Fusion X. Denver Posted January 24, 2011 Report Share Posted January 24, 2011 My dad made me clean the kitchen >.>BUT I FINISHED!Adding the new chapter(s) now, should be up in...another amount of time what with editing and all, but hopefully not too long.DL, I know you're not doing a review, but as a heads up, my writing from the first half is more of the same, but I tried writing by keeping in mind certain things you advised for the second half. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted January 24, 2011 Report Share Posted January 24, 2011 *shows up just in time* woot, made it before the chapter came out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted January 24, 2011 Report Share Posted January 24, 2011 Cortez.This chapter is closing in on 30 pages 0___0I may ACTUALLY have to split it, if I can find a good cut-off point >.>I'm back and writing the conclusion, hang tight.30 page chapter??? Do you know what the word moderation means?? inb4typicalanimecliche HE BACK ONLINE!!!! EVERYONE!!!!! WE MIGHT GET THE REVELATON!!! THE LEGENDARY CHAPTER 22! wait nvm =_=" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 Attention everyone, important news.I finally got the message in the front post "CONTENT TOO LONG"As such, I am relocating Part 2 of DEF to my 3rd post on the 1st page, or Post #9.And it'll stay there.Chapter 22 shall be out in a few moments B)[spoiler=@DL after reading chapter]I didn't describe Lora at the end because Jake never told me what she looked like, I'll edit in a description later.Also, anybody know the girl from PikaPerson01's sig? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 FINALLY, REJOICE! IT HAS ARRIVED. *Punches Fanboy in the face* ...like a boss. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 *watches Itachi get punched and laughs* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 Okay, had a few problems.But Part 1 and Part 2 are now settled in and I put in the name for Chapter 22 >.>See you all in 20 minutes :lol: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 20 minutes...alright then. Can't wait to see what'll happen....I'm getting totally excited about this new chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 It's already up bro, I meant that's probably how long it'll take to read xP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 That was a great chapter! Would've taken longer for me to read...without the proper music to read to. Anyway, it was a pretty intense one, Fusion. Kinda feel bad for Roxas and Flame with those injuries....and quick question: Who the heck is uncle Jose that Sonic has?? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BT Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 NO! I'm not in it!! good chapter though >.> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 BT, you are in it, just not specifically mentioned.Everyone in Akatsuki was at the jet >.>@Sonic-Jose Chao. Do you remember 1 of the Mods that was in Crab's team that tried to infiltrate the Tower of Any Other before Life took over the world?One of them was your uncle.He's based on the mod JesusofChaos. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 OHHHHHH!!! Now I remember....wow, never would have thought he was Sonic's uncle...XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 Nice chapter It's just that you did what I feared you would do You flashbacked ;_; We are still on our way to Japan =0 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Headmaster Monokuma Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 Well Fusion, I have to say, you did a good job with my character at the start. Dead on with how I've been feeling. Anyway, the chapter is great as usual. Not much else I can say. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 Just finished reading, I can't believe I've become "that guy who builds things" I have like 0 role in the Plot now. I'm the Power up guy you meet in Video Games. Also is it bad if this statement describes what I feel IRL: "Well, I despise that truth,” she bluntly replied. “I look at the idiots of our generation and how they’re the ones who mainly comprise of its entirety. At this rate, modern society will plummet into incompetence and slow in progress because these morons who don’t strive to achieve or make something of themselves will be running our society and together run us into the ground. I don’t see why it’s cool to be an idiot, when people should be focusing on dreams and goals that will better themselves and contribute to society. I mean, will pot and booze bring us the cure to cancer, or even money to the table?” AND DIDN'T I INB4 THE FLASHBACK THING!?!!?! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 I told you Itachi, this was about build up.And I wanted to flesh out Life's back story now since I saw an opportunity to .__.NEXT chapter we'll be in Japan.@Sonic-Dude, if you look at some of the other relations between the characters, I wouldn't blame you for scratching your head.Seriously, if I told El my fanfic would have DMG being Crab's brother-in-law who's Xazeon's mom or Roxas being trained by Aqua's dad, he'd probably dismiss me as a lunatic and never touch it.I think Life's family tree is the only real WTF though .-.EDIT: Creator, I have plans for you. (no homo)Don't panic.@Dane-I was hoping I pegged you right xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 Tired of responding in the same post Fusion? Anyway I liked how that worked out, just don't take so long on the next one. If you can help it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 Basically what happened with this one:-New Years-School-Studying-Midterms-Procrastination-Work But now the 1st 3 won't be a problem anymore, so we're back on track.I already have 23 half-planned out, if I have a snow day this week, I'll start writing then B) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 Tired of responding in the same post Fusion? Anyway I liked how that worked out, just don't take so long on the next one. If you can help it.^ This and I beg of you not to pull another Masashi Kishimoto again :P You know his style of insane build-ups AND SINCE WHEN DID REMO AGREE TO THE OPPRESSIVE RULE OF THE SANIN??? DID HE BECOME A GT VEGETA? A TOTAL WIMP? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 I should totally throw in a flashback next chapter on how the Trio of DEF became the Sannin.And to be honest, giving Life's back story didn't occur to me until I wrote it.Sometimes chapter ideas come to me as I write them and it becomes something totally different than I first set it out to be. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 I understand completely, I do the same thing while RPing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 I should totally throw in a flashback next chapter on how the Trio of DEF became the Sannin.And to be honest, giving Life's back story didn't occur to me until I wrote it.Sometimes chapter ideas come to me as I write them and it becomes something totally different than I first set it out to be.o_0" "0_o Your gonna worry me now That might come back later as a "good" idea Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Limited Edition KING Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 Ahem, “It’s a long story involving this hot L cosplayer…” ... What the hell? o-oFirstly, I don't watch Death Note so I don't see why a character based off me would, maybe make it so it's Blair from Soul Eater instead? She does have purple hair and would make more sense as I watch Soul Eater. Besides isn't saturn in this story female? That would make further sense. Also, only one ear gets pierced? Wouldn't the inactive find having one earring suspicious? Also that would completely throw off Thomas' symmetry. Anyways it was a great chapter fuse with a few parts that made me roll on the floor and laughed my a** off. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nexev Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 When I first saw Gary I was like "DAMN YOU OAK!" Then it turned out to be not-oak and it suddenly became allot less interesting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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