BLEACH: Fragments

[Dad]

I hope you do have it in soon Shadow. I'm anxious. No rush, but this is the first good BLEACH rp I've seen in a while. But don't let that keep your from a good app. I look forward to seeing a good Shikai out of you.

[Shadow Zero]

Oh, this Shikai is going to be good, and the bankai is going to be awesome. Also, I found the app!!! Now all I have to do is finish it!~ Wish I could show what I have so far, but it has to be finished first and posted all at once, so yeah.

Edit: The app is finally finished! Here it is!

[spoiler=Viral Tsunokai]
[b]Name:[/b] [color="#00FF00"]Viral Tsunokai[/color] (ponounced vih-ruhl Tsoo-noh-kai)

[b]Gender:[/b] Male

[b]Appearance:[/b] Viral stands at six feet tall with spiky yellow hair pointing towards the back and Ice blue eyes. He is Caucasian and slightly muscular in nature, and thus far has been able to avoid getting scars. He weighs 160 lbs. and always wears his zanpukuto whether in or out of wartime, the metallic cross-guard of which is a Z with a lightning bolt through the center.

[b]Personality:[/b] Viral is easy going when off duty, but is very serious and professional in his duties as a Shinigami. He enjoys having conversations with people, but dislike talking to people who talk to much, and also likes to sit and read books when he has some free time on his hands. He also has a liking for earth music, and often listens to it while he reads. He also keeps an I-pod on him that he happened to buy while on an undercover mission tracking a dangerous hollow whose personality is not unlike that of Grand Fisher, and modified it so that it runs off of reiatsu instead of battery power. He tends to carry it with him so he can listen to music when there is nothing else to do and also likes to listen to it while traveling to the next place where he has been assigned to take on a mission.

[b]Biography:[/b] Viral was born in the Kanto region of Japan and traveled the world during his human life. He was a hard worker and easy going then as well, but unlike in the Soul Society was far less serious. He had a passion for books and music alike, and spent as much time as he could listening to music and reading whatever book happened to be on hand at the time. He graduated from College at the age of 26, and became a librarian. At the age of 30 he was killed in a drive by shooting. He had unfortunately been in the wrong place at the wrong time, and while the intended target was able to make a clean getaway, Viral was not so lucky. He had konso performed on him the same as so many other lost souls, his final regrets being that he would no longer be able to see his family or watch his children grow.
In the Soul Society, Viral was assigned to a district in the Rukongai that was frequented by Shinigami, and so was not so lawless a place as many of the other districts. He was discovered by a shinigami of the Squad 3 and told of the reason why he felt hunger even though most people in the Rukongai don't. It was then that he applied and was accepted in the Soul Reaper Academy, and he attended every single day of it until graduation. Once having graduated, he was assigned to Squad 3, and like many others in his squad was stunned when Gin allied himself openly with Aizen and left the Soul Society. He is currently the third seat of Squad 3, and like so many others are constantly busy in the ensuing chaos that replaced the peaceful every day life in the Seireitei since Aizen left.

[b]Shikai Name & Release Phrase[/b] subeteno sakusei wo hakai shinasai. Muchitsujo no ha

[b]Shikai Appearance[/b] Becomes a two edged sword that is white on one side and black on the other.

[b]Shikai Abilities[/b] The white side burns Whatever it cuts, so even a shallow cut can cause pain as it feels as though a fire is lit inside the wound that is inflicted. The black side can either poison a person, or freeze the inflicted areas upon cutting depending on what Viral wants. Either way, it slows the movements of an opponent each time they are struck with it. The poison gradually spreads throughout the body, while the freeze effect is limited to wounds inflicted by the black side and the area surrounding it. All effects of Muchitsujo no ha can only be stopped if Viral wishes it to be so. Furthermore, Muchitsujo no ha is capable of unleashing a wave of energy called Kougenjin when swung by focusing Virals reiatsu into the blade itself, and the wave of energy can take multiple forms. However, when not given a specific shape, it is usually a curved blade of energy that is one and a half times as tall as Viral is.

[b]Bankai Name[/b] Tenkuu no Muchitsujo no ha

[b]Bankai Appearance[/b] There are four appearances that this Bankai has
1: A white aura surrounds the Viral, increasing their speed. Viral is also surrounded by orbs of dark energy that can merge or separate at will.
2: Viral attains white wings and is surrounded by a pool of darkness energy.
3: Thousands of dark and light two edged energy swords surround Viral and his opponent.
4: Viral is completely clothed in a type of medieval armor of alternating black and white colors with a helmet in the shape of a dragon or some other similarly fashioned beast.

