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...yes.

@King-Meh, it's fine since I wrote a fight and a half while chilling in the Swiss Alps.

First fight's just a fight, second fight is mostly about character development.

And I've been reviewing future events and have come to the conclusion that every chapter's going to be a little longer than usual >.>

So uh, good news?

I'll write some more tonight.

Not good news.

 

Anyway, got done reading, was just scrolling through the comments.

 

@Jake - I agree. Religion, the bible, church, etc suck, but I do believe in a higher power that set everything in motion.

 

@Creator - I demand on voicing for whatever animation you do =333

 

 

Now for comment on chapters.

 

Chris' train of thought when he heard DL and EL had gone to the Inactive is...weird.

 

 

Aside from that, nice chapters. Can't wait for the others.

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Not good news.

 

I knew you would say that =P

Hate to tell you this, but 32's pretty long. There's SIX fights.

So this is a real test of whether I can keep people interested with all action.

You thought Chris was weird? As in more analytical?

Meh, I guess I see what you mean. I kinda want to say that's just his intellectual side that never really crops up in public, but whatever :T

Fuse. Not Catholic or even close. DO NOT MAKE ME RECITE PRAYERS xD

 

I loled.

I thought it fit, but okay xP

But when is the new chapter coming out?

 

Today.

I just need to finish this last part I'm on, but since I'm six hours ahead, you guys should definitely get it at some point tonight.

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Don't worry Final, there's a comic situation coming in 33 with your name on it.

And someone else's.

And another one's.

You'll see what I mean.

Also, 32 is out.

Talk about a shitload of action.

[spoiler=After chapter]

So guys, mind telling me favorite fight this round?

Dranzer vs Justin I liked for intense close combat.

Black vs Aa'une was fun to write with it being a sky battle.

B.T vs Kiva could have been longer I think, but I guess stretching that out wouldn't have accomplished much beyond what's already been done.

Btw, if anyone thinks Hito died too easily, just remember each of these Espeon guys were strong...and he took on five of them :T

Flame vs Hioco sucked, I know. Kind of a filler fight, but I wanted to show the change in Flame's fighting style.

Roxas vs Odin might have been able to be better, but I liked the character development for Roxas.

Even more so for Sonic vs Sora. I think that takes my spot for favorite fight this round since Sonic is fighting for someone he barely knows and does it with a passion.

And yes, it was mad corny, but it worked, didn't it?

 

Next chapter has epic sh*t.

More epic fights.

Hopefully epic twists.

Lulzy moments.

And shining light on those that haven't been seen for a while...

 

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Only if you have Ventrilo.

 

Otherwise it will end up like LittleKuriboh, i.e. I voice practically everyone with a different voice.

What is Ventrilo?

 

 

 

@Fusion - I shall read tommorow xD

 

Also, it was weird because....IDK, it seemed to jump a bit too much.

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...For some reason I sense that you felt the need to add the part with Creator in. It felt kinda forced.

 

Also Sonic is obviously subbing for Sora since Sora is subbing for Riku in this Kingdom Hearts ripoff there.

 

Roxas vs Odin = Terra vs Eraqus

 

Sonic vs Sora = Sora vs Riku

 

Creator vs DMG = Lelouch vs Light (maybe)

 

Black vs A-une or whatever = Yusei vs Jack/that one chick with the Black dragon

 

So yeah, Kingdom Hearts much.

 

Next thing you know I'm going to be chasing darkness and a giant Heart.

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Don't worry Final, there's a comic situation coming in 33 with your name on it.

Huzzah!

And someone else's.

Okay.

And another one's.

Meh.

You'll see what I mean.

You don't know that. I could be blind...........I can see fine. Damn you.

Also, 32 is out.

Done.

Talk about a shitload of action.

No complaints from me.

[spoiler=After chapter]

So guys, mind telling me favorite fight this round?

Dranzer vs Justin I liked for intense close combat.

Black vs Aa'une was fun to write with it being a sky battle.

B.T vs Kiva could have been longer I think, but I guess stretching that out wouldn't have accomplished much beyond what's already been done.

Btw, if anyone thinks Hito died too easily, just remember each of these Espeon guys were strong...and he took on five of them :T

Flame vs Hioco sucked, I know. Kind of a filler fight, but I wanted to show the change in Flame's fighting style.

Roxas vs Odin might have been able to be better, but I liked the character development for Roxas.

Even more so for Sonic vs Sora. I think that takes my spot for favorite fight this round since Sonic is fighting for someone he barely knows and does it with a passion.

Black vs. Au'une. Just seemed that awesome. Second was Sonic and Sora.

And yes, it was mad corny, but it worked, didn't it?

That's the understatement of the century.

 

Next chapter has epic sh*t.

NB?

More epic fights.

NB?

Hopefully epic twists.

........................NB?

Lulzy moments.

NB?

And shining light on those that haven't been seen for a while...

Atman? Oh wait...

 

 

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Time for another one of my famous . . . or is it infamous by now?

 

I'd go with infamous

 

Thanks Jesse

 

No problem

 

Well now for another one of my infamous reviews of 'Trio of DEF'! 8D

 

[spoiler=Better than a Chuck Norris Roundhouse Kick to the Face XD]

 

". . . Aa’une didn’t reply, smirking as the shadowy figures whipped off their black cloaks, revealing their true selves."

 

OH GOD! The Backstreet Boys!!!

 

 

“Why…are these guys dressed as furries?"

 

Oh no it's even worse!!!

 

 

And somehow I keep feeling Black's getting nothing more than melodramatic speeches.

