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CrystalCyae

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Lord Of the Mysterians, you've earned yourself a strike :(

For one, we do NOT use ** to mark what we do, like whispering. You put:

*whispers to Terry* What's up?

Two things wrong there. the ** and the fact that that example doesn't consist of "".

You should put:

"What's up?" Jake asked Terry in a whisper.

See the difference?

The end of this equals........

1 strike (bordering 2, so ur lucky)

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My side: Samantha was admitted to hospital while protecting Traugott from Ariados' Poison Jab. No internal poisoning, but still too painful.

Then she was admitted to Hospital while Ragnarok was kidnapped by Traugott.

They were right on top of the Bell Tower.

Ragnarok's Pokemon came to the rescue when Traugott's Tyranitar destroyed the monument.

Everyone was evacuated. Ragnarok and his Pokemon managed to escape...

 

Well, you did say 'multiple' apps, but how many? Please specify.... Oh well.

 

Name: Ace Alpha (Known as 'Dwayne Beelzebub' in Team Disaster)

Age: 12

Gender: Male

Appearance: Ace Alpha wears dark-framed glasses, thus his eye colour is, and possibly will always be, unknown. He has long, glistening, sapphire-blue hair which shines under the golden sun. He has fair skin. He wears two different outfits depending on whether he is Dwayne Beelzebub or Ace Alpha.

As Ace Alpha, he wears a couple green sneakers and blue skinny-jeans. His hoodie is green with a yellow stripe along the zip. His sunglasses cover his eyes.

As Dwayne Beelzebub, he wears a beret and wears purple pants. His blue shoes match his blue top.

 

Bio: Ace Alpha, real name unknown, was adopted by foster parents. He was a curious little boy back in those days. One day, while he was playing along the river, he fell into it and was going to be attacked by a school of mysterious looking Yellow Basurao that were thought to never exist. The Basurao were going to attack him, until the leader of the school ordered them to halt the carnage. One of the Basurao pleadged to follow Ace, thus he obtained the rare Basurao, a real companion to share his problems with.

There was one problem that his Basurao was dumbstruck with. Ace was recently bullied that day and shared his problem with his friend, and eventually asked, "Why must we be either good or evil? Why not both?" Basurao was dumbstruck.

As Ace matured, he realized he could. And so, his double-sided carrer started, both helping and hurting Pokemon.

 

Personality: Ace has a Split-Personality, and he is very stealthy too. He is brave and will always stand up for his friends. He is easily influenced by love. He is a very flirty person, but hardly does it to younger people.

 

Main Pokemon: Basurao (Male, Yellow Stripe)

Pokemon Team:

Basurao (Male, yellow stripe, nicknamed Fluffy in Team Pokemon, Jetsam in Team Disaster)

Garchomp (Female, no nickname in Team Pokemon, Flotsam in Team Disaster)

Beautifly (Male, no nickname at all, resembles Monarch Butterfly)

Metagross (No nickname at all)

Smeargle (Male, No nickname at all)

Sazandora (Female, nicknamed Cerberus in Team Pokemon, Death in Team Disaster)

Other: He has a Split Personality and is secretly in both teams. No one knows that. He is a considerably high ranking member, one rank below Samantha and Ragnarok.

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can i join?

 

minnie

Age: 10

Gender: girl

Appearance: Melody.jpg

Bio:

i started my pokemon travel when i was 8 years old. i tried my hardest but couldnt win a single badge no matter how hard i tried. i would take odd jobs to feed myself and my pokemon. but i always kept training and soon my eevee turned into a leafeon. he is always protective over me and it makes me try harder seeing him work so hard for me. because of him i have earned my frist badge and feel i can get them all. also while i was training i wound and caught a bunch more eevees and they also changed so i have every type in the pokedex.

Personality: minnie is kind and honest about things she believes in. while she is quite her lead pokemon protects her.

Main Pokemon: leafeon

Pokemon Team:all of the other eevees

Other: i am new

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A couple of pointers:

 

The Bio should really be written in third person, like the personality section is. You may still be accepted with it in first person, depending on Obsidian, but third person is preferable really.

More pressingly, however, is the fact that your team is too large. There are seven Eeveelutions, but you can only have six pokémon in your party, meaning you can't have all of them.

Also, there's nothing to say which side she's on. Most of the other apps mention somewhere in the Bio which team they're on, and list their role within the group in the 'other' section.

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A couple of pointers:

 

The Bio should really be written in third person, like the personality section is. You may still be accepted with it in first person, depending on Obsidian, but third person is preferable really.

More pressingly, however, is the fact that your team is too large. There are seven Eeveelutions, but you can only have six pokémon in your party, meaning you can't have all of them.

Also, there's nothing to say which side she's on. Most of the other apps mention somewhere in the Bio which team they're on, and list their role within the group in the 'other' section.

This.

Please, change the team and write the bio in third person.

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Lets try THIS out...

 

Name: Alexis Xanadu

Age: 20

Gender: Female

Appearance: Alexis Xanadu has long, wavy, Purple hair which is partially green. She wears a short, purple gothic-styled dress and carries a green umbrella with her. She has fair skin. Her left eye is purple, the right is green. She also has a necklace on her neck which resembles a smaller version of an odd keystone. Her

Bio: Alexis, since young, loved to explore dangerous areas in the Pokemon world. She has travelled to Isshu, Almia, Johto and Sinnoh until she stopped. When she was young, her parents gave her a gift - an odd keystone necklace. It was only sooner when she found out it was actually her new Pokemon Partner - a small Spiritomb. This Spiritomb had been her Partner for very long and she always put on her necklace, hardly seen without her. She had explored different places with her Spiritomb, and caught many a rare-coloured Pokemon. Many years after her last journey, she decided to join the alliance of good - Team Pokemon.

Personality: She is a flirty person, and a hardworking one too. When provoked, she revokes aggresively.

Main Pokemon: Spiritomb

Pokemon Team:

Spiritomb (No nickname, Male)

Eevee (No nickname, Female)

Monozu (Nicknamed Tex, Male)

Larvitar (No nickname, Female)

Gochiruzeru (Nicknamed Goth, Female)

Tsujartsa (Nicknamed Smuggy, Male)

Other: High-ranking member in Team Pokemon, despite her weak team.

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