[b]Bankai Abilities[/b]
1: Viral becomes much faster, and the orbs of darkness energy stay fixed in the same position relative to his location at all times unless he otherwise directs them to be elsewhere. The darkness orbs can either explode on contact, dragging weaker enemies into a realm of complete darkness where they are quickly poisoned to death, or upon contact quickly and completely encases the enemy, making it impossible for him/her to move for a short period of time. The orbs of darkness energy simultaneously freezes and poisons enemies on contact and can also merge together or separate apart and form new shapes, allowing them to also be used as shields. The white aura allows Viral to burn an enemy simply by touching them. He is also capable of summoning blades of light energy whether in his hand or elsewhere on the field, and can wield them according to his will, same as with the orbs of darkness energy. The orbs and swords are also capable of firing off either light or darkness energy shots respectively, causing poison and freeze damage or burn damage upon hitting the enemy.
2: Viral is able to fly and shoot beams of energy from his wings. His speed is also much increased in this form, and the pool of darkness energy surrounding him moves with him as well. The pool of darkness energy can from tentacles, spikes, and other shapes, and the tentacles are able to create distortions in the dimensional wall, disappearing through said distortions and reappearing through other distortions at a location of Virals choosing. The darkness energy is also free-forming and can take on many shapes, even be used as a close fitting armor. Like the darkness orbs, the pool of darkness energy is also capable of firing off energy beams from it.
3: Viral becomes faster and his opponent becomes slower. He is able to use the blades of light and darkness energy to fight many enemies at once, controlling them both through force of will and wielding them by hand. The dark and light energy blades each respectively retain the abilities of the Zanpukuto's Shikai, Muchitsujo no ha.
4: Viral is able to cause light or darkness energy to jut out from anywhere out of his armor. He can also have the energy separate from his armor and take on various forms as well as summon creatures to fight with or for him. Each creature is surrounded with an aura of either light or dark energy which is able to take several strong hits before disappearing. He can also summon either white or black flames that cannot be doused and will only disappear if he wills it.

[b]Hollow Mask Appearance[/b]
Virals hollow mask is the same skull shape as Ichigo's, with the exception that it has spikes jutting out and upwards at halfway between the cheek and law bones, and at the temple. The black markings are striped with four at the top, and the spikes are completely black. There are also two stripes at the chin area of the hollow mask as well, and all stripes have pointed ends.
[/spoiler]

[PrimalFear]

@ Umbra:

1st: The name should be resolved because I had Phantom change my Name back to PrimalFear, i'd prefer not to have to change the characters name as I love the name. But if you insist then I shall do it anyway.

2nd: I guess your right about the Huceo Mundo thing, as I would be considered Captain rank. I will change and update that part of my Bio with an alternate scene, but you misunderstood what I was saying about "Destroying everything in his path" and "Slaughtering his squad members". The "Destroying everything in his path merely was an overexageration of the rampage he was causing, he wasn't exactly destroying things just basiclly going insane. As for the "Slaughtering of his squad members" He did not commit the act, he was just completely covered in blood and going on a rampage when the Rescue squad showed up so one could only assume the possibility that he had slaughtered them which he didn't, their was also a slight possibility that Hayate was undergoing a hollow transformation at the time of the rampage (Which is clearly stated he wasn't, just merely going insane from what he had just seen happen to his fellow Squad members.)

Now if what I said is okay for me to do then I will do so and re-apply the edited app.

[Umbra]

Primal, regardless if you change your name or not, it was still the same as your username when you applied. This lengthy a discussion with you leads me to believe this isn't going to work. Application [b]discarded[/b]. Please withdraw from this thread.

Shadow Zero: I don't even know where to start. Overpowered beyond logical reason; more or less insta-kill Shikai (white side) or will eventually cause paralysis (black side) with the bankai going on from there, sub-par grammar and the like, as well as one of the gravest sins when it comes to explaining your character; comparing it to others. It makes it seem as if you can't describe your character on your own, and thus makes me think less of you.

The application is as much an information dump as it is a test of your writing abilities.

[Shadow Zero]

Sub par grammar? =/ Sorry to hear that. I sometimes have a bit of a problem with lengthy applications where that is concerned.

I'll modify the app as best I can, but first, can you tell me how it is insta-kill? I can work from there, I just need to know what the problems are first.
Not to say that I can't figure most of it out on my own, I just want your take on things so I better understand how to edit the app so that it's more acceptable.

