Kōsuke Ueki Posted May 5, 2011 Report Share Posted May 5, 2011 [center]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g4Mkyq55vGo [/center] This trailer led to the story I intend to tell you. This story will blow your mind, and I hope that you will enjoy it as well. Happy Reading! P.S. The trailer and character belongs to former YouTube user ReubenKee, who died in a boat accident a few years back. May he Rest in Peace. Most of the story is my own idea. [spoiler=Arc I - Warrior of the Fires and Wind][spoiler=Prologue][center][i][b]Fire burns with desire. A desire to defeat evil. Wind cuts through even the strongest of enemies, including the poison that spreads throughout the land. When both become one, the ultimate warrior is created. It has no name of its own by the gods it was created from, but was named by the people, as Dragon Claw.[/b][/i][/center] [i]Fire and brimstone had spread through the small, yet unnamed, villages. Blood, gore, corpses, and the smell of death passes through the burning buildings and smelled by the creatures who had begun this massacre. Daemons. Not Demons, but Daemons. In this world, the Daemons are resented by all beings, from Humans, to the Demons, to the Gods. It is believed that Daemons are immoral creations of the Devils and Humans yet are not treated as one of either kind. The result lead to a genocide of the Humans to prove to be in the same superiority as the Devils.[/i] [i]Little by little, their dark powers had overwhelmed even the mightiest of Human warriors, for the use of dark magic and death magic as a last resort. One by one, the Humans were slaughtered by the overwhelming power of the Daemons, and the leader had planned for this in only 5 years. It didn't matter what condition, age, or known job they do, all Humans; Men, women, mothers, fathers, the elderly, children, severely ill ones; it didn't matter, for the Daemons care not of the Humans for they wish to be rid of them, and that is what they almost did.[/i] [i]The next day, the land was a baren wasteland, filled with burnt buildings and rubble from the attacks. The Daemons had ruled over the Human lands, continuing their search for the remaining Humans. With each kill, more and more of the Humans had begun hiding into places that the Daemons would think less of to look at. But all were found with equal ease. The population of the Humans were dropped to a mere 5,000. And those left decided to fight back. Many of them fought valiantly, but failed miserably, as their lives were taken away with ease. Many had survived from the attacks the Daemons made on them, and escaped to prevent from being killed. It was until one woman had called to the Heavens to assist them in this battle. But their was no answer at first, until that woman said, "We need a protector..." It was then the gods of Fire and Wind and granted her wish. With that, a warrior was crafted, one not Human, nor God, but a Champion. That warrior, was me[/i] [i]It was I that put an end to the charade. But I'm not Human, nor am I of anything else but a "Champion of the Gods". This...is where my story of becoming a great hero to the greatest of enemies had begun. I could not speak or think at first, but eventually learned to, but that's another tale I intend to tell later. My name is Dragon Claw, by the people, and this is my story.[/i] [center][size="7"][b]Dragon Claw Chronicles[/b][/size][/center][/spoiler][/spoiler] I know the Prologue is short, but I promise you, the chapters will be much, MUCH longer. Chapter 1 of Arc I will be up within a week. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bahamut - Envoy of the End Posted May 6, 2011 Report Share Posted May 6, 2011 Even though it was a short prologue, you really could have gone more to town on the blood and gore and fire and stuff, you know, really got the reader drawn into the terror and devastation. Reading it as is just felt, 'oh would'nt you know, all the humans were killed in a vicious and horrible way, wow'. Kinda underwhelmed description. More description should also have gone into the Daemons and the hero himself. It really wasn't great reading, sometimes the choice of words was awkward, such as using death and dark magic as a last resort, what the humans did? Hiding into places the Daemons wouln't think of. They were found easily. Well they clearly thought of them then. That kind of thing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kōsuke Ueki Posted May 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 6, 2011 I was having some problems in choosing words, and how long I wanted it was shorter than I expected. Besides, more description on everything will be shown in the first chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kōsuke Ueki Posted June 17, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 17, 2011 [size="6"]ANNOUNCEMENT: [size="2"]This Fan Fic will be put on standby until I get the time to actually work on it. Until that happens, posting is prohibited(Except for mods, of course) until I make the next announcement in which I will be having the time and patience to work on this Fan Fic with ease. Don't worry, by next month or the month after that, I'll be sure to continue from where I left off. Trust me. You won't be disappointed when I finally make the first chapter. So, later! [/size][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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