“I go first then. Draw!” Chad drew his card. “Alright, I summon Flame Manipulator in attack mode!” The Flame Manipulator was Chad's favorite card. It is a dark skinned boy with a loose purple muscle shirt and blue jeans. It is quite weak. But, Chad's deck is about powering it up. This deck use to belong to his father.[/size] [size=3][b]Flame Manipulator[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Level 3[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Spellcaster/Fire[/b][/size] [size=3][b]No Effect[/b][/size] [size=3][b]900/1000[/b][/size] [size=3]“I'll set two cards face down and end my turn.”[/size] [size=3]“Alright, my turn then. Draw!” Amber yelled. There father works for Industrial Illusions, the company that makes and releases the cards. Because of this, her father made you a personal deck. Right now, she had an extremely lucky hand.[/size] [size=3]“I summon Crystal Kingdom – Spy in attack mode!” A thin man appeared in a wool outfit, with a color mixture of green and red. [/size] [size=3][b]Crystal Kingdom – Spy[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Level 2[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Warrior/Effect/Earth[/b][/size] [size=3][b]You must pay 500 life points to use this cards effect. You can send this card to your[/b][/size] [size=3][b]opponents side of the field. When you do, your opponent reveals all face down cards[/b][/size] [size=3][b]and all cards in his/her hand. Your opponent cannot activate spell or trap cards the turn[/b][/size] [size=3][b]you activate this effect. This effect can only be used once while this card is face up on the field.[/b][/size] [size=3][b]If you control an Amber Queen or Jade King, you do not have to pay life points.[/b][/size] [size=3][b]200/300[/b][/size] [size=3]“Now I use my spies effect.” Amber sacrificed 500 life points. A coin flew out from the sky and fell into the spies hand. The spy ran over to Chads side of the field. His two face down cards came up, and his hand appeared behind him. His face down cards were Sea of Flames and Wall of Fire.[/size] [size=3][b]Sea of Flames[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Trap[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Activate only when your opponent declares an attack while you control a face up[/b][/size] [size=3][b]attack position Flame Manipulator. Destroy the monster, and inflict damage to your[/b][/size] [size=3][b]opponent equal to that monsters attack.[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Wall of Fire[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Trap[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Activate only when your opponent declares an attack while you control a face up defense position[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Flame Manipulator. Destroy the attacking monster.[/b][/size] [size=3]“Darn it!” Yelled Chad. He planned on stopping any attack using those traps.[/size] [size=3]“Next I activate Crystal Kingdom – Proclamation!” Yelled Amber[/size] [size=3][b]Crystal Kingdom – Proclamation[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Spell[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Special Summon one Amber Queen and one Jade King from your deck or hand. Destroy them[/b][/size] [size=3][b]during the end phase[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Jade King[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Level 8[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Warrior/Earth[/b][/size] [size=3][b]No effect[/b][/size] [size=3][b]3000/2800[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Amber Queen[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Level 8[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Warrior/Earth[/b][/size] [size=3][b]No Effect[/b][/size] [size=3][b]2500/2100[/b][/size] [size=3]A woman that, looks a lot like Amber, in a light-red armor and a sword (in a sheath)appeared, next to a man, that looks like Chad, in green armor appeared next her her.[/size] [size=3]“I attack Flame Manipulator with Jade King!" Amber yelled. The Jade King pulled his sword out of his Sheath. It was green and shiny. It seemed polished to the point were Chad could see his reflection in it. He then lunged to Chad's side of the field and slashed the Flame Manipulator in half, which then shattered.[/size] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left][b][size=3]Amber Phaux: 3500[/size][/b] [b][size=3]Chad Phaux: 2100[/size][/b] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left][size=3]"Now Amber Queen! Destroy Flame Manipulator!" Amber Queen pulled out her sword, which was red and actually quite rough. It appeared as if the Amber Queen found a slab of a pointy stone, and added a handle to it. She jumped at Crystal Kingdom - Spy, and stabbed him.