So, YCM. Feedback needed.

[bury the year]

Without any context other than that this will be a sports manga-based story, what do I need to improve upon in here, and should I continue?

[spoiler=Here ya go.]“Sae, come look at this.” Reito Hibari, a man with lightly-tousled brown hair, around thirty years old or so and sporting the beginning of a five-‘o-clock shadow, picked up a letter from the granite countertop at which he was sitting and waved in the direction of his wife. “It’s a letter from the Kousaka family.”

“Ara~? Let me see that.” A moderately-young woman with an unruly tangle of black hair streaming behind her, swept to her husband’s side from the nearby door, startling him slightly. Sae swiftly pulled the letter out of Reito’s hand, flapped it open with a quick motion of her hand, and began to read it.

[i]Dear Hibari Family,

It’s been a good four years that we’ve been away, but I think that Yozaburo and I have decided at long last that we should be heading back to Ayanami. We believe it’s best for the kids that they grow up in a more... “native” environment, and although America’s been good to us, I have to admit that we miss Japan! (Look at me – I’ve forgotten how to write a proper letter!) Also, since our house seems to have been unsold all these years (with the recession, I’m only mildly surprised), I think we’ll be moving back next door to you. Expect us over here in a week or so: we’re just finishing packing as I write this, so the only big hurdle we have left is getting all our stuff over. On that note, Natsuo and Akiho have picked up a new hobby, and I think Kenta-kun would like to try it out. Well, that’s all for now. Can’t wait to see you all again~!

Sincerely,
Kousaka Shiki.[/i]

Sweatdropping a bit, Sae sighed and passed the letter back to her husband. “I knew they’d come back someday, but I didn’t think it would be this long,” she said placidly.

“Hey, you remember Yozaburo-kun, right?” Reito replied, folding the letter back up. “He was never one to stay in a single place. Give him credit for sticking in a foreign country for so long. And besides,” he continued, “we can pick things up like they had never left. I’m just a bit curious on what that ‘hobby’ Shiki-kun was talking about is.”

“You and me both,” Sae sighed, resting her forearms on the countertop. A flash of an idea lit her face up, though, and she propped herself up. “Should I wake up Kenta to tell him the news?”

Reito chuckled slightly and reached over to grab a nearby coffee mug, with all the intent of filling it up. “Naw. It’s the weekend. He deserves to sleep.”

Smiling back, Sae turned around and walked back to the stairs. “Whatever you say, honey,” she cheerfully stated with a wink.

In response, Reito waited until his wife was out of sight up the stairs, then grumbled to himself and stared into his empty cup of coffee. [i]‘This should be... interesting.’[/i]

Suddenly, another thought struck him, and he bolted upright. [i]‘Wait. If the letter was sent a week ago, and it takes about a week to get the mail through…’[/i]

His train of thought was greeted by the honking of a car next door.[/spoiler]

[Bassa]

Looks good so far, I would be interested in reading more.

BTW I am a fast reader. Lol.

[//Zeromaru//]

I like what there is so far. You should definatley do more.
And about improvements... theres definatley a few little things that need doing, but I can't tell what. I'd need to see more I think. [size="1"][i]Hint, Hint[/i][/size]

[bury the year]

http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/225292-reversal/

Wish granted.