Sotos Posted October 3, 2010 Report Share Posted October 3, 2010 Most of these stories were written as essays for my english class, but I think they are pretty good, so I decided to post them here... Enjoy![img]http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/public/style_emoticons/default/wink.gif[/img] I'll post new ones when I find the time...[spoiler=Story 1] Maria looked at the map and realised she was completely lost. She decided to ask for help, which was pretty much the only thing she could do.She began to wonder if she would find the house at all... Two days ago, she had received a letter from a relative she hadn't even heard of. He had signed the letter as "Uncle Ben". He asked her to meet him, so that they would get to know each other, so she took a day off work and decided to look him up. She had come where he had told her to, but she couldn't find his house. To make things even worse, everything around her looked kind of...weird. The sky was temporarily covered by clouds, and the villagers were extraordinarily silent while walking, like they were ghosts. She saw two of them talking to each other, but even though she went as close as she could, she couldn't hear anything. She decided it was no time for daydreaming, so she asked a villager where Ben lived. "Ben?" he answered in a hoarse voice, "I cannot tell you where he is, but I gen get you to him... Come with me." As they walked, it seemed like more people began to follow them with their soundless steps, like they expected her. She tried to back away, but the man held her tightly, leading her to a Graveyard. "Wh-where are we going?" She asked, trying to seem brave. She tried to convince herself that it was nothing but a nasty joke. The man holding her started to talk, revealing teeth that looked longer than how they should be. "Ben is dead. And you are about to meet him."[/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DARKPLANT RISING Posted October 3, 2010 Report Share Posted October 3, 2010 ............Um............ No offence, highly expected. Of course, 13-year-olds can't write real horror stories unless they're complete geniuses, so this is good for the age, but I'll say that it lacks story and a shocking ending that really freaks out the reader. A good horror story has to get the reader to understand completely why the ending scene happened. But if this happened to me, I'd get freaked out. Just add some reality, and it's good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sotos Posted October 4, 2010 Author Report Share Posted October 4, 2010 Thanks, just think that it was supposed to be just an essay...[img]http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/public/style_emoticons/default/wink.gif[/img] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DARKPLANT RISING Posted October 5, 2010 Report Share Posted October 5, 2010 [quote name='Sotos' timestamp='1286208610' post='4678747'] Thanks, just think that it was supposed to be just an essay...[img]http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/public/style_emoticons/default/wink.gif[/img] [/quote] Then it's quite good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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