Trio of DEF

[Sploda]

@DL

That is why I sent Fusion several possible weapon loadouts for myself since I would use Guns used by Militaries.

[Fusion X. Denver]

Not gonna bother quoting, but gonna point out a few things.

 

1. This is only the second review I've done, so it's expected I caught stuff like "He panted, *insert speech here*"

 

2. Nonono, things like "face of a sharpened face" made me want to slit my wrists.

 

3. I call him FACESHARPFACEMAN because you said "he had the face of a sharpened face." Lack of proofreading will do that. Or rather, proofread at times when your brain is actually awake.

 

4. That's cause grenades aren't really meant for cutting wire. Swords have blades. Swords were made to cut. So even if a grenade could not, I see no reason a sword could not. Unless the wire was made of diamond. In which case Bel is one rich guy.

 

5. A glomp is a tackle hug. You run at the person, and tacklehug them.

 

6. You did not have to say he was sad. He got betrayed by a close comrade, and almost DIED. A simple "He looked down at his feet" would have sufficed to tell us he was sad. Easily. Always choose show instead of tell.

 

7. When someone is about to use their super move and the other person wants to stop them, usually they pick a method they can trust. I dón't mind him missing. But the fact he threw THREE and didn't manage to hit him good with a single one leads me to believe he IS an idiot for using weapons he's not profficient with to stop an enemy super move.

 

if someone in Brawl is about to activate their Final Smash a few feet from me, I don't use Fox's LASER GUN, I use his B-left >:U

 

 

 

Nontherless, this is probably the last review for a WHILE.

 

So I'll just be commenting on the chapters normally.

 

 

EDIT:

 

I suppose I should mention this: I'm not upset with my character using claws.

 

But if I was fighting a war, and I had claws, and the guy next to me had GUNS, I'd be freakin jealous.

 

2. *looks*

Ah. I get it.

 

4. That's like saying if a grenade can't blow up a tank, a sword can cut it in half. The wires wouldn't be cut :/

 

5. Ah. Noted.

 

7. I kinda envisioned Dranzer being more damaged from that, but I guess I wrote him off as not really bothered. Late-night writing coupled with no Word has disadvantages I guess.

 

No reviews? Not that I don't mind criticism, but I spent a good hour or so replying, so that comes as a relief >__>

 

@Edit-I guess but among good guys, usually only people who are skilled marksmen use them. If everyone used guns, it'd be boring, so I only kept it to a few people or so.

Not to say none of us won't use a gun at some point, but I find it more refreshing when everyone isn't using the same weapon :/

[Sploda]

@Fusion

Which is why instead of Suped up Pistol firing Lazars my Guns would fire...

 

OMG BULLETS!

 

Because of my previous Connections I can supply Generic members with weapons that I use (slightly modified as said in the PM).

 

Also I'm a great shot.

[DL]

@Fusion -

 

But blades are meant to cut things. Grenades are not. A grenade would not cut the wire because grenades aren't meant to cut.

 

 

Also, I spent a separate whole 3 days on that review (night of one, midday of one, morning of one).... ._.

 

So not doin them for a while

[Lt. Colonel Remo]

it didn't cut

it blew out shards of glass that cut the wire

 

[spoiler=BTW here is a gud replacment for Remo Fandon, think of as an updated picture...]

 

 

you kinda set Remo up to be Batman didn't you?

XD

[Fusion X. Denver]

What do you mean Batman?

DL...as the author, I am positive the wires could not be cut by swords.

And sure, I'll update your bio then since it looks similar enough.

I found a good new one for Creator too, tell me what you think.

[spoiler=I'm thinking it's good]

 

[Blake]

What do you mean Batman?

DL...as the author, I am positive the wires could not be cut by swords.

And sure, I'll update your bio then since it looks similar enough.

I found a good new one for Creator too, tell me what you think.

[spoiler=I'm thinking it's good]

 

Stop revamping bios you have and start on ones you do not.

[Lt. Colonel Remo]

by batman i mean remo came from a presumably rich family and nao suffered the loss of parents

[Sploda]

@Fusion

Yeah that is a better one alright.

 

@Remo

If you count Batman as a random kid who uses stuff that I build for the Banned, then I guess so.

[Fusion X. Denver]

Remo actually doesn't use weapons >.>

Or none I can think of at the moment, he might later.

Wow, you are like Batman xP

And Black, I've already explained why I can't :/

[Fusion X. Denver]

Yo guys, I'm spending the day in the car as I'm coming home from my cousin's.

