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Jake the Sage

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It is a friday, anyone else want to...?

 

I do, but I doubt anyone else would... especially with Lora not around.

 

On an unrelated note, I'm currently on the fourth page of my prologue. Seriously, it's like impossible to cut it off. lol

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You're only real role here is to keep this hotel from being obliterated. And when you aren't here then it's my job. Your job is not to change organization. Just keep things stable with the way they are.

But I have Jake's job right now. And to keep this place from being destroyed, I have to keep order and I have my own way of doing so.

 

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Desu, Jake, Broken and I are the only ones who can do the multi-persona properly who frequent here. And that is only about 4 out of 8 people.

Anyways, I'll read it. The first paragraph is my judging point. If I don't like it, you wasted my time.

 

In that case, I shall prepare for the bomb if it shall fall.

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In that case, I shall prepare for the bomb if it shall fall.

Ew. No, No, No. Why is it so generic and predictable. "Such a great place, but an issue makes it not such a great place." You simply go the way everyone does to introduce the main idea of the story. To be honest, by the first paragraph, I was complete bored with it. Work on your way of expressing your ideas.
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Okay. Scratch Desu from the list.

 

What's that supposed to mean? <_<

Haha Arrow. Let's be friends.

 

Uhh....<----Is this guy special needs?

 

Yep. <-----Ah, so you admit it.

 

Wait, what? No! Not me.

I would bring Brokette or Brokelle in, but they're not exactly, the type of persons you'd want to be around. one is a hyperactive sugar obsessed nut, and the other is slightly obsessive.

 

Sounds fun.

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Ew. No, No, No. Why is it so generic and predictable. "Such a great place, but an issue makes it not such a great place." You simply go the way everyone does to introduce the main idea of the story. To be honest, by the first paragraph, I was complete bored with it. Work on your way of expressing your ideas.

 

The bomb has dropped. I shall explore the fallout.

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