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PM seems awesome and more secretive, not spoiling the story except for your own character.

 

Well considering it doesn't show any real "revealing" information on my story . . . yeah . . .

 

Okay sorry it took so long.

 

[spoiler=Nobou Beginning]

[spoiler=Appearance]

NobuoBeginning.jpg

 

 

Nobuo Beginning

Alias: 6-Shot, Desperado Finale

Age: 16 - 41

Height: 5’ 11’’

Weight: 182 lbs. - 206 lbs.

Race: White

Job: High School Student/Status Member (Former) - Vigilante

Relationships: None

Weapon(s):

  • Twin Guns [Cerberus & Null]

CHARACTER FIGHTING STATS 1-5 (1; Weakest, 3; Normal 5; Strongest)

Power- 3

Defense- 3

Speed- 4

Intelligence- 3

Skill- 4

Killing Intent- 4

 

 

[spoiler=Raine]

[spoiler=Appearance]

Raine.jpg

 

 

Morgan Vanderburg

Alias: Raine

Age: 17 - 42

Gender: Male

Height: 5’ 4’’

Weight: 193 lbs. - 179 lbs.

Race: German

Job: Status - Recreational Therapist

Relationships: None

Weapon(s): None

CHARACTER FIGHTING STATS 1-5 (1; Weakest, 3; Normal 5; Strongest)

Power- 2

Defense- 2

Speed- 3

Intelligence- 4

Skill- 4

Killing Intent- 1

 

 

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Damn, those are pretty f*cking awesome, Jake.

 

But make sure you use revolvers for hios main guns. F*ck Denver's pistols. Pistol whipping for the win.

 

Just a few things. German is a race? He's white too. Shouldn't you just have some sort of location or bio for that? And how is Nobuo named Nobuo yet be White? That's a Japanese name. Never really liked when Denver did that either but Tatsuma (whose picture was originally used for Nobuo) was Japanese. Oh, and Raine weighs quite a bit with no real difference to Nobuo for a guy who's 7 inches short than him. Just wanted to mention these things. Don't really care all that much but they're there. Still amazing stuff, man.

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Damn, those are pretty f*cking awesome, Jake.

Thank you

But make sure you use revolvers for hios main guns. F*ck Denver's pistols. Pistol whipping for the win.

I'll make a note . . . Nobou pistol whips people

Just a few things. German is a race?

Yes it is

He's white too.

That is SKIN color you're thinking of. Germans have white skin too you know

Shouldn't you just have some sort of location or bio for that?

Location would be too tedious and not really make a difference. Bio would take TOO long tbh

And how is Nobuo named Nobuo yet be White? That's a Japanese name. Never really liked when Denver did that either but Tatsuma (whose picture was originally used for Nobuo) was Japanese.

Again, that is skin color you're thinking off. And names can be given without be the same race; though not truly common

Oh, and Raine weighs quite a bit with no real difference to Nobuo for a guy who's 7 inches short than him.

While weight is usually figured by height, remember life style and what not also apply. Nobou weights less than Raine because he "keeps fit" while Raine, not as extensively

Just wanted to mention these things. Don't really care all that much but they're there. Still amazing stuff, man.

 

Daemon, noted

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Doesn't Caucassian pretty much sum up the race for white people? <_<

 

German is more like a heritage or location where their ancestors had come from. Or is my race half german and indeed not white? And can't African-Amercans be German if they live their? Or am I American? Is that a race too now? IT MAKES NO SENSE TO HAVE ONE BE RIGHT AND THE OTHER BE WRONG

 

The location was why there'd might actually be a point to the German.

 

Wait, so Nobuo's parents are like weaboos and gave their kid a Japanese name? ._.

 

Muscle weighs more than fat you know. And based on pictures Raine is just plain skinny and girl-like, right? There should be a much bigger difference. :/

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Muscle weighs more than fat you know. And based on pictures Raine is just plain skinny and girl-like, right? There should be a much bigger difference. :/

 

I agree with this, plus... it kind of hurt being called fat... who am I kidding, it hurt a lot.

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S'all good. I'm gonna read it, though.

 

So who here has read (or reading) the Hunger Games?

 

My mom just got the book yesterday and she read 218 pages straight .___.

Meaning it's my turn after she's done (probably by today).

http://30.media.tumb...0ojhto1_500.gif

 

Meh, I'll start with what I have.

 

I died.

Heads-up:

As I wrote this, I was going chapter by chapter, meaning I was mostly improvising with the story until the last few chapters. And with most of the chapters, I included lots of YCM members as cameos, some only appearing one time and never being heard of again.

So honestly, DEF's main problem is there are way too many characters clogging the fic because I tried giving screen time to whoever wanted it and that kind of thing. Aside from that, I'd hope the story itself is decent and the fights are at least passable.

Well howdy, fellow veterans.

 

With food on the subject, what's everyone's favorite sit-down place? Mine is Applebee's.

 

T.G.I Fridays.

It's sad though, they never let me eat their pizza anymore because it's on the kids menu >_>

So I have to settle for a dumb steak now.

I'm watching Needless on my Vita. :/

 

How is it?

Damn, those are pretty f*cking awesome, Jake.

 

But make sure you use revolvers for hios main guns. F*ck Denver's pistols. Pistol whipping for the win.

 

Just a few things. German is a race? He's white too. Shouldn't you just have some sort of location or bio for that? And how is Nobuo named Nobuo yet be White? That's a Japanese name. Never really liked when Denver did that either but Tatsuma (whose picture was originally used for Nobuo) was Japanese. Oh, and Raine weighs quite a bit with no real difference to Nobuo for a guy who's 7 inches short than him. Just wanted to mention these things. Don't really care all that much but they're there. Still amazing stuff, man.

 

Desu

Look at everyone in DEF.

They all have weeeeird names >.>

Your pic's fitting anyhow.

 

Though this makes me wonder...are you black or something?

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