Assisan Dairys the Blue and Black wolves.

[Joey Miles]

[spoiler=small peice]silent steps in the calm of the night.

the calm trickle of water from a fountian in the front of the house.

the eary glow of the pale blue moon in the dead of night.

these were my bread and butter the things that kept me alive.

i loved my job is was the ultimate game and the score was kept in one of three ways.

style, payment, and number of kills and i was number one in all three along with my partner and brother.

we ran down a long hall our silent footsteps unheard by normal human ears.

our breaths were quiet as if they didnt exist and our eyes glowed unnatural colors of gold and red.

we had many names, the alpha and omega, the blue wolf and the black wolf, the messangers of death they were all names that we went by. but it didnt matter what mattered was the game.

i opened the door of the famous actor and number one on the f.b.i's most wanted list. there the man sat in a chair holding a gun in his hand pointed at me.

"so they sent kids after me." he chuckled at my partner and i. "how sad that its come to this."

i rolled my eyes and my partner growled a bit. "now look we can do this the easy way or the hard way " i said to him. "you can take this poisen i have or we can kill you with our hands and if i was you i would take the poisen." i said gentaly.

he laugh once more at me and i decided not to wait. before he could even move his finger to the trigger of his gun i was behind him a glowing blue knife in my hand. "well it seems you made the wrong choice." i said as i took at the trembling man. "it doesnt matter though your dead as it is." i said beofre i put my hand on his sholder. the minute i did his body lit up like a christmas tree filling to the brim with electricty.

it didnt take long for him to die and once he was gone i moved hand to his head putting the gun to it and pulling the trigger. it wasnt like i was unsure that my job was done it was more for the sake of style.

we ran out of the house moving across the large yard like wolves in the night loping in the pale moon light.

this was my game and i was undefeated.[/spoiler]
ok this is a small peice of the actuall story i'm going to write but first i need to know if people like it otherwise i'm gonna kill this and move on

[The Final Messenger]

There are spelling errors but I remember you're dyslexic so I won't mind those... yet... it's abit shor- oh it said 'short piece'.... Grammer, grammer, grammer... don't put lines between each line unless you're getting another paragraph.... make the thing into a paragraph or two, not just lines.... [END OF REVIEW]

[Joey Miles]

the lines are for effect thier pauses in the reading where the narriator isnt saying anything thats why their there

[The Final Messenger]

Now it makes sense... Sort of

[bury the year]

MS WORD. SPELLCHECK. USE IT. I don't care if you're supposedly dyslexic - we have computers for bad spellers. Not using it is a sign of laziness and not caring about your work.

[Joey Miles]

i dont have a spell cheaker that wont crash my computer. otherwise i would use one sorry please review for the story not the spelling....well at least untill i get my new laptop

[The Final Messenger]

What about Microsoft Word?(I just remembered about that) don't most computers have it built in?

[Joey Miles]

my computer is over 8 years old it doesnt have much

[The Final Messenger]

Mine is 9 and has Word and works perfectly fine... I think

[Joey Miles]

mine doesnt lol anyway untill i get my new laptop ignore the spelling please after that then theres no excuse