chedbonlahor Posted September 28, 2010 Report Share Posted September 28, 2010 Here is a poem I wrote about a friend and have not shown to him. He went to uni and his mum got diagnosed with cancer while he was at uni. She was in dubai and he was withe me at uni, he couldn't do a thing so, it was a depressing time and I wrote this for him: Tom Pt.1 A boy and his mother are overlooking a lake Together; the time has come. They approach a small boat moored purposefully, They play see-saw together. Each breath, every step all movements are Bound; around their counterpoint. The boy is shaking now his mother’s arm falls like a Jigsaw; about each other, she shakes as he does. The boy steps into the empty new world of the boat Alone; he turns and sees the tears of his mother fall, His eyes too give way, the patter of his pain hits the coarse belly of the boat. Together they stand abject, distraught, alone Together they stand their hearts and mind in union. The boy feels at peace. Pt.2 The boy waves to all that he is, as he Kicks; his was from the shore towards his tomorrow. The distance between the boy and his mother grows, a dark force Grips; his heart cold. His mother too shivers, trembling, as the moist droplets on her cheeks freeze over. Their pain is shared, together each one can feel the Other; transcending touch, they grow warm in each other. The boy converts the air to strength, shoulders poised, chest thrust outward, He stands at his tallest. The man turns and witnesses the faint sight of his Beloved; slumped onto her knees pain twisting through her. A vicious mist sets and envelops her body, She is gone. Alone she falls distraught, abject, Alone he stands their hearts and minds apart. The boy feels nothing. The boy is completely alone. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zimiri of the Muse Posted October 1, 2010 Report Share Posted October 1, 2010 very interesting and sad poem, 8/10 i hope for the best for your friends and his mom Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DARKPLANT RISING Posted October 1, 2010 Report Share Posted October 1, 2010 The backstory was too sad and poem-like to possibly give you anything except 10/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jay11 Posted October 1, 2010 Report Share Posted October 1, 2010 "Even death can bring the stongest man to tears" Anyway, that was a buitiful poem and i have no choice but to give you a 10/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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