Ann 10 [Remake][Prolouge Only!][Accepting Reviews]

[Jolta]

Ben 10 Spinoff here! It may be horrible...

[spoiler=Plot]
A hundred years after the death of Ben Tennyson, the world now needs a new hero. An era with flying cars, [s]card games on motorbikes[/s] clear blue skies, advanced Level 5 tech, aliens haven't made enough contact with Earth, etc, etc... But lets skip to this part. A new hero is born, and is definitely ready to save the Earth! Can a fifteen year old save the day every day? Well, its Hero Time.[/spoiler]

[spoiler=Aliens(Basically the only thing worth noticing in a Ben 10 Fanfic]
[url="http://img121.imageshack.us/img121/240/crystalskull.png"]Crystal Skull[/url][/spoiler]

[spoiler=Prologue, where it all began...]
“Ann-dear!” a voice wailed to my ears. It was my mom. “This Parcel is for you! Seems to be wrapped with Alien paper, but whoever did this must… I dunno…”

“Mom! It’s the wee hours of the morning! Can’t you wait till later?” I mourned, with my naked body laying on my bed, only wearing a pair of white shorts. I put on a shirt, went out, took the parcel, and went back to my room. That was weird. I saw my mother grinning slightly, she must be hiding something.

I looked at the weird-looking tag. “Anglina Lina Tennyson, yeah, right person… Right address… OK, what’s this emblem?” It was a black circle with a green hourglass-shaped figure on it. “Happy belated birthday? Woah, 10 days late. Talk about too belated.”

I ripped open the parcel, only to find the same emblem in there. “Weird watch? Always wanted one. Oh who am I WOAH!” The watch immediately attached itself to my left wrist, and formed a strap around it. “Must be a dream. Back to sleep…” I said to myself as I took of my shirt and well, went back to sleep!

Little did I know, it was not a dream. And little did I know, that was the day my life changed forever.

The next morning I woke up and said, “weird dream…” I looked at my wrist. “OK, maybe not,” I added sheepishly. It was a weekend. There were so many things to do! After brushing my teeth, bathing, eating breakfast, or whatever I have to do, I put on my signature red and yellow stripy long-sleeve shirt and red miniskirt, along with my favourite red beret. I walked out of the house to have a stroll. But this was the part where I noticed it was no ordinary stroll…

While I had my stroll along the streets, I experienced the creepiest thing ever. An octopus-like humanoid creature emerged from the sewers. His head was squid-like, he had a humanoid body clad in metal, eight tentacles on his back and was bluish-green in colour. I definitely haven’t seen such a creature before! There weren’t many people around since it was still early. I was doomed.

The creature stretched one of its tentacles and clung it on my wrist. “Give me the Omnitrix! As in, NOW!” the squid-like beast said. It stretched out its tentacles at me and sealed me within them.

“Oh holy- naughty tentacles? Well, maybe this thing could help me…” I muttered to myself as I used my watch. I managed to make the faceplate go up, then I saw a hologram. “Its HERO TIME!” I shouted as I slammed down my watch.

Transformation began. All clothing was broken down by nanomechanisms, to be stored when I turn back to Ann again. My privates were covered by purple crystals, followed by the rest of my body. My whole body was reshaped into a Cyclops-like Phantom-like Entity. Finally, my eyes changed from purple to green.

“Crystal… Skull…” I muttered in a rather chilling voice. I discovered that I had morphed into a one-eyed crystal ghost. When the squid-like creature whipped me with his tentacles, he literally went through me. I managed to become intangible. I was too overconfident the second time, so he struck me. But however, I did not feel a thing through my crystal-hard body. Not surprisingly, the weird creature cried in agony.

“Notable moves, but you are still no match for me…” the creature said, “I need a revamp. RETREAT!” The squid-like creature jumped into the sewers again. Trust me, he will return soon.

I had just discovered the true powers of this watch. “Omni-trix? Omnitrix! That’s your name! Weird watch you are, but you’re a lifesaver!” I said in an unintentionally chilling voice while looking at the emblem on my chest. I slapped myself on my rock-hard face using my rock-hard arms to see if it was just a dream. Nope, it wasn’t. Suddenly, I heard a buzzing sound from my emblem. In a flash of green light, I had morphed back into Ann. And yes, with the clothes.

“You and I are gonna save the day! Every day!” I told my new gizmo as I reached the door. “And now you’re gonna help me open the- wait, I have the keys…” I took of my beret, dug deep into it and took out my keys. I then put my beret back on and unlocked the door.

Little did I know, the squid-faced villain had a plan to destroy me. I have a new archenemy to settle.[/spoiler]

[Jolta]

Oh gawd why no comments?

[Jolta]

Bumpeh? No reply? Is everyone hating Ben 10?

[Jolta]

"Everyone likes to watch Ben 10!"

Doesn't seem like it.

[Max.]

yay. first comment. It's pretty good. But I like Ben 10 in general.

[Jolta]

I'm workin' on Chapter 1. But I'm also busy with Neopets

I have teh next Alien up my shoulders. And yes, the "squid-like creature" [i]is[/i] Vilgax. He survived [b]THIS[/b] long.

[Jolta]

Anyone else?

[valliant12]

Umm... so far it's okay... but I don't judge books by covers. I will wait longer until I officially comment.

[Jolta]

Thanx!

Well, I guess I'll add moar. Soon.

[Kaisu]

I'm too lazy to read it all, but.. A few typos.

I'll do a full-fledged review later, Jolta.

[Jolta]

A big thanks from me, ol'friend! I'll be lookin' for my nailclipper.

[Kakashi Hatake]

I didn't read the full thing but I like it! There was some parts that made me laugh but I don't know why... make more!