[Umbra]

Well, perhaps "insta-kill" was the wrong word, but it seems a bit too powerful. Even a grazing blow spreads an infectious fire-disease that can burn the entire body if it isn't cured in time? (May depend on how long this time is, but you should tone down the conditions for infecting a little.)

The black side is a bit more acceptable, as long as it scales properly. Possibly ten or twelve hits before the target is paralyzed?

[TotalObelisk]

Here you go, hopefully everything's in order :3

[b]Name:[/b] [color=green]Oharue Namine[/color]
[b]Gender:[/b] Female
[b]Appearance:[/b] Oharue appears to be about 16 in appearance, is about 5'11 in height and has a fairly thin build. She has long, untidy carrot coloured hair which rises at the front and falls over her face in short bangs and is tied behind her in a large ponytail at the back and has bright yellow eyes. She wears a typical shinigami robe but also wears a blue jacket over the top as well as armour covering her chest, forearms and shins, as well as a wide leather belt around her waist with several leather tassles coming off it. She wears her Zanpakto on her back in a bright blue scabbard. In its sealed form, Oharue's Zanpakto takes the form of a long, two-handed katana with a light blue handle, the guard is shaped like a six point star and has a jagged pattern on it. Due to its length, Oharue keeps her katana on her back and often has problems when drawing it.

[b]Personality:[/b] Oharue really has two sides to her, which she flits between during frequent mood swings. The first is a cheerful, carefree and incredibly cocky personality, in which Oharue acts like she's top of the world and will always underestimate people or judge them by her first impressions. She can lose her temper very easily, however, and will become moody and sour. During her mood swings she will often snap at people or start a fight for no reason (To be honest, she'll also start a fight when she's not moody, but then she's simply doing it for the fun of it). She usually has a lot of pent up frustration and usually takes it out on anyone or anything nearby, be it hollow, quincy or even shinigami. She has a habit of challenging people to fights at random when she's bored, or when she just wants to show off and doesn't usually care how powerful they are. Most often she will start fights will squad 11 members, as they are noted as the most powerful fighters, but also because Oharue was not allowed to enter squad 11 because of her Zanpakto's abilities. This is something which she is very annoyed about and because of it dislikes her Zanpakto's abilities and often berates her for it. During fights she will show off nearly all the time, making a lot of unnecessary movements and actions, and will also attempt to end fights in the flashiest way possible. For her, fighting is a way to make her seem better and what she wants most of all is to be the best. She dislikes being seen as weak and will get very annoyed when anyone calls or so, be they right or wrong. She also gets stroppy when she's losing and will not hesitate to use dirty tricks or cheat, but will get annoyed if her opponent does so, claiming they're being unfair. She also idolizes the captain of squad 11, Kenpatchi Zaraki, and aspired to become as strong and as famous as he is. Thus she is angry that her Zanpakto's abilities denies her entry into Squad 11.

[b]Biography:[/b] Oharue was born in Soul Society and raised in Zaraki. Her parents had both died and in the human world and sent to Soul Society where they fell in love. However they where stricken by poverty and her mother was very frail and sick. As such Oharue was almost constantly teased during her childhood and, having a short temper, would often get into a number of fights with others. She would often come home with a large number of injuries to which her mother would often fuss over, which only caused Oharue to become even more irritated.
During her early teenage years, her mother eventually died and her father became increasingly depressed. Feeling irritated at his sign of weakness Oharue chose to ran away from home, despite her father's protests. However, not too long after she wound up fighting a group of armed thugs. In a fit of rage Oharue refused to run away and stood her ground, ending up with several serious injuries all over her. However, before the gang had a chance to kill her, Oharue's father suddenly showed up and cut one of them down with a katana. Taken by surprise, the others where also quickly delt with.
Oharue's father then took her back home, Oharue protested but due to her injuries she was unable to prevent him from doing so. While he was treating her, her father told her that, for a long time, he had longer to enter the Gotei 13 and become a shinigami, hence why he'd secretly had the katana for so long, but since his wife was sick and he had Oharue to care for, he'd given up on this dream and now claimed he was too old to carry it on himself and asked Oharue if she'd put her violent tendencies to good use and become a shinigami. Oharue was unimpressed by his story but accepted anyway, claiming she wanted any excuse to get away from him (she has since loathed her father for making her out to be weak and interrupting a fight). Taking her father's katana, Oharue entered the academy in order to become a shinigami, and did show potential but lacked a lot of self control and often started fights with other students, earning her a negative reputation with the teachers. Despite this, she proved to be quite
gifted in controlling her Reiatsu and using Kidou, despite her rebellious nature. During her six years at the academy, Oharue heard stories about the 11th squad captain, Zaraki Kenpatchi. No doubt intrigued by the rumours about him, and the fact that he came from the same place she did, Oharue aspired to enter the 11th squad upon leaving the academy, and so focused less on Kidou and more on physical combat. Seeking to become even stronger in order to realize her dream, Oharue began to attempt to converse with her Zanpakto's spirit in order to unlock her Shikai and become a seated officer. However, despite being gifted in controlling her Reiatsu, she found it increasingly difficult to achieve this and would often lose her temper and get into even more fights to vent out her frustration. After about a year of trying, she eventually managed it just as she graduated from the academy. Feeling proud of herself, she attempted to enter the 11th squad but was rejected due to her Zanpakto being Kidou based. Oharue
argued that she never wanted it to be a Kidou type Zanpakto but it didn't change anything, so she instead entered the 13th squad, feeling a strong resentment to most squad 11 members. Despite her best effect, Ohaure has so far only managed to get as far as the 8th seat.


