Lt. Colonel Remo Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 I loved the fight scene and the whole "tooth as poison" thing cause that's MGS one thing that was really bugging me though If you weren't going to mention Remo in the conclusion why not just use him as an emotional death for the sannin? The build up with Wham and TheComposer was virtually useless .-. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 I loved the fight scene and the whole "tooth as poison" thing cause that's MGS one thing that was really bugging me though If you weren't going to mention Remo in the conclusion why not just use him as an emotional death for the sannin? The build up with Wham and TheComposer was virtually useless .-. Wow, that was quick.I figured Dranzer and Ninjew were laying it on a little thick already.And how was Remo supposed to get up there from the ground?Besides, I need him for future one-shots.It wasn't useless, because that build-up won't just affect Remo.And Remo will be a changed man after all this....then again, who won't be changed :T Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 Also I loved how you incorpirated X-man into this...somehow but I was hoping for a..total beat down Remember Father from FMAB? Yeah =/ But this ending worked just as well EDIT: Only it should've been Crab who laid the beat down Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Desu the Blue Nerd Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 It's late and my mom's mad that I'm still up. I need to go to bed. DX I'll read it tomorrow though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 That could have worked.But the thing is, Life isn't super strong or anything.Well, he is. But his strength wasn't the menacing thing about him. It was his power and the danger he posed to the world. So if there was a beatdown...it'd be over way too fast. Too easy. No fun at all.So only a few managed to get that far.Crab could have, but she's not the main. Funny thing about the final blow: originally, I was just going to have Chris do it. DL and El would be unaware of the plan and would have been outraged right along with Rogue when the moment happened. But I couldn't think of a way for Ninjew to JUST tell Chris, and why Chris when El would have been better?So I opted for the three of them to do it together...the way it should be. @Desu-I really hope you'll enjoy it.For real. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 @Fusion>_><_< I don't see how I'll change. Cliche ending is Cliche but it was an awesome ending. Nice Banhammer btw. Now obviously I won't be caught, I'm too good to be caught. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kazooie Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 ...VICTORY I GOT TO READ IT ohey, life is dead yaaaaaaay :'D The chapter was good in general, and I enjoyed reading it. :'D ...now i can't wait to see the epilogue. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 Yeah...I'm full of cliches.I'm all about those, really.I swear, it's all Mr. G's fault for having me write that 4 page paper explaining why cliches were a good thing :TBut glad you liked it regardless. And as Flandre once told me, every YCM fic needs a Banhammer in it somehow.@Caeda-Love that you loved it. And I planned out some of the epilogue at work today (restaurant was a ghost town), I think it'll tie a lot of things in nicely. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kazooie Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 that was like... the most complicated banhammer ever. Looking forward to it Fuse. Can't wait to read, but it seems like you could use a break after writing that. :'O Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sploda Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 He can't rest just yet. We still need to finish up the YMB3 story arc. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 I'm actually working on 36 now.I don't really know how long this will be or what other things I'm putting in it, the story's basically writing itself again.But I know the end of it, which is what matters.A TRUE WRITER NEVER DETERS.FOR WRITER'S BLOCK CAN SIMPLY BE PUSHED ASIDE LIKE IN LoZ. The epilogue should be the most pleasing of them all...I think. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kazooie Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 @Creator:...true enough @Fuse: ...oooh, can't wait to see it :'D ...looking forward to the epilogue. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Enma Kozato Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 Contradiction time..... LAST!get it......? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Desu the Blue Nerd Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 Dude. It was great. No. Time to use that word I made up. Incredisomazingendous. Yeah. It's that incredisomeazingendous that I have to use a made up word that mixes a bunch of other words. The way they finished Life was awesome with the banhammer (saw Chris' hammer being a banhammer from a mile away) and the swords stuck in Ninjew was just plain that word I made up that's too long yet I type all this out. I'm making you an honorary badass. Because appareantly I can do that and have authority on all things badass. ^_^ One thing though. Stop making me a bad guy. <_< Well in this case it was like 20 bad guys. Silent Swordsman was my old username along with a few variations. -_- I was going to mention it in part 3 of my one-shot but I can still work it in. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 Epic chapter is epic!! XD Can't wait to see the epilogue!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
--------------- Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 ALSO, everyone please put their hands together for Atman.He went out of his way to compose an awesome theme to go along for this occasion.http://www.mediafire.com/?b7b5sbfnparr6gh <-teh linkhttp://musescore.com/score/12966 <-teh sheet musicAtman, thank you for this great honor, I'm truly humbled and privileged by this gift. Gift? Hell no, man. You're paying me with an Epilogue. Contradiction time..... LAST!get it......?I dun get it.... OWAITLOL. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 Thanks Desu, really happy you liked the final fight.What's funny about the SS is I didn't even remember that was the name of a YGO card until after I wrote it v.vAnd yeah, Life's death by all those swords through Ninjew was always planned, since day 1.I'll admit, Naruto inspired that scene there with Zabuza's death, but Ninjew was like Zabuza in a few ways. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Desu the Blue Nerd Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 I was thinking about that scene when I read it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Big Bad Pennar Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 And as Flandre once told me, every YCM fic needs a Banhammer in it somehow. That's the truth... Whether it's an actual hammer, or a Giant Satellite laser OT: Epic Ending, I'm waiting for the Epilogue... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Colonel Remo Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 I'll admit, Naruto inspired that scene there with Zabuza's death, but Ninjew was like Zabuza in a few ways.That's exactly what I remembered when I read the chaptah Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
--------------- Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 I have no idea what any of you are talking about because NARUTO SUC-*shot* (But srsly, I dun like it :/) I liked the part where Deus dives into the lava with Gir. Although, I could never imagine myself doing that, even in an RP or anything. (does not like burning 3: ) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deustodo Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 Well.. at least I died. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake the Sage Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 There is no review for this chapter . . .Because?It was too awesome I have to admit D. . . your death might have been the most bad ass of them all with the Gir thing. "Tacos?""Yes it is actually Taco night," . . . "Because, tonight we dine in hell!!!" So F*cking Perfect!!! I was looking for more of a beat down too, but this was just as good.Cliche ending is cliche, but it couldn't have gone any other way. I do NOT expect Creator to be captured tbhAND!!! I think I have thought of a way to get MY Trio of DEF spin-off going with Life's death >8DFusion, want to collab with me or do you just want me to give you the idea? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fusion X. Denver Posted July 27, 2011 Report Share Posted July 27, 2011 I liked the part where Deus dives into the lava with Gir. Although, I could never imagine myself doing that, even in an RP or anything. (does not like burning 3: ) I liked using Deustodo a lot during this whole arc. I kinda wished I used him more earlier in the fic.Deustodo wasn't set to die from the beginning, but when I thought of the bomb and how to stop it, Deus occurred to me, since he's impervious to pain, and therefore the heat. No one else would have been able to bear it and would have hightailed it before working on the bomb.Deustodo may not have had as much screentime as other characters, but he was totally one of the most epic.And if there was a cool way to die, it'd be diving into lava after saving the world. The epilogue is being planned.But chapter 36 is being worked on.In case some of you didn't know, I'm doing one last chapter and THEN the epilogue. @Jake-PM me.If it's an idea for a whole nother series, pass... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted July 27, 2011 Report Share Posted July 27, 2011 Chapter 36 and then the epilogue....now I'm getting super excited to figure out what'll happen X3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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