Fusion X. Denver Posted March 2, 2011 Report Share Posted March 2, 2011 [s]Username: FUSION X. DENVER[/s] Your Excerpt: http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/222554-trio-of-def-chapter-27-is-up-pg-16/ Your Favorite Color: Blue Your Preferred Title: Spontaneous Writer (or any other suiting noun) Your Status: Author http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/222554-trio-of-def-chapter-27-is-up-pg-16/ I've also found the limit annoying, I just edit new chapters into my next post on the 1st page after the opening post. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
evilfusion Posted March 2, 2011 Report Share Posted March 2, 2011 There's actually a limit? I haven't reached it yet... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted March 2, 2011 Report Share Posted March 2, 2011 Your Excerpt: [spoiler=Excerpt from Chapter 4]Across the street from them, James Harrington was having a terrible, terrible morning. He'd woken up at six with his throat throbbing and a terrible cough. He'd taken his pills and downed them with a cup of coffee. No sugar, no milk, no nothing – the same way he'd been drinking coffee for the last forty years. Now, he couldn't go back to sleep. He'd been sitting in the kitchen, still in his robe, for the last two hours. At sixty-one, he needed every hour of sleep he could get, and now he'd be in a terrible mood all day. Not that he usually wasn't, but still. Ever since his wife had left him five years earlier for a younger man, he'd found it very hard to actually appreciate things. He'd moved here from Los Angeles after the divorce to try to find some calm, and until now it had worked. Now, chaos had broken out just across the street. It had started with an explosion ten minutes earlier, and now something far worse was going on. One man was lying dead in the street, one bleeding to death, and one kid throwing up on the lawn. He recognized the neighbor from across the street, Diego Rodriguez, trying to console the kid. He and Diego would usually play checkers down at the Sundown on Thursdays, and he'd gotten to know the man pretty well over the last few years. He was a bit religious – “all that God jibber-jabber” as James himself called it – but other than that, he was a good guy. The Harrington household had been strictly atheist while James had been growing up, and to this day, religion bothered him to no end. Diego was alright, though. Even so, James Harrington couldn't get out of his chair to help him; mainly because of what was happening behind them. The only one still standing was a kid, some out-of-towner. From here, the kid looked confident to him, which James found very hard to believe. What was standing beyond the kid frankly terrified him. The thing, the only word he could think of for whatever that was, couldn't be explained. It was something undefined, something horrible. He'd seen the man in the suit coming up to the lawn, shouting something... only to be shot down instantly. He sighed. “I can't just sit here and rot, though.” He reached over to his phone. Even if he couldn't get over there, he could send someone else. He dialed the number to the Castor Medical Center, and waited. It took a few seconds for him to connect. “You've reached the CMC, hello?” James Harrington cleared his throat. “Hello. I'm James Harrington, and I've got something interesting to tell you...”[/spoiler] Your Favorite Color: Purple. Your Preferred Title: The Irregular. Your Status: Author+Reviewer. [url=http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/232922-legacy-of-the-tormentor-the-dark-doorway]*link*[/url] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bahamut - Envoy of the End Posted March 2, 2011 Report Share Posted March 2, 2011 ll I though I'd have a butcheres at a couple of new fanfics to see if there was anything new to look at that was any good. 1st attempt - New Moon by Mako - War based fic which got straight into the fic, but felt meaning and soulless. Short and snappy chapters, some attempts at wit in a serious situation, characters aren't well fleshed out. 2nd attempt - Soul Finers by King - Really, really dissapointed. Three guys with supernatural powers jump this boy, have a stupid conversation, then someone just runs in and with one kick to all these super baddies let them get away. Dialogue was unbelievably horrible. An attempt at something different I'm sure, but I expected better from such a member. 3rd attempt - Legacy of the Tormentor by Umbra - As recommended by Saber, third time lucky, really enjoyed the first two chapters. Mystery and actiony start to a YGO fic, actually got me interested in what the characters were trying to accomplish and the situation they were in, much more so than the above, where the characters were immediately faced with difficult situations, but I just didn't find myself caring because they were so bland. Looks a truely excellent read in progress. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Twig Posted March 3, 2011 Report Share Posted March 3, 2011 [quote name='~ Epic Hero - Saber ~' timestamp='1299081975' post='5045797'] For the moment, I strongly recommend Umbra's LoT: tDD, which is an awesome read of an unusual variety. Well worth your time, especially if you can take a look at the original. [/quote] Yeah, it's gonna take a while for me to catch up on it. =o Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted March 3, 2011 Report Share Posted March 3, 2011 Reading the original would be necessary if you wanted to understand [i]everything[/i] that leads up to the current storyline, but The Dark Doorway can definitely be enjoyed in its own. It may seem as if a few characters appear out of nowhere later in the story, with the main cast already knowing them, and if that would bother you, I recommend reading the original. It's all in there. I'm currently reading through Dead Zone (at Chapter 13) and I'm enjoying every second so far. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vector Nightmare Posted March 4, 2011 Author Report Share Posted March 4, 2011 Alright guys, we've been doing a good job so far, the Fanfic section already looks a little more lively. Keep up the good work, and please try to post links to your reviews in this thread, so I can tally everything easier. Also, I'm thinking of revamping the thresholds for point awards - I'll make them pure length-based, which, even though inelegant, is more practical and may clear up some pointless disputes. We'll see about that. In the meantime, I'll get a few more reviews down in the weekend. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
evilfusion Posted March 4, 2011 Report Share Posted March 4, 2011 How do you post a link to a specific post? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vector Nightmare Posted March 5, 2011 Author Report Share Posted March 5, 2011 You can get the hyperlink to the post by clicking the number on the top right corner of it (for example, if I wanted to link to your post, I'd click on the #33, and then use it as the target of a hyperlink). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
