Sploda Posted May 15, 2011 Report Share Posted May 15, 2011 Nice chapter, although at the end you left 'Black' instead of Issac. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Toffee. Posted May 15, 2011 Report Share Posted May 15, 2011 @Chapter 5: Gotta' love Dewloren Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted May 15, 2011 Report Share Posted May 15, 2011 Will Lyn pull a reversal? I think she'll even the field, but still lose, continuing the rivalry, but that's just my guess. Good chapter, though I noticed one thing that kinda gripes me: when the characters tal, you tend to avoid contractions, saying you are instead of you're for example. When one writes, it's best to avoid contractions in the narration (might be guilty of that myself) but during dialogue, contractions sound more natural, you know? But that's just a minor thing, hope chapter 6 is out relatively soon =P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted May 15, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 15, 2011 @Creator: Frigg =.= Will fix. @Arm: Yes, you do ;D @Fuse: I already know the end xD I use both contractions and regular phrases when I speak, so to me, it did not seem odd ^^; Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mugendramon Posted May 15, 2011 Report Share Posted May 15, 2011 inb4567Asspull. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted May 20, 2011 Report Share Posted May 20, 2011 I just realized something as I browsed your OST list. Syrus Makara Daniel Libera Victor Aero Luke Solaris Four names as the titles of themes. Are these upcoming characters :3 Can take a guess who DANIEL and AERO are, but not sure about the other two. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted May 21, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 21, 2011 Go ahead and guess. I think that at least one will stump you. Also, you missed the OTHER names later on, such as Laura Blitz. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted May 21, 2011 Report Share Posted May 21, 2011 Oh yeah, I also missed these guys. Finn Alatreon. Laura Volttania Zane Thanatos Chiyo Blanche Ken O’Malley I'll listen to their themes in a sec, but I'm gonna guess Ken is Nexev or Creator. Maybe even Broken. As for the four mentioned earlier... Syrus-DMG (going out on a limb, I know) Daniel-DL Victor-El Luke-Me? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted May 21, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 21, 2011 [quote name='Fusion X. Denver' timestamp='1305940126' post='5221666'] Oh yeah, I also missed these guys. Finn Alatreon. Laura Volttania Zane Thanatos Chiyo Blanche Ken O’Malley I'll listen to their themes in a sec, but I'm gonna guess Ken is Nexev or Creator. [b]Nex is someone else/.[/b] Maybe even Broken. As for the four mentioned earlier... Syrus-DMG (going out on a limb, I know) [b]..... wat no[/b] Daniel-DL [b]Yeah[/b] Victor-El [b]lolno[/b] Luke-Me? [b]LOLNO[/b] [/quote] There you go Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted May 21, 2011 Report Share Posted May 21, 2011 Ah, got one right. Makara is close to Mikara and the theme fit him, so that's what I thought. No Aero for El? Despite his obsession with wind and stuff? Figured Luke's theme didn't match me... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted May 21, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 21, 2011 Actually, you and Ecchi do't have a theme... And DMG is not even in here >>; At least, not planned yet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted May 21, 2011 Report Share Posted May 21, 2011 Aha. THANK GOD MY NAME ISN'T SY- *shot* How's that 6th chapter going btw? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted May 21, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 21, 2011 Working on it... Just hit a bit of a block >> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted May 21, 2011 Report Share Posted May 21, 2011 I can relate. Have one now and had that through all of 33. Don't worry, it'll come to you soon enough. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted May 28, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 28, 2011 Alright, Chapter 6 is up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Andx Posted May 28, 2011 Report Share Posted May 28, 2011 Appear to have an issue with the italicizing part way into the chapter. No other formatting errors from what I saw though. Fun chapter I guess. Feels like it sorta just should have been in with Chapter 5. The characters appeared more flat to me in this chapter than they generally do. Not sure if you were having trouble finding inspiration or what. Still a good chapter in that it's here and getting things moving again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted May 28, 2011 Report Share Posted May 28, 2011 Went fine for me. Although... Being somewhat of a [i]casual[/i] duelist, I'm often left confused with unfamiliar archetypes such as the Ice Barriers and the fairies Lyn used. Basically, I didn't really get the effects and ATK/DEF stats because they weren't in there .-. I'm probably the only one with this problem, but I don't think I appreciated the duel as much as everyone else did because of that :T Still a good chapter though. I want to see what'll happen with Cerise and Parco meeting; I can imagine hilarity ensuing from those two together. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted May 28, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 28, 2011 [quote name='Fusion X. Denver' timestamp='1306552215' post='5236736'] Went fine for me. Although... Being somewhat of a [i]casual[/i] duelist, I'm often left confused with unfamiliar archetypes such as the Ice Barriers and the fairies Lyn used. Basically, I didn't really get the effects and ATK/DEF stats because they weren't in there .-. I'm probably the only one with this problem, but I don't think I appreciated the duel as much as everyone else did because of that :T Still a good chapter though. I want to see what'll happen with Cerise and Parco meeting; I can imagine hilarity ensuing from those two together. [/quote] Use the Wikia xD Just keep a tab open. Mayeb. Parco, while not a main, is definitely one of my favorites in his future xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted May 28, 2011 Report Share Posted May 28, 2011 I have a similar case in DEF, he's the guy who takes Chris' spot as number 1. But it's a drag to constantly copy and pas- *shot* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted May 28, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 28, 2011 Just open the Archetype Pages xD Counter Fairies Ice Barrier Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Toffee. Posted May 28, 2011 Report Share Posted May 28, 2011 Chapter 6 was lulz "YOU MEAN MAKE THEM ALL WEAR MINI-SKIRTS!?" "*DOOR. NOW*" I died laughing. [quote name='Fusion X. Denver' timestamp='1306552215' post='5236736'] I want to see what'll happen with Cerise and Parco meeting; I can imagine hilarity ensuing from those two together. [/quote] [s]Parco lets Ceriese win, as he wants to be part of Powerforce[/s] I MEAN..... HI! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted May 28, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 28, 2011 [quote name='Armadilloz' timestamp='1306556241' post='5236829'] Chapter 6 was lulz "YOU MEAN MAKE THEM ALL WEAR MINI-SKIRTS!?" "*DOOR. NOW*" I died laughing. [/quote] Thanks xD that made my day Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted May 28, 2011 Report Share Posted May 28, 2011 [quote name='Zetsubou Black' timestamp='1306557085' post='5236848'] Thanks xD that made my day [/quote] It was totally not a Roy Mustang Rip in anyway. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blake Posted May 28, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 28, 2011 [quote name='Enzax Aito' timestamp='1306562658' post='5236983'] It was totally not a Roy Mustang Rip in anyway. [/quote] You're right, it wasn't. It was a reference to him. An homage. Parco is a walking homage xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted May 28, 2011 Report Share Posted May 28, 2011 [quote name='Zetsubou Black' timestamp='1306562798' post='5236989'] You're right, it wasn't. It was a reference to him. An homage. Parco is a walking homage xD [/quote] When I say Rip that means you took something they said/did and used in on a new character. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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