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Thanks boss. ^_^

 

I apologize DF, I remember seeing you posted a 1-shot, got distracted, and somehow lost the mental note telling me to go back and read it.

Just finished, I like it so far.

Though the thing with naming:

Gin Level-->Gin Anger

Oh sorry. I thought it was Level since in I thought you were using the anger part of his name for that abillity of his.

Cookie-Connie, although Cookie could have been a nickname.

I couldn't remember her name but I thought in it with her it said her nickname was cookie. Thanks though.

And I'm not sure if you remembered, but Nobuo basically has cybernetic arms that turn into giant pistols containing his signature "6 Shot". Your one-shot doesn't contradict that, just making sure you knew.

Of course I know. Well I didn't know what kinds of guns since you did say machine guns but then only one bullet from each and then turning into three confused me. I was going to ask later. And Nobuo's bat is wooden in yours too. In here it's metal. Don't worry. I have a plan to fit these things all in.

And you think of Cortez with Techi?

No. I remember Cortez fighting somebodt with a lot of guns. I didn't remember who it was but for some reason keep thinking Techi.

I loled.

His character resembles him I guess, though his IRL personality is a far cry from him.

Who? Techi? Actually, from what I have of him so far it's about the same as when him and bubble girl were still together.

 

Anyways, great one-shot, looking forward to the second part.

I'm not the best at criticism, but I'd say give the characters more description, even if only a couple adjectives and a sentence. Otherwise, nothing bad jumped out at me, maybe someone else would be more astute.

Sorry, I've been told that I need to cut down on the description before so I didn't go into that great of detail. I was also a tad bit worried about the size of my paragraphs.

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Um.

I dunno.

Did...you didn't read all 33 chapters yet, right?

How'd you find out about DEF :mellow:

 

Well...I saw it mentioned in the thread...so I decided I would take a quick gander at it while checking my own Fan-Fic thread...

 

Congratulations. Reading 33 chapters has now been added to my massive list of things to do. The list is based on how interesting it is to me...and this is like...second or third. Ugh, I need more time during the day. <_<

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...I am amazed by how much was posted here.

 

 

@Creator -

 

1. I can do a hell load of voices for your DEF sprite animation. (I haz amazing voice variety)

2. I might just write that one-shot of a day in the Ultima

 

;DDDDDD

 

 

 

 

@Fuse - Dude

 

I will so totally write the most epic one0shot this thread has ever been blessed with.

 

It'll be like the Hangover, in that it'll have basically everything.

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I shall.

 

 

oh yeah

 

Read 33

 

 

Hoenstly, Fuse

 

I feel you still tell unecessarily.

 

Like when Jake thought "I really don't wanna use this, because it'll break my sword...but I got no choice" (paraphrase)

 

I mean....doesn't it seem better (and cooler)

 

to just say "I really don't wanna use this...but I guess I got no choice...."

 

It adds to the suspense and tension

 

Because we know if he said that there's something that is bad in that equation

 

But outright telling us what it is takes away that tension .~.

 

 

Otherwise, good fights as always (tho unbelieavable, I suppose the setting we discussed wil make it belieavable.)

 

 

 

 

And Creator

 

 

At least this isn't the FTK fic

 

Where every other chapter that wasn't a DL-filler ended in a cliffhanger xD and Chase in a coma

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...I am amazed by how much was posted here.

 

 

@Creator -

 

1. I can do a hell load of voices for your DEF sprite animation. (I haz amazing voice variety)

2. I might just write that one-shot of a day in the Ultima

 

;DDDDDD

 

 

 

 

@Fuse - Dude

 

I will so totally write the most epic one0shot this thread has ever been blessed with.

 

It'll be like the Hangover, in that it'll have basically everything.

I'm caling BS on that first thng.

Except for like, one Sasuke voice, they all sound the same (from the four or five I've heard).

I may just be being stupid, but thats what I think

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