[/size] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left][size=3][b]Amber Phaux: 3500[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Chad Phaux: -200[/b][/size] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left][size=3]“Nice try Chad, but you'll never beat me.” Amber said, with some attitude. “I know I'll get you one of these days. In fact, I challenge you aga-” Chad was interrupted by the bell.[/size] “[size=3]Darn. Okay, see ya' later sis!” Meanwhile, across town.[/size] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left]“[size=3]No!” A man yelled.[/size] “[size=3]Now succumb to the Alchemy World!” The other man said. One of them was wearing a dark cloak, while the other was in a white T-shirt. The one in the T-shirt fell through the ground.[/size] “[size=3]I await two more souls to fall into my trap. Maybe a Tag Duel will work...”[/spoiler][/size] [size=3][spoiler= [/size]'Chapter 2 - A Duel With The Devil'][size=3]After school, Chad and Amber were walking home. As they were walking, 2 men were in there way. One was in a dark cloak, and the other was familiar. The man was very young, maybe even in high school. He had blue hair that comes off the side of his head and then spikes up. It was blue. He had a dark blue jacket. Under it, was a black shirt, along with some dark pants. “OH MY GOD! YOU'RE SHARK! NATIONAL CHAMPION OF JAPAN!”Excitedly said Chad. Since he wants to be Tag Duel Champion, he looks up to anyone named champion. He looked closely at him.... His eyes.... were black!? They were pure black, and every nerve and vain were visibly colored red! The man in the cloak walked forward. He put down his hood. It revealed long purple hair, with green blotches in random spots.[/size] “Hello. My name is Waru Misu.” Waru said. [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left][size=3]“Huh?” Amber asked.[/size] [size=3]“In my quest for power, I require souls. You two will do perfectly. ALCHEMY FIELD ACTIVATE!” Waru yelled. Suddenly, a bright light appeared under them. It then took different shapes. The largest one was a circle. It surrounded everyone. There were four rectangles, each next to a different person. There were these strange symbols on the outside of the circle. The symbols were mirrors of each other. And finally, there was a much smaller circle in the center. They looked out. None of the clouds were moving. There was a sprinkler on, but it stopped in mid-air. Time itself has stopped.[/size] [size=3][b]Waru Misu and Ryoga Kamishiro[/b][/size] [size=3][b]vs[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Amber Phaux and Chad Phaux[/b][/size] [size=3]“Here's what happens. We each have our own deck. We throw our cards to the center. Through the process of Transmutation, which will turn the card into it's actual monster, or activating it's effect. I'll go first to demonstrate. Oh, by the way, there's no need for D-Gazers. Draw!” Explained Waru.[/size] [size=3]“I summon Baby Daedalus in attack mode!” He threw the card into the circle in the center. It melted into the ground. Suddenly, a small blue dragon-like creature sprouted from the ground.[/size] [size=3][b]Baby Daedalus[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Level 3[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Sea Serpent/Effect/Water[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Once per turn, while you control a phase up Umi, select one Sea Serpent, Aqua, or Fish[/b][/size] [size=3][b]monster on your side of the field. Until your opponents next end phase, that monster[/b][/size] [size=3][b]cannot be destroyed by battle.[/b][/size] [size=3][b]1300/1200[/b][/size] [size=3]Suddenly, behind Waru and Shark, one of the symbols began glowing. It was an upside down triangle. Or maybe it was right side up, and they were at the wrong angle. Then they realized that the same symbol was glowing on Baby Daedalus. Specifically on it's head. “I end my turn with that.”[/size] “My turn then. Draw!” Said Amber. She had an unusual amount of courage. Usually around strangers, she would stutter up, and shrivel down. Something was making her brave [size=3]“Amber, what's wrong?” Chad said.[/size] [size=3]“Chad, when I'm dueling with you, you give me good courage.” She said. She drew her card.