fenrir Posted April 17, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 17, 2011 Episode 5 up. That was arguably the most time wasted. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted April 17, 2011 Report Share Posted April 17, 2011 To be fair, considering this is the second time out of five episodes we've only used thirty minutes or less, it was a less waste of "time". But the only problem with the fanfic (albeit a [b]huge[/b] one) was sheer blandness and how it was cliche and boring. The only criticism we really could have given was that the story needs to be amped up. I was reading the second chapter and not much really changed in terms of development, although we meet our third main character. The ending leads us into a bunch of backstory for chapter three, and unless that backstory is wholly interesting and relevant, that could easily be a useless chapter. The reason episode five was a waste of time is because there was only [i]one thing wrong[/i] with the damn fanfiction. We spent thirty minutes addressing one point when we could have read two sentences and said the same thing. Fenrir, you never posted your "greeting" on Clair's thread. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted April 17, 2011 Report Share Posted April 17, 2011 Wait, who was the guest speaker? Shradow? I missed his intro and I couldn't hear anything he said towards the end >.> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Clair Posted April 17, 2011 Report Share Posted April 17, 2011 oh awesome. Somehow I [i]knew[/i] I was going to get my fic dissected and analyzed by you guys. I'm honored... and still laughing at how random/funny the reviews always are. xD I know my story is off to an okay start now because Dark wanted to read the second chapter, for better or for worse. It's comments like yours that remind me that I can always be a better writer. Hope it wasn't too painful of a read. ^^; EDIT - What can I do to make this fic less boring for people? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted April 17, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 17, 2011 ^^ Tsukasa Hiragi I probably spelled that wrong. Dark, I meant most time wasted as in we blabbered on about one problem when yes, we could have just said one thing and keep reading. The fan-fic was ridiculously short compared to Fusion's. We should have been done with that waaaay earlier. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted April 17, 2011 Report Share Posted April 17, 2011 [quote name='Fusion X. Denver' timestamp='1303059235' post='5145672'] Wait, who was the guest speaker? Shradow? I missed his intro and I couldn't hear anything he said towards the end >.> [/quote] Metagross / Su Casa Or something along those lines. [quote name='Clair' timestamp='1303059453' post='5145680'] oh awesome. Somehow I [i]knew[/i] I was going to get my fic dissected and analyzed by you guys. I'm honored... and still laughing at how random/funny the reviews always are. xD I know my story is off to an okay start now because Dark wanted to read the second chapter, for better or for worse. It's comments like yours that remind me that I can always be a better writer. Hope it wasn't too painful of a read. ^^; EDIT - What can I do to make this fic less boring for people? [/quote] I actually wrote down in my "To Do List" to write a text analysis of the fan fic, because you are a good friend and I want you to improve in terms of writing (not like I'm in a position to be tutoring English; I suck at English <___<), but it will mostly be a reiteration of the voice review. Nevertheless, I will hopefully post it today on your fic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Clair Posted April 17, 2011 Report Share Posted April 17, 2011 [quote name='Dark' timestamp='1303065840' post='5146082'] I actually wrote down in my "To Do List" to write a text analysis of the fan fic, because you are a good friend and I want you to improve in terms of writing (not like I'm in a position to be tutoring English; I suck at English <___<), but it will mostly be a reiteration of the voice review. Nevertheless, I will hopefully post it today on your fic. [/quote] Oh, cool! Thanks. ^^ Just a fact that you probably knew that applies to almost every fanfic out there: if you are familiar with the series, then it makes said fic easier to read. xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ieyasu Tokugawa Posted April 17, 2011 Report Share Posted April 17, 2011 I was the guest speaker Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted April 17, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 17, 2011 Episode 6 up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted April 17, 2011 Report Share Posted April 17, 2011 Who's Lilith? Kokonoe? Also, that was the funniest one yet. Sorry Dark, but Fenrir's drinking game is actually ingenious. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Althemia Posted April 17, 2011 Report Share Posted April 17, 2011 [quote name='Fusion X. Denver' timestamp='1303078483' post='5146617'] Who's Lilith? Kokonoe? Also, that was the funniest one yet. Sorry Dark, but Fenrir's drinking game is actually ingenious. [/quote] Hola, it's Lilith/Kokonoe. Also, just saying. That drinking game has given me a headache. > ___ > Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted April 17, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 17, 2011 [quote name='A.B.A.' timestamp='1303079600' post='5146643'] Also, just saying. That drinking game has given me a headache. > ___ > [/quote] SUCCESS. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frybread002 Posted April 18, 2011 Report Share Posted April 18, 2011 Sooo....the fact that you guys don't review most of our stuff means we're doing an solid job, right? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted April 18, 2011 Report Share Posted April 18, 2011 [quote name='Frybread002' timestamp='1303085453' post='5146898'] Sooo....the fact that you guys don't review most of our stuff means we're doing an solid job, right? [/quote] Or they probably haven't noticed it yet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frybread002 Posted April 18, 2011 Report Share Posted April 18, 2011 Enh, they are always ranting on about something or arguing with each other. Wouldn't blame them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted April 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 18, 2011 [quote name='Fusion X. Denver' timestamp='1303085517' post='5146902'] Or they probably haven't noticed it yet. [/quote] That. Now that you mention it though, off to rip on your fan fics! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frybread002 Posted April 18, 2011 Report Share Posted April 18, 2011 As long as it's not mine, I'm not gonna care. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted April 18, 2011 Report Share Posted April 18, 2011 [quote name='Frybread002' timestamp='1303089195' post='5147105'] As long as it's not mine, I'm not gonna care. [/quote] It is yours. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frybread002 Posted April 18, 2011 Report Share Posted April 18, 2011 Hahahahaha!!! I'll just be laughing at them if they do. Besides, it's all commentary. Speaking of which, did you give them their forty bucks yet? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted April 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 18, 2011 The whole forum owes us $40. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frybread002 Posted April 18, 2011 Report Share Posted April 18, 2011 Smart Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted April 18, 2011 Report Share Posted April 18, 2011 Fen, you mentioned a dream with a basketball court. In your dream, are you the hero? Is it you? Great stuff as always, and I like that you guys didn't end up having to make a second recording to give final thoughts for the last two. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted April 18, 2011 Report Share Posted April 18, 2011 Yeah, we've been smarter about getting things done within thirty minutes. I liked having the security of using two episodes, and we will if we need to, but the previous two fanfics were short enough. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ieyasu Tokugawa Posted April 18, 2011 Report Share Posted April 18, 2011 [quote name='Dark' timestamp='1303095657' post='5147349'] Yeah, we've been smarter about getting things done within thirty minutes. I liked having the security of using two episodes, and we will if we need to, but the previous two fanfics were short enough. [/quote] Hopefully you've learned how crappy a guest speaker I am :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fenrir Posted April 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 18, 2011 [quote name='Phantom Roxas' timestamp='1303093431' post='5147270'] Fen, you mentioned a dream with a basketball court. In your dream, are you the hero? Is it you? [/quote] ...FFFFFFFFF- Dammit I knew I missed something. >__< Oh well, I'll make a reference to it next recording or something. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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