YGOnewgen Posted April 12, 2011 Report Share Posted April 12, 2011 For years have passed,the world was balanced by bringing peace to the world.The Most biggest Nations,Fire,Light,and Dark was once a peaceful place when something happened.Three Gods,Chaos,Sharom and Drakom,the three Dark brothers landed at the peaceful world and brought war and hatred to it.They made all Nations turn against each other specially the Dark Nation.The Dark Forces are now preparing for war as they prepared the 'hundred thousand Dark Duelists from all over the world.The Divine Tribe,the smallest one of the six nations,were the only once who brought peace to the world.There,other Gods trusted them.Cosmos,Corelia, and Shiva,the three Goddesses of Divine must bring peace to the world again.They sense that a big battle is yet to come.Leon,a boy that the Goddesses trusted,built an alliance to destroy the Gods of tyranny.He convinced all nations,except for the Dark.Duel Monsters were again brought back to the world to help the good,and the bad for their doing.The Goddesses of Peace and the Gods of tyranny.Who shall prevail?It is up now for Leon to save the world that was once a peaceful and happy place,now a piece of planet full of hatred and war. To join,please fill up this form: Name: Age: Bio: Nation:(Darks are only allowed when I accept them to) Peace(Alliance)/Tyranny: Best Card:(May be custom) Deck: Appearance: Gods and Goddesses cards: Tyranny:(Can only be taken control by The Dark Leader.) [img]http://img824.imageshack.us/img824/5466/378789.jpg[/img][/img] [img]http://img576.imageshack.us/img576/8504/378789g.jpg[/img] [img]http://img856.imageshack.us/img856/5466/378789.jpg[/img] Peace:(Can only be taken control by The Divine Leader and Leon.) COMING SOON Name:Leon Age:18 Bio:He was the one who was chosen by the Goddesses to build the alliance against the Dark Nation and the Gods of tyranny.He is still scared on what is going on in the world.He is the only chance of the world. Nation:Divine Peace(Alliance)/Tyranny:Peace Best Card:Mighty Dragon Shino and God of Peace-Cosmos Deck:Mighty Alliance Appearance:COMING SOON Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mecha Love Posted April 12, 2011 Report Share Posted April 12, 2011 Jemomaker. this is more or less my rp.[font="Century Gothic"][/font] ....... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Premier Alexander Romanov Posted April 12, 2011 Report Share Posted April 12, 2011 That, and it's absolutely horrendous. It hurts to read the description, and your cards make no sense. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dwarven King Posted April 12, 2011 Report Share Posted April 12, 2011 Your "God Cards" are WAY over-powered. Almost unstoppable. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YGOnewgen Posted April 13, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 13, 2011 sorry toyou all.if its horrible, tell the admin to lock this one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Premier Alexander Romanov Posted April 13, 2011 Report Share Posted April 13, 2011 Actually, I want to help you improve it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frybread002 Posted April 15, 2011 Report Share Posted April 15, 2011 Apologizes friend, I must agree with my colleagues here: I know it's out of place to critique an role-play on this forum, but the Plot's grammer is rather jagged and messed up. Like, the proper spacing if way off, and it's kinda hard to read because it's all bunched up. Not only that, it's kinda hard to follow when you post your cards like that. Also, it's the wrong forum to post them on. In all honesty, I could go on all day. But then I will be going completely off topic with of where I'm trying to go: TAKE YOUR TIME PLANNING!!!! Seriously man, a story becomes more worth it if you take the time to study and learn about different ideas and techniques. Now, I'm going to mention other role-plays because it's only going to stray from what I'm actually saying. Which is to take your time doing this. If anything, it just becomes more worth while if you take your time planning something, and it becomes really successful in the end. I think Lady can vouch for me here. P.S. Oie!! It's a shock to see you help up a new guy Lady (take my word for it jemomaker, Lady is actually a guy ). Why the sudden change of heart? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YGOnewgen Posted April 15, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 15, 2011 [quote name='Codename: Lady' timestamp='1302706989' post='5135398'] Actually, I want to help you improve it. [/quote] Thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YGOnewgen Posted April 16, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 16, 2011 I'll just make another one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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