 

I get what you mean Jake ... "Thanks to Life, all of us have tasted despair" is so emo and melodramatic it makes me want to kill a random citizen

 

Just don't follow your-

 

Too late (holding dead body)

 

 

Half a year ago...

 

In a galaxy far far away

What?

No one thought that was funny?

Oh then f*ck you guys XD

 

 

Funeral ... and the name Madara has finally been cired over

 

Odd considering the REAL Madara is a megalomaniac hell bent on controlling the Naruto World in an all encompassing genjutsu to steal away free will

 

Narutard

 

 

3 months ago...

 

In a galaxy far far*gets hit*

 

Lame the first time, even lammer the second time.

 

 

So what did we learn about this section of the chapter?

 

Black's dad got killed by a member of his own group on accident?

 

NO! That even in a work like this, some people are just sh*t outta luck.

 

Lovely Jesse

 

 

LOL @ Shooting Star's referance XD That was wonderful

 

 

So is this a fight or a duel?

 

Seriously some Astro Dragon and the Blackwing Dragon . . . how awe inspiring . . .

 

 

“Lanza del Relampágo!

NO!!! It needs to be Lanza Skillet XDDD

 

 

"British, super-agent transvestites."

 

Uh . . . okay 8/

I'll even admit for me, that is an odd enemy to have

 

 

LOL I got to complain a bit more in the story XDDD

*shakes Cortez's hand*

At least you agree with me 83

 

 

"It's f*cking magical . . ."

LOL

Saying it's magic is always a good excuse XD

 

 

It seems BT is nothing more than a person who keeps causing problems by being around

 

 

Wait . . . what?! Did Fusion really JUST kill Hito the Samuari from Japan?

 

Seems like it

 

Well that is just great . . . I think

 

 

*watches as BT uses Alien X to completely overpower Kiva*

 

D*mn!

I know

I think BT got the best part so far

 

 

“S-stop,” Kiva muttered. “You don’t want to become a murderer like me, you’re one of the good guys!”

 

(raises fists and yells)

 

YOU CAN DO IT BT!!! PULL HIS F*CKING HEART OUT!!!

OO_

 

 

Uh . . . Fusion Hioco is a GIRL 8/

Thats akward

 

 

“You don’t know what you’re doing,” Roxas deduced. “And my brother doesn’t either. I don’t know how Life did it, but I’ll fix the both of you.”

 

*looks at Jesse*

Why is it . . . when I read this . . . I saw you having made a deal with Life?

 

Dunno. Seems like it'd happen? But that'd be a kick ass way to get into this thing, being the source behind the Inactive's growning might.

 

 

 

Okay, sorry BT, but ROXAS had the best fight this entire chapter 8O

Dude the lightning attack and the conversation inmatch was very well done.

 

 

You know it's odd reading Sonic talking about Hito . . . knowing that the dude is already dead

 

 

They call me, ‘Sonic, the Bumping Chaos’!”

 

BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP BU*gets hit*

 

 

All this bumping between two guys is kind of . . .

Hot?

No?! (T_-) (notices girl inbetwen Jake and himself) WHAT THE F*CK?! HOLY SH*T SIS!!!

Hi ^*^

RUN AWAY!!!

*both Jake and Jesse flees in terror*

 

 

*comes back when Jackie leaves*

Okay . . . coast is clear

(walks back in and sees Sonic bludgeoning Sora)

Dude . . . sweet

 

 

When PROTO says 75% of the fleet is no problem I imagine all kinds of kick ass artillery just suddenly popping out from underneath his armor 83

 

 

Creator vs Donovyn . . . next chapter!

Dun dun dun

 

 

 

Okay how to sum this chapter up?

 

[runs in]

I'm back from ballet practice! Did the new chapter come out?

 

Yes

 

Alright lets get on to revie-

 

Already did

 

Awe man [sulks back into my room]

 

Oooooooooookkkay ^^;

Quite honestly my attention waned a bit. But I mean, I was watching DC stuff . . . you really can't compete with that X3

 

Some of the fights were cool as I mentioned and for the most part I felt this was an intro to the more exciting fights that will occur later.

 

I did notice I only got to saw a few things, but then again there is more to come

 

With me

And hopefully me

ME TOO

 

I never should have brought you guys along (=_=);;;

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WHY YOU LITTLE, LIFE COME OUT AND FIGH- -gets hit with a frying pan from nowhere and dragged into his room-

 

Oh so Sorry about Flandre, He's upset and the several deaths in that fic kind had pissed him off a little, so -Coughs- A Little Review:

 

No Appearance, but that's okay, The action already gets hi-

 

-Suddenly, You hear telltale screams, The Mysterious man peeks in Flandre's room and shivers before closing the door-

 

Sorry about that, I Am Andinios Nighingale, I am an old entity that gained some sort of Body ever since the War of the Advanced Clause, I'll be Speaking in Flandre's Stead until he cools down...

 

The Furries would be better if they were-

Oy Stop it Ryz, It's not an 18+ Fic!

 

Oh and if Flandre's here, he would beat the living sh*t out of

-Holds up the Severed Leg of Jesse-

Looks like you kinda got over that, -Sees the Jake and Jesse Bumping- AAAAHHHHHH!!!!!! MY EYES! THEY'RE BLEEDING!!!!!! -Runs for his Life-

 

Well With that, Lets continue the Review

 

I Already imagine a Giant Bomber AIRRAID part as with the comment

A Real Shame AIRRAID got Catastored When Released into the TCG

That's Enough with the Yugioh puns, Lets leave before I Go JD all over your sorry A**es

I have no choice but to Agree with you Hiri, Lets all finish this review and call it a night

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