[b]Shikai Name & Release Phrase[/b] 'kanojo subeteno sakusei no sekai soshite ikken!' (Stand atop the world and look down on all creation (probably innacurate)) Inoshishimusha (Daredevil/Foolish Warrior)
[b]Shikai Appearance[/b] Oharue's weapon becomes a Bisento (a pole-arm weapon with a short, wide blade that vaguely looks like a fish head). The shaft is dark blue with a light blue weight at the end and another holding the blade in place.
[b]Shikai Abilities[/b] When swung through the air, Oharue's weapon charges electricity to electricute her opponents depending on their reiatsu (opponets with higher reiatsu than her will feel minimal effects depending on how much charge the weapon has), the longer it moves for, the greater the charge becomes. The charge increases roughly 10 volts for every second it's in motion, because of this Oharue will make a lot of unnecessary movements to increase the charge. The charge will vanish once the weapon stops moving and will vanish if the blade is not in contact with anything conductive. Oharue is also able to shoot electricity from the tip of her weapon by charging it to a high voltage and then focusing her reiatsu into the tip before the charge vanishes. Oharue often uses this long ranged attack to surprise opponents. Although she dislikes her Zanpakto's abilities she will still utilize them in battle.

[b]Bankai Name[/b] Ikkitousennomusha (matchless warrior/Warrior of 1000 battles)
[b]Bankai Appearance[/b] Oharue's Bankai takes the form of two large cylinders with a large blade at one end and a short handle at the other, each handle is connected by a steam of lightning to an orb which floats behind Oharue and can attach to it to become a single weapon. Each cylinder is almost as large as Oharue herself and has a strip of black on one side which will slowly turn bright blue as its charge increases. The blades at the end are similar in appearance to the hilt of the sealed form except with three points on each side and are blue in colour. Despite its size, Oharue is able to wield the weapons in one hand each very easily. In addition, the armour on Oharue's body will increase, becoming almost full samurai armour with the exception of her head.
[b]Bankai Abilities[/b] As before, Oharue's weapon will increase in charge the longer it stays in motion and its current charge is indicated by the stips along the side of each weapon, Oharue can also shoot lightning from each blade at will which will use up the charge of either end. Oharue can also recall eiter of the weapons so long as they're still connected to the orb by lightning, allowing her to use them in long rang as well as short range. Unlike the Shikai form, the charge will not vanish when the weapon stops, only when Oharue fires lightning from it or succesfully hits someone with it. When the charge is at maximin, both weapons will become surrounded by lightning and Oharue will become considerable stronger and faster. If there is not enough charge left in the weapon, the lightning connecting the two weapons to the orb behind Ohaure will vanish until they regain their charge.

[b]Hollow Mask Appearance[/b] Oharue's mask is similar to a Kabuto Samurai mask, with a bone like helmet covering the top of her head and three horn like extensions that come out of the top and each side which extend past the back of her head. The mask part depicts a grinning face with large fangs at either end and upturned eye holes that look like curved rain drops. Its completely white except for the edge of the eyes which have a jagged blue pattern coming off them, similar to the guard of Oharue's sealed Zanpakto.

