sketchpad Posted October 10, 2010 Report Share Posted October 10, 2010 Ok guys I wrote this off the top of my head and I want to see how this goes, note this isn't just a couple of chapters, it will be a whole season, maybe containing 20 chapters!? anyways enjoy! [spoiler=Chapter 1: The New Obsession]It was a warm winter’s day in the town of South Park, many were happy, many were sad, but In South Park Elementary a new obsession for the boys had been found. “Dude, Dude look what I’ve got,” The plump boy known as Cartman called bragging about a packet of cards. “So what it’s just a couple of cards, with pictures stuck on them and a couple of stats,” Stan claimed scratching his head. “Yeah what’s so great about them?” Kyle added also confused. “Shut up Kyle you Jew!” Cartman bellowed angered that his friends weren’t exactly impressed. “You like them right don’t Butters?” Cartman asked trying to prove a point. “What Yugi-oh cards, Oh no! I’m not allowed Yugi-oh cards, my parents say I’m grounded if I buy any more, they say it‘s a game only for the grown ups.” he said shivering which was strange since the whether was still mildly warm. “Dude only poor people like Yugi-oh,” Kyle mumbled taking the piss yet again out of Cartman. “That’s not true! YOU STUPID JEW!” Cartman yelled infuriated. “It is..I mean Kenny likes them, point proven,” “Pfft, Kenny likes yugi oh? Kyle Kennies as poor as f***! They cost 3.50 per packet!” “Kenny!” Stan shouted grasping his attention, the unhealthy boy turned his head in the direction of the others, looking surprised at the question being asked. “You like Yugi-oh don’t you Kenny?” “Yeh I love Yu-gi-oh,” he said joining the crowd so silent you could barely hear him. “Screw you guys I’m going home,” Cartman announced pissed off. “But it’s second Break?” Kyle expressed in a Jewish accent. “Screw you guys I’m going home,” he repeated once more. “But it’s second Break? We still have four hours left of school,” “Dude leave him, he probably just wants to leave so he can play Yu-gi-oh,” Stan butted in, next the entire school began to laugh at Cartman, he felt ashamed. “GAME ON, GAME ON, COME ON YOU BETTER PLAY YOUR CARDS RIGHT!” They all sang mimicking the theme tune. The overweight boy had now reached his house, he grumbled as he entered, “Stupid Stan and Kyle not liking Yu gi oh, I’ll show them, I’ll get them into it if it’s the last thing I do!” … “Dude what you going to buy with 3.50, the next Xbox game is £40,” Stan said to Kyle as they each stood still outside Game. “Your not..Seriously going to buy a pack?” Stan asked noticing what Game sold with 3.50 “I’m just going to see how crappy these things really are, one packet that’s it, might aswell,” kyle replied counting his money. “Fine, one packet, we both told each other we wouldn’t resort to this s***!” “One packet I promise,” Kyle said confident entering the store. … “So..How crap are they?” Stan asked quizzed revealing a sinister laugh. “These things are actually pretty good,” Kyle replied gazing upon his cards he’d purchased. “No f***ing way? Dude it’s a piece of card?” Stan said once more. “Yeah but I got a shiny, I bet Cartman doesn’t have any of these,” Kyle boasted looking straight into the eyes of his Blue eyes White Dragon. “No Kyle, what are you doing?” “Sorry Stan, I’m on Cartman’s side on this one, it’s a good game,” Kyle replied treasuring his shiny card like his life depended on it. “Oh well I’m sure no one else likes it,” Stan said talking in his mind ditching Kyle. Next Monday….”Hey every one, Kyle likes Yugi oh!” Stan said while eating his lunch in the hall. “So it’s a good game?” Craig mentioned, supporting him. “What?” “Y..Y..Yer..Man..Its..Gr..Gr..Great!” Jimmy said spitting his words out, “I love Yu gi oh!” Token said proudly putting some of his cards on display, “No way you got the Dark Magician,” Butters said astonished. “Really?” At the that moment almost everyone on the table departed to another, “Is Yugi oh really the answer? DAMN YOU CARTMAN!” To be continued… [/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yugioh4eva22 Posted October 10, 2010 Report Share Posted October 10, 2010 nice work you have another reader Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted October 10, 2010 Report Share Posted October 10, 2010 I'm not blown away by this. The grammar could be better, and I never really got a chuckle out of it. So... yeah, do more if you want, but you can do better. I KNOW you can! The sky's the limit and all that!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ghoulish Posted October 10, 2010 Report Share Posted October 10, 2010 it was actually quite enjoyable to read, not that funny, i think u resorted to the whole "Jew" jokes a little quickand they often are said in a joke kind of refrence like when kyle doesnt want to waste money, but not bad ill keep reading Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sketchpad Posted October 11, 2010 Author Report Share Posted October 11, 2010 chapter 2 will be up soon, and thanks for the feedback you guys Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted October 11, 2010 Report Share Posted October 11, 2010 If they're in Colorado, then why are they paying with pounds? O_o Also, Token getting the Dark Magician? Is that Fridge Brilliance- *is shot* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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