Thar Posted November 30, 2011 Report Share Posted November 30, 2011 Broken, was this before or after I joined that you posted that sample? If it's before, how far are you into it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Desu the Blue Nerd Posted November 30, 2011 Report Share Posted November 30, 2011 O...kay. Wow. To think the topics went from having the biggest members here be perverted against Lora to talking about going on to Chatzy, I think.Same old same old.Anyway, how you been Lora? If you want me to mess with Desu, Brothar, Broken, or any of the other perverts on this club that messed with you, I'll be waiting.You couldn't mess with me if you tried.I'm actually the ONLY person in this club other than your father who isn't peverted in any way whatsoever.Jake...isn't perverted? AHAHAHAHA!!!!!! XDI'm the nice guy here.You are? I don't know, man. I can be an extremely nice guy if I feel like it. :/BTW, how old are you now? It's been a while since I talked to you, and I can't even be sure if any birthdays have passed.I turn 16 tomorrow. :3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☖☠☗JAXCOB☗☠☖ Posted November 30, 2011 Report Share Posted November 30, 2011 I WAS GOING TO SAY HAPPY BIRTHDAY.SINCE I SAID IT IN ANIME LOVE CLUB. OH THE OLD DAYS WERE NICE. :^D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Thar Posted November 30, 2011 Report Share Posted November 30, 2011 @Swift: Pretty much what Desu said. The only reason we toy with Lora is really to mess with Jake. Also, as generous as you are to defend her, it won't be necessary considering she is fully capable of defending herself. Lastly, unless you're a girl yourself, I highly doubt that you are any less perverted than either of us, at least in your mind. Btw, Desu - Happy 16th Birthday! *hands over card that shoots you when you open it.* ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Desu the Blue Nerd Posted November 30, 2011 Report Share Posted November 30, 2011 Oh yeah, Thar already played the not perverted card and we called bs. I take it we were right. And my birthday is tomorrow, guys. Wish it then. :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Thar Posted November 30, 2011 Report Share Posted November 30, 2011 Oh yeah, Thar already played the not perverted card and we called bs. I take it we were right.Yeah, basically. You left when I scared Jake with my comment on porn preference.And my birthday is tomorrow, guys. Wish it then. :/I could, but I was technically a legal adult the day before I turned 18. So that's how I view it. ;3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Simping For Hina Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 *Works on Birthday gift* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☖☠☗JAXCOB☗☠☖ Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 *Works on Birthday gift**Works on Surprise anniversary gift* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Thar Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 *works on plot to destroy the world his weapons for the next Chatzy fight* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Simping For Hina Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 Brothar vs. Desu-kinz :3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Thar Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 Brothar vs. Desu-kinz :3 Yes, except he turned me down last time. So I dunno. :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☖☠☗JAXCOB☗☠☖ Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 JWAH JWAH JWAH.IS ALWAYS TURNS PEOPLE DOWN.LIKE A DESPERADO.YEAAAAAAAAAAAH! BD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 Desu, I like the milk of your body. [spoiler=And now, Jake's violent death]Jake was stationed at one of the old desks Taisen had refurbished on the second floor; and was removing his belt when he noticed one of the draws opened slightly. Naturally he took a look inside and found a baggy containing a white powder. Balancing the pros and cons, he came to the natural conclusion that it was some form of snortable drug, no doubt that would be something Taisen would probably try, at least once. Not that it matters now, seeing as he’s stuck up Clair’s cooch. Seeing how the lines are done from movies, he made several lines using the razor blade that was also in the draw. Sadly, there was no crack pipe, so he went au natural with the substance. What he didn’t know was that the substance happened to be a ludicrously powerful hallucinogen, and snorting it in large quantities was fatal. Sadly, Jake did not know this as he finished the fourth line. Almost immediately his eyes became bloodshot as all hell broke loose inside his mind. Visions of things were shooting by, I say things course, as they were too scrambled to accurately portray…he’s f***ed up you know. The drug addled body began to stumble about, until vision restored to normal. He sighed thankfully, but was then struck in the head by a mace. His vision went foggy, until a stiletto heel stomped him in the chest. He forcefully focused his eyes upwards, taking in the sight of a medium height teenage girl, in a maid costume. ‘Lora?’ he questioned, Lora being the name of his imaginary daughter. ‘Hiya dad’ she said sarcastically, swinging the overly large mace in her hand quite adeptly. ‘Why do you have a mace?’ he inquired; a mace mace, not a morning star. Granted, a morning star would’ve be very cool. ‘This old thing?’ she inquired, looking at her mace. ‘Why, I have it to smash your face in of course’ she added sweetly. ‘Ummm, why?’ he inquired, fear becoming quite obvious in his eyes. She lent down nice and low, staring him straight in the eyes. ‘I think it’s prettyobvious you pervert’ she whispered. With a quick jolt she raised herself up and too did she raise up the mace. She took her foot of his chest and swung down quickly. He rolled out of the way, the mace splintering the ground it struck. Sparing no time he managed to roll forwards and give himself a running start. He didn’t look back but instinctively jumped as the mace splintered the ground where his foot would have been. He didn’t look back as he took a corner and continued running. The library seemed a lot more twisted though, as every turn he took looked just like the last one. He never did look back, even though the sound of the smashing echoed in his mind. And then, the once silence was broken. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=S32X5-eKVp4 The very sound chilled him to the bone. He had no idea where she was, but the whistling continued, that god damned whistling was everywhere. He turned a corner and ran down more corridors of books. The whistling began to resonate even more loudly, causing him to run faster, and faster. He reached yet another corner, and met, a dead end. The whistling was then reaching its climax. He turned around slowly, the way out was much longer than it had originally been. And, at the end was Lora. She had a completely manic look in her eyes as she lurched forward, the mace in hand. With every step she took, she seemed a bit taller and stronger than before. Her lips still pursed from whistling. Extreme amounts of fear filled Jake as all he could do was crouch down and cover his head with his arms. A high pitched laughter echoed through out the library as she was in macing range. In truth, this had all been inside his head; as he was in reality lying on floor, spasming whilst foam poured from his mouth. I didn't want your death to be gross, but just violent and psychological. Because frankly, this is eventually going to happen. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Thar Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 Do me next! I read it. Didn't seem that extreme at first. Then I read the last few lines. I'm shaking now. lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Desu the Blue Nerd Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 I have to stop eating weird candy I find in the hallways... The story was actually kind of interesting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 It was only a small fraction of the story, but sufficed to say that this one is probably the goriest, in turns on brain smashing anyways. That was the point Desu, the true horror in the story was not how gory and squicky it is, but that I wrote it in such a way that you WANT to keep reading it to see what happens next. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Desu the Blue Nerd Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 Wekll the ending was extremely predictable. It was just kind of interesting and did have some pretty nice additions to it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Thar Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 Wekll the ending was extremely predictable. It was just kind of interesting and did have some pretty nice additions to it. Yeah I expected something related to the drugs towards the end, but to be honest, I was so hooked on the story that I was totally oblivious to it until the end. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 I thought the Kill Bill whistle track would be a nice touch as well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Thar Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 I thought the Kill Bill whistle track would be a nice touch as well. It was. I was engulfed in the echoing of it in the twisted library. Good god, imagine actually going through that trip. Nuts, man. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Desu the Blue Nerd Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 I didn't bother to click on it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 I reworked that scene, because originally Lora was always on his tail smashing bookcases and the floor behind him. In turn, I found the subtle approach much more interesting. But the intrigue in it is how the reader's do tend to imaigne what is going on, which adds to the atmosphere. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☖☠☗JAXCOB☗☠☖ Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 I liked it I guess. I guess I would have loved it, if I love reading and getting THAT into stories. :I Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kōsuke Ueki Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 Hey, guys, I'm writing a book. I made it a Fic. You guys want the link and read what I have so far? I can also show you an excerpt of the current chapter I'm working on, too if you want. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted December 1, 2011 Report Share Posted December 1, 2011 And if it's anything like oyur reviewing career... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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