Lt. Colonel Remo Posted January 3, 2011 Report Share Posted January 3, 2011 Well, if this was accepted I was planing on making another char...not really sure though, thats why that dewd who stole the stuff was there at all. Accepted then? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted January 3, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 3, 2011 What El said. And added your app Cortez. Now that stuff's slowed down, I'll get cracking and post my first bio soon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spirit of DMG Posted January 3, 2011 Report Share Posted January 3, 2011 *Apathy* I made an alteration to one weakness and added another. ARE YOU HAPPY NOW, ELPHEMIA!? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted January 3, 2011 Report Share Posted January 3, 2011 IDK Remo, that is up to Fusion and Cortez. DMG, I've very happy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted January 3, 2011 Report Share Posted January 3, 2011 ... I haz a good Idea for his brother but.... He haz to get accepted Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted January 3, 2011 Report Share Posted January 3, 2011 Remo, if you want to get accepted make your app better. =.= Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted January 3, 2011 Report Share Posted January 3, 2011 aside from the horrible bio what else do you suggest? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 [quote name='ItacÑ’i' timestamp='1294093775' post='4909579'] Name: Shusen Lon Age: unknown Personality: Agressive fighter Careful Planner [b]go more in depth[/b] Likes:Being at the Top, Cake, Totally insulting others when they are at their best Dislikes: Being Insulted, Having superiors Fears: Losing, Succumbing to his weakness [spoiler=Appearance][IMG]http://i51.tinypic.com/2uiixrt.jpg[/IMG][/spoiler] Powers: Is able to fly, Manipulation of energy, extremely short temporary illusions, [s]can make chocolate cake out of any material form.[/s] Weaknesses: [s]Isn't able to plan out unexpected details (i.e can't think on his feet). Gets way in over his head. Horrible social skills,[/s] easily caught by surprise Power Grid Score: [s]Over 9000! [/s] Intelligence:4 Strength: 6 Speed: 3 Durability: 2 Energy Projection: 7 Fighting Skills: 6 Total:28 Bio: [s]He leiks cake[/s] A simple foot soldier who went AWOL, he began hating the very supriors who put in a bad place. He was forced to decided between his family or hisself and decided to escape. Angry at his own weakness, he began to help others in similar positions. Lol its a saiyan :3 [/quote] For powers, go more specific. What type of energy, ect. For weaknesses, replace the crossed out ones with actual battle weaknesses. 1st one is invalid unless your intel is 3 or lower. -.- Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlackSkullCortez Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 The sample passes. I still question the app. It's mostly specifications. Like, what types of energy does he manipulate? Also, as much as it doesn't sound like it, the Chocolate Cake thing can be OP'd. Either make it temporary or put up certain conditions on that. Also, gifted does plan out details. Unless he's smart overall but just gets WAY in over his head. In which case that's one weakness. >.> Social Skills isn't a weakness, really. Look up at El's for the ones I think aren't valid. I agree with him, that is. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 but...i leiked the cake thing ;_; Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlackSkullCortez Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 Itachi, you already had the thing in the likes section. What is unnecessary will be unnecessary until what is unnecessary is necessary. And it's unnecessary in the bio. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 How about now? It is not done, but is it better? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlackSkullCortez Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 It's getting better, yes. But I would honestly change days into hours, and the month into something more like something times per fight with the charging. I mean, the RP is not going to go as fast as you think time-wise. Still needs more descriptions on things. But keep in mind the personality is optional, if you can't think of something. For energy type, if your character is DBZ based, I would have to say the energy-type is Ki or something like that. Don't know, though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 DBZ = Ki And Remo, this isn't an RP where you shove a bunch of crap you like into an app. You actually have to balance, think, ect. :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlackSkullCortez Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 @ El The reason I actually included the power grid was so we could have a check on weaknesses. So it actually helps with balancing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 [s]shaddap[/s] 'k I can't now tho Why do you hate ametrasu(the member) so much? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 [quote name='ItacÑ’i' timestamp='1294102270' post='4910064'] [s]shaddap[/s] 'k I can't now tho Why do you hate ametrasu(the member) so much? [/quote] ..... Spam is what you are doing. And Cortez, the power grid really does help. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 .... I'll stop then I haz to go then Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlackSkullCortez Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 Really? I thought you said it was abu-*shot* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 Is it(i.e my bio) ready now? Please point out anymore inconsistancies Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlackSkullCortez Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 It's much better. Just one question that doesn't need to be included, but I would like to know: since I know that this guy has a family, was the part that got powers in the Genetic War a failed or successful experiment(s)? EDIT: Just wait for El or somebody for approval. I don't trust myself enough to make the decision on my own. >.> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted January 4, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 Alright, finally done. Hopefully it's good, let me know if there's anything wrong or iffy with it. And Itachi, I think you're good to go. So accepted. [b]Name:[/b] Kyte Forrester [b]Aliases:[/b] None [b]Age:[/b] 17 [b]Personality:[/b] Kyte is devoted to Gravix and focuses solely on performing missions and capturing mutants that are prowling the deepest corners of Hadora. He's very professional amongst comrades and acts vicious when fighting foes. He prefers fighting one on one, but isn't against teamwork, especially if he needs it. [b]Likes:[/b] Gravix, success, contributions [b]Dislikes:[/b] Mutants, opposition, noncompliance [b]Fears:[/b] Failure [spoiler=Appearance] [img]http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2010/176/c/4/Swordsman_by_Myme1.jpg[/img] [/spoiler] [spoiler=Powers] Kyte specializes in infusing his two swords with his chakra. With just chakra, the swords become much more destructive and are more durable, but Kyte will often add his natural elements, fire or wind to it. Kyte's "main" element is fire, which he's practiced utilizing ever since he learned to utilize his chakra. Later he discovered he could use wind jutsu as well and has refined his fire and wind jutsu to near-master level. With two mastered elements under his belt, he's recently tried utilizing lightning, though the most he can do is either infusing his swords with lightning chakra, or by condensing it into his palm for a move called "Thunderhand", but it can only be used once a day. He's very skilled at swordsmanship and is a decent gunman. [b]Fire Style Jutsu:[/b] Fireball Jutsu-a giant fireball blown from the mouth Fire Pillar-Kyte emits fire chakra from his entire body to deflect attacks, break free of ice attacks, and increase damage through physical attacks, can last however long Kyte continues to emit chakra for Phoenix Flower Jutsu-several small fireballs blown from the mouth, can sometimes contain weapons like kunai or shuriken Geyser Tide-Kyte can tunnel underground and send several geysers of fire up through the surface; he can also do so above ground by manipulating the fire below, but it's not as accurate when done so Fire Fist-Kyte has fire surrounding his fists to burn and deal heavy damage to the opponent, same principles as the Fire Pillar, but only surrounding the fists Blazing Fist of the Overlord-A powerful move that expends a lot of chakra, a fiery red dragon of flame is controlled by the wielder and can incinerate almost anything in its path, only lasts for 20 seconds or so and burns the arm that controlled it afterward Shinseiken-Kyte's most powerful technique, he compresses his chakra and heat into his palms to craft a sphere with characteristics similar to a nova; it's very easy to destabilize, motivating Kyte to use both hands to keep it under control, he either throws it at the opponent which will only last two seconds before massively exploding or it can be thrust directly into the opponent, but that damages his arms in the process Various other Fire Style Jutsus that all range from C to A-rank. [b]Wind Style Jutsu:[/b] Wind Style Stream-Can change direction while in mid-air at high speeds, blown from mouth Vacuum Great Sphere-bullet of wind chakra Vacuum Serial Waves-blades of wind blown from the mouth, size can range from human to giraffe size Vacuum Wave-a large blade of wind that flies out from the users body to everything surrounding him Vacuum Sphere-several small blasts of wind chakra blown from the mouth, covers a wide range and act as bullets Great Breakthrough-a gust of wind that varies in strength depending on Kyte's vitality, at its peak it can blow down a tree Fumatama-Kyte gathers wind chakra in his palm that rotates rapidly to create a sphere that deals heavy damage when thrust directly into an opponent, but it can't be used for too long as the wind chakra cuts into Kyte's palm the longer it's used for Wind Pillar-Same as the Fire Pillar, but with wind Gale Punch-Kyte has a mini-tornado of wind surrounding his fists to slice and inflict heavy damage to the opponent, same principles as the Wind Pillar, but only surrounding the fists Wind Run-Kyte can manipulate wind chakra and the air around him to increase his body's speed, mainly used for traveling purposes since it requires concentration which is hard to achieve during battle Various other Wind Style Jutsus ranging from C to A ranks [b]Lightning Style Jutsu:[/b] Thunderhand-Kyte gathers and compresses lightning chakra into his palm, is capable of piercing most armors and can only be used once per day [/spoiler] [b]Weaknesses:[/b] Many of Kyte's powerful moves have adverse effects on him, such as backfiring, inflicting harm onto himself, and draining lots of chakra. He cannot bear the cold, he is only impervious to it when using Fire Pillar, but this forces him into steadily wasting his chakra during usage. When feeling pressured in a fight, he can act out violently to try and gain the upper hand, but this has the potential to backfire on him and leave him vulnerable with several openings. Kyte almost always needs to rest after a fight since he expends a lot of chakra during a fight, leaving him vulnerable and not able to move quickly. [b]Power Grid Score:[/b] Intelligence: 5 Strength: 3 Speed: 3 (4 when using Wind Run) Durability: 3 Energy Projection: 6 Fighting Skills: 5 Total: 25 (26-Wind Run) [b]Bio:[/b] Kyte grew up in Kaze Canopy, where he learned how to use the Chakra Network inside his body that all ninja possessed. His master, Denfu, taught him to wield fire jutsu and eventually wind jutsu when he advanced to the level of a protege. When he was 12 years old, Denfu was ambushed by a rogue mutant and was killed in the conflict. This stirred a hatred for mutants in Kyte and he immediately left Kaze Canopy for Valor City, where he became accustomed to urban life and refined his combat skills by fighting any mutants he could find and criminals. A few years later, he encountered a man named Fusion who offered Kyte a partnership in the Gravix Raiders. Liking the sound of it, Kyte signed up immediately and has spent the last two years devoting himself to the Gravix Raiders. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlackSkullCortez Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 The only difference I would make is that Energy Projection would be 6, since he doesn't control ALL forms on energy. If you control more than 1 and less than all forms of energy, that's automatically a 6. Otherwise, accepted. I thought this was going to be the pris... never mind. EDIT: WOW, I just realized, Infinity IS the X-Men. Wow. Just, wow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted January 4, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 Wow. You're right. And alright, I'll make the change and add it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted January 4, 2011 Report Share Posted January 4, 2011 [quote name='BlackSkullCortez' timestamp='1294109089' post='4910329'] It's much better. Just one question that doesn't need to be included, but I would like to know: since I know that this guy has a family, was the part that got powers in the Genetic War a failed or successful experiment(s)? [b]If decide to make his brother it'll be different but so far they were successful but escaped and lived in Kasuka Town to have a normal life when Shusen was found with powers and drafted.[/b] EDIT: Just wait for El or somebody for approval. I don't trust myself enough to make the decision on my own. >.> [b]XD[/b] [/quote]o.0 If you added it(my app) to the member list can you add the attack Final Galick Cannon? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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