[/size] [size=3]“I put one monster face down and end my turn.” She threw a card into the circle. It melted in. The card came out from it, being much larger. It then flew in front of her.[/size] [size=3]“My turn then. Draw!” Creepily said Shark. It sounded as if his voice echoed. He drew his card.[/size] [size=3]“I summon Big Jaws in attack mode!” A shark, with a large, sharp dorsal fin and ginormous teeth came from the circle. It had the same sign on it as Baby Daedalus. [/size] [size=3][b]Big Jaws[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Level 3[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Fish/Effect/Water[/b][/size] [size=3][b]At the end of the battle phase, if this card attacked, banish it[/b][/size] [size=3][b]1800/900[/b][/size] [size=3]“Now I create the overlay network with the monsters!” Baby Daedalus and Big Jaws turned into a blue energy, which flew up into the air. The circle in the center widened, nearly touching everyone. The blue energy flew down, hitting the circle. The circle started glowing red. [/size] [size=3]“I XYZ summon Submersible Carrier Aero Shark!” Suddenly, 2 large sharks, connected by a machine flew out from the ground, and floated above Shark. It had 2 small balls of light circling it. It had the same sign on it as Big Jaws and Baby Daedalus.[/size] [size=3][b]Submersible Carrier Aero Shark[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Rank 3[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Fish/Effect/XYZ/Water[/b][/size] [size=3][b]One per turn: you can detach 1 XYZ material monster from this card;[/b][/size] [size=3][b]inflict 400 damage to your opponent for each card in your hand.[/b][/size] [size=3][b]1900/1000[/b][/size] [size=3]“Next I use Aero Shark's effect!” 1 of the balls of light flew into the center of the machine. Suddenly, 5 missiles came out from the machine. They split apart into ten, and hit both Amber and Chad.[/size] [size=3][b]Waru and Ryoga: 4000[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Chad and Amber: 2000[/b][/size] [size=3]“HAHAHAHAHA! Next turn, you two will lose!” It was true. Waru had 4 cards in his hand. He would draw a card, and use it's effect one last time. They needed a miracle. [/size] [size=3]“Aero Shark! Attack the face down monster!” It flew down. Suddenly, an old man wearing rags appeared on the field. It had an upside down triangle with a slash at the bottom on it's head. The same side behind Amber began glowing. [/size] [size=3]“You attacked my Crystal Kingdom – Beggar, activating it's effect!”[/size] [size=3][b]Crystal Kingdom – Beggar[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Level 2[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Warrior/Effect/Earth[/b][/size] [size=3][b]If this card is attacked while face down, half the attack of the attacking monster,[/b][/size] [size=3][b]and add half of the attack of the attacking monster to this cards defense.[/b][/size] [size=3][b]800/1000[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Crystal Kingdom – Beggar[/b][/size] [size=3][b]New Attack: 800/1950[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Submersible Carrier Aero Shark[/b][/size] [size=3][b]New Attack: 950/1000[/b][/size] [size=3]The beggar knocked Aero Shark over onto Shark.[/size] [size=3][b]Waru and Ryoga: 3000[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Amber and Chad: 2000[/b][/size] [size=3]“It doesn't matter what you do. No matter what, you will lose!” Yelled Shark. “Fine then. Your turn, Chad.”[/size] [size=3]“Alright, draw!” Chad then started thinking: “Dammit. I don't have a plan to stop it's effect. What can I do!?” Suddenly, Chad had a vision. [/size] [size=3]He was in a room. There was a door behind him. At the end of the room, there were two things: a painting, and a display case. The painting was of him and Amber. He was in a doctors coat, saving people from sickness. In the display case, were two items: One was a strange red card, and the other was an unusual item. It was a ring, with a triangle inside it, which had an eye on it. At the bottom, were 5 pointy things. On top, was a circle, with a string through it. He has seen this vision in his dreams before, but this time, he had an urge to destroy the display case. He broke it open with his fists, grabbed the items, and woke up.[/size] [size=3]Meanwhile, Amber was having a similar vision. Except in this one, the painting was of her and her brother, saving people from an armed robbery. The items in the display case was a red card, and a ball, with an eye on it. She did the same thing as Chad, and took them. She as well woke up.