New chapter's done, it'll be out tonight.

It's extra long too, because I kinda won't be able to write this weekend.

Tomorrow I'm staying over at a friend's house, then spending time with family friends on New Year's, then working the next day, and probably doing all my homework on Sunday.

So see you guys tonight.

[Limited Edition KING]

That's like awesome music to my ears fusion. Well not the fact that you're busy the next few days (no real surprise there am I right guise? :3) but it's good to hear the new chapters done.

[Jake the Sage]

That's like awesome music to my ears fusion. Well not the fact that you're busy the next few days (no real surprise there am I right guise? :3) but it's good to hear the new chapters done.

 

Agreed 100%

[Nukyasu]

Nice fan-fic. However, there is one problem I have found. Well, you don't use enough simple words. It's not hard to understand, by no means, but the simpler is better. It's like saying:

The gamin ambulated down the viaduct.

instead of:

The boy walked down the road.

 

Okay, maybe that was an over-exaggeration, but do you see what I mean?

 

Anyway, nice fan-fic overall.

[Fusion X. Denver]

New chapter's up.

[spoiler=Open after reading, but before commenting]

Some of you may go WTF with my casting choices for the play, deal with it.

And I know I didn't get to include some cameos for some people in RP.820 like Genesis, Phantom, or those guys, but I felt doing any more than I did would feel forced. There's plenty of opportunities for the future though.

Other than that, hope you guys liked the twist with Pikachu and the comedy (lolbareboxers).

 

EDIT: Well hey there new reader, glad to hear you liked it :)

And I'll keep that in mind, thanks.

[Headmaster Monokuma]

I didn't think you were actually going to fit the Arcadia/Powerforce split in. xD

 

That surprised me when I saw it, although it is fitting.

 

Another great chapter Fusion, it's good to see you haven't burned yourself out yet.

[Jake the Sage]

ZOMG new chapter! LAWL!!!

 

*knocks out random fanboy*

 

How the hell these guys keep poping up is beyond me *holds broken bat*

[Big Bad Pennar]

I Smell a Betrayal lol

 

great chapter BTW, i hope there will still be good chapters

[Fusion X. Denver]

I didn't think you were actually going to fit the Arcadia/Powerforce split in. xD

 

That surprised me when I saw it, although it is fitting.

 

Another great chapter Fusion, it's good to see you haven't burned yourself out yet.

 

I know right?

And thanks, I'm trying to make each step toward this one point more and more interesting..

I'm ready for an interesting adventure to happen in Japan B)

Though I'm not forgetting about Yugo either :P

EDIT: Course there will Flandre.

[Headmaster Monokuma]

I know right?

And thanks, I'm trying to make each step toward this one point more and more interesting..

I'm ready for an interesting adventure to happen in Japan B)

Though I'm not forgetting about Yugo either :P

 

You know right.

 

It was pretty interesting before, but it got better.

 

The entire story makes me think Shadow is going to be kicking the bucket soon. >.>

 

I'm sure we would all be disappoint if you did. ;D

[Blake]

*Reads first cople lines*

 

Fuse, I like Jack more than Dark Glass xD

 

Will say more after reading.

[Fusion X. Denver]

*Reads first cople lines*

 

Fuse, I like Jack more than Dark Glass xD

 

Will say more after reading.

 

.__.

In the DEF universe, Dark Glass > Jack in your opinion >.>

Kk.

[BlackSkullCortez]

Wait, your... GOING ON A DATE!? *ground and sky shakes*

FUSION, YOU HAVE MESSED UP THE BALANCE OF THE UNIVERSE! *sky vanishes*

Yeah, I liked the chapter.

EDIT: And the friend he's staying with tomorrow is definitely me.

If I start posting weird things, that's Fusion.

[Fusion X. Denver]

Thanks bro.

But I went to a dance with Danni, is it so hard to belie-

Wait, that was a b*tch playing me.

Never mind.

[Limited Edition KING]

Fusion you're going on a date and you will like it.

I lolled at that as well as Pikachu's plan. I only wish Thomas could have been in the play though.

Also I think I know who the person betraying the Inactive is~

 

Thomas was absolutely awesome in this chapter I loved all the CP involvements except the fact that they were arrested and D.L was a total biatch in not believing Thomas.

Again I must say this Death Cannon FTW.

 

And he got to wear a kick ass mask.