El Make Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 WRITER'S NOTE: When switching between settings like Creator and El to Fuse and Justin, put double space or a "----------" in between the paragraphs. :3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Fusion X. Denver Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 Thread turned hot :lol: Success!Hopefully Chapter 4 will be up tonight, and if not, tomorrow morning hopefully.EDIT: Is it necessary?If so, then sure. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 Can't wait to see what happens next in Chapter 4! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 Fusion, yes it is nesacery! It lets readers know a change in setting is occuring! Do you know nothing about proper writing? =.= Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlackSkullCortez Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 Normally, they have a weird transition symbol in novels, but I don't think those would be good in an FF. Just use the lines. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 Cortez, some use "*", some use "§", whatever tells the reader there's a transition. >.> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Tainted Black Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 In RPs I run, with NPCs, I use ------ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 @Fusion - Yes it is. And for the LOVE OF GOD!!!!! NEW DIALOGUE = NEW PARAGRAPH!!!!! DX Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 DL, you can't expect him to not do noobish things.... on his first FF... even after he's read ours.... that were good examples for him... and reading books in RL should tell him this.... ummm... yeah.... :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 I swear, if chapter 4 STILL has dialogue on the same paragraph... I am going to &$&@# Fusion. =_= Also, yeah, you'd think he'd be able to get from my 60+ chapter fic how you're supposed to write grammaticaly correctly. >>;; Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Fusion X. Denver Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 :/I'll edit chapters 1-3 later I guess.Chapter 4 added, I basically made a new line for every piece of dialogue, but kept it in its original paragraph, if that's still wrong, I'll fix that later. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 Hmm, the Fake Knights going hero and villain to try and save Yugo City...sounds interesting. Another awesome chapter Fusion, can't wait to see what will happen next!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Fusion X. Denver Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 Thanks Sonic, I figured that would fit in with their random antics, using them will be interesting for me to work with :)Think it's time we introduced the Akatsuki next chap... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 Nice. The Akatsuki will be arriving in the next chap, sweetness. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 *eye twitches* ........................... You made my Sprites Kari, Aqua, and Kana................................................................. ........ Go screw yourself.... Well, all anger and rage I am feeling toward you aside... You didn't need to sy Katie was my ex, it would have been beter if their actions told us, instead of you. But, I do find this chapter good (except for what makes me want to slaughter you, and put each of your limbs in a different corner of the world) I like the FTK... But.....who is the young wolf guy? And who's Tim? Cause I'll say now Tim is NOT a part of the FTK =_= BTW....SCREW YOU FOR MAKING MY SPRITES AQUA KARI AND KANA >OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Fusion X. Denver Posted September 20, 2010 Report Share Posted September 20, 2010 D.L, they aren't your sprites, that's just how you see it xPKatie's description, eh I'll keep that in mind next time to use actions for description, sure.Tim's in there because he was a part of the original FTK before he rebelled, wasn't he? Also, I added in some of the changes people pointed out like the long lines for scene changes and proper spacing between new dialogues. Even changed Deus' argument from poo to cake against CreatorNext chapter is Akatsuki time :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted September 21, 2010 Report Share Posted September 21, 2010 Fusion, GTFO of thinking about knowing FTK. Anyways, lololololololololol at the sprite thing. XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord JZ of the Enigma Posted September 21, 2010 Report Share Posted September 21, 2010 I was a lil werided out by the sprites things, but oh well, it's your fic and your story.....I'm not in the FTK but i wonder if I'll have a cameo in the Akatsuki...and how bipolar i'll end up being.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Fusion X. Denver Posted September 21, 2010 Report Share Posted September 21, 2010 JZ you'll show up somehow.Chapter 5 is done, I just need to do final editing and I'll post it.EDIT: Added. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted September 21, 2010 Report Share Posted September 21, 2010 Wow, the Akatsuki got their @$$es whooped. Wasn't expecting that for their first appearance. But, all in all...a great chapter. Can't wait to see what the new guy that walked in will do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Fusion X. Denver Posted September 21, 2010 Report Share Posted September 21, 2010 He's gonna shake shizz up ;PThought it would be an interesting start for Akatsuki, thanks for the feedback! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted September 21, 2010 Report Share Posted September 21, 2010 Your welcome Fusion. ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted September 21, 2010 Report Share Posted September 21, 2010 Epic...win. You even introduced PROTO, now I have an urge to get back to work on the FTK Fan-fic I was working on. Now about the ipad... I LAOTH APPLE PRODUCTS! HOW DARE YOU! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Enma Kozato Posted September 21, 2010 Report Share Posted September 21, 2010 It's not beef jerky!It's DEER JERKY! You can either edit or lose a reader bish! >:TDEER!lol cmpletely insignificant random arguement effects futureRandomish...then again I kinda skimmed over it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Fusion X. Denver Posted September 21, 2010 Report Share Posted September 21, 2010 Uh...hence why you stole an iPad, took it apart, and completely redesigned the interior mechanics leaving no resemblance to the original aside from the size?Or I can just say it has a cloaking device which masks its true appearance.But this is supposed to be a real world setting, so maybe not >.>And glad I brought back some inspiration for ya :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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