[/size] [size=3]Back in reality, Chad looked around. He looked down. He was wearing the ring! Another strange site as well, for his Extra Deck was glowing! He opened it up and found the red card. It was in a strange language. He then started hearing stuff in his head, telling him what to do.[/size] [size=3]At the same time, Amber was having trouble seeing. She grabbed the eye hidden behind her hair. It was gone! There was something else in it's place. And her extra deck was also glowing. She pulled it out. It was at first written in an unknown language, but it started rearranging itself into English. [/size] [size=3]“Alright, I summon Flame Manipulator in attack mode!” Chad yelled. All of this was coming from a voice in his head. [/size] [size=3][b]Flame Manipulator[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Level 3[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Spellcaster/Fire[/b][/size] [size=3][b]No effect[/b][/size] [size=3][b]900/1000[/b][/size] [size=3]“Next I equip Attribute Changer on Crystal Kingdom – Beggar!”[/size] [size=3][b]Attribute Changer[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Spell/Equip[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Change the equipped monsters attribute to one of your choice[/b][/size] [size=3]“I change it's attribute to Light.” Suddenly, the upside down triangle on his head turned right side up, had a line grow out of the bottom, and had 2 lines going through the other line. The same sign started glowing behind Chad, and the other triangle stopped glowing.[/size] [size=3]“Now I use the Life Force of my monsters!”[/size] [size=3]“Huh?” Everyone exclaimed. Suddenly, glowing, light blue strings came from the chests.They started spiraling up between the monsters.[/size] [size=3]“I Life Force summon Number 23: Dr. Reviver!” A man in a doctors coat appeared. At first, the sign on Crystal Kingdom – Spy was on Dr. Reviver's hand. But then, it shattered and was replaced with a fancy looking '23'.[/size] [size=3]Quick description of Life Force Monsters: Life Force monsters are a special kind of monsters. They are made from a persons mind. Lets use Dr. Reviver as an example. He is a Light Spellcaster monster. You need 1 Light Attribute monster and 1 Spellcaster monster. You cannot use the same monster (must use 2 different monsters). Those monsters are known as Life Force users. You make the Life Force Users attack and defense 0. Activating it's effect is by giving a number of attack back to one of the Life Force User monster. If all Life Force User monsters are destroyed, destroy the Life Force Monster. If your Life Force User gains all it's Attack and Defense back, you cannot use it's effect.[/size] [size=3][b]Number 23: Dr. Reviver[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Current Level: 5[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Spellcaster/Effect/Life Force/Light[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Effect Unreadable[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Current Attack: 100/2850[/b][/size] [size=3]“What creature is this?!” Waru yelled. Chad began hearing the voice more.[/size] [size=3]“Now I use it's effect!”[/size] [size=3]“Good luck. I hope you can read.... whatever language that is.” Waru said.[/size] [size=3]“I select one monster in the graveyard. I give 100 attack times that monsters level to a Life Force User. I then roll a dice.” Suddenly, a bright light traveled down the string and hit Flame Manipulator, giving him 300 attack and defense. [/size] [size=3]“The monster I selected was Big Jaws!” Dr. Reviver then pulled a large dice out of his pocket and rolled it. “If I roll correctly, I get to special summon Big Jaws to my side of the field. Then, I gain life points equal to it's attack points! But if I roll incorrectly, he is banished, and I lose life points equal to it's attack points.” Dr. Reviver through the dice on the ground. Amber and Chad began clenching their fists. If they failed, they would have 200 life points left and lose no matter what. If they succeeded, they would get an extra turn. It continued rolling.[/size] [size=3]“By the way, I succeed if it lands on 1,2 or 3.” Chad explained. It all depended on this. It landed on 4. [/size] [size=3]“NOOOOOOO!” Amber yelled.[/size] [size=3]“YEA-” Waru was about to yell. Suddenly, it rolled over one more time, landing on 3. [/size] [size=3]“Alright!” Chad yelled.[/size] [size=3][b]Waru and Ryoga: 3000[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Amber and Chad: 3800[/b][/size] [size=3]Suddenly, Dr. Reviver took out a defibrillator. Big Jaws suddenly appeared. He used three times on Big Jaws, bringing it back to life. It then went to Chads side of the field.