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The Bumping Chaos just really really sucks as a title. Period.

 

 

Anyway, favorite fight was Justin vs. Dranzer (really intense), then Black vs. A'Une. (tho I'm wondering how the dragon was refered to as "small" when it towered over an 11-year old by like 10 feet.)

 

 

You're right, the Flame vs. Hioco fight sucked. Much more than it should have. Hioco seems really really weak. I mean, most of the other fighters were exhausted or unconcious by the time their fights ended, Flame was hardly injured.

 

 

Sonic vs. Sora....yeah, really cliche. But like you said, it worked.

 

 

 

There was some telling that I really thought could have been better shown (and didn't make much sense) tho I don't remember anything in particular.

 

 

oh, in the flashback of Madara's death, it seemed real awkward for DL to put his hand on his shoulder and talk (which was a telling since you just told us he comforted the "lost soul" (wtf lost soul)) then Fusion did the same (still in tell-mode), then Black talked (interrupting the mystery words from DL and Fusion)

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@Creator-I needed a cliffhanger and figured I'd make your transition now rather than in the same chapter as-

*shuts up*

@Jake-Hioco's a girl?

For real?

Huh.

Well, I've crossed members' genders befo-

*shot*

@Black-No one really commented on other cases like it in the fic, so I honestly wasn't expecting that to be pointed out :/

@King-You laughed? Huh, not what I was going for, but glad that worked out for ya =P

@DL-Maybe. But if Sonic likes it, that's all that matters :T

And as usual, every flaw becomes so blatantly obvious after you point it out.

Oh well, least it wasn't the whole chapter.

 

Also, yes, these served as the prelude for the better more intense fights coming up.

I might lay out more fights like 32 in 33, but after that, it's more about building up and doing the finale.

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Okay, I'll try explaining myself.

I forgot what duel monster Black wanted to use, so I PMed him, he told me Asterisk. And he also mentioned Cherry using Stardust/Quasar and Clair using Rainbow Dark.

Then when Black and Aa'une fought, I wanted Aa'une to push Black in a corner and use a devastating move, so Asterisk was killed, then I needed Black to come back somehow.

So then I thought of Ulqui and his Resurreccion and had Black use wings.

Then I was like, "Meh, I'll make him Stardust." This was on a whim.

But since he was Stardust, I thought for the sake of parallelism, Clair needed a "human" Rainbow Dark, and since you were the only other person who used Duel Monsters, you became Rainbow Dark Dragon.

It's okay though, that's not all you do.

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Wow BT and Sonic, that's pretty cool of you two xD

Oh yeah, I just randomly remembered something Jake said last page.

You said Sonic was talking about Hito in the present tense despite knowing he was dead.

When he actually doesn't know, only BT, Emma and Blake know, and they're all some floors ahead of Sonic.

Also, some of you may have been wondering why I put Sora in DEF.

The truth is, there was actually a member named Sora who was in Akatsuki some time ago. He was probably one of the best cardmakers I've ever seen during my cardmaking days, he had a stickied KH set in Pop Culture too. Though he hasn't been on in a long time, so he is...inactive :(

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Also' date=' yes, these served as the prelude for the [s']better[/s] more intense fights coming up.

I might lay out more fights like 32 in 33, but after that, it's more about building up and doing the finale.

 

I'll say this now . . . if you want any help editing fights I am more than happy to help.

Though you seem to have the hang of it 83

 


 

I couldn't help it....thanks to B.T. saying that...I added my fight against Sora in my sig....DX (Great...I'm joining a band-wagon <_<)

 

Like BT' date=' by the way cool looking name, said . . . get off his wagon and get the f*ck in.

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| The STFU Truck ||l ""|""\__,_

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(@)@)*********(@)(@)**(@)

 

LOL XD nah I'm just kiddin'

 


 

No Fusion I SAID, and I quote:

It is weird Sonic is talking about Hito right now . . . even though he is dead

See? I quoted myself ^^

I know Sonic doesn't know. I'm just saying it's odd he was talking about him with the obvious fact the reader knows said character is dead 8 /

 


 

And yes . . . Hioco is a girl. I've talked to her 83

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