Pokemon: The Next Generation

[Squidward Tentacles]

[spoiler='Application']Character's Name
Appearance
Pokémon used (Up to six) (No legendaries)
Badges
Age
Attitude towards characters
Are they a trainer?
Hometown (Town/Region)[/spoiler]
[spoiler='Season 1'][spoiler='Episode 1']Episode 1: Meet the Mijumaru!<div>[font="Arial, sans-serif"]Alex woke up from his slumber. He checked the clock. "Ohmy... It's 11 o'clock! I've slept through school!" He rememberedsomething. "Oh wait! It's summer!" He looked at his computer. On thescreen flashed "Happy 10th birthday Alex!" "Oh my God. I'm 10now!" It was true. He was now elligible to get his Pokemon liscence. Alexadored Pokemon, especially his pet Ponyta. He picked up his backpack, which hisolder sister, Sarah, had left for him. He opened up the cabinet above hiscomputer and took out a fruit bar. After finishing off the fruit bar, he randown the stairs. "Thanks, Sarah!" He said. "No prob, littlebro." She said. He hugged her. "I'll be home probably by the end ofsummer." He said. "Okay." He ran out the door, and into thesunlight. He got on his bike and rode over to Professor Oak's lab. He, believeit or not, was the first one there. He knocked on the door to the lab, whichwas answered by professor Oak."Hello?" "Ah, Yes. You must beAlex Mijumaru." "Yes, I am." "Okay." Professor Oakannounced with a smile. They walked into the main room where he sees a glassdome. Professor Oak pressed a button, and the dome retracted. Alex saw threePokéballs. "Wow..." Alex exclaimed. "There are three Pokémoninside here. One is Mijumaru, Pokabu, and Tsutarja. You may choose from thosethree." Professor Oak said. "I choose Mijumaru!" Alex said. Ablue and white sea otter-like Pokémon with black ears appeared out of thePokéball. "Mijuu?" it called. Alex picked it up and hugged it. "Thankyou, Professor Oak!" "You're welcome." Alex put Mijumaru on hishead, and it hugged him. "Mijuu..." it said again."Okay, Mijumaru. I think I'll call you Mijuu." Alex said. And theywalked out of the lab, eager to start their quest.[/font] [/spoiler][spoiler='Episode 2']Episode 2: Call of the Choroneko Part 1

[font="Arial, sans-serif"]As Alex and Mijuu walked into the town of Miribusa Town in theSouthern region of Vulcana, they heard a weird cry. A purple cat Pokemon rantoward Alex. He took the Pokedex out of his backpack and found out the Pokemonwas a Choroneko. It jumped on him, and knocked the Pokedex out of his hands.Mijuu caught it just in time, and Alex fell. "Mijuu, Water Gun!" Alexsaid. A stream of water appeared from Mijuu's mouth, and it blasted theChoroneko. Alex got up and took a Pokeball out of his backpack. He pressed thebutton and threw the Pokeball at Choroneko. It disappeared in a flash of light,and the ball closed around it. The red and white capsule rocked three times,then stopped. Alex smiled. "Yeah! I caught a Choroneko!" He said."I'll call her Neko!" The Choroneko was Level 12, and Mijuu was Level12. Mijuu grunted as Alex added the Pokeball to his belt. "Come on,Mijuu." Alex said. Mijuu jumped on Alex's head, and they walked to thePokemon Center. Alex looked around, and noticed someone familiar. Someone withdark brown hair. "Sarah?" Alex said. "Hey, little bro!"Sarah said. "What are you doing all the way from Hikari Town?""Well, I came here to do some shopping, and realized you'd be coming heresoon, so I decided to wait for you." She said happily.[/font][/spoiler][spoiler='Episode 3']Episode 2: Call of the Choroneko Part 2