[/size] [size=3][b]Big Jaws[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Level 3[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Fish/Effect/Water[/b][/size] [size=3][b]At the end of the battle phase, if this card attacked, banish it.[/b][/size] [size=3][b]1800/300[/b][/size] [size=3]“Alright, I use Big Jaws to attack Aero Shark!” Big Jaws dove into the ground, with only its dorsal fin visible. It got closer and closer to Aero Shark, until it finally jumped up and bit the machine holding the two sharks together apart. It then turned into a light, which flew into the rectangle next to Shark. [/size] [size=3]“So that's what those are. The rectangles are the graveyard.” Amber guessed. She was correct. [/size] [size=3]“With Big Jaws effect, he is banished. Now I attack directly with Dr. Reviver!” Dr. Reviver pulled a scalpel out of his pocket. He then threw it at Shark.[/size] [size=3][b]Waru and Ryoga: 2300[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Amber and Chad: 3800[/b][/size] [size=3]“I'll put two cards face down and end my turn.” Chad said. It was now Waru's turn.[/size] [size=3]“I draw. I activate the effect of my Special Daedalus!”[/size] [size=3][b]Special Daedalus[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Level 5[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Sea Serpent/Effect/Water[/b][/size] [size=3][b]You can normal summon this card from your hand without tributes. If you do,[/b][/size] [size=3][b]half this monsters attack and defense.[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Current Attack: 1200/1200[/b][/size] [size=3]“Now I use Special Daedalus to attack Dr. Reviver!” Special Daedalus blasted water at Dr. Reviver.[/size] [size=3]“I activate my trap card Sea of Flames!”[/size] [size=3][b]Sea of Flames[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Trap[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Activate only when your opponent declares an attack while you control a face up[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Flame Manipulator. Destroy the attacking monster, and inflict damage to your[/b][/size] [size=3][b]opponent equal to the attacking monsters attack.[/b][/size] [size=3]Flame Manipulator rose it's hand. Out of nowhere, lava-like flames burst from the ground. It started flowing towards Special Daedalus. It hit it, and then hit Waru.[/size] [size=3][b]Waru and Ryoga: 1100[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Amber and Chad: 3800[/b][/size] [size=3]“You have left me open for my plan! I activate the spell card Daedalus Death!”[/size] [size=3][b]Daedalus Death[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Spell/Quickplay[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Activate only when a face up 'Daedalus' monster is destroyed by a card effect. During[/b][/size] [size=3][b]your next turn, if you made a successful battle with a Levia Dragon - Daedalus or Ocean Dragon Lord - Neo Daedalus,[/b][/size] [size=3][b]your opponent loses half his/her life points. If unsuccessful, you lose half your life points.[/b][/size] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left][size=3]"Next, I use the spell card Monster Reborn!"[/size] [size=3][b]Monster Reborn[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Spell[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Special summon one monster from either players graveyard.[/b][/size] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left][size=3]"I bring back Special Daedalus!"[/size] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left][b][i][size=3][b]Special Daedalus[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Level 5[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Sea Serpent/Effect/Water[/b][/size] [size=3][b]You can normal summon this card from your hand without tributes. If you do,[/b][/size] [size=3][b]half this monsters attack and defense.[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Current Attack: 1200/1200[/b][/size][/i][/b] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left][size=3]Amber must draw a specific card, or they will lose.[/size] [size=3]“I set a card face down and end my turn!”[/size] [size=3]“I-I d-draw...” Amber said, weakly. She weakly moved her hand towards her deck. She drew her card. This was the card she needed. “I activate Crystal Kingdom Proclamation!”[/size] [size=3][b]Crystal Kingdom – Proclamation[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Spell[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Special summon one Amber Queen and Jade King from your hand or deck.