[Shadow Zero]

Oh, I see where the problem lies now. Actually, getting hit with the white side doesn't actually set a person on fire, nor does any of the respective parts of the bankai forms. What it does is cause a burning sensation that makes it feel like you're on fire, and the cells would eventually react accordingly, meaning that if it becomes strong enough they could be cauterized as though they were actually burned. It's partly psychological in nature now that I think of it, but is not something that is an illusion either. Does that help you understand a bit? Sorry if I caused any confusion.

And yeah, a grazing blow was probably a bit much. If I changed that part of it, then the app would be acceptable?

And again, I apologize for the sub-par grammar. I struggle with that at times, but it is something that I am constantly working on.

[Dad]

[quote name='TotalObelisk' timestamp='1290082948' post='4793120']
Here you go, hopefully everything's in order :3

[b]Name:[/b] [color=green]Oharue Namine[/color]
[b]Gender:[/b] Female
[b]Appearance:[/b] Oharue appears to be about 16 in appearance, is about 5'11 in height and has a fairly thin build. She has long, untidy carrot coloured hair which rises at the front and falls over her face in short bangs and is tied behind her in a large ponytail at the back and has bright yellow eyes. She wears a typical shinigami robe but also wears a blue jacket over the top as well as armour covering her chest, forearms and shins, as well as a wide leather belt around her waist with several leather tassles coming off it. She wears her Zanpakto on her back in a bright blue scabbard. In its sealed form, Oharue's Zanpakto takes the form of a long, two-handed katana with a light blue handle, the guard is shaped like a six point star and has a jagged pattern on it. Due to its length, Oharue keeps her katana on her back and often has problems when drawing it.

[b]Personality:[/b] Oharue really has two sides to her, which she flits between during frequent mood swings. The first is a cheerful, carefree and incredibly cocky personality, in which Oharue acts like she's top of the world and will always underestimate people or judge them by her first impressions. She can lose her temper very easily, however, and will become moody and sour. During her mood swings she will often snap at people or start a fight for no reason (To be honest, she'll also start a fight when she's not moody, but then she's simply doing it for the fun of it). She usually has a lot of pent up frustration and usually takes it out on anyone or anything nearby, be it hollow, quincy or even shinigami. She has a habit of challenging people to fights at random when she's bored, or when she just wants to show off and doesn't usually care how powerful they are. Most often she will start fights will squad 11 members, as they are noted as the most powerful fighters, but also because Oharue was not allowed to enter squad 11 because of her Zanpakto's abilities. This is something which she is very annoyed about and because of it dislikes her Zanpakto's abilities and often berates her for it. During fights she will show off nearly all the time, making a lot of unnecessary movements and actions, and will also attempt to end fights in the flashiest way possible. For her, fighting is a way to make her seem better and what she wants most of all is to be the best. She dislikes being seen as weak and will get very annoyed when anyone calls or so, be they right or wrong. She also gets stroppy when she's losing and will not hesitate to use dirty tricks or cheat, but will get annoyed if her opponent does so, claiming they're being unfair. She also idolizes the captain of squad 11, Kenpatchi Zaraki, and aspired to become as strong and as famous as he is. Thus she is angry that her Zanpakto's abilities denies her entry into Squad 11.

