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2200 / 1700

[i]When a card's effect that target a card(s) in your Deck is activated: Special Summon this card (from your hand). When this card is Special Summoned by this effect: Send 1 card from the top of your opponent’s Deck to the Graveyard. This card gains these following effects based on the type of card sent:
• Monster : Draw 1 card. Discard 1 card during the End Phase
• Spell or Trap: Your opponent cannot Normal Summon Level 4 or lower monsters on their next turn.[/i][/center]

[b]Hope you like it. All good critism gets [color="#00FF00"]a rep[/color]. All [color="#00FF00"]+rep[/color] for me also get a rep in return[/b]
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When a card's effect that target a card(s) in your Deck is activated: You can Special Summon this card from your hand. When this card is Special Summoned by this effect: Send 1 card from the top of your opponent’s [b]Deck to the Graveyard[/b]. This card gains the following effect based on the type [b]of[/b] card sent:
• Monster : Draw 2 cards. Discard 1 card during the End Phase
• Spell or Trap: Your opponent cannot Normal Summon Level 4 or lower monsters for their next 2 turns.

(Stopping your opponent from Normal Summoning low level monsters for 2 turns seems like a bit much, you could change it to:
"Your opponent cannot Normal Summon on their next turn." or "Your opponent cannot Special Summon Level 4 or lower monsters for their next 2 turns."

That way, it still limits their Summoning, but it won't affect them as badly as your current effect does.

Edit: Also, his ATK/DEF and Level could be lowered a bit, cause his effect can actually be activated quite easily.
Think of "Masked Dragon, Shining Angel, UFO Turtle, etc.
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What I said ^^
Lol, but really any of the 3 works (yours or mine), I was just trying to give examples of what you could change it to.

Try to keep in mind what I mentioned about those cards that Special Summon monsters from your own deck, it could make this a little OP.
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[quote]Well, being a tad bit OP'd isn't that bad. If it is the "powerful Synchro" type, then it is bad. The OCG has been taken care of. I'm glad you are attempting New OCG. 8.99/10 [/quote]

Thanks you for commenting Mr OCG Teacher. :lol:

[quote]Monster effect you should limit it to 1

drawing 2 is too much for the cost of only discarding 1

8.4/10 [/quote]

Emh, i want to make this as useful as possible. So, i'll keep it like that. Btw thanks for commenting

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[quote name='ragnarok1945' timestamp='1308088347' post='5283481']
drawing 2 is too much for the cost of only discarding 1
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Its a lot more complicated than that with this card. But out of personal issues, I will only educate Maha Guns over PM if he asks me, and it will not be posted.

That being said, I find this card to be very very interesting. A bit on the broken side since it's a Lockdown/+1 card. But I do like the attempt, so good effort Maha Guns.
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The current effect is balanced as it is, maybe pulling a little towards situational.

Although, combined with a searcher, or even Foolish, he can be a nasty surprise.

But, I'd change the opponent's milling to randomly discarding 1 card. You know, since milling nowadays can easily go against you.

New OCG looks good too.

9/10.
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As far as I know, cards in the Deck aren't targeted. [spoiler="Reasoning:"]For example, if you use RotA and you're clearly going to look for Stratos, but your opponent chains Simultaneous Loss and mills your Stratos, you can still search for something else.[/spoiler]
...so the Summoning condition should be something like "When a card's effect that adds a card(s) from your Deck to your hand or Graveyard is activated..."
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[quote name='newhat' timestamp='1308245371' post='5287769']
As far as I know, cards in the Deck aren't targeted. [spoiler="Reasoning:"]For example, if you use RotA and you're clearly going to look for Stratos, but your opponent chains Simultaneous Loss and mills your Stratos, you can still search for something else.[/spoiler]
...so the Summoning condition should be something like "When a card's effect that adds a card(s) from your Deck to your hand or Graveyard is activated..."
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stop saying stuff I agree with

card is a vanilla 2200 SS that I just can't care about, neutral draw's nothing to write home about considering how dead-drawy this is
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When a card's effect that target a card(s) in your Deck is activated[i][b][u], you[/u][/b][/i] can Special Summon this card (from your hand). When this card is Special Summoned by this effect[b][i][u], send[/u][/i][/b] 1 card from the top of your opponent’s Deck to the Graveyard. This card gains these following effects based on the type [i][u][b]of[/b][/u][/i] card sent:
• Monster : Draw 1 card. Discard 1 card during the End Phase
• Spell or Trap: Your opponent cannot Normal Summon Level 4 or lower monsters [u][i][b]on[/b][/i][/u] their next turn.

First of all the name and the pic do not match. That pic is not adorable. The card is UPed cause after the first turn its on the field, its kinda useless... And if you dont get a card targetting your deck, its pretty much a dead-draw because its not like youre gonna tribute 2 monsters for 2200 ATK.
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[quote name='Luna Lovegood' timestamp='1308327446' post='5290155']
When a card's effect that target a card(s) in your Deck is activated[i][b][u], you[/u][/b][/i] can Special Summon this card (from your hand). When this card is Special Summoned by this effect[b][i][u], send[/u][/i][/b] 1 card from the top of your opponent’s Deck to the Graveyard. This card gains these following effects based on the type [i][u][b]of[/b][/u][/i] card sent:
• Monster : Draw 1 card. Discard 1 card during the End Phase
• Spell or Trap: Your opponent cannot Normal Summon Level 4 or lower monsters [u][i][b]on[/b][/i][/u] their next turn.[/quote]

There's nothing to fix with the cards OCG. It's just using the [i]new[/i] OCG, rather than the old.

[quote=Maha Guns ]I see, you have no idea what youre talking about. Look at BlindMonkey post[/quote]

Unlike you, marcher actually is right, and he does know what he's talking about in some situations.

And my previous suggestion still stands. Get rid of the "you can" from the effect, unless you like making this cards SS effect only work when your opponent is messing with your Deck. In that situation, the card is practically useless.
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[quote name='Godfather Zandaa' timestamp='1308330384' post='5290254']
There's nothing to fix with the cards OCG. It's just using the [i]new[/i] OCG, rather than the old.
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I was actually fixing the RLG (Real Life Grammar). The changes I made have nothing to do with OCG, but rather grammar. 'The type card' isn't proper grammar. I was helping make it proper. He also used capitalization in the wrong spots. I was just helping out :)

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