[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Destroy it during the end phase.[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Jade King[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Level 8[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Warrior/Earth[/b][/size] [size=3][b]No Effect[/b][/size] [size=3][b]3000/2800[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Amber Queen[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Level 8[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Warrior/Earth[/b][/size] [b]No Effect[/b] [size=3][b]2500/2100[/b][/size] [size=3]“I use the Life Force of my monsters!” Amber yelled. The strings protruded from Jade King and Amber Queen's chest. It spiraled between them.[/size] [size=3]“I Life Force summon.... Crystal Kingdom – Protector!” A large man in a red-and-green suit of armor came from where the spiral was. [/size] [size=3][b]Crystal Kingdom – Protector[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Level 8[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Warrior/Effect/Life Force/Earth[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Effect unreadable[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Current Attack: 3200/3200[/b][/size] [size=3]“Crystal Kingdom – Protector! Attack Special Daedalus for the win!” The Protector then flew towards the Special Daedalus.[/size] [size=3]“I use Battle Attack Switcher!” Waru yelled.[/size] [size=3][b]Battle Attack Switcher[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Trap[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Activate only when your opponent declares an attack with a monster with more than[/b][/size] [size=3][b]2000 attack, on a face up 'Daedalus' monster. Negate the attack, and switch the monsters attack[/b][/size] [size=3][b]until your next end phase.[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Crystal Kingdom – Protector[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Current Attack: 1200/3200[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Special Daedalus[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Current Attack: 3200/2400[/b][/size] [size=3]“I end my turn then.” Said Amber.[/size] [size=3]“THIS IS THE END! DRAW!” Shark yelled. I activate The Legendary Ocean!"[/size] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left][size=3][b]A Legendary Ocean[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Spell/Field[/b][/size] [size=3][b]This card's name is treated as "Umi". Downgrade all Water Monsters in both player's hands and on the field by 1 level. Increases the ATK and DEF of all water monsters by 200 points.[/b][/size] [size=3]The circle in the center turned into a triangle. Then the Alchemy Field was flooded with water. Strangely, everyone was able to breathe. "Because of Legendarys Ocean's effect, I can do my next plan. I sacrifice Special Daedalus to summon Levia Dragon - Daedalus!" The Special Daedalus turned into a burst of energy, and a ball of light. The ball of light went into the graveyard. The burst of energy hit the triangle, making it larger. Then, a large blue dragon came out from the center of the triangle, and floated above Shark, making a large roar.[/size] [size=3][b]Levia Dragon - Daedalus[/b] [b]Current Level: 6[/b] [b]Original Level: 7[/b] [b]Sea Serpent/Effect[/b] [b]Send "Umi" on your side of the field to the Graveyard to destroy all cards on the field except this card.[/b] [b]2600/1500[/b][/size] [size=3]"Now I use Daedalus' effect!" All of the water was absorbed into Daedalus' mouth. He then shot it at at everything. As it started shooting the water at Chad's side, Amber said this: "I shall protect my brother! I use my Protectors effect! I give Amber Queen 2000 attack back!" The light shot out through the string and hit Amber Queen. "Now, the effect is negated, and you lose life points equal to Daedalus attack points!" Daedalus re-absorbed the water, and instead shot it at Shark and Waru. "AHHHH!" They both yelled. [b]Waru and Ryoga: 0[/b][/size] [b]Amber and Chad: 3800[/b] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left] [/left][/left] [left][left][size=3][b]Winner: Amber and Chad Phaux[/b][/size] [size=3][b]Better luck next time Waru Misu and Ryoga Kamishiro![/b][/size] [size=3]Suddenly, the rectangular graveyard grew across where Waru and Shark were. It suddenly opened up, into a place of pitch blackness. Waru and shark fell in. However, they grabbed onto the edge.[/size] [size=3]“Help me!” Waru yelled. Amber moved away her hair to reveal her new eye. Chad pulled out his new necklace. The eyes on them began glowing. Suddenly, Waru and Shark flew up, hitting the ground. The graveyard then closed up, and the Alchemy Field shattered. Shark's eyes then returned to normal. But before Chad took attention to that, he turned to Waru.[/size] [size=3]“Waru, you harmed innocent people and cheated in your own game. You are dishonorable and have no good intentions. Until your lesson is learned.... PUNISHMENT GAME!” Chad exclaimed. The eye on his necklace began glowing, and Waru began having visions. He thought that he was trapped in the Alchemy Worlds. [/size] [size=3]The Alchemy World is were people souls are trapped when they lose an Alchemy Duel. The world is pitch black, up until you hit the bottom. When you hit the bottom, anything that happened on the Alchemy Duel happens again. Example: If you were stabbed by a monster with a sword, a stab wound appears on the stabbed area. After everything that happens, it is all healed. Then, you see every monster from your deck and your opponents deck coming after you to kill you. When they do successfully, your soul is reborn, were the process happens all over again. [/size] [size=3]Waru had his hands clutched to his face in fear, and began running away. His pocket began glowing, and then a large beam of light flew up into the air, in all directions. Chad and Amber either ignored what Chad just did, or forgot. Either way; this is what happened next.[/size] [size=3]Shark got off the ground. Since he was possessed, he didn't remember what happened. He got up, with his hands in his pockets (By the way, time began again). Chad then started yelling[/size] [size=3]“OH MY GOD SHARK! PLEASE GIVE ME YOUR AUTOGRAPH! Or even better, DUEL ME!!” Shark then told Chad:[/size] [size=3]“Meet me at the Tag Nationals of Japan. We can duel there.” Shark then walked away into the distance. [/size] [size=3]“Oh... my... God.....I just met.... Shark!” Chad said. He didn't expect to ever see his main idol. Amber grabbed her head.[/size] [size=3]“You're such a dork Chad. Oh by the way, nice necklace. Where'd you get it?” Amber asked.[/size] [size=3]“I'm not sure myself. What about your eye? What happened to it?” Chad asked in response.[/size] [size=3]“I'm also not sure. Let's just hide these from mom and dad. Who knows what they'll say about me putting this thing were my eye was.” Amber responded. They than began to walk home.[/size][/spoiler] [/left][/left] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Joker Guy Posted August 24, 2011 Report Share Posted August 24, 2011 Some cards are OP'd, and some grammar is bad, but if you restructure this a bit it would make a fine story. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fireraven23 Posted August 24, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 24, 2011 Cool cards. I may sound stupid when I ask this, but what does OP'd mean? Urban Dictionary had me confused (Too many definitions) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Not-so-Radiant Arin Posted August 24, 2011 Report Share Posted August 24, 2011 OPed = OverPowered. Meaning that the card is, well, too good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrabHelmet Posted August 24, 2011 Report Share Posted August 24, 2011 I was going to do a Foe Fiction review of this story because I knew it would be terrible, but then I couldn't because you didn't even bother to write a proper story. You just dump one paragraph of incredibly bland exposition on us before diving into a very boring duel. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fireraven23 Posted August 24, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 24, 2011 It was an honor just to get a comment from you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Rai Posted August 24, 2011 Report Share Posted August 24, 2011 Grammar please. So little apostrophes anywhere and also such bland description. First chapter: "Green and shiny. Stabbed." Next paragraph: "Red and shiny. Stabbed." If Crab Helmet won't, I might decide to start another series for the sake of it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrabHelmet Posted August 25, 2011 Report Share Posted August 25, 2011 [quote name='fireraven23' timestamp='1314222535' post='5466247'] It was an honor just to get a comment from you. [/quote] That is the most pathetic thing I've heard in my life. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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