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Good news all, 31's out.

[spoiler=Read after reading]

UGH.

I actually hated writing this chapter, I think the writing sucks.

Probably because there's so much going on and so many characters experiencing stuff, so forgive me for that v.v

Otherwise, I've been dying to debut PROTO the Machine Emperor for ages now, hope it was epic to read.

Black, if you end up reading this, this is why I refused to let you control Machine Emperors.

PROTO MUST BE THE FIRST MECHA OF THE NEW ERA.

Come to think of it, if DEF ever got anime'd, it'd probably be a Mecha anime...

Anyways, I'm going to try shedding light on some minor characters through a few glimpses throughout this war. Not going to go into full detail with everyone, but that's what one-shots are for.

Anyway, epic battles and stuff are looming ahead, I'm looking forward to it!

 

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Dun... dun... DUN!

Nice cliffhanger and overall chapter.

 

“I get first crack at life,” Ninjew stated, cracking his knuckles.

You mean Life, right?

 

And I hate to break it to you, the probability of getting this Anime'd is quite low.

 

*Is planning to do a Sprite animation series based off of DEF.*

 

*Is later planning to animate using animations*

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Okay new chapter and a new review from Me!

 

and me of crouse

You're going to be a regular . . . aren't you Jesse

 

d*mn right I am. Wait?! Why'd I get censored!?

 

The rules

 

God f*cking d*mn the rules!

 

And on that colorful note, lets begin (--);

 

[spoiler=Review]

 

Everyone has they're own style of doing things in a war

 

I personally would just run through the crowd lopping off heads

 

This is going to be a LONG review if you keep up those comments

 

 

LOL referance to SS's dream of being an idol. Nice but I think you might get him made with that

 

And then he is going to imagine beating your ass all over the place. But don't worry . . . it is only in his imagination, nothing a swift kick to the groins can't cure, if he actually HAS any.

 

 

After reading the idea of Life making so a plane couldn't break through it successfully I suddenly got an urge to make a 9/11 joke

 

Dear God, No Jesse! NO!!!

 

ALA AKBAR! (crashes a paper airplane into a Jenga Tower) That'll curb the urge ... for now

 


 

(*looks at picture*)

 

yeah he actually looks more like an evil boss now

Agreed

 


 

So Creator cannot be defined?

that is our job!

 

She totally is in love with Creator

bow-chika-wow-wow

O~oooooooooooooookay . . .

 


 

Even now Creator is being his normal mysterious self. Blonde hair originally? I doubt even then he is telling the truth

 

though you have to admit, the idea of contacts and short hair does make sense in a war setting

 

Too true, too true.

 


 

"Dude, we're like terrorists"

 

9/11 JOKE! 9/11 JOKE!!!

 

I can't believe you got beaten to the punch this time Jesse

 

and I am completely pissed off about it, though it is funny . . . and Black ruins it

 

 

"I think I'm safe"

 

So am I *showing the chip dried in blood*

 

 

*falls over*

 

did he really just bring back the green wisdom and springtime of youth sh*t again?

 

Yeah I think that kinda ruined the moment for me, but it's part of his character so it does fit

 

fits like a bullet in the hea(gets hit)

 

Thanks Lora

 

No problem

 

 

"I get first crack at Life"

 

Yeah you wear him down so I can kill him later in the battle

 

Dad now you're acting like Uncle

 

Not my fault I wanna be the one to kill him

 

 

Wow did Black just really . . . read from the bible?

*shivers*

Ehehehe . . .

 

 

*jumps in the tower to see it's an empty office*

 

Well this wasn't what I was expecting at all

 

*hundreds of Inactive minions begin pouring out of everywhere*

 

Oh wait there we go XDDD

 

 

"Moonstone Cannon, FIRE!"

I knew it CX

 

Sad though it can only be used once. Think we should strap Yaming in and begin firing the Apocolypse Cannon?

 

That'd be cool if we could ^^

 

 

Tower vs Spacecraft = Epic 8D

 

 

Yes! Proto is back . . . though he never technically left if you count the proto-fracs

All the same Creator has some nice dialogue here, a very rousing speech

 

Don't stroke your ego in public Creator, that's just nasty XDDD

 


 

Street Fighter reference FTW

 

Jake . . .

Dude I don't even get a last name XDDD

 

ROFL

 

You included that really Fusion? My grumbling made it into the actual book? Sweet

 

Hey where am I?!

 

At home tied to a chair so you don't interrupt adult-oriented fun

 

That can be taken the wrong way Jesse

 

I know, meant it that way

 

 

". . . so if any of you plans to make it to the top, have something sharp."

 

I ALWAYS have a knife on me at least, even IRL BD

 

 

OMFG The Anti-Mods! I get to kill ONE!!! *waves swords around frantically*

 

 

"I take it you're Hioco. I hope the rumors behind your 21 guns were false . . . "

 

Okay that seriosuly made me laugh out loud XD And Hioco is no longer inactive, but for the purposes of this story I guess it doesn't matter

 

And even Phantom Roxas' old mentor has returned!

 

 

 

All in all I don't know what it was about this chapter . . . maybe it was the fact it began the war or just knowing after it the true epic combat WILL begin . . . but I simply loved it.

 

Everything clicked and even if there was some slight "choppy water" parts it didn't ruin the overall likablness of what I read.

 

Funny jokes, good combat and unexpected twists- Just what I have come to expect from Trio of DEF

 

I really want to run in and help dad

 

Get out of the chair we strapped you to and sure, why not.

 

<_< Why'd I bring you two along with me?

 

Dad that so isn't nice!

 

Be glad your sister isn't here

 

*shivers*

Good points

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Simple Creator.

It's fun as Hell.

Thanks Jake, glad you loved the chapter.

And I'll just say that the focus won't be entirely on what's inside the tower.

Also, I loved writing that dialogue Creator. I'm already devising more to come for you and other characters.

Tomorrow, since my flight's gonna be 8 hours, I'll see what I can do about finishing 32.

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Simple Creator.

It's fun as Hell.

Thanks Jake, glad you loved the chapter.

And I'll just say that the focus won't be entirely on what's inside the tower.

Also, I loved writing that dialogue Creator. I'm already devising more to come for you and other characters.

Tomorrow, since my flight's gonna be 8 hours, I'll see what I can do about finishing 32.

 

That is the ONLY reason I would pilot a mecha of any sort.

 

Seriously, around people I'm talking like Kamina.

 

In private I'm like Lelouch.

 

I'm either Kamlouch or Lelmina. Either way I'm 100% Creator, and I'M AWESOME!

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