Okano Posted January 26, 2008 Report Share Posted January 26, 2008 this are my first cards Im mexican so I make them in spanish but the translation is coming but before make them in english I going to give you the translation below the cards [spoiler=angelsXX(fem)] when this card is destroyed in result of battle take control of the monster that destroy this monster when this card is summoned look at the top card from your deck if is magic you take it,if is trap card put it back in your deck and shuffle and if is a monster send it to de garveyard and increase your life points in the Atk of that monster when this card battles a monster in atk position destroy other monster and this do not and give the damage as normaly when this monster is summoned destroy an equipment card on the field.this monster can only be destroy in battle ny an equiped monster this monster cannot be atacked by monsters without a equipment.this monster can only be destroyed by a monster equiped whit "longinus spear" when this monster is summoned put 5 counters in this card(max.5). when this card atk remove a counter.when this card atk whitout a counter destroy all in the field and give damage to your opponents life point 500 x each card this card can be special summoned if there is no other monster on the field you can summon and control 1 EVA-type from your deck,when this card is destroyed that monster is returned to the graveyard [spoiler=the childs] 1st child Rei 2nd child Asuka 3rd child Shinji 4th child Toji 5th child Kaworu starting whit the EVA unit [spoiler=EVA units] EVA-00 Eva-01 EVA-02 EVA-03 EVA-04 EVA series [spoiler=chibi evas]"Chibi EVA-00 Prototype" when this monster atacks an monster in def position destroy the atacked monster at the end of damage steap "Chibi Eva-01" "Chibi EVA-02" "Chibi EVA-03" "Chibi EVA series" all comments are acepted [spoiler=some trap cards] "A.t field" "Eva battery" "Full power A.T. Field" "Mecha battle" now angels [spoiler=Angels] 1st angel 2nd angel 3rd angel 4th angel 5th angel 6th angel 7th angel Otsu and Kou(separeted form of Israfel) 8th angel un-born form 8th angel 9th angel 10th angel 11th angel 12th angel 13th angel 14th angel 15th angel 16th angel 17th angel 18th angel Edit:more cards and translated of the cards Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RestLess-BoTics Posted January 26, 2008 Report Share Posted January 26, 2008 Work on your grammar errors, and spelling errors, and use of pictures, ( And the quality of them.. ) and your cards will be about perfect! Pretty good job though! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pen pen Posted January 31, 2008 Report Share Posted January 31, 2008 icredible exep by some grammar errors and spelling errors but very gd cards Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mad Hopz Posted January 31, 2008 Report Share Posted January 31, 2008 need some work... better pics and better ocg is needed. 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DSS Posted January 31, 2008 Report Share Posted January 31, 2008 good job but bad pics ,bad OCG 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Okano Posted January 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 31, 2008 I know one of the image is bad but i dont have any better than that one Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Xth Haseo Posted February 1, 2008 Report Share Posted February 1, 2008 Dude wtf is with your grammar? I like the card images..even though some are borderline hentai! I think that one of those cards needs to be reworked...it would get banned in the real game because of it's CED type effect. Girl Saquiel-XX Fairy/Effect When this monster is summoned(state normal or special not just summoned) put 5 counters in this card(max.5)(starting with a full amount of counters is overkill).When this card atk(um..the word should be Attacks) remove a counter. When this card atk(again..attacks) whitout(without) a counter destroy all(what? monsters? traps? spell? destroying all is what got CED banned in the first place) in(on) the field and give(inflict) damage to your opponents life point 500 x(reverse the x and 500 and put the x before the 500) each card(It should say "for each card sent to the graveyard by this cards effect" not just each card. I thought I would help you out and fix up yours some...so after editing it would be like this.Girl Saquiel-XX Lv6 Light Fairy/Effect 2200/2000 - When this monster is normal or special summoned successfully place 5 spell counters on this card.(Max.5) When this card attacks, remove 1 spell counter from this card. When this card attacks without a spell counter on it, destroy all cards on the field, then inflict damage to your opponents life points equal to the amount of cards sent to the graveyard by this cards effect x 500.(I tried to keep the original card text intact the best it could be.)btw the reason I changed it from "Counter" to "Spell Counter" is because spell counters are easier to remove from the card making its priority effect easier to use. I also suggest raising the ATK to 2500 or at least 2400 to contend with the Monarchs and lower the defense to around 1500. It doesn't need defense since it is suppose to be constantly attacking and it won't last 5 turns with Monarchs being pretty easy to get out with the same 1 tribute required like this card has. By allowing it to get 5 counters even if it is special summoned it prevents it from u sing it's field destroying effect the same turn someone uses Call Of The Haunted or Premature Burial on it I thought about that and agree that that makes the card more balanced and less of a "hax card" like people say BLS and CED are. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Abstract [Atrocity] Posted February 1, 2008 Report Share Posted February 1, 2008 Might want to change the pics on some of those cards... (and by "might", I mean DEFINITELY.) Needs grammar fixes, i'm too lazy to point them out Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Okano Posted February 1, 2008 Author Report Share Posted February 1, 2008 thnks by point my errors because Im not from USA and I dont know perfectly how to write Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
keji masters Posted February 12, 2008 Report Share Posted February 12, 2008 it's ok like the others said some ocg errors but you get it right eventually Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Okano Posted May 15, 2008 Author Report Share Posted May 15, 2008 add more cards and edit some all angels added Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chain Posted June 7, 2008 Report Share Posted June 7, 2008 good but fairy not fairie Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
╬「Selatcia」╬ Posted June 7, 2008 Report Share Posted June 7, 2008 Pics need better backgrounds. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Okano Posted September 8, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 8, 2008 I add the normal EVA units and start to fix the old cards so just help my whit this Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thunderfang12 Posted September 9, 2008 Report Share Posted September 9, 2008 so many OCG errors Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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