[b]Biography:[/b] Oharue was born in Soul Society and raised in Zaraki. Her parents had both died and in the human world and sent to Soul Society where they fell in love. However they where stricken by poverty and her mother was very frail and sick. As such Oharue was almost constantly teased during her childhood and, having a short temper, would often get into a number of fights with others. She would often come home with a large number of injuries to which her mother would often fuss over, which only caused Oharue to become even more irritated.
During her early teenage years, her mother eventually died and her father became increasingly depressed. Feeling irritated at his sign of weakness Oharue chose to ran away from home, despite her father's protests. However, not too long after she wound up fighting a group of armed thugs. In a fit of rage Oharue refused to run away and stood her ground, ending up with several serious injuries all over her. However, before the gang had a chance to kill her, Oharue's father suddenly showed up and cut one of them down with a katana. Taken by surprise, the others where also quickly delt with.
Oharue's father then took her back home, Oharue protested but due to her injuries she was unable to prevent him from doing so. While he was treating her, her father told her that, for a long time, he had longer to enter the Gotei 13 and become a shinigami, hence why he'd secretly had the katana for so long, but since his wife was sick and he had Oharue to care for, he'd given up on this dream and now claimed he was too old to carry it on himself and asked Oharue if she'd put her violent tendencies to good use and become a shinigami. Oharue was unimpressed by his story but accepted anyway, claiming she wanted any excuse to get away from him (she has since loathed her father for making her out to be weak and interrupting a fight). Taking her father's katana, Oharue entered the academy in order to become a shinigami, and did show potential but lacked a lot of self control and often started fights with other students, earning her a negative reputation with the teachers. Despite this, she proved to be quite
gifted in controlling her Reiatsu and using Kidou, despite her rebellious nature. During her six years at the academy, Oharue heard stories about the 11th squad captain, Zaraki Kenpatchi. No doubt intrigued by the rumours about him, and the fact that he came from the same place she did, Oharue aspired to enter the 11th squad upon leaving the academy, and so focused less on Kidou and more on physical combat. Seeking to become even stronger in order to realize her dream, Oharue began to attempt to converse with her Zanpakto's spirit in order to unlock her Shikai and become a seated officer. However, despite being gifted in controlling her Reiatsu, she found it increasingly difficult to achieve this and would often lose her temper and get into even more fights to vent out her frustration. After about a year of trying, she eventually managed it just as she graduated from the academy. Feeling proud of herself, she attempted to enter the 11th squad but was rejected due to her Zanpakto being Kidou based. Oharue
argued that she never wanted it to be a Kidou type Zanpakto but it didn't change anything, so she instead entered the 13th squad, feeling a strong resentment to most squad 11 members. Despite her best effect, Ohaure has so far only managed to get as far as the 8th seat.


[b]Shikai Name & Release Phrase[/b] 'kanojo subeteno sakusei no sekai soshite ikken!' (Stand atop the world and look down on all creation (probably innacurate)) Inoshishimusha (Daredevil/Foolish Warrior)
[b]Shikai Appearance[/b] Oharue's weapon becomes a Bisento (a pole-arm weapon with a short, wide blade that vaguely looks like a fish head). The shaft is dark blue with a light blue weight at the end and another holding the blade in place.
[b]Shikai Abilities[/b] When swung through the air, Oharue's weapon charges electricity to electricute her opponents depending on their reiatsu (opponets with higher reiatsu than her will feel minimal effects depending on how much charge the weapon has), the longer it moves for, the greater the charge becomes. The charge increases roughly 10 volts for every second it's in motion, because of this Oharue will make a lot of unnecessary movements to increase the charge. The charge will vanish once the weapon stops moving and will vanish if the blade is not in contact with anything conductive. Oharue is also able to shoot electricity from the tip of her weapon by charging it to a high voltage and then focusing her reiatsu into the tip before the charge vanishes. Oharue often uses this long ranged attack to surprise opponents. Although she dislikes her Zanpakto's abilities she will still utilize them in battle.

[b]Bankai Name[/b] Ikkitousennomusha (matchless warrior/Warrior of 1000 battles)
[b]Bankai Appearance[/b] Oharue's Bankai takes the form of two large cylinders with a large blade at one end and a short handle at the other, each handle is connected by a steam of lightning to an orb which floats behind Oharue and can attach to it to become a single weapon. Each cylinder is almost as large as Oharue herself and has a strip of black on one side which will slowly turn bright blue as its charge increases. The blades at the end are similar in appearance to the hilt of the sealed form except with three points on each side and are blue in colour. Despite its size, Oharue is able to wield the weapons in one hand each very easily. In addition, the armour on Oharue's body will increase, becoming almost full samurai armour with the exception of her head.
[b]Bankai Abilities[/b] As before, Oharue's weapon will increase in charge the longer it stays in motion and its current charge is indicated by the stips along the side of each weapon, Oharue can also shoot lightning from each blade at will which will use up the charge of either end. Oharue can also recall eiter of the weapons so long as they're still connected to the orb by lightning, allowing her to use them in long rang as well as short range. Unlike the Shikai form, the charge will not vanish when the weapon stops, only when Oharue fires lightning from it or succesfully hits someone with it. When the charge is at maximin, both weapons will become surrounded by lightning and Oharue will become considerable stronger and faster. If there is not enough charge left in the weapon, the lightning connecting the two weapons to the orb behind Ohaure will vanish until they regain their charge.

[b]Hollow Mask Appearance[/b] Oharue's mask is similar to a Kabuto Samurai mask, with a bone like helmet covering the top of her head and three horn like extensions that come out of the top and each side which extend past the back of her head. The mask part depicts a grinning face with large fangs at either end and upturned eye holes that look like curved rain drops. Its completely white except for the edge of the eyes which have a jagged blue pattern coming off them, similar to the guard of Oharue's sealed Zanpakto.
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*force accept*

[Shadow Zero]

I've made some changes to my application. Do you think it's a little more balanced now Umbra? I'll take another look a little later and see what else I can find that might need changing. Are there any other problems that you see with it?

[Umbra]

Obelisk, accepted. Revenant, I got it the first time around, no need to quote the whole thing.

Shadow, do that, at least. I assume that your Bankai doesn't immediately go onto all four stages, but that your character can activate them at will, with a more intense strain on your reiatsu for each stage. You're still comparing your character to existing characters, which really puts me off. It's far too uncreative.

[Shadow Zero]

Well, I actually hadn't planned on them being in stages, although that would probably help to make it more balanced.

But yeah, is there anything you currently see with the app that needs fixing?

*goes to look while waiting for an answer*

Edit: Ah, you must have read that as I was editing it. That part I took care of. I'm going to give it one more look over.

[.Starrk]

Is there still a spot left?

[Dad]

[quote name='Coyote Starrk' timestamp='1290124799' post='4794203']
Is there still a spot left?
[/quote]

Check the first post. If the applicant's accepted total five, then no.

EDIT: Actually, it looks like there's a sixth spot in place. So yes.

[Umbra]

There is indeed one spot left.

Shadow, it looks good now. As long as the Bankai goes the way we've stated, you're [b]accepted[/b].

[Shadow Zero]

Awesome. Can't wait for the rp to start.

Greetings Mister Starrk. Going to try oyour hand here eh? Well, let's see what you can do then.

[.Starrk]

[b]Name:[/b] [color="#2E8B57"]Roku Kyoriumi[/color]
[b]Gender:[/b]Male
[b]Appearance:[/b] 6' FT Tall, 135 LBS, Skinny build and short hair.
[b]Personality:[/b] Roku is a very laid back person, however if he gets into battle, he decides to get serious when it comes down to it. He is generally a happy person and is kind to his subordinates.
[b]Biography:[/b] Roku was born in the Rukon district. His family was fairly poor but they were able to survive by selling merchandise on the streets. He wasn't a very high achiever as a child, but his greatest quality was that he was so kind to others, even if someone isn't kind in return.
One day, a Soul Reaper had come to his part of the district because he was coming to see where he had originally lived. After the Soul Reaper had sensed Roku's extremely high Reiatsu, he needed to find him. After hours of searching, he had found Roku. The Soul Reaper urged Roku to join the Soul Reaper academy, where he would surely advance and become powerful. Roku then decided that he wanted to go, and with the consent of his parents, he went to become a Shinigami.

Roku had done very through the Shinigami academy and graduated in 1 year. He had completely mastered his swordsman ship. His Kido isn't very strong,l however, his Shikai enhances is Kido abilities. He then joined squad 5, where he would later be promoted to Lieutenant, where he had proved himself time and time again to be powerful by helping with the Soul Societies' greatest problems. His Shikai had already been fully developed and now his Zanpaktou was complete as he reached Bankai.

[b]Shikai Name & Release Phrase[/b] Kuroru (Crawl), Akuma No Noroi
[b]Shikai Appearance[/b] Zanpaktou is transformed into a longer dividend blade with holes in the middle used for Kido attacks. Its lighter weight gives it more room for the user to move around much faster. Akuma No Noroi has a sharp tip, but a dull blade. The guard on the Zanpaktou is a Square Black and cannot be easily destroyed. The blade is also red, with a white lining edge.


[b]Shikai Abilities[/b] Lighter Sword Weight, High Speed movement, Ranged Kido attacks fired from Zanpaktou. Flash Step is faster and upgraded now due to the Weight change difference after released. The holes in his Zanpaktou are used for Kido shot out of them. Accuracy isn't always the best, but still attacks are still stronger than usual. Sharpened edged sword is now better for close combat because it is better for cutting, piercing and slashing.

[b]Bankai Name[/b] Saishu-Tekina Akuma No Noroi
[b]Bankai Appearance[/b] User is transformed into a hollowfied Soul Reaper. User is now wearing a white robe. Hollow mask is immediately put on as Bankai is activated. Wings can be developed if the user takes to much damage and is immobilized. Sword is now sharped by user's own Reiatsu. Kido power is reduced while Physical Strength is heightened. The blade is is pure blood red, with the guard in the shape of a skull.

[b]Bankai Abilities[/b] Souru bunkatsu (Soul Split) or the Ability to Split someones soul in half. Bankai takes away extreme amounts of energy away and possible organ bursts because of full transformation. After Soul Split is used, The user will most likely pass out due to the loss of Spiritual pressure of releasing and Reaping a soul. After the user uses Soul Split, user leaves Bankai until Reiatsu is restored.

[b]Hollow Mask Appearance[/b] Mask resembles some what of a Devil. Black lines appear on the bottom of the mask near the mouth. Due to the heaviness of the Mask, it can only be contained for about 5 minutes if not using Bankai. Forehead part of mask thicker than the rest of mask to protect the users brain.

[Dad]

[quote name='Coyote Starrk' timestamp='1290126806' post='4794343']
[b]Name:[/b] Roku Kyoriumi
[b]Gender:[/b]Male
[b]Appearance:[/b] 6' FT Tall, 135 LBS, Skinny build and short hair.
[b]Personality:[/b] Roku is a very laid back person, however if he gets into battle, he decides to get serious when it comes down to it. He is generally a happy person and is kind to his subordinates.
[b]Biography:[/b] Roku was born in the Rukon district. His family was fairly poor but they were able to survive by selling merchandise on the streets. He wasn't a very high achiever as a child, but his greatest quality was that he was so kind to others, even if someone isn't kind in return.
One day, a Soul Reaper had come to his part of the district because he was coming to see where he had originally lived. After the Soul Reaper had sensed Roku's extremely high Reiatsu, he needed to find him. After hours of searching, he had found Roku. The Soul Reaper urged Roku to join the Soul Reaper academy, where he would surely advance and become powerful. Roku then decided that he wanted to go, and with the consent of his parents, he went to become a Shinigami.

Roku had done very through the Shinigami academy and graduated in 1 year. He had completely mastered his swordsman ship. His Kido was also very well developed as well. He then joined squad 5, where he would later be promoted to Lieutenant, where he had proved himself time and time again to be powerful by helping with the Soul Societies' greatest problems. He then had been promoted to Captain shortly after he had mastered his Bankai. His Shikai had already been fully developed and now his Zanpaktou was complete.

[b]Shikai Name & Release Phrase[/b] Crawl, Akuma No Noroi
[b]Shikai Appearance[/b]
[spoiler=Appearance]
[img]http://www.globalgear.com.au/images/dsc_72981.jpg[/img]
[b]Shikai Abilities[/b] High Speed movement, Ranged Fire Kido attacks fired from Zanpaktou.

[b]Bankai Name[/b] Saishu-Tekina Akuma No Noroi
[b]Bankai Appearance[/b]
[spoiler=Appearance]
[img]http://www.deviantart.com/download/70078519/khia_bankai_bordom2_by_khia.png[/img]
+ Full White Robe and Hollow Mask is always on after activation.
[b]Bankai Abilities[/b] Souru bunkatsu (Soul Split) or the Ability to Split someones soul in half. Bankai takes away extreme amounts of energy away and possible organ bursts because of full transformation.

[b]Hollow Mask Appearance[/b]
[spoiler=Hollow Mask]
[img]http://th01.deviantart.net/fs43/300W/f/2009/134/1/2/Vizard_mask_design_by_Iron_Fox.jpg[/img]
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Images are not allowed in the application bruh. Try again. Oh, and you're going to be asked for a Japanese Translation to your shikai. That means the "Crawl" part.

[.Starrk]

[quote name='Revenant Black' timestamp='1290126933' post='4794349']
Images are not allowed in the application bruh. Try again. Oh, and you're going to be asked for a Japanese Translation to your shikai. That means the "Crawl" part.
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Whoops its says Shikai appearance so I thought there would be a pic. :/ Oh well.


Alright finished.

[Dad]

[quote name='Coyote Starrk' timestamp='1290127280' post='4794373']
Whoops its says Shikai appearance so I thought there would be a pic. :/ Oh well.


Alright finished.
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Goes for the mask too. xDDD

[.Starrk]

[quote name='Revenant Black' timestamp='1290127717' post='4794395']
Goes for the mask too. xDDD
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;D

[Shadow Zero]

Wait, you mean the entire release phrase is supposed to be in Japanese? o.O

[Dad]

[quote name='Shadow Zero' timestamp='1290129266' post='4794494']
Wait, you mean the entire release phrase is supposed to be in Japanese? o.O
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He ask me to do so, and I'm guessing that would be for all of us.

[Blake]

He asked me to do it, as well.

[Shadow Zero]

Okay then? =/ I'll get the translation and change it now.