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Still catching up, but...

 

Why did Velma Crab change to Veronica Crab?

 

And what's with

 

"there are two possible reasons as to why Ragnarok hasn’t attacked us yet. It could be one, or both, or neither"

 

 

if there are two possible reasons, it's either one or the other.

 

z.z

 

 

And this > his shoes squeaking against the wet floor.

 

was pointless.

 

 

“Our friend Niashi came down with a bug last night, so he’s the only one not coming. But you and him have the same hair color! So-”

 

Ohman, next time I find someone with my hair color I'll definitely impersonate them, regardless of any other factors such as eye color, hair color, skin color, facial shape, age, etc >:U

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"there are two possible reasons as to why Ragnarok hasn’t attacked us yet. It could be one, or both, or neither"

 

 

if there are two possible reasons, it's either one or the other.

 

z.z

 

 

And this > his shoes squeaking against the wet floor.

 

was pointless.

 

1: Actually it can be both.

 

Maybe Rag was asleep/kidnapped. That can be both. Crappy example but I'm too lazy to actually think of a realistic one.

 

2:

 

It's called describing the scenario. Crappy criticism.

 

ALSO PLBPLBPLBPLBPLBPLBPLBPLBPLB.

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1: Actually it can be both.

 

Maybe Rag was asleep/kidnapped. That can be both. Crappy example but I'm too lazy to actually think of a realistic one.

 

It can be both, but not neither.

 

2:

 

It's called describing the scenario. Crappy criticism.

 

I understand describing the scenario, but there is also such a thing as pointless description. Describing things that hold no meaning to the current part are pointless. He was about to start an explanation, we don't really need to see the floor was wet right before that.

 

ALSO PLBPLBPLBPLBPLBPLBPLBPLBPLB.

 

 

EDIT:

 

Hold on a sec.

 

 

EDIT 2:

 

 

“Where’s everyone else? Isn’t Crab there?” Roxas asked.

 

“Everyone else is off doing business, but I have no idea where Veronica Crab or Luna Moon are,” Suddenly, a beeping sound could be heard from Ragnarok’s computer. “Oh, this is Crab now! Crab, where the hell did you go?”

 

 

 

It could be one, or both, or neither, but we need to address it now,” he began pacing back and forth, his shoes squeaking against the wet floor. “One is that they don’t have adequate forces to handle us. I doubt that, considering we were only a mere fraction of the Banned, though it’s hard organizing an army to face one faction.

 

 

By the way, beginning of chapter 25

 

“Are you sure you don’t want to? A lot of us miss you, you know...”

 

“Thanks, but no thanks, Claie. Such a pointless split made me realize factions aren’t all it’s clammed up to be.

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Aaand the mood was ruined.

 

WTF

 

"Ohsup Dark, wanna be teh leadah of the Banned"

"Ohshure! Wai?"

"Cause u cool and stuff and we need leadar!"

 

 

Come on, Fusion. Making a random guy that's not even a high-ranking member of the Banned the LEADER of the Banned?

 

Wtf...

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I know he's filling in, but is Ragnarok so unprepared as a leader that he did not organize this AT ALL for an occurance?

 

No world goverment would be like "YO. KID. YOU SEEM TO HAVE TEH NECESSARY QUALITIES. WANNA BE PRESIDENT 4 A BIT?" if the president is beaten up and the vice president is away.

 

 

And Saturn could lead the Banned from Japan.

 

 

I just cannot accept that any organization with common sense would do that.

 

I don't care how skilled and prepared he is, they would NOT entrust the Banned to some high school kid, there HAS to be measures for this kind of stuff.

 

 

I'd even accept Creator as a temporary leader.

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The trio walked in silence for a while, until they found a bench and sat down. Saturn took out a silver device and pressed a button.

 

After a few seconds, she pocketed it and reported, “No spyware or anything like that in the vicinity. We can talk here.”

 

 

 

"Yeah, no spyware or any- OMFG THAT GUY BEHIND THE TREE WAS SPYING GET HIM"

 

 

Isn't spyware something related to computers?

 

 

And even assuming that there was no "spyware" detected, WHY would they talk in public? What, the Japanese are deaf?

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@DL

1. Spyware is either a hostile computer program OR spy equipment.

 

2. I'm bust atm so I can't lead nor would I want to.

 

3. Since when does resistance against a guy with a DOOMSDAY BUTTON IN HIS CHEST make sense?

 

4. 85% of Japanese in this fic can't understand English.

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