evilfusion Posted March 5, 2011 Report Share Posted March 5, 2011 Oh, okay. Cool. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vector Nightmare Posted March 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted March 6, 2011 Alright guys let's get this thing rolling... tomorrow I'll start tallying down reviews an points... so please link whatever you reviewed here, I've seen a few of your reviews and know where to find them, but I'm certainly missing a lot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted March 6, 2011 Report Share Posted March 6, 2011 [url=http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/227678-yu-gi-oh-5ds-spiritual-ruin-pg-13/page__view__findpost__p__5052844]Review of Spiritual Ruin, 1-9[/url] That would be everything I consider a review so far. I'll review Dead Zone more critically once I get around to it, and I'm working my way through Armageddon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bahamut - Envoy of the End Posted March 7, 2011 Report Share Posted March 7, 2011 Back after weekend. Whoop, another review on the way. How far have you got so far? Going to do some more reading now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted March 11, 2011 Report Share Posted March 11, 2011 I did get up to Chapter 2, but I feel as if I didn't get enough of an impression. I'll read through them again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vector Nightmare Posted March 11, 2011 Author Report Share Posted March 11, 2011 Armageddon starts really kicking off at about chapter 4, methinks. The beginning had left me a bit skeptical, but it got much better later on. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bahamut - Envoy of the End Posted March 11, 2011 Report Share Posted March 11, 2011 [quote name='Umbra' timestamp='1299810777' post='5065817'] I did get up to Chapter 2, but I feel as if I didn't get enough of an impression. I'll read through them again. [/quote] [quote name='~ Epic Hero - Saber ~' timestamp='1299861624' post='5066697'] Armageddon starts really kicking off at about chapter 4, methinks. The beginning had left me a bit skeptical, but it got much better later on. [/quote] Chapter 4 is when the card games actually start. I tried to make the first chapters as actiony as possible, but to mixed results. Chapter 3 was kind of a mandatory info-dump/set up chapter. Writing the second arc now, I dunno it's natural development, but my chapters have suddenly got a lot longer and more expansive now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bahamut - Envoy of the End Posted March 14, 2011 Report Share Posted March 14, 2011 Thanks for the review of Armageddon Umbra. Would respond in thread but don't want to post there (want first chapter of Arc Two to go at top of Page). You're right about lack of writing practise. Maybe that's why I find it so fun to do something different. Lulz at how horrible my spelling has become since leaving scholl. Lazy. Yeah it's cliche, but glad you think its ok. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted March 14, 2011 Report Share Posted March 14, 2011 "At the top of the page" depends on the settings you have, you know. ^^ I have mine set to 40 posts / page, which means right now you're halfway through Page 2. Just keep trying, keep thinking about it, and eventually it'll come back to you. It's not a major concern, and it's still a good story. I don't want to discourage you, but... keep trying. Clichés exist for a reason. In the current state of literature, "originality" really comes down to using clichés in different combinations. Speaking of clichés, chapter seven of The Dark Doorway is titled "Wisdom" and is just about to breach two pages in length. It should be finished in a matter of days. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bahamut - Envoy of the End Posted March 21, 2011 Report Share Posted March 21, 2011 This is quiet. Could do with a second activity, although I appreciate Saber is busy IRL at the moment. Anyone tried anything new recently? I looked at WDT by Monkeylife, which started yesterday. Just a duel tournament, no real major plot or anything like that from the outset, just straightforward trying to enjoy competitive duels with different strategies. Writing quality needs work but could be enjoyable and possibly unpredictable, probably need one or two more chapters before it can be judged. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
evilfusion Posted March 21, 2011 Report Share Posted March 21, 2011 Haven't really had the interest in reading much lately. Anything I went to randomly was either horrendously bad or just not my cup of tea. As for writing, I joined a fic-writing contest worth 300 points, which I won. Then again, 2 people missed the deadline and the other person was Pika, who blatantly wasn't trying/caring. But I can't complain because if a second entry hadn't been turned in, I wouldn't have won, since there was no "default winner" thing going on. And I've been on a short-attention span kick for a while, so I haven't been working on my own fic, either. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Synchronized Posted April 8, 2011 Report Share Posted April 8, 2011 I don't mean to like necrobump, but is this still around? I was gone for a while, but I've decided to start from scratch with a Fan-Fic, and I didn't know if you guys were still doing this or not. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aesirson Posted April 8, 2011 Report Share Posted April 8, 2011 Might as well join. Your Excerpt: [url=http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/245535-arazel-the-anecdote-of-a-god/]Story I posted a couple of minutes ago.[/url] Your Favorite Color: Green Your Preferred Title: The Notably Irrelevant Your Status: Author, and thus automatically a Reviewer. EDIT: Oh it's pretty much dead <=| Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bahamut - Envoy of the End Posted April 8, 2011 Report Share Posted April 8, 2011 NO!!! STAY PLEASE STAY!!! Accepted as members. Will read your thing a bite later Aesir. Yes we definately need more activity but only happens with new members. Saber's preety busy ATM and I haven't seen Umbra is ages. So Star, you got some ideas for your fic? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
evilfusion Posted April 9, 2011 Report Share Posted April 9, 2011 Considering I [b]was[/b] the last post for two weeks, it's not my fault. Then again, I more or less stopped writing my fic due to an utter lack of motivation. It's one of those things in the back of my mind. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bahamut - Envoy of the End Posted April 9, 2011 Report Share Posted April 9, 2011 Meh, I've double posted before. Anyway, if I can think of a 'mini writing sketch' challenge, would people be interesting? Baiscially this idea that just came into my head would be you give three 'props' - items, persons, places, or just somethings - and the next person can write a short chapter, mini-story that uses those items listed. Then sets a new list. Good idea? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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