Alex looked at Sarah. “Well, I better get going, little bro.” She said. “Okay.” Alex said. He hugged his sister, and went up to the counter. “Hello.” Said Nurse Joy cheerfully. “Could you heal my Mijumaru and Choroneko?” “Of course.” Nurse Joy took the Pokéballs and placed them in a machine. 10 seconds later, she handed Alex the Pokéballs. “Thank you.” Alex said, and he left. He took out the town map. “Hmm…” He said. “Looks like Vulcia City is the nearest place with a gym…” He said. He took his laptop out of his backpack and looked up the gym leader of Vulcia City. “Hmm… okay. Vulcia leader: Lucas. He uses two Kibago, both level 15 and a Dratini level 18.” He looked at Mijuu. “You ready, Mijuu?” He asked. Mijuu grunted. “Mijuu!” Mijuu pointed out toward the edge of Miribusa Town. Alex looked over there and saw a Mamepato staring menacingly at them. “Mame!” It cried. It flew at Mijuu, and Choroneko jumped out of its Pokéball and scratched the Mamepato. “Fury Swipes, Neko!” Alex said. Neko slashed up Mamepato, and it fell. Alex took out a Pokéball and threw it at the Mamepato. The Mamepato disappeared in a burst of red light. The red and white capsule secured itself around the Pokémon and rocked three times. The Pokéball stopped moving, and the Mamepato busted out of the Pokéball and began pecking Choroneko. “Neko! Mijuu, Bubblebeam!” He yelled. The Mamepato was blasted with bubbles. It fell to the ground with a screech, and fainted. Alex threw the Pokéball at the Mamepato, and the bird disappeared in a red flash of light. Once again, the capsule secured itself, and, rocking three times, stopped rocking. “Yeah! I got a Mamepato!” Alex yelled. Neko went back in her Pokéball, and Mijuu grunted and got back on Alex’s head. Together, they walked onto the bridge to Vulcia City.

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[Squidward Tentacles]

bump.

bump. plz comment.

bump.

[Floyd.]

Buddy, this is horrible, what you're looking to be is a Screenplay artist, I recommend you read some information points about how to format a Screenplay and then download the programme 'Celtx' to continue and write it.

[Squidward Tentacles]

yeah... I'm not actually looking to be a screenplay artist.

[quote name='Floyd.' timestamp='1290634311' post='4807776']
Buddy, this is horrible, what you're looking to be is a Screenplay artist, I recommend you read some information points about how to format a Screenplay and then download the programme 'Celtx' to continue and write it.
[/quote]

And it is a lot better than you think. Not right now, maybe, but it's still growing.

[Squidward Tentacles]

bump

[The True Ace Attorney]

Dude this is horrible. It hasn't been formatted correctly and each "Episode" is ridiculously short. You're missing a hell of a lot of spaces. You're actually mentioning levels which do not belong in any media outside the games. And finally, is your character called Alex Mijumaru? That... That's just stupid.

[Squidward Tentacles]

his real name isn't Mijumaru. It's what prof. oak thinks. People get that mixed up, and his real name Bijuu. and this is one of my first fan fics, so it may not be too good yet. but as i start adding characters, it'll get better.

[quote name='GreatPriestCthulhu' timestamp='1290689090' post='4809031']
Dude this is horrible. It hasn't been formatted correctly and each "Episode" is ridiculously short. You're missing a hell of a lot of spaces. You're actually mentioning levels which do not belong in any media outside the games. And finally, is your character called Alex Mijumaru? That... That's just stupid.
[/quote]

well, could you at least help me figure that stuff out?I mean, I am new at this fan fic stuff.

[DARKPLANT RISING]

[quote name='Sonic Paladin' timestamp='1290642572' post='4808090']And it is a lot better than you think.[/quote]

Not exactly the sort of thing a smart guy would say, huh? Also:

[spoiler=Episode 1]
Episode 1: Meet the Mijumaru!<div>
[i]Okay, so that's [/i]one[i] great naming.[/i]
Alex woke up from his slumber. He checked the clock. "Ohmy... It's 11 o'clock! I've slept through school!"
[i]Appearently your computer automatically deletes spaces between "Oh" and "my". Also, he doesn't have any other people in his house. Or, he's just being simply ignored.[/i]
He rememberedsomething.
[i]Nice timing. More evidence. Windows 2010 is nice. How about buying that?[/i]
"Oh wait! It's summer!"
[i]Oh wait! He's babbling something to himself![/i]
He looked at his computer.
[i]Okay. So the first thing someone late for school does after getting up is checking the computer?[/i]
On thescreen flashed
[i]Again. You're not fond of spaces.[/i]
"Happy 10th birthday Alex!"
[i]What sort of weird software is that?[/i]
"Oh my God. I'm 10now!"
[i]Oh my God. He must have been struck by lightning in the night.[/i]
It was true. He was now elligible to get his Pokemon liscence.
[i]I wonder if you know the meaning of the word "orthodox".[/i]
Alexadored
[i]Alexadored. I've heard of Alexander, but Alexadored... oh wait, it's just you again.[/i]
Pokemon, especially his pet Ponyta. He picked up his backpack, which hisolder sister, Sarah, had left for him.
[i]She hates him, coming from how she didn't wake him up. Expect some nasty joke in that backpack.[/i]
He opened up the cabinet above hiscomputer and took out a fruit bar.
[i]This joke is now lame.[/i]
After finishing off the fruit bar, he randown the stairs.
[i]*Picks nose*[/i]
"Thanks, Sarah!" He said. "No prob, littlebro." She said. He hugged her.
[i]Apart from another mistake, it must be that she's out of middle school already. Otherwise it'll be that she's skipping school without a valid reason.[/i]
"I'll be home probably by the end ofsummer." He said. "Okay."
[i]He's an orphan. Amen to his parents.[/i]
He ran out the door, and into thesunlight.
[i]At least it can be Thesunlight Street.[/i]
He got on his bike and rode over to Professor Oak's lab.
[i]He forgot all about school... And how many Professor Oaks are there in the world?[/i]
He, believeit or not, was the first one there.
[i]It's not a big city. There aren't a hundred people having the same birthdate.[/i]
He knocked on the door to the lab, whichwas
[i]Forget it.[/i]
answered by professor Oak."Hello?" "Ah, Yes. You must beAlex Mijumaru."
[i]Oh no. Not again.[/i]
"Yes, I am." "Okay." Professor Oakannounced
[i]*Throws up*[/i]
with a smile. They walked into the main room where he sees a glassdome.
[i]Fine. I'll stop on that note.[/i]
Professor Oak pressed a button, and the dome retracted. Alex saw threePokéballs. "Wow..." Alex exclaimed. "There are three Pokémoninside here. One is Mijumaru, Pokabu, and Tsutarja. You may choose from thosethree." Professor Oak said. "I choose Mijumaru!" Alex said.
[i]At this point we know that the Ponyta is gone from history.[/i]
Ablue and white sea otter-like Pokémon with black ears appeared out of thePokéball. "Mijuu?" it called. Alex picked it up and hugged it. "Thankyou, Professor Oak!" "You're welcome." Alex put Mijumaru on hishead, and it hugged him. "Mijuu..." it said again."Okay, Mijumaru. I think I'll call you Mijuu." Alex said. And theywalked out of the lab, eager to start their quest. [/spoiler]

Since just this would make you leave the computer, I'll add a clip of a particular tut I made.

[i]Some of these similar things can also get you in trouble:
1. Posting horrid cards in contests
2. Posting Fan Fics with at least two of: (i) horrible grammar, (ii) spelling, (iii)plot and (iv) detail
3. Posting horrid GFX[/i]

So how's that. I know you're depressed. Thing is, this isn't the Yugioh Fan Fic Forum. It's the Yugioh Card Maker Forum. Why not visit the other sections?

[Squidward Tentacles]

look, i'm sorry if it's not that good, but it's one of my first fan fics. cut me a little slack...

[DARKPLANT RISING]

[quote name='Sonic Paladin' timestamp='1290836367' post='4812780']
look, i'm sorry if it's not that good, but it's one of my first fan fics. cut me a little slack...
[/quote]
Well then. I'll stop this fairly enjoyable foe fic stuff... just for you.

...But while I don't mind at all since I don't care about reps, most people would get mad if you randomly neg anyone who tells you stuff. Not a good idea.

Also, if you can't accept peoples' simplest opinions saying Pokemon is bad, you're seriously egocentric.

[Squidward Tentacles]